作文讲评-a_letter_of_request

Furthermore, the entire community will benefit since the town will attract more visitors, thus increasing business and tourism. In addition, the town and beach will be much cleaner and safer for our children. I would be most grateful…
an outline of the letter:
1.
properly address the recipient; state ຫໍສະໝຸດ Baidueasons for writing 2. explaining reasons for making the request 3. state expected results/consequences 4. closing remarks
Problems:
1. ignorance of writing purpose, who is to read your letter, who are “you”. a) Our society was first established in… we… b) You will be picking up trash in the street, and attend an art competition. c) The students will be occupied with lots of activities they will be filled with happiness. 2. informal style v.s. over-politeness Contraction, abbreviation… I was wondering if you… 3. Tense
Then, on Sunday, volunteers will meet on the beach at 9 am so that rubbish can be collected during the morning. There will also be a “clean-up” art competition which will be open to young people between eight to eighteen. Applicants are asked to submit drawings or paintings, on an environmental theme, by the end of this Friday. The winners will be announced at noon on Sunday, when prizes will be awarded.

A sample: (give a heading to each paragraph)
There are various activities planned for the weekend, which will take place on 8th and 9th March. Volunteers are requested to meet at 11 am on Saturday at the shopping center. Black bin-liners will be distributed and volunteers will be split into groups for safety. The collection of rubbish and materials for recycling will take place within the inner-city area and the bags will be collected from the meeting point at 4 pm.
1.Make our community more comfortable, attractive 2.Young people get more involved in protecting environment 3.…
Two ways:
1.
activities first, then goals; 2. match each activity with a corresponding goal
How to patch up the pieces?
Time: this weekend, March 8-9, Activities: 1.Collect rubbish & material for recycling 2.A “clean-up” art competition 3.…
Goals:
We feel sure that you will agree that, in recent years, our town and beach have become unsightly and that there are huge benefits to be gained from such a project. National surveys have shown that the more young people feel involved in protecting the environment, the cleaner the area will stay after the initial efforts.
How to write a letter ?
Read the requirements carefully

You are a member of an environmental protection society which is organizing a “clean-up” weekend. Write a letter to the headmaster of your local school asking for students’ help. Explain what activities will be involved and how useful it will be for the community as a whole. (Your letter should include points listed in the chart below) 注意：要点齐全、补充省略号部分并适当添加细节， 使行文流畅。