2024届高三英语一轮复习读后续写解析课件

“Tasha, would you like to know where we are going?” Mom asked calmly.
“I guess…” I murmured under my breath. “Sweetheart, we are going to a children’s shelter, I have been there before and I think it would benefit you,” she explained. I felt a knot slowly form in my stomach. How was I supposed to help there?
We often take for granted the very things that most deserve our gratitude. 抓取主题词——gratitude
Mom rang the doorbell. The door flew open and we were led to the front room, where all of the children were playing. Toys were spread out across the floor. I noticed a baby whose body was scarred with wounds.
环境描写——以景衬情/借景抒情；铺垫情节发展；
Step1 语料积累——细节描写（动作/语言/心理/外貌/环境等）
The majority of the children had noticeable physical scars (伤 疤) such as cuts, scratches and bums. What a terrible life they had had before they moved here! My heart sank.
When we reached the shelter, I was rather surprised. It was a large white Victorian home. As we approached the large front porch, wind bells played a calming tune while trees and blossoms welcomed us. Maybe this wasn’t going to be so bad.
Step1 语料积累——细节描写（动作/语言/心理/外貌/环境等）
Step2 语料积累——精彩表达
Step3 小试牛刀——学习技巧，构思写作
Step1 语料积累——细节描写（动作/语言/心理/外貌/环境等）
We often take for granted the very things that most deserve our gratitude.
Growing up, I wanted to be just like my mom. Kind and caring, she always seemed to make people comfortable in her presence. For years she was a volunteer in our community. I loved going to the local nursing home to help with her until I hit my preteen years. Suddenly, I was too caught up in my adolescent world to worry about helping others.
The majority of the children had noticeable physical scars (伤疤) such as cuts, scratches and bums. What a terrible life they had had before they moved here! My heart sank.
Step1 语料积累——细节描写（动作/语言/心理/外貌/环境等）
“Tasha, would you like to know where we are going?” Mom asked calmly.
“I guess…” I murmured under my breath. “Sweetheart, we are going to a children’s shelter, I have been there before and I think it would benefit you,” she explained. I felt a knot slowly form in my stomach. How was I supposed to help there?
Mom rang the doorbell. The door flew open and we were led to the front room, where all of the children were playing. Toys were spread out across the floor. I noticed a baby whose body was scarred with wounds.
2020江苏三校10月联考真题
One particular summer day when I was twelve, Mom came into my room and told me to get up and meet her at the car. I had planned to spend the day at the lake with friends. Why did she have to ruin everything? Eventually, I made my way outside. I imagined the lake water cooling my skin. Annoyed, I climbed into the car and slammed the door shut. I sat in silence, too upset to make a c写更具体；人物形象更饱满
Step1 语料积累——细节描写（动作/语言/心理/外貌/环境等）
When we reached the shelter, I was rather surprised. It was a large white Victorian home. As we approached the large front porch, wind bells played a calming tune while trees and blossoms welcomed us. Maybe this wasn’t going to be so bad.
Step1 语料积累——细节描写（动作/语言/心理/外貌/环境等）
One particular summer day when I was twelve, Mom came into my room and told me to get up and meet her at the car. I had planned to spend the day at the lake with friends. Why did she have to ruin everything? Eventually, I made my way outside. I imagined the lake water cooling my skin. Annoyed, I climbed into the car and slammed the door shut. I sat in silence, too upset to make a co动nv作er链sa—tio—n丰. 富细节描写；推动情节发展；刻画人物形象
用词丰富多样（贴合语境，暗示人物心情） ——以“说”为例 asked calmly, murmured under my breath, explained
更多的“说”： whisper, answer in a soft tone, reply, add, continue, call, request, shout, yell, roar with laughter, cry with pain, scream, yawn, sigh, agree, comfort, advise, insist absolutely, warn, complain...
3.曲折性原则 凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。
读懂大意，理清脉络
读所给的不完整故事，弄清大
意和主题，理清故事的主要 人物和事件。
1
2 细读首句，构思框架
仔细阅读所给两段的首句， 结合正能量结尾，思考大 致框架。
增加细节，开始写作
依据情节发和常识，在确定的 框架内，可按“所见/遇所想，
Contents
Part one 读后续写写作指导 Part two 真题演练
——2020江苏三校10月联考真题
Part three 范文赏析
写作指导
1.原文一致原则 内容要前后衔接，上下连贯 语言表达风格一致。
2.正能量原则
故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家； 失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处； 犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。
Paragraph 1: As I was looking around, I felt a gentle pull on my shirt. Paragraph 2: I returned to the shelter with Mom several times.
Step2 语料积累——精彩表达
Growing up, I wanted to be just like my mom. Kind and caring, she always seemed to make people comfortable in her presence. For years she was a volunteer in our community. I loved going to the local nursing home to help with her until I hit my preteen years. Suddenly, I was too caught up in my adolescent world to worry about helping others.
所为所感”等构思具体细节。
3
4 修改润色，整洁誊写 思考再三，把修正润色后的 续写整洁地写入答卷。
读后续写
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写 两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为
150左右。
We often take for granted the very things that most deserve our gratitude.
Paragraph 1: As I was looking around, I felt a gentle pull on my shirt. Paragraph 2: I returned to the shelter with Mom several times.
读后续写 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写 两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为 150左右。 一 读懂大意，理清脉络