译林牛津选修六Unit4GUIDEDWRITING写作指导

Writing a proposal
【情景呈现】
假定你是某国际学校高二88班的学生，你校有很多班级禁止学生使用平板电脑这类电子设备，可你认为学生合理使用电子设备其实对学习有益。

请你代表你们班用英语给你校校委会写一封建议书。

要点提示： 1. 简要介绍目前电子设备在中学的使用情况； 2. 提出可行性建议；
3. 解释学生使用电子设备的益处。

注意：1. 词数150左右（标题和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数）；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

参考词汇：平板电脑tablet；监管supervision
Making good use of electronic devices
_____________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________ We would be glad if you would take our proposal into account.
【写作分析】
一、文体分析
建议书属于应用文文体，它的目的是向某个人或某一机构就某一问题提出自己的看法和建议。

建议书通常包括以下内容：
1. 标题：一般居中书写，用几个关键词写明所建议的主题；
2. 称呼：提出建议的人或组织；
3. 正文：a. 现状：陈述目前的情况有哪些不合理之处或不利之处；
b. 建议：针对不合理之处提出建议；
c. 益处：解释采用建议后能带来哪些好处。

4. 结尾：一般是表示敬意或祝愿的话，必要时可给出联系方式。

注意：1. 阐述现状及提出建议时需具体、合理且具有说服力；措辞要委婉礼貌，忌命令式口吻；
2. 现状、建议和益处也可采用小标题的形式，使建议书包含的内容一目
了然。

二、思路演进
三、语言风暴
请根据所给句子和策略尝试填空（每空一词）。

1. Great changes have taken place in how people acquire knowledge.
(用表示时间的短语作主语以突显客观事实）
The past decade has _____ rapid changes in the way people acquire knowledge. 2. Many teachers only regard the tablet as a curse, banning its use at school completely, although it has many benefits.
(增加表示倾向的短语来缓和生硬的语气；合并句子使句子更简洁)
Many teachers _____ to regard the tablet as a curse, banning its use at school completely _____ _____ its benefits.
3. Teachers can help us use such devices.
(运用高级表达使语意更突出；添加介词短语使建议具体化)
Teachers can help us _____ _____ _____ / _____ _____ _____ _____ such devices _____ introducing useful learning apps and e-books.
4. Electronic devices help us get considerable learning resources.
(运用高级表达来丰富作文语言)
Electronic devices enable us to have _____ to considerable learning resources.
5. We will have a good command of what we’re learning, and we’ll know more about the world. (运用not only ... but also ... 和倒装结构来加强语气)
Not o nly _____ _____ _____ a good command of what we’re learning, but we’ll
also know more about the world.
6. If we develop our potential earlier, we can contribute more to our country and even the world. (运用“the + 比较级... the + 比较级...”来突出益处)
_____ _____ we develop our potential, _____ _____ we can contribute to our country and even the world.
【参考范文】
Making good use of electronic devices
Group: Class 88, Senior 2
Introduction
The past decade has witnessed rapid changes in the way people acquire knowledge. They rely more on electronic devices like tablets, through which up-to-date knowledge covering all aspects of life is spread. Indeed, the tablet is a double-edged sword, but many teachers tend to regard it as a curse, banning its use at school completely regardless of its benefits.
Proposal
Teachers can help us take advantage of such devices by introducing useful learning apps and resources, explaining how to use them and distinguish misleading resources from helpful ones, as well as providing e-books that are worth reading. Whatever the learning resources are, they should be used under supervision.
Benefits
Electronic devices enable us to have access to considerable learning resources. Not only will we have a good command of what we’re learning, but we’ll als o know more about the world, expanding our horizons. The earlier we develop our potential, the more we can contribute to our country and even the world.
We would be glad if you would take our proposal into account.
【实战演练】
假定你是李华，是你们班的英语课代表。

最近在不少公共场所（如动物园等），很多人因不遵守相关规定而发生意外。

请你针对这一现象用英语写一封建议书，以供下次英语课上进行小组讨论。

注意：词数150左右。

参考词汇：违反violation；保护措施safeguard
语言风暴
1. witnessed
2. tend; regardless of
3. take advantage of / make good use of; by
4. access
5. will we have
6. The earlier; the more
实战演练
Ensuring visitors’sa fety
Name: Li Hua
Introduction
It is a pity that many accidents caused by people’s violation of public rules and regulations have made headlines. Some visitors get hurt because of their improper behavior; some don’t realize the possible dangers from lack of common knowledge about safeguards. Therefore, it’s high time to draw everyone’s attention to it. Proposal
First, the public facilities should be improved and necessary warning signs should be made clearly to the visitors. Second, the awareness of safety should be stressed in various ways, for example, watching a video before entering. Besides, the entrance fee should be reduced so that most people can afford it. Otherwise, some of them may try to go against the rules for the purpose of saving money.
Benefits
I am convinced these measures will secure visitors against potential threats. As a result, public places like zoos and parks can serve as ideal places for relaxation. I would be pleased if you would approve my proposal.。