高三英语3：读后续写之细节描写

写作高级句式: 3.“So+ adj./adv. + be动词or助动词+主语 + that...”
读后续写“微技能”之 “to show”
to show:
写作高级句式: 5.双形容词作状语 safe and sound, cold and wet
写作高级句式：4.非谓语动词作状语 ”-ing /-ed/ to do ”
“Without grammar very little can be conveyed, without vocabulary nothing can be conveyed.” — David Wilkins
读后续写“微技能”之 “to show”
续写“微技能”之 “to show”
A tell-y example
They went to New York to see Cats. They both enjoyed it very much. When they tried to go home, their flight was delayed because of the snow so they stayed and decided to see the musical again.
高中 英语 二年级
读后续写微技能之
细节描写
To-do list:
“Show, Don't Tell.”
必 杀 技
To Tell
VS
To Show
概括描写
细节描写
To show : to write with more sensory(感官的) detais ,allowing your readers to hear,see,taste,touch and smell the same things your characters are experiencing .
beating against the windows, I could barely hear any voice.— Christopher was nowhere to be found.
写作建议： 环境描写要抓住风雨、河流、阳光等自然景象具体描述， 采用拟人的修辞，借助具体动词，会更加生动！
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搭配高级句式，细致描述，更具画面感！
Summary
读后续写“微技能”之 “to show”
写作高级句式: 1. 三连动（3verbs) 2. 主句+“with 复合结构”
读后续写“微技能”之 “to show”
Tom felt so …that… Tom felt so exhausted that he lay in Mother’s arms , sleeping soundly. So exhausted did Tom feel that he lay in Mother’s arms , sleeping soundly.
depressed and worried delighted and shocked
F_e_e__li_n_g_h_u__n_g_ry__a_n_d__e_x_h_a_u_s_t_e_d_(感到又饿又累) ,
Tom lay in Mother’s arms and fell asleep.
Hungry and exhausted, Tom threw himself into
with breeze kissing her hair, >修辞运用：personification(拟人)
I saw a figure like a lily ,
比喻 (Simile明喻 & Metaphor暗喻）
写作建议l：ov外el貌y 描an写d要fa抓ir住, 人物主要特征如眼神、头发、走路姿态等
读后续写“微技能”之 “to show”
读后续写“微技能”之 “to show”
to tell: He felt very tired.
to show:
Fall asleep
Tom
Have a deep sleep
Sleep soundly
Within a few seconds
In Mother’s arms
Head on the shoulder
读后续写“微技能”之 “to show”
lie v. 撒谎 lied, lied
躺着 lay ,lain
Tom __g_o_t_（get) tired , __la_y_（lie)in Mother’s arms and __fe_l_l（fall) asleep. Tom 感到很累（ exhausted), 就在妈妈怀里睡着了， 小脑袋靠在妈妈的肩膀上。 Tom felt exhausted and slept in Mother’s arms， with his head on her shoulder.
读后续写“微技能”之 “to show”
Example 1
to tell: My mother was hopeful.
to show: My mother’s es were sparkling with
hope.
sparkle v. reflect brightly 发光，闪光
写作建议：心理描写要抓住眼、嘴、手、脚等身体部位具体描述， 会更加传神！
读后续写“微技能”之 “to show”
Example 2
to tell: Mira is lovely and beautiful.
to show:
To Mira
亮点:
Very gently ,
> 词汇：v. 、adj.及adv.运用
She walked near,
>语法结构： “with+n.+-ing”
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张等修辞，会更加立体！
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读后续写“微技能”之 “to show”
Example 3
roar v. /n. 咆哮，轰隆 the roar of the traffic
to tell: It was raining hard. biting adj. 刺骨的 the biting wind to show: Thunders roaring and icy biting rain violently