试卷讲评课件

Mike
写作第一步（基本要点） 几个要点
结构：几段 审 题 人称 时态
三点
三段 第一人称
一般现在时,一般过去时
作文要点齐全，为什么不是一档或二档 文？
第二档:(9-12分) 1.基本符合题目要求,内容完整 2.语法结构和词汇基本满足文章需要.语言基本通顺, 语意基本连贯. 3.有少量语言错误,但不影响整体理解. 第一档：(13-15分) 1.完全符合题目要求,表达思想清楚且积极向上,内容 丰富. 2.使用多种句型结构和丰富的词汇,语言通顺,语意连 贯,具有逻辑性.
studying aims:
1. 能够在老师的引导下，说出审题的要点 2.能够说出描述父母、同学、和师生关系的 词汇和句型 3. 能够运用所学词汇、句型和审题技巧修改 作文，完成第二稿的写作。
文段表达（2014一模考试） 根据中文和英文提示，写一封意思 连贯，符合逻辑，不少于50词的回信。信 的开头和结尾已给出，其词数不计入所完 成的回信内。所给英文提示词语仅供选用。 请不要写出你的真实校名和姓名长过程中对自己产生过重要 影响的人，他想了解你生命中最重要的人 是谁，请你根据他的问题回复邮件。 提示词语：helpful, patient, look after, brave,
Mike
第二档:(9-12分) 1.基本符合题目要求,内容完整 2.语法结构和词汇基本满足文章需要.语言基本通顺, 语意基本连贯. 3.有少量语言错误,但不影响整体理解. 第三档:( 5-8分) 1.部分内容符合题目要求,内容不够完整 2.语法结构和词汇错误较多,语言不通顺,影响整体理 解.
作文中的第二段
要求：9分及9分以下同学：
从以上相关词汇中任选一组（词汇可以不全 部选用），运用适当的连词和句型（参考 自己的卷纸），写出一段30词左右的事例。 Why is he/she so important? Give an example.
10分及以上同学：
参考优秀范文，修改润色自己的作文，写出 整篇作文
love
Who is the most important person in your life? Why is he/she so important? Give an example. What can you learn from him/her?
To Mike From Li Ping Subject The most important person in my life Hi! Mike, I’m glad to hear from you. __________________________ Yours, Li Ping
Mike
The most important person in my life is my mother. Because she gives me a lot of help. One day, I had a cold. But my parents were at work, so I called my mother. I thought she could help me. When my mother heard this, she came back as soon as possible. Then she took me to the hospital. When I stayed in bed, she looked after me. My mother didn’t stop to have a rest until I was better. I was moved by her. My mother is the most important person in my life. Her love is the most wonderful thing in the world. I won’t forget my mother’s love and I will love my mother forever.
Who is the most important person in your life? Why is he/she so important? Give an example. What can you learn from him/her?
To Mike From Li Ping Subject The most important person in my life Hi! Mike, I’m glad to hear from you. __________________________ Yours, Li Ping
My mother is the most important person in my life because she often tells me how to wash clothes, cook meal and clean my own room. She usually asks me to buy some things because she wants me to grow up and how to spend money. 要求：独立阅读并思考：这段作文符合题目 要求吗？为什么？然后，师友交流
In fact, many people are imprtant for me. But the most important person in my life is my English teacher. Because she often helps me with my English. One day, we had an exam. I’m not good at English, so she tauch me after school, and I got a good marks. And las month, I joined the basketball team, but I hurt my leg, and my parents doesn’t at home. So, she looked after me and let me brave. She is a very good person. She is very kind, so I am very kind now. I can learn lots of things from her such as how to look after other people and how to love everyone. She is very helpful for me.
love
Who is the most important person in your life? Why is he/she so important? Give an example. What can you learn from him/her?
To Mike From Li Ping Subject The most important person in my life Hi! Mike, I’m glad to hear from you. __________________________ Yours, Li Ping
师友讨论：如果你是判卷老师，你觉得 哪篇作文的分数高一些，为什么？
文段表达（2014一模考试） 根据中文和英文提示，写一封意思 连贯，符合逻辑，不少于50词的回信。信 的开头和结尾已给出，其词数不计入所完 成的回信内。所给英文提示词语仅供选用。 请不要写出你的真实校名和姓名。 假如你叫李平，最近和英国朋友Mike通 过邮件讨论成长过程中对自己产生过重要 影响的人，他想了解你生命中最重要的人 是谁，请你根据他的问题回复邮件。 提示词语：helpful, patient, look after, brave,
评价表
评价项目
要点齐全 结构清晰 用连接词 使用句型 字数符合
少量语法错误
在相应的地方划勾
自评 互评
学会修改和润色
技巧 1熟练掌握50句型 技巧 2 使用丰富的句式和句型，交错使用长 短句，增加语言的表现力。 技巧 3 使用复合句
定语从句， 状语从句， 宾语从句，
词块搜索与整合
1.朋友： get bad marks; be good at ; offer to do sth. make progress in ; get on well with sb. 2.父母： have trouble (in) doing sth.; give up doing sth. show sb. how to do sth. ; succeed in doing sth. make one’s mind to do sth. 3.老师： fail in ; be kind to sb.; give sb. advice on sth help sb. with sth. ; get good marks 4.过渡词： what’s more , and, so, because, although, but