英语作文点评

英语作文点评
假如你是李华,请根据下表所给的要点,用英 语写一封信,向你的美国笔友TOM 介绍你的 朋友王明.王明也想成为TOM 的笔友. 姓名王明性别.年龄男,16岁外表高大帅气品 性诚实,善良.忠诚.乐于助人,兴趣.爱好读书, 唱歌,跳舞,旅游,电子游戏.特长篮球 要求:词数在120左右;可适当增加细节,以使 行文连贯.文章的开头及结尾已给出,不计入 词数.
代词的混用 He name is Wang Ming and he is a sixteen years old. His name is Wang Ming and he is a sixteen years old. What’s the impression of he ? What’s the impression of him? His most is good at playing basketball. He is good at playing basketball
时态混用 1 He got on well with everyone. He do homework very strict. He gets on well with everyone. He does homework. 2 He like reading books. He likes reading books. He played very well. He plays very well.
As a boy age 16,Wang Ming is not only tall and handsome, but also honest and loyal to his friends. He is always ready to help others. In his spare time ,he does a lot of reading ,from which he learns a lot .Besides, he is good at singing ,and dancing.he is fond of traveling and has visited lots of places of interest during his summer and winter holidays. So he has learned much about different cultures and customs. Sometimes, he also has fun playing computer games. What he is especially good at is playing basketball . I’m sure you’ll come to like him if you keep in touch with each other. Best wishes! Yours, Li Hua
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The students is 16 years old called Wang Ming . He is very handsome ,in other words , many girls like him . He is honest , happy and strong . He got on well with everyone ,but he is very hard- working and do homework very strict. He favorite reading ,singing , dancing and gam. Class many students like him . he very like popular music ,but he patient study . He very like help students study English .He nothing like other students learning English , he is special method of teaching . He favorite biology , chemist ,English and physics , many teachers very like him . he very intelligent . He is good at basketball technology very good .So he always energetic play basketball in the playground . So . I think you and he become good friends . you have a new pen friends. Best wishes!
缺冠词 Wang Ming is boy 改为 Wang Ming is a boy. 注意: 单数名词前必须有a， an，the或者形 容词性物主代词四者之一。
He is a sixteen –year-old boy who called Wang Ming . He is very honest and kind . He always helps other persons who get into trouble, and everyone enjoys living with him. He is fond of reading, singing traveling and other activities , and he also enjoys playing, such as playing basketball , and he does well in it ,sometimes he will relaxed by playing computer games. My first impression of him was that he was intelligent and funny, he is very good, I think you will be good friends.
缺谓语 He very intelligent. 改为 He is very intelligent. He very tall and very handsome and have very black hair. 改为 He is very tall and very handsome. He has very black hair.
五种基本简单句型: 五种基本简单句型
1 He smiles
主 谓 The sun risee great changes Great changes have taken place in my hometown 主 谓 2 We don’t like the teacher 主 谓 宾语 We don’t like the teacher who talks rudely. 主 谓 宾语 定语 3 MR Deng teaches us English. 主 谓 间接 宾语 直接宾语 4The little boy often makes us laugh 主 谓 宾语 补语 He is a boy ( become go turn ） 5主 系 表语