【英语】 中考英语书面表达点解析(Word版附答案)1

【英语】中考英语书面表达点解析（Word版附答案）1
一、中考英语书面表达（含答案详细解析）
1．假如你即将在学校英语兴趣小组的活动中发言，请你用英语写一篇发言稿。

要点提示如下:（1）几个月前，奶奶晚饭后去跳广场舞（do square dancing）。

（2）从那时起，奶奶喜欢上了广场舞。

（3）现在，奶奶比以前健康了，有了很多朋友。

（4）有些邻居有意见，认为音乐很吵，无法入睡。

（5）你认为人们可以跳广场舞，但……
要求：（1）开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

（2）要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥。

Boys and girls,
I’m very happy to speak here and I’d like to talk about my grandma.
_______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________
That’s all. Thank you!
【答案】Boys and girls,
I’m very happy to speak here and I’d like to talk about my grandma.
A few months ago, my grandma went to do square dancing after supper. Since then, she has been in love with square dancing. Now, she is much healthier than before. What’smore, she has a lot of friends. However, some neighbors have a complaint against the people who do square dancing. They think that the music is so loud that they can’t fall asleep at night.
In my opinion, people can do square dancing because it is a good way to keep healthy. But they should think about the feelings of others and they shouldn’t make a lot of noise.
That’s all. Thank you!
【解析】
这是一篇给材料作文，根据要点提示写一篇学校英语兴趣小组的活动中的发言稿。

要注意随着文章推进时态的变化，一开始应该选择一般过去时，而后面应该选用一般现在时，最后表达自己观点的时候也应该使用一般现在时。

人称为第一，三人称，注意主谓一致关系，构思文章框架，列举出可能会用到的好词好句，记住千万不能漏写信息要点。

参考词汇就是必用词汇，一定要运用到文章当中。

在写作中注意运用恰当的连词，使文章更加顺畅，自然。

2．你有没有因为没能好好管理时间而影响了学习的经历?请你写一篇文章谈谈这件事及你的看法。

内容包括：1.你没完成学习任务的经历（事情，原因及后果）；2.针对如何管理好时间给出几点建议。

作文要求：1.短文须包括所有提示内容，可适当发挥。

2.文中不得出现真实的人名、校名和地名。

3.词数80个左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。

Once, I couldn't make good use of time and it had a bad influence on my
study.__________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________
【答案】Once, I couldn't make good use of time and it had a bad influence on my study.
I had an experience like this. Last weekend, my good friend, Jim taught me how to play a kind of computer game. It was interesting. So I spent more time on it. I forgot to do my homework in the end. My teachers and parents were angry with me. I was also upset.
How to make good use of our time? I think we should make a weekday plan. We should write what we are going to do on the paper, mark the deadline of each thing clearly and put the paper up somewhere we can see it easily. It can help us to remember what we have to do next.
【解析】
【详解】
这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少，如make good use of，last weekend，how to do，play a game，a kind of，spent more time on，forget to do，in the end，be angry with，be going to do，on the paper，put up等。

而特殊非谓语动词结构Jim taught me how to play a kind of computer game.和I think we should make a weekday plan. /We should write what we are going to do on the paper, mark the deadline of each thing clearly and put the paper up somewhere we can see it easily. /It can help us to remember what we have to do next.等复杂从句结构的运用，丰富了短文内容，使表达多样化，是本文的亮点。

在学习中注意总结牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章表达更有逻辑性，也更富有条理。

【点睛】
书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。

它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。

所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。

3．书面表达
李华所在的国际学校正在开展“My Favourite Traditional Festival”交流活动，假定你是李华，请你向来自不同国家的同学介绍中国传统节日——端午节，内容包括：
1. 今年庆祝时间（6月18日）
2. 节日由来：纪念（be in memory of）屈原
3. 吃粽子，赛龙舟，挂菖蒲和艾草（calamus and Ay Tsao）……
4. 欢迎大家一起体验这个传统节日
注意：1. 词数80~100；
2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3.文中不能出现与本人相关的信息；
4.开头已写好，不计入总词数。

Dear fellows,
The Dragon Boat Festival, also called the Duanwu Festival, is celebrated on the fifth day of the fifth month according to the Chinese calendar.
_____________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________.
【答案】Dear fellows,
The Dragon Boat Festival, also called the Duanwu Festival, is celebrated on the fifth day of the fifth month according to the Chinese calendar.People celebrate the holiday on June18 this year . People hold the dragon-boat races in memory of Qu Yuan,one of the greatest poets in China. We can watch the dragon-boat races and eat a kind of Chinese food named Zongzi during the Dragon boat Festival. People always hang Calamus and Moxa on the day.We welcome to experience this traditional festival with friends from all over the world.
【解析】
这是一篇给材料作文，向来自不同国家的同学介绍中国传统节日——端午节。

结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般现在时态，人称为第一，三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构和动宾结构，注意一些常见句式的应用，比如：People celebrate……，People hold……，We can watch……，We welcome to……等句式的应用。

写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。

写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系。

点睛：本文结构紧凑，语言简练。

开头介绍了今年端午节庆祝时间，接下来介绍端午节的由来以及庆祝活动，最后欢迎大家一起体验这个传统节日。

此处according to, in memory of, a kind of, on the day, welcome to do sth, all over the world等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。

4．Life is just like a mirror, you smile at it, and it smiles at you, too. 请你以“Learn to Smile”为题，根据下表所列的要点写一篇100词左右的文章（文章开头已给出）。

学会对自己微笑1、面对困难与烦恼学会微笑（考试失利、被别人误解等）。

2、使你自信，击败你的人有时就是你自己。

3、有益于身心健康。

学会对他人微笑1、便于与他人之间的交流。

2、给别人带来快乐,自己也快乐。

微笑是一种语言人人都能懂，传递友谊，拉近距离。

1、参考词汇：对某人微笑 smile at sb. 误解 misunderstand
2、短文必须包括所有内容要点，不要逐字翻译，可适当发挥，使短文连贯通顺。

Learn to Smile
I remember a song by Westlife, the first sentence of it is “Just a smile and the rain is gone.” Do you like smiling? I think you should learn to smile .
___________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________【答案】Learn to Smile
I remember a song by Westlife, the first sentence of it is “Just a smile and the rain is gone.”
Do you like smiling? I think you should learn to smile .
First, learn to smile at yourself when something unpleasant happens in your life. If you fail an exam or you are misunderstood by your friends, don’t be sad. Just smile at yourself . Smiling at yourself brings back your confidence . Sometimes the one who beats you is not others, but yourself. And smile can also keep you healthy.
Second, learn to smile at others. It will make you communicate better with people. Smiling at others makes yourself happy as well.
In a word, smile is a kind of language belonging to everyone. It passes love and friendship and helps shorten the distance between you and other people. Living with a smile ,every day will be shiny.
【解析】
这是一篇表格式的作文，要点是一表格的形式出现，首先要研究表格，找出需要表达的要
点，然后加以整合，也可以适当增加使意思更连贯，但要点一定要全，不能漏掉。

写作时要注意遣词造句，不能受汉语的影响，要用地道的英语表达，注意时态，语态，单词拼写，语法等问题，用好简单句，适当用复杂句。

可以用一些高级词汇。

还要注意句子的关联。

5．书面表达
每个人都有自己心爱的物品，相信你也拥有一个自己心爱的物品吧！请以“A（n） _____ I have”为题，描述一个或一件你心爱的物品，并谈谈你是如何得到它的，以及它存在的意义。

要求：1. 请在题目空白处填上你心爱物品的名字；
2. 文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3. 语言表达准确，短文连贯通顺，80词左右。

A（n） _________ I have
_______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________【答案】A（n） toy gun I have
Everyone has an object that she/ he like best. So do I.
In my drawer, there is a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth. It’s a black toy gun and it can shot some small plastic pills for ten meters. When I was young, I played with other kids with my toy gun. They all admired me and put me in the place of leader. I was so happy then.
When I was a little boy, I liked watching the war movies best. I was eager to have my own toy gun. One day, it was my birthday. I asked for it when my father came back. My family was poor then and my father didn’t promise me. From then, father worked harder and came back more lately. A week later, father put a box to me. A black toy gun in it! I was moved with tears. In order to get it, father worked late and hurt himself. He died a month later.
Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time I miss him, I’ll take out the toy gun and say “Thank you, my dear father!
【解析】写作分析：这篇作文需要就自己最喜欢的物品展开描述，要求是进行描述，并谈谈你是如何得到它的，以及它存在的意义。

写作的难度是逐渐加深的，在讨论其如何获得的时候要注意正确使用时态，在谈论意义的时候要注意表达的准确性，避免不熟悉的表达。

写作亮点：
这篇文章讲了自己最喜欢的玩具枪，描述玩具枪的时候有适当的细节补充，例如a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth（用黄布包着的玩具枪），这里用到了过去分词作定语，作者还描述了玩具枪的功能（small plastic pills），顺便还描述了自己小时候玩枪的经历，准确使用
了时态。

在描述得到的经历的时候不落俗套，讲到了自己的家庭那时比较困难，父亲是通过努力工作为我赚钱买枪的，写作是富有感情的，也通过这段经历为这把玩具枪赋予了一定的意义。

最后玩具的意义得到了升华，表达了作者的期望（I hope I can be a soldier），上升到了保家卫国的层面，这样的一篇作文是有深度的，能够让人感动的，是一篇优秀的范文。

6．自信赋予人力量，带给人快乐。

拥有自信，人生处处是舞台，生活越来越精彩。

假如你是李华，请你为校刊英语园地“自信助我成长”专栏写一篇短文，谈谈自信的重要性，分享一次使你更加自信的经历，并说说我们如何更加自信。

提示词语：powerful，happy，believe in，keep doing
提示问题：
Why is it important to be confident?
What experience made you more confident?
How can we become more confident?
It's very important to be confident
【答案】It’s very important to b e confident. Self-confidence can bring us courage to stick to what we do. So it’s valuable to us.
When I was in Grade 7, once my teacher asked me to make a speech in class. Although I practiced it for many times at home, I still felt nervous and forgot thewords at the beginning of it. Then I breathed deeply and relaxed myself. You can’t believe how happy I was when I recalled the speech and finished it successfully.My teacher thought highly of my performance and I got much encouragement from my classmates. From then on, I have become more and more confident.
To build confidence, firstly we need to clearly know about our own advantages and try to develop them. It is the most important that we should put in enough effort to what we do. Then we can finally make it and gain more confidence.
【解析】
本文内容应包含表格中所提供的所有信息。

灵活运用各种句式，采用不同的表达方式将各个要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当。

语言力求准确，简洁。

最后必须认真查验是否有漏写，有无拼写错误及标点误用等。

点睛：这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少，如at the beginning of；know about；make a speech等；When ；Although ；Then ；From then on,等的运用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理；同时语言流畅，内容完整，是一篇不错的范文。

7．随着网络的发展、人们消费观念的转变，购物方式也在悄然的发生变化。

“网购”已成为一种时尚，越来越多的学生也加入到网购群体中。

请你根据以下表格的提示，写一篇网上购物的文章。

提示词汇：网购shopping online; 商品 goods; 导致 cause
注意：1.所表述的内容必须包含表格中的所有方面，可适当发挥；
2.文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称；
3.词数：100词左右，文章开头已给出，但不计入总数。

With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online.
【答案】With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. It has become fashionable. Some of us students also join the group.
Shopping online has many advantages. Just with the click of a mouse, you can buy what you’re interested in without going outdoors. You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowds and save a lot of time. When shopping online, you can choose from more varieties of goods, whose prices are generally lower.
Every coin has two sides. Its disadvantage s are obvious, too. On one hand, it’s very easy for you to buy goods that aren’t like the pictures you see on the Internet. On the other hand, shopping online may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed. That’s a waste of money.
All in all, I love shopping online.
【解析】
本文属于材料作文，主要讲述网购的优点和缺点。

根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。

【亮点说明】这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别适用一些亮点词句，如convenient，disadvantage，in good quality，figure out，have the chance to do，be attacked by，of course，take care of
等。

增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。

点睛：写作时可以从以下几个方面做起：
认真审题。

审好题是写好书面表达的关键。

审题时要注意试题的要求，抓住要点，词数符合要求。

构思提纲。

有了提纲，我们就可以根据提纲和主题确定相关的写作材料。

通常书面表达给出的话题是开放的，而具体的内容要求学生自己发挥，因此选择恰当的素材也是使短文中心突出、明确的关键。

初写短文。

一切都准备就绪，就可以动笔写作了，在写作的过程中我们要注意句子的准确性、连贯性以及简洁性。

使用的词语、短语及句型尽量用自己有把握的词。

同时还要注意使用恰当的连词，使句子衔接自然。

修改润色。

修改润色是获取高分的必要步骤。

这一步我们除了检查短文的各种错误外，还要检查语法结构是否合理，有无重复、啰嗦的语言，大小写是否正确，格式是否正确，词
数是否符合要求等。

8．写作
某英文网站的“ Student Life”栏目正在向中学生征文，标题为“ A time when I made someone happy”，请你写一篇英文稿件，内容需包括以下要点:
1. Who was the person you made happy?
2. When was it?
3. What did you say or do?
4. Why did it make him/her happy?
5. How did you feel at that moment?
注意：1．词数：100左右（题目不计入总词数）。

2.文中不得出现可能透考生真实身份的任何信息。

【答案】Last summer,though it was hot,I volunteered to teach children English in rural area.When I arrived there,I couldn't adjust to the weather and life style.However,as time went by,I found myself quite happy when I saw the students I was teaching made great progress.In order to teach them,I had to keep on learning as well.As a result,my English improved a lot.Also,I made friends with some of my students.We are still keeping in touch by letter now.
In a word,not only did I help those in need,but also I myself learn a lot that summer.If I have another chance to do volunteer work,I am ready to go.
【解析】写作分析：这是一篇给定标题的材料作文，需要逐条完成要点问题的回答，描述一次自己让别人开心快乐的经历，是一篇记叙文，首先要读懂5个问题，其次要用恰当的语言和衔接手段把这五个问题的回答联系在一起，变成一篇短文，同时也要注意在描述过去的故事的时候要正确运用过去时态。

写作亮点：既然这是一篇记叙文，就应该完整地呈现故事，需要加上必要的背景，指明时间（Last summer），地点（in rural area），简要概括事件（teach children English），这是文章首句的点睛之笔，信息量丰富。

短语和固定搭配的正确使用也为这篇文章增色不少，例如“adjust to…”（调整以适应…），“as time went by”（随着时间的流逝），“made great progress”（取得巨大进步），“keep on learning”（继续学习），“In a word”（总而言之）等等短语使用正确。

在收尾部分表达了作者积极的人生态度，表示如果还有机会自己还乐于参与，这样使得这篇文章结构完整，表意更加清晰。

9．假如你是李华，请你根据以下提示用英语写一封保护大象的倡议书。

提示：陆地上最大的哺乳动物，可以活到80岁。

目前数量在减少，因为：
1）人们砍伐森林，大象渐渐失去家园；
2）人们捕杀大象，获取象牙。

3）应如何保护它们（不少于三条）。

要求：1）恰当运用比较级和最高级；2）80词左右。

倡议书的结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

参考词汇：哺乳动物mammal; 象牙ivory
Dear classmates
_______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ ________
I believe everyone's contribution （贡献） can make a big difference.
Yours,
Lihua 【答案】Dear classmates,
Elephants are the largest mammals on the land and they can live up to be eighty years. But now the number of the elephants is decreasing because of the following reasons. Firstly, people cut down trees in the forest, so elephants are losing their homes. Secondly, people also kill elephants for their ivory.
As a result, we need to do something to help them. First, we should plant more trees to build the homes for elephants. Second, we can put up post on the street to tell people that it is against the law to kill elephants. Or we can also hold some activities in some public places to spread the idea of protecting the elephants.
I believe everyone's contribution （贡献） can make a big difference.
Yours,
Lihua 【解析】
【详解】
本文是一封倡议书,倡议大家保护大象。

文章共分为三个方面的内容，首先描述大象想在所处的现状，然后说明出现这种状况的原因，最后为了保护的大象我们应该如何去做。

时态主要为一般现在时。

提出倡议时可以使用We can/ We should/ Let’s/We’d better的表示建议的句子。

写作时注意不要使用太复杂的句型，以免出现语法错误，为使句子具有连贯性，可以适当使用连词。

本篇文章内容完整，符合材料要求，Elephants are the largest mammals …,及First, we should plant more trees 也使用到了比较级和最高级；Firstly,…. Secondly,…等词的使用使文章具有层次性，条理清晰。

并且一些连词的使用，比如so, or, but等也使文章具有连贯性，是一篇不错的文章。

10．书面表达
为感受母爱情深，弘扬知恩图报，某英语网站正在举办以"My Mother"为主题的征文活动，请根据下列思维导图所提供的信息，写一篇短文，介绍你的母亲和你之间的故事。

参考词汇：give much to…，It's my turn to…，try my best to…
提示：
1）短文内容须包括所给内容，含母亲曾为你所做的事和你将为母亲所做的事各一件，并阐述原因；
2）请注意短文结构层次、时态运用和卷面整洁度；
3）词数80个左右，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数；
4）文中不得出现学校和个人的相关信息。

My Mother
We need love．We also need to show love．The person I love most is my
mother．___．
【答案】My mother
We need love．We also need to show love．The person I love most is my mother．My mother is 41 years old．She is of medium build with long black hair．She is quiet．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She likes dancing．She can cook delicious food．
She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．
When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what she wants most，I think．
【解析】
【详解】
这是一篇给材料作文。

为感受母爱情深，弘扬知恩图报，要求以"My Mother"为主题写一篇短文介绍你的母亲和你之间的故事，参加某英语网站正在举办的征文活动。

在写作时，注意文章文体、人称和时态；注意连句成篇，保持文章的连贯性，要层次清楚，要点分明，中心突出。

同时要注意语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯；尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，最好不要写太长的复合句；尽量选取简单的易拼写的单词，确保正确率；词汇、句式要丰富多样，可以为文章增色添彩。

【点睛】
首先认真审题，看清题目中的要求和要点；然后根据提示内容，列出写作要点及每个要点
中可能要用到的表达；然后紧扣要点，动笔写作，在写作过程中，要注意句与句、段与段之间的过渡，必要时可适当运用表示转折、因果、并列、比较等关系的连词，使文章过渡平稳，自然流畅；同时注意语句要通顺，词汇书写无误，不要出现语法错误。

最后要细心复核检查，确保正确无误。