高中英语新高考-英语作文：热点话题解读和指导：伟人的品质(徐州高三期末考试一模)

高中英语新高考-英语作文：热点话题解读与指导：伟人的品质（徐州高三期末考试一模）

题目：

请阅读下面文字，并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。

Yuan Longping, 90, known as the “father of hybrid rice”，plays a crucial role in helping China achieve food security. Every morning what he does first is go to the field and works as a "farmer". When asked how much his shirt was, he told the reporter that it was 35 yuan.

Deng Jiaxian, the Founding Father of China's A-Bomb and H-Bomb, was the founder and promoter of China's nuclear weapon cause. However, it was not until he died that his parents! and many of his friends realized that he had produced such extraordinary achievements.

Li Junxian, without whom it would have been impossible for us to send the rocket into space, is one of the academicians of the Chinese Academy of Engineering. In 2018, this 90-year-old party member, donated 3 million yuan to set up the Doctor Innovation Fund and the Hardship Assistance Fund.

【写作内容】

1.用约30个词概括上述信息的主要内容；

2.分析上述国家功臣身上有哪些值得我们学习的优良品质；

3.谈谈其中某一品质对你的启发，并举例说明。

孙三五老师解读：

如何写概括：

材料是三个伟人的事迹。遇到这样的列举，我们不可能去概括每一个人的例子，而是要把这三个例子表达的中心先写下来，然后提及他们就可以。

这点可以从2015年的高考作文题看出来，我写的也是完全仿照这一年的高考范文：

基本结构就是：

这三段材料反映了什么（社会问题/寓意等）+一笔带过三个例子的主语

由于高考范文最后用的是：以上三段材料的…就是典型的代表。我突然想用非限制性定语从句来表达。

One’s value lies in what difference he has made to the world, of which the typical examples are Yuan Longping, Deng Jiaxian,Li Junxian with only the wellbeing of Chinese in mind. （31词）

如何写正文：

要点一：谈优秀品质

思维：朴素（simple）；投入（devotion）；淡泊名利；信仰；慷慨等等

以上思维很容易从材料中看出来，关键是写人需要掌握一定的句型，请看我造句的角度：

Clearly, from these heroes we can feel the unbelievable power of good qualities. First,their devotion to their causes and simple

lifestyles dwarf the mundane pursuit of fame and wealth, demonstrating that life deserves more than just being, but also poetry and dreamland. Second, it is their strong belief that encourages them to remain true to their original aspiration for the sake of the whole Chinese.

感悟：

1.这一段里的dwarf（使…相形见绌）就是非常好的词语，说它是传神之词也不为过

2.写的过程中我突然想到了两个说法：生活不只是眼前的苟且还有诗和远方；勿忘初衷。至于为什么想到了，其实我也不知道。我相信很多人都有这样的经历，姑且称之为灵感吧。但是如何翻译也是关键。我不建议考试的时候去尝试这些翻译，很容易成为chinglish。我查了不少地方，终于确定靠谱的翻译。

要点二：

这个要点可写的地方很多，关键是举例说明。

But I am especially impressed by their patriotism and loyalty, which makes them a beacon of hope for those in dark times. Shouldn’t we feel shame for our complaint about our country once faced with

frustrations? Their action does remind us that do not ask what the country can do for us but ask what we can do for the country.

感悟：

只有三句话：第一句主题句；第二句举例；第三句提建议。

1.这一段的a beacon of hope是比喻，相当于希望的灯塔。这个词我写作的时候脑子里一闪而过，我怀疑是否有把人比作灯塔的说法？很多时候，汉语中讲得通的修辞在英语中往往也可以，就修辞而言，很多是相通的。

2.第二句我用的是反义疑问句，这个句子也是一种修辞。修辞是提升品质的一把利器。

3.最后一句我突然想到了肯尼迪发表的演讲，这句太出名了，想到它也不足为怪吧。

完整的文章：

One’s value lies in what difference he has made to the world, of which the typical examples are Yuan Longping, Deng Jiaxian, Li Junxian with only the well-being of Chinese in mind.

Clearly, from these scientists we can feel the unbelievable power of good qualities. First, their devotion to their causes and simple lifestyles dwarf the mundane pursuit of fame and wealth, demonstrating that life deserves more than just being, but also poetry and dreamland. Second,