2023年上海春考英语真题作文范文和解析

我们班的口语课外教Tom发现你们班课上互动不积极，委托你了解同学们的想法，经过你对全班同学看法的了解，有些同学表示对课堂上讨论的话题不感兴趣，有些同学怕犯错，不敢开口。

1.向Tom反应同学的想法；
2.向Tom提出建议并说明理由；
【考题分析】
继2017年秋考、2020春考作文，本次春考是上海高考改革以来第三次考察夹叙夹议类作文，在往年的一模和二模题中同学们其实练习了不少，真正的关键点是要做到所提建议合理、理由表达精准。

【撰写大纲】
1.对话题不感兴趣问题：
①建议：更换话题，寻求贴近学生生活的话题。

②理由：熟悉的话题能让学生们有话说，更容易让学生们参与进来，从而提高课堂活跃性。

2.怕犯错不敢开口问题：
①建议：可以采用老师重复错误或同伴纠错等教学策略，不要直接点评学生错误。

②理由：引导式批评既可以让学生意识到错误，还可以敢于表达的增强自信心。

3.其他：
①建议采用角色扮演Role play活动方式。

②理由：避免了话题讨论活动的单一性，将英语理论运用到实践，激发同学们的口语兴趣。

或建议举办争论辩论、演讲比赛、做游戏、小组练习等等。

【范文赏析】
Dear Tom,
After an inves tigation into the reasons for students’ inactive interaction in class, I found some showed little interest in the topics discussed while others dared not speak English for fear of making mistakes. In view of above problems, I am writing to voice my proposals and reasons are listed as follows.
First and foremost, I propose changing to some topics closely related to their lives in that topics students are familiar with will give them something to talk about and make it easier for them to get involved, thus improving class activity. Apart from it, such teaching strategies as teacher repeating mistakes or peer correcting mistakes are suggested be adopted to encourage students rather than direct comments on their mistakes. Not only will these ways help students realize their mistakes, but also they will conduce to boosting their self-confidence. Last but not least, performing role-playing activities is also a good way, for it contributes to stimulating students’ interest in speaking when they can put what they have learned into practice.
Conclusively, with student-based topics, novel teaching methods and role plays, I believe more students will engage in your class interestingly. Sincerely hope you can find them useful.
Your Sincerely,
Li Hua
【范文点评】
该篇范文内容方面表达充实、建议有理有据，全面的回应了题目要求；语言方面运用了名从、定从、状从、倒装句、被动语态以及多种非谓语动词的用法，用词贴切、丰富。

【词组学习】
1.inactive interaction 不活跃的互动
2.in view of 鉴于；考虑到
3.for fear of 担心
4.voice my proposals 表达我的观点
5.change to 换成
6.be closely related to 与...密切相关
7.get involved 参与
8.conduce to sth/doing sth有助于做某事
9.boost self-confidence 提高自信
10.stimulate/trigger/arouse their interest激发他们的兴趣
11.student-based 生本的
12.put sth into practice 将...付诸实践
13.engage in 参与、从事。