Essay Apreciation

Flash Points
Effective supporting evidence and typical example
Delicate inductive reasoning makes argumentation develop naturally and logically Rhetorical question adopted to stimulate readers to think and to express viewpoint in a more forceful way
Flash Points
• Evidence from the report makes it more scientifically and more believable
• Cross use of the deductive reasoning and the inductive reason increases the readability of the essay
Reflection
• Your thought. When writing an argumentation, you should regard yourself as the center of the world, and through your word, we should get the confidence, charm and prestige of you. • Writing is to share, to exchange and to sharp our mind.
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Body（to illustrate the supporting viewpoints)
• What’s more, once one thing becomes the model, crisis will follow. Report shows that humans all have a common weakness: laziness, hidden in our body. So if there is a regulation or an example for us to follow, we won’t think more about the morality construction. The more obedient we are, the less creative we will be.
Flash Points
• Introduces the background information concisely and clearly
• States the viewpoint straightforwardly and up to the point
Body（to illustrate the supporting viewpoints)
Essay Appreci are not moral models of the society
Introduction
(to give the background information and states the view) I always remember that in my childhood, my parents told me: do as the teachers do. Without any doubt, I followed this principle at that time. While now, I am not that obedient any more. Actually, I am strongly against that creed, and these are my reasons.
Flash Points
“Least thing last say”
• This pattern is used to give readers space to rethink and leave the time for them to make their own decision
Conclusion
• First and foremost, not all the teachers are as qualified as you expect them to be. Let’s just take “Fan Paopao” for example. Fan used to be a nameless teacher, while after Wenchuan earthquake, his destiny has totally changed. He’s become a famous man, not famous for his teaching achievements, but for his acute response to the unexpected danger. If we say teachers are the moral models of the society, should I draw that we have to learn the proficient escaping skills that Fan owns or follow his belief: just run away when dangers come?
(to summarize your statement)
• No man is perfect, and no teacher is yoked to be a morality builder.
Reflection
• This argumentative essay could be proper for students to read, for it is easy to understand and grasp. • The structure of this essay is wellarranged and the logical transition is so clearly that makes it easier to follow • Argumentation is nothing but to persuade, to guide others to follow
Body（to illustrate the supporting viewpoints)
Last but not least, the burdens on teachers’ shoulder have been heavy enough, so the society shouldn’t impose more duties on them. Today’s teachers are quite trapped in the “teacher’s mode” ,which caused a great tension to them, eliminating their passion for class, with the teaching quality successively declining. Therefore, as to this point, the chief task of a teacher, conveying knowledge, could be largely affected. So we shouldn’t be too strict to these hardworking gardeners, and teachers are not deserved to be a slave to the so-called moral models.