读后续写微技能--动作链和动作面课件-2024届高考英语作文复习专项
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Show, don’t tell
读后续写之“动作链”和动作“面”
读后续写作为记叙文，其核心只有一个，那就是“人”。因此一 切的笔墨，都是为了塑造人物形象，使人物更加饱满。
How to make your writing vivid and attractive?
最为重要的描写有五类：环境、动作、心理、情绪、语言
body voice
①Doing...,主+谓, doing...（三个主动动作同时进行，可以用此结构）
1.他们站在空旷的路边，仰望着天空，感受着这份珍贵的平静。
肢体
面部
心理
Standing beside the empty road, they looked up into the sky, feeling the precious peace.
How to make your continuation writing vivid?
动作链:
题材 题材
一连串的动作构成画面
Skill 1: 描述一系列的动作。如果是同一个主语做了两个以上动作，可 用 :主+谓1, 谓2 and (then) 谓3 ，
Skill 2: 当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，可用: 1. 非谓语, 主+谓 非谓语: ①动作有明显先后:Having done sth 2. 主+谓, 非谓语 ②主动:doing ③被动done
①“动作链”结构1: 主+谓1..., 谓2..., and 谓3....
1. 看到失散多年的儿子，她将其一把抱住。可 以把“抱”这个动作按时间拆分为： 形成动作链: 冲向前 蹲下来 一把抱住
She dashed forward, knelt down and gathered her son into her arms.
Strike while the iron is hot：
1.他们享受着美好的时光，聊着天，吃着东西，开着玩笑。
They were having a wonderful time, talking, eating and joking.
2.失望、无言(speechless)， Tim站在那里，不知道该怎么办。
He clapped his hands with excitement, nodding and smiling.
④(With)... doing/done...,主+谓, doing...
贝贝坐在泳池边，双臂低垂，思考自己是白熊猫还是黑熊猫。
(With) his arms drooping, BeiBei sat beside the pool, wondering whether he was white or black.
face His smile broadened from ear to ear.
He clapped his hands together and jumped up and down with joy.
v.咯咯地笑
He giggled and squealed with
excitement.
v. 长声尖叫
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仿写练习2-doing/done...(分词作状语), 主语+谓语
When decorating the house with my mother, I accidentally broke an expensive vase.
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(Being) speechless and disappointed, Tim stood there, not knowing what to do with it.
3.耷拉(droop)着脑袋， Lucy坐在河岸边，若有所思。
With her head drooping, Lucy sat at the riverbank, thinking about something.
1.我站在门口，完全震惊了。 I stood in the doorway, absolutely __s_h_o_c_k_e_d_/__a_s_t_on. ished 2. 珍妮坐在那里，吓得说不出话来，惊呆了。 Jenny sat there, _s_p_e_e_c_h_l_e_s_s______ (speech) and numb with shock. 3. 她垂下头，不知该如何回答。 She__l_o_w__e_r_e_d__h_e_r_h_e__a_d________, not _k_n_o_w__i_n_g_____ (不知) how to reply.
__________________________________________________________________ 2.她登上(board)飞机，坐在座位上，寻找她的书。
She boarded the plane, sat on he点r s击ea此t 处an添d 加th标en题looked for h点e击r b此oo处k添. 加标题
at a loss what to say.
③主+谓, doing... and doing...
1.他欣喜若狂，在雨中又唱又跳。
心理
面部 肢体
He was overwhelmed with joy, singing and dancing in the rain.
2.他激动地鼓掌，一边点头，一边微笑。
S h o w, d o n ’ t t e l l Summary
Skill :从 面部/肢体和题材语言题心材理 多个方面编织动作”面 ” 1.Doing...,主+谓, doing... 2.Done...,主+谓, doing... 3.主+谓, doing... and doing... 4.(With)... doing/done...,主+谓, doing...
一非致谓时语，:可①用主: 动且完 1成. 非:H谓av语in,g主d+o谓ne sth ② 2主. 主动+:d谓o,in非g谓③语被动done
3.主句, doing... and doing... 4.(With)... doing/done...,主句, doing...
①表情感类的形容词， 主+谓… 情感类的形容词在句中作状语，说明主 语的情感状态，可以转化为feeling + adj, 主+谓。有时可以放在句后：主+ 谓…, + 表情感类的形容词。例如：
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How to make your continuation writing vivid?
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2.动作“面”
（面部，肢体，
√
语言心理）
感受从 情面绪部/:肢喜体怒和形语言于心色理--多--H个e方i面s 编ha织p动py作. ”面“.
4.发现自己的鸡又被偷了，老人攥紧(clench)双拳，一脸愤怒。
Finding that his chicken had been stolen again, the old man clenched his fists, with his face burning with anger.
S h o w, d o n ’ t t e l l Summary
心理
肢体
面部
Encouraged by the teacher's words, Lucy raised her
hand,whispering,“I'll do it.”
2.被眼前的这一幕吓坏了，他一动不动，不知道该说什么。
心理
肢体
心理
Terrified by the scene in front of him, he was rooted to the spot, being
He hailed a taxi, got into it and told the driver his destination.
再比如2017年6月浙江卷读后续写中写到“用肉把狼引开”的情节.
【拿出肉】→【瞄准狼】→【扔出去】
He took out the meat, aimed at the wolf and threw it straight to the fierce animal.
②“动作链”结构2: doing/done...(分词作状语), 主+谓
1. 受到老师的责备和大家的嘲笑，他感到相当的不安和沮丧。
动作1
动作2 动作3
Blamed by his teacher and laughed at by everyone, he felt rather upset and depressed.
题材 题材
Skill1: 主语一致的主要动作≥2: Skill :从 面部/肢体和语言心理 多个方面编织 主+谓1, 谓2 and (then) 谓3 ， 动作面
1.Doing...,主句, doing...
Skill 2: 当出现两个动作， 而前后两个动作逻辑主语
2.Done...,主句, doing...
3.排了三个小时的队后，他被告知票卖完了。
动作1
动作2
He queued for 3 hours, and was told that the tickets were sold out.”
Having queued for 3 hours, he was told that the tickets had been sold out.
2.围在营火旁，他们吃着烧烤，享受这一令人难忘的时光。
肢体
面部
心理
Gathering around the campfire, they feasted on BBQ, enjoying the unforgettable moment.
②Done...,主+谓, doing...
1.被老师的话所鼓舞， Lucy举起了手，小声说，“我来。”
How to make your continuation writing vivid?
S h o w,题材d题o材n ’ t t e l l
1.动作链: 一连串的动作
√
使用一连串动作让画面动起来
方法一：构造“动作链”
比如上车这个动作, He got into the car.
【拦车】→【上车】→【告诉司机目的地】
2. 他上台领奖并发言.按时间拆分为：
先看一眼奖杯，深吸一口气，说道： “谢谢！”。
He glanced at the trophy/ cup, took a deep breath and said, “Thanks.”
仿写练习1- 主+谓1..., 谓2..., and 谓3....
1.女孩停止了啜泣(sob)，从女人身边退了(step)回来，开始唱歌。 The girl stopped sobbing, stepped back from the woman and began to sing.
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②“动作链”结构2: doing/done...(分词作状语), 主+谓
2. 女孩开始吹她的口哨，尝试去吸引其他人的注意力。
动作1
动作2
The girl began blowing her whistle, trying to attract other people's attention.
②“动作链”结构2: doing/done...(分词作状语), 主语+谓语
读后续写之“动作链”和动作“面”
读后续写作为记叙文，其核心只有一个，那就是“人”。因此一 切的笔墨，都是为了塑造人物形象，使人物更加饱满。
How to make your writing vivid and attractive?
最为重要的描写有五类：环境、动作、心理、情绪、语言
body voice
①Doing...,主+谓, doing...（三个主动动作同时进行，可以用此结构）
1.他们站在空旷的路边，仰望着天空，感受着这份珍贵的平静。
肢体
面部
心理
Standing beside the empty road, they looked up into the sky, feeling the precious peace.
How to make your continuation writing vivid?
动作链:
题材 题材
一连串的动作构成画面
Skill 1: 描述一系列的动作。如果是同一个主语做了两个以上动作，可 用 :主+谓1, 谓2 and (then) 谓3 ，
Skill 2: 当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，可用: 1. 非谓语, 主+谓 非谓语: ①动作有明显先后:Having done sth 2. 主+谓, 非谓语 ②主动:doing ③被动done
①“动作链”结构1: 主+谓1..., 谓2..., and 谓3....
1. 看到失散多年的儿子，她将其一把抱住。可 以把“抱”这个动作按时间拆分为： 形成动作链: 冲向前 蹲下来 一把抱住
She dashed forward, knelt down and gathered her son into her arms.
Strike while the iron is hot：
1.他们享受着美好的时光，聊着天，吃着东西，开着玩笑。
They were having a wonderful time, talking, eating and joking.
2.失望、无言(speechless)， Tim站在那里，不知道该怎么办。
He clapped his hands with excitement, nodding and smiling.
④(With)... doing/done...,主+谓, doing...
贝贝坐在泳池边，双臂低垂，思考自己是白熊猫还是黑熊猫。
(With) his arms drooping, BeiBei sat beside the pool, wondering whether he was white or black.
face His smile broadened from ear to ear.
He clapped his hands together and jumped up and down with joy.
v.咯咯地笑
He giggled and squealed with
excitement.
v. 长声尖叫
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3.那个容女在人此处从添他加内手容在里此抓起最后一块饼干，怒视(glare at)着他容在. 此处添加内容在此
仿写练习2-doing/done...(分词作状语), 主语+谓语
When decorating the house with my mother, I accidentally broke an expensive vase.
Realizing that I could't afford to c点on击ti此nu处e 添m加y f标ur题ther study, I点ha击d此to处s添to加p 标题 chasing my dream.
(Being) speechless and disappointed, Tim stood there, not knowing what to do with it.
3.耷拉(droop)着脑袋， Lucy坐在河岸边，若有所思。
With her head drooping, Lucy sat at the riverbank, thinking about something.
1.我站在门口，完全震惊了。 I stood in the doorway, absolutely __s_h_o_c_k_e_d_/__a_s_t_on. ished 2. 珍妮坐在那里，吓得说不出话来，惊呆了。 Jenny sat there, _s_p_e_e_c_h_l_e_s_s______ (speech) and numb with shock. 3. 她垂下头，不知该如何回答。 She__l_o_w__e_r_e_d__h_e_r_h_e__a_d________, not _k_n_o_w__i_n_g_____ (不知) how to reply.
__________________________________________________________________ 2.她登上(board)飞机，坐在座位上，寻找她的书。
She boarded the plane, sat on he点r s击ea此t 处an添d 加th标en题looked for h点e击r b此oo处k添. 加标题
at a loss what to say.
③主+谓, doing... and doing...
1.他欣喜若狂，在雨中又唱又跳。
心理
面部 肢体
He was overwhelmed with joy, singing and dancing in the rain.
2.他激动地鼓掌，一边点头，一边微笑。
S h o w, d o n ’ t t e l l Summary
Skill :从 面部/肢体和题材语言题心材理 多个方面编织动作”面 ” 1.Doing...,主+谓, doing... 2.Done...,主+谓, doing... 3.主+谓, doing... and doing... 4.(With)... doing/done...,主+谓, doing...
一非致谓时语，:可①用主: 动且完 1成. 非:H谓av语in,g主d+o谓ne sth ② 2主. 主动+:d谓o,in非g谓③语被动done
3.主句, doing... and doing... 4.(With)... doing/done...,主句, doing...
①表情感类的形容词， 主+谓… 情感类的形容词在句中作状语，说明主 语的情感状态，可以转化为feeling + adj, 主+谓。有时可以放在句后：主+ 谓…, + 表情感类的形容词。例如：
此处添加内容
此处添加内容
此处添加内容
How to make your continuation writing vivid?
S h o w,题材d题o材n ’ t t e l l
2.动作“面”
（面部，肢体，
√
语言心理）
感受从 情面绪部/:肢喜体怒和形语言于心色理--多--H个e方i面s 编ha织p动py作. ”面“.
4.发现自己的鸡又被偷了，老人攥紧(clench)双拳，一脸愤怒。
Finding that his chicken had been stolen again, the old man clenched his fists, with his face burning with anger.
S h o w, d o n ’ t t e l l Summary
心理
肢体
面部
Encouraged by the teacher's words, Lucy raised her
hand,whispering,“I'll do it.”
2.被眼前的这一幕吓坏了，他一动不动，不知道该说什么。
心理
肢体
心理
Terrified by the scene in front of him, he was rooted to the spot, being
He hailed a taxi, got into it and told the driver his destination.
再比如2017年6月浙江卷读后续写中写到“用肉把狼引开”的情节.
【拿出肉】→【瞄准狼】→【扔出去】
He took out the meat, aimed at the wolf and threw it straight to the fierce animal.
②“动作链”结构2: doing/done...(分词作状语), 主+谓
1. 受到老师的责备和大家的嘲笑，他感到相当的不安和沮丧。
动作1
动作2 动作3
Blamed by his teacher and laughed at by everyone, he felt rather upset and depressed.
题材 题材
Skill1: 主语一致的主要动作≥2: Skill :从 面部/肢体和语言心理 多个方面编织 主+谓1, 谓2 and (then) 谓3 ， 动作面
1.Doing...,主句, doing...
Skill 2: 当出现两个动作， 而前后两个动作逻辑主语
2.Done...,主句, doing...
3.排了三个小时的队后，他被告知票卖完了。
动作1
动作2
He queued for 3 hours, and was told that the tickets were sold out.”
Having queued for 3 hours, he was told that the tickets had been sold out.
2.围在营火旁，他们吃着烧烤，享受这一令人难忘的时光。
肢体
面部
心理
Gathering around the campfire, they feasted on BBQ, enjoying the unforgettable moment.
②Done...,主+谓, doing...
1.被老师的话所鼓舞， Lucy举起了手，小声说，“我来。”
How to make your continuation writing vivid?
S h o w,题材d题o材n ’ t t e l l
1.动作链: 一连串的动作
√
使用一连串动作让画面动起来
方法一：构造“动作链”
比如上车这个动作, He got into the car.
【拦车】→【上车】→【告诉司机目的地】
2. 他上台领奖并发言.按时间拆分为：
先看一眼奖杯，深吸一口气，说道： “谢谢！”。
He glanced at the trophy/ cup, took a deep breath and said, “Thanks.”
仿写练习1- 主+谓1..., 谓2..., and 谓3....
1.女孩停止了啜泣(sob)，从女人身边退了(step)回来，开始唱歌。 The girl stopped sobbing, stepped back from the woman and began to sing.
处添加内容在此处添加
处添加内容在此处添加
The w内此容处om在添此加an处内添容gr加a内b容b在ed the last biscuit from his hand and then内此g容处l在添ar此加e处内d添容a加t 内容在
__h_im__. _____________________________________________________________
②“动作链”结构2: doing/done...(分词作状语), 主+谓
2. 女孩开始吹她的口哨，尝试去吸引其他人的注意力。
动作1
动作2
The girl began blowing her whistle, trying to attract other people's attention.
②“动作链”结构2: doing/done...(分词作状语), 主语+谓语