专题03 读后续写“金纲”(三)-备战2021年高考英语四大“金纲”写作专项突破(36)
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高考英语作文之“读后续写”
“金纲”三 外貌性格描写
[技能点拨] 进行人物外貌性格描写时，可描写一个人的总体印象，也可以 抓住人物重要的外貌特征或性格特点进行描述。可以具体描述人物 的五官、着装，甚至可以配上动作描述。在描写人物片段时，可写 你对人物印象最深的一两点，再加上一两句人物评价。读后续写中 可以从以下两方面描写人物外貌特征。
doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
Paragraph 1： The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ Paragraph 2： We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________
[素材积累]
1．外貌描写 ①scruffily dressed 衣着不整洁的 ②neatly dressed 衣着干净整洁的 ③well-dressed 衣着考究的 ④smartly dressed 穿着光鲜的 ⑤elegantly dressed 穿着考究的 ⑥plain 相貌平平的 ⑦good-looking 好看的 ⑧muscular 强壮的
第三步：优化写作语言，完成读后续写 Paragraph 1： The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________
第二步：再读，获取发展线索，构思情节发展 1．细读续写两段开头语，确定续写的大体方向 ①根据续写第一段首句中写到的关键词 we_remembered_the_brand-new_tent，可知下文应着重围绕帐篷展 开话题。可按照妈妈健忘、善良的性格特点，预测可能会发生的 一些有趣的故事。 ②根据续写第二段首句中的关键词along_the_way提示，第二 段可描述一路观光的同时，在他们家人之间发生的美好而有趣的 故事，最后还可以写看望祖父母，并写出“我”对这次旅行的感 悟。结合首句中关键词great sights可简单描写景物作为呼应。
3．故事情节(故事情节线/人物情感线) (1)已知线索：驱车出发→返回拿物→再出发→妈妈健忘令我 担心→有空房间的宾馆难寻→妈妈建议找陌生人的后院搭帐篷 →David和我担忧，爸爸拒绝
(2)根据故事情节填空
答案：①forgetful ②had ⑥nervous
forgotten ③worried ④tent ⑤backyard
第一步：初读，获取基本信息 1．故事主线：驱车出游访二老，妈妈健忘返家跑；担心自己 被遗失，宾馆难找主意妙。 2．故事要素： (1)When: I was eleven (2)Where: during a trip (3)Who: Mum, Dad, David, I (4)Why: My mother was forgetful. (5)What: a family trip with my forgetful, loving, sweet mother
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept：“You stand outside the door and play lookout (放哨) while I go, and I'll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids？” “What？！ Oh, Gosh...I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left
[解题流程]
[2017·浙江 11 月高考改编]阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行 续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A Vacation with My Mother I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother—loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we'd ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we'd returned home to get the purse and traveler's checks Mom had forgotten.
⑪careful 仔细的 ⑫careless 粗心的 ⑬good-hearted 好心肠的 ⑭responsible 有责任心的 ⑮diligent 勤奋的 ⑯experienced 有经验的 ⑰forgetful 健忘的 ⑱cold 冷酷的 ⑲calm 镇定的 ⑳strong 坚强的 ○ 21selfish 自私的
1．肖像描写。肖像描写即描绘人物的面貌特征，它包括人物 的身材、容貌、服饰、打扮以及表情、仪态、风度、习惯性特点 等。肖像描写是对人物外貌的一种静态描写，其目的是以“形” 传“神”，刻画人物的性格特征，反映人物的内心世界。
2．神态描写。神态描写专指对面部五官展开描写，可以表现 人物的喜怒哀乐。描写时要用表示表情、神态的词语。常通过人 物的脸、眼睛等方面的神态描写来反映人物的喜怒哀乐等情感。
behind in a strange city, but we weren't about to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn't we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections (反对). If a strange family showed up on her front
⑨short 个子矮的 ⑩tall 高的 ⑪overweight 超重的 ⑫plump 丰满的 ⑬thin 瘦的 ⑭skinny 极瘦的 ⑮slim 苗条的 ⑯medium height格与特征描写 ①simple-minded 头脑简单的 ②polite 有礼貌的 ③modest 谦虚的 ④knowledgeable 有丰富知识的 ⑤imaginative 富有想象力的 ⑥ill-mannered 举止粗鲁的 ⑦hard-working 努力工作的 ⑧impatient 急躁的，不耐烦的 ⑨sweet 和蔼的 ⑩brave 勇敢的
2．预测续写故事情节 Paragraph 1：本段预测主线：夜晚露宿在河边，怎料帐篷落 宾馆。→第二天我们决定沿河露营，以便欣赏自然美景。爸爸正 要搭帐篷，这时突然发现找不到帐篷了，询问妈妈后得知妈妈又 把帐篷落在宾馆了。他只好返回宾馆拿帐篷。 Paragraph 2：本段预测主线：沿途观光好快乐，母爱亲情大 如天。→沿途每到一处，妈妈都很高兴，拥抱我们，使我们感到 舒适安全。尽管妈妈健忘和心不在焉，但她从来不忘记表达对我 们的爱。
○ 22romantic 浪漫的 ○ 23quiet 安静的 ○ 24nervous 焦虑的 ○ 25lovely 可爱的 ○ 26gentle 温柔的 ○ 27generous 大方的 ○ 28adventurous 喜欢冒险的 ○ 29energetic 精力旺盛的 ○ 30charming 有吸引力的 ○ 31confident 自信的
○ 32humorous 幽默的 ○ 33optimistic 乐观的 ○ 34outstanding 杰出的 ○ 35pessimistic 悲观的 ○ 36pleasant 令人愉快的 ○ 37proud 骄傲的；自豪的 ○ 38rude 无礼的；粗鲁的 ○ 39sociable 善于交际的 ○ 40spirited 精神饱满的
“金纲”三 外貌性格描写
[技能点拨] 进行人物外貌性格描写时，可描写一个人的总体印象，也可以 抓住人物重要的外貌特征或性格特点进行描述。可以具体描述人物 的五官、着装，甚至可以配上动作描述。在描写人物片段时，可写 你对人物印象最深的一两点，再加上一两句人物评价。读后续写中 可以从以下两方面描写人物外貌特征。
doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
Paragraph 1： The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ Paragraph 2： We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________
[素材积累]
1．外貌描写 ①scruffily dressed 衣着不整洁的 ②neatly dressed 衣着干净整洁的 ③well-dressed 衣着考究的 ④smartly dressed 穿着光鲜的 ⑤elegantly dressed 穿着考究的 ⑥plain 相貌平平的 ⑦good-looking 好看的 ⑧muscular 强壮的
第三步：优化写作语言，完成读后续写 Paragraph 1： The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.__________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________
第二步：再读，获取发展线索，构思情节发展 1．细读续写两段开头语，确定续写的大体方向 ①根据续写第一段首句中写到的关键词 we_remembered_the_brand-new_tent，可知下文应着重围绕帐篷展 开话题。可按照妈妈健忘、善良的性格特点，预测可能会发生的 一些有趣的故事。 ②根据续写第二段首句中的关键词along_the_way提示，第二 段可描述一路观光的同时，在他们家人之间发生的美好而有趣的 故事，最后还可以写看望祖父母，并写出“我”对这次旅行的感 悟。结合首句中关键词great sights可简单描写景物作为呼应。
3．故事情节(故事情节线/人物情感线) (1)已知线索：驱车出发→返回拿物→再出发→妈妈健忘令我 担心→有空房间的宾馆难寻→妈妈建议找陌生人的后院搭帐篷 →David和我担忧，爸爸拒绝
(2)根据故事情节填空
答案：①forgetful ②had ⑥nervous
forgotten ③worried ④tent ⑤backyard
第一步：初读，获取基本信息 1．故事主线：驱车出游访二老，妈妈健忘返家跑；担心自己 被遗失，宾馆难找主意妙。 2．故事要素： (1)When: I was eleven (2)Where: during a trip (3)Who: Mum, Dad, David, I (4)Why: My mother was forgetful. (5)What: a family trip with my forgetful, loving, sweet mother
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept：“You stand outside the door and play lookout (放哨) while I go, and I'll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids？” “What？！ Oh, Gosh...I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left
[解题流程]
[2017·浙江 11 月高考改编]阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行 续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A Vacation with My Mother I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother—loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we'd ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we'd returned home to get the purse and traveler's checks Mom had forgotten.
⑪careful 仔细的 ⑫careless 粗心的 ⑬good-hearted 好心肠的 ⑭responsible 有责任心的 ⑮diligent 勤奋的 ⑯experienced 有经验的 ⑰forgetful 健忘的 ⑱cold 冷酷的 ⑲calm 镇定的 ⑳strong 坚强的 ○ 21selfish 自私的
1．肖像描写。肖像描写即描绘人物的面貌特征，它包括人物 的身材、容貌、服饰、打扮以及表情、仪态、风度、习惯性特点 等。肖像描写是对人物外貌的一种静态描写，其目的是以“形” 传“神”，刻画人物的性格特征，反映人物的内心世界。
2．神态描写。神态描写专指对面部五官展开描写，可以表现 人物的喜怒哀乐。描写时要用表示表情、神态的词语。常通过人 物的脸、眼睛等方面的神态描写来反映人物的喜怒哀乐等情感。
behind in a strange city, but we weren't about to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn't we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections (反对). If a strange family showed up on her front
⑨short 个子矮的 ⑩tall 高的 ⑪overweight 超重的 ⑫plump 丰满的 ⑬thin 瘦的 ⑭skinny 极瘦的 ⑮slim 苗条的 ⑯medium height格与特征描写 ①simple-minded 头脑简单的 ②polite 有礼貌的 ③modest 谦虚的 ④knowledgeable 有丰富知识的 ⑤imaginative 富有想象力的 ⑥ill-mannered 举止粗鲁的 ⑦hard-working 努力工作的 ⑧impatient 急躁的，不耐烦的 ⑨sweet 和蔼的 ⑩brave 勇敢的
2．预测续写故事情节 Paragraph 1：本段预测主线：夜晚露宿在河边，怎料帐篷落 宾馆。→第二天我们决定沿河露营，以便欣赏自然美景。爸爸正 要搭帐篷，这时突然发现找不到帐篷了，询问妈妈后得知妈妈又 把帐篷落在宾馆了。他只好返回宾馆拿帐篷。 Paragraph 2：本段预测主线：沿途观光好快乐，母爱亲情大 如天。→沿途每到一处，妈妈都很高兴，拥抱我们，使我们感到 舒适安全。尽管妈妈健忘和心不在焉，但她从来不忘记表达对我 们的爱。
○ 22romantic 浪漫的 ○ 23quiet 安静的 ○ 24nervous 焦虑的 ○ 25lovely 可爱的 ○ 26gentle 温柔的 ○ 27generous 大方的 ○ 28adventurous 喜欢冒险的 ○ 29energetic 精力旺盛的 ○ 30charming 有吸引力的 ○ 31confident 自信的
○ 32humorous 幽默的 ○ 33optimistic 乐观的 ○ 34outstanding 杰出的 ○ 35pessimistic 悲观的 ○ 36pleasant 令人愉快的 ○ 37proud 骄傲的；自豪的 ○ 38rude 无礼的；粗鲁的 ○ 39sociable 善于交际的 ○ 40spirited 精神饱满的