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假如你是刘然，你的朋友Ann想要到你们学校读书，请根据下列信息写一封信，介绍一下你校的基本情况，并给她一些来中国上学的建议。
写作要点：
1 学校建校时间（1982年10月）
2 学校环境（两座教学楼，一个大操场）
3 学生在校学习时间（周一到周五，早八点到晚四点）
4 至少给出两条来中国之前的建议。
原创作文
Dear Ann,
I heard that you want(would like) to study in my school. So I’ll introduce my school to you and give you some pieces of advice. My school was founded in October in 1982. My school has two Teaching Building (two teaching building s或者two classroom buildings)and a big playground. Students have classes from 8a.m. to 4p.m. on weekdays. Before you come to China, you should learn Chinese well to communicate with others. Then you are supposed to learn how to use chopsticks. It will help you pick up food when you eat Chinese food.
Yours,
Liu Ran
作文得分：15分二等文
作文批改:
1 最后的两条建议不实用。
2 对作文的第一句一定要多加斟酌。
作文修改：
Dear Ann,
I’m glad to receive your letter! And I’m happy to know you are going to study in my school. It’s great to be your school mates. Now, let me introduce my school to you. My school was founded in October in 1982. There are two classroom buildings and a big playground. Students have classes from 8a.m. to 4p.m. on weekdays. Before you come to China, you should learn some easy Chinese words to communicate with others. Then you are supposed to learn some Chinese cultures, such as, we drive on the right ,and we eat with chopsticks. I’m looking forward to seeing you soon!
Yours,
Liu Ran
批改说明：
1 画横线的句子是建议修改的部分
2 红体字是根据原创作品进行修改的
3 其他可以参考答案上的例文。