2023年新高考英语读后续写提分技能 续写故事冲突的预设与解决7法

2023年新高考英语读后续写提分技能
续写中的故事冲突的预设与解决
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读后续写首先力争读懂原文，找出记叙文的几要素，找到故事情节中到底有什么冲突或问题。

然后读懂需要续写的两段的首句，根据首句推测故事发展的走向和两段的大致内容。

读后续写的文章属于叙事类文体，大部分故事都是围绕conflict（冲突）和solution（问题解决）来运转的，因此矛盾冲突在叙事类读后续写语篇中尤为重要。

矛盾冲突的解决能推动故事情节的发展。

矛盾冲突分预设与解决技巧，可以帮助学生在基于篇章主题意义下更好地发散思维，做到有话可说，有事可写。

同时，在学生创设矛盾冲突进行续写的过程中，可以联系上文已有的故事冲突，提高故事的完整性和连贯性。

学生掌握了矛盾冲突的基本写作技巧，有利于在续写的故事创作中打开思路，提高语言的综合运用能力。

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故事冲突的预设与解决的7个技巧
技巧1：面对问题，人物产生的消极或积极情绪
【技巧举例】
（2021年6月，浙江高考，Para.1）The pay day arrived at last.I was delighted to finally get the payment after I worked hard for two weeks. On the way home full of excitement, I thought about how to make use of the “huge” sum of money. “I needed a new football in the future. ” I whispered to myself.Approaching my house, I noticed my dad and mom standing beside the old truck of my family, looking sad. It seemed as if something wrong had happened... ...
【分析】续写第一段中的“On the way home full of excitement”表明了故事主人公心情非常好，但是当面对新的问题“my dad and mom standing beside the old truck of my family, looking sad”时，故事主人公内心开始出现冲突与疑问，这就反映在“something wrong”上面。

两种心态的冲突描写前后衔接自然、且恰到好处。

【用语储备】
“感到一阵……”：feel a flush of...= feel a wave of...= feel a feeling/sense of...[joy(高兴), excitement(兴奋), pride (骄傲), anger(愤怒), rage(狂怒), panic(惊慌), alarm(惊慌) , terror(恐惧), horror(恐惧), fear(恐惧), unease
(不安), sorrow (悲伤), sadness(悲伤), grief(悲伤), embarrassment(尴尬), disappointment(失望), shame(羞愧), guilt(愧疚)]。

例如：She felt a wave of panic, but forced herself to leave the room calmly.
她感到一阵惊慌，但是强迫自己镇静地离开了房间。

技巧2：面对复杂的情境，人物产生急迫/复杂的心理
【技巧举例】
（2021年1月，浙江高考，Para.2）The video was posted online the Monday before Halloween.I looked just like a pumpkin head in it. Embarrassed and a little annoyed, I fled to my room, but Mom stopped me. “You haven’t read the comments yet.” I scrolled down the screen and marveled at the stories the viewers shared about Halloween.
【分析】续写第二段首句提示语提供了一个新的情境，即“The video was posted online”，这让故事主人公内心冲突加剧（Embarrassed and a little annoyed），但当听力母亲的话之后，主人公开始阅读网上的评论，这又将主人公引向另一情境，结果主人公内心又起了变化（marveled）。

情境的不断变换，加剧了故事主人公内心的矛盾冲突的不断变换。

【用语储备】
（1）心里想：think /say to oneself
（2）害怕；恐慌：with fear /panic /terror; tremble; shiver; shake; quake; tremble with fear; be seized with panic; scream with panic/terror; freeze/shake with terror
（3）生气；愤怒：with rage; be red-cheeked with rage; tremble /shake with rage; feel like crying with rage; be speechless with rage; be boiling with rage
（4）兴奋；激动：with excitement; yell with excitement; jump up and down with excitement; scream with excitement; go wild with excitement
（5）悲伤；流泪：Tears blurred one’s eyes.泪水模糊了她的双眼。

/One’s eyes got misty.一个人的眼睛都模糊了。

/One’s eyes misted /dimmed with tears.泪眼模糊。

/t ears roll down one’s eyes /cheeks /face泪水落下
技巧3：面对他人的行为或行动，人物展开了新的动作/行为
【技巧举例】
(2021年，新高考I卷，Para.2）The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. When their mother saw the delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her, she was very surprised. It was not only the gift, but the love of the children for her that moved her very much. The two children could finish cooking a breakfast, which she didn’t expect. The children said loudly, “Happy Mother’s Day!”Mother hugged them tightly and kissed them
again and again.
【分析】续写第二段中，当双胞胎叫醒母亲（woke their mother up）后，母亲的动作首先有“saw”和“was very surprised”，之后在双胞胎发出节日问候“Happy Mother’s Day”时，母亲的动作有“hugged”和“kissed”。

这种“动作主动应对”模式在休息的故事情节冲突拓展过程中是比较重要的，因为动作上的变化往往承载了人物对情节中的矛盾冲突的回应模式及态度。

【用语储备】
（1）常用词语：open one’s mouth; widen one’s eyes; rise to one’s feet; jump to one’s feet; shout at the top of one’s lung; reach out（伸出手）
（2）常用句式：如：Having passed the exam, he was so happy that he was at a loss what to do. 通过考试后，他非常高兴，不知所措。

She opened the gift with her hands shaking slightly. 她用轻微颤抖的手打开了礼物。

技巧4：人物沉浸在某一情境中，于是出现了新问题
【技巧举例】
（2018年6月，浙江高考, Para.1）Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. My horse turned to the left to avoid the little rabbit as I held on tightly and tried not to fall. Then my dad turned around and shouted, “Hold on!” All of a sudden the horse began to run. My dad tried to keep up behind us. For a few minutes my horse slowed down to a trot and then stopped beside a river. I looked around and realized that we were way off the track. 【分析】续写第一段首句承接源语篇提供了一个新的情境，即“rabbit jumped out”，从而引发了马与人的一系列的避险动作，并且马由于受惊而奔跑起来，最终将主人公带入了另一个困境，即“we were way off the track”。

【用语储备】
（1）不幸的是(unfortunately)
But bad luck for sb, ... 但是某人真不走运
She tried her best, but in vain. 她尽力了，但没有成功。

（2）某人做了某事，不知道下一步该做什么。

Sb did sth, wondering what to do next.
Sb did sth, not knowing what to do next.
技巧5：情况好转或情境向好，人物突然有了一个想法
【技巧举例】
（2020年7月，浙江高考，Para.2）At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. My heart leaped with joy as I knew we were likely to be saved. Elli used pepper spray again to buy us enough time. But this time the bear became more alert. He regarded us with the merciless necessity of hunger, so we throw all the food we have. He then turned away and started devouring. As we were climbing the rope ladder, Elli prayed like thousand times to show thankfulness of being safe and sound.
【分析】续写第二段首句预设了一个新的情境“the helicopter arrived”，于是故事主人公的心情好转（My heart leaped with joy），并且当再次遇到熊的攻击时，主人公就又有了新的想法（we throw all the food we have），这将故事的冲突与发展带到另一个情境中；此外，当获救后，主人公又开始感谢（Elli prayed like thousand times to show thankfulness of being safe and sound）。

可见，用新的想法接续“情况好转”可以充分展现人物对整个事件的回应过程中的特写镜头。

【用语储备】
“某人突然想到……”：It suddenly occurred to sb that...=It hit sb that...=It struck sb that...=It dawned on sb that... 技巧6：面对他人的鼓励/激励/帮助等，人物找到了解决办法
【技巧举例】
（2017年6月，浙江高考,Para.2）A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. They found the dangerous situation, where three men circled the wolf. Mac's friends also jumped off their bicycles and joined the fight with the wolf. More and more cars stopped. Some drivers took out the sticks from the cars, and some took out the knives, even the guns towards the wolf. In the meanwhile, the wolf might feel the people's threats around, so it began to step back slowly. Soon, it ran away off the road and disappeared in the distance.
【分析】续写第二段首句提示给出了来帮忙的人（the other two cyclists arrived），之后又不断有人加入（Mac's friends also jumped off their bicycles/ More and more cars stopped），故事中的人物有了一系列与狼对抗的动作，如“circled the wolf”“took out the sticks from the cars”“took out the knives”等，这些将故事中人狼对峙的冲突进一步推向高潮。

【用语储备】
（1）鼓起勇气(做某事):take /gather /one’s courage (to do sth)
（2）毫不犹豫/选择：without a second thought/without delay/without hesitation/having no choice
技巧7：获得新的成长，人物开始总结、点题并呼应前文
【技巧举例】
（2022年1月，浙江卷, Para.2）One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease. I felt so sorry to hear that and I thought I should visit him in any case. He was a little surprised to see me when I stepped into his ward with some flowers and fruits. I offered to do the rest work of our project and he invited me to share my ideas to perfect it. We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our project on time. Our hard work paid off and Dr. Henderson’s was very satisfied with our wonderful findings. From this project, we also learned the significance of teammates. Just as the saying goes, one person can go far, but a group of persons can travel farther.
【分析】续写第二段中主人公最后发现能与队友和谐相处并最终完成了项目（We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our project on time），这引发了主人公的反响，并且主人公的这种体验不断地深入（从“we also learned the significance of teammates”到“a group of persons can travel farther”），充分展现了主人公内心的矛盾冲突从不断激化到出现转机、再到一步步迎刃而解的过程。

【用语储备】
（1）直到…… 才意识到……
倒装句：Not until... did sb realize /notice that...
强调句：It was only... that sb realized that...
（2）表达经历与教训
What a valuable lesson I have learned from...! 我从……中得到了宝贵的教训。

What an unforgettable experience! 多么难忘的经历啊!
（3）结尾点题
God helps those who help themselves.天助自助者。

Everyone is the architect of his own fate.每个人都是自己命运的建筑师。

Life is full of laughter and tears. Only by accepting both can we enjoy life.生命就是充满欢笑和泪水的。

只有同时接受两者，我们才能享受生活。

Never underestimate the power of your action.永远不要低估你的行为的力量。

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1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

In late December, the cow path near our house in Tennessee was still covered with leaves, but I knew snow would be falling soon enough. My younger brother, Buddy Earl, and I were on an important mission: Go to Uncle Tommie’s place and get a goose(鹅). The hiking over Little Mountain and getting there would be worth it. Uncle
Tommie raised the best geese around, and he’d offered to give us one for Christmas dinner.
Uncle Tommie met us at the door. “I’m not rushing you boys,” he said, “but as light snow started, you’d better get the goose and head home.” It didn’t take me long to pick up a goose from his yard. Buddy and I said a quick thank you and goodbye. The snow came down harder, wind blowing every way.
“I’m as cold as ice. How about you?” asked Buddy.
I tapped the goose’s head. “I wish we had feathers to keep us warm like you,” I said. “Or heavier coats.”
“Doug, I’m freezing,” Buddy said. I could hardly hear him over the wind and my own chattering teeth. “I think we should go back.” The idea was attractive, but we were closer to home than to Uncle Tommie’s house. We had to push on.
I held the goose closer to my chest. The bird was the only warm thing about me. I stepped in front of my brother. “Buddy, open your coat!” “Are you crazy?” He asked. “I’ll lose the little warmth I have.” When he saw I was serious, he slowly unzipped (拉开……的拉链) his coat and opened it. I placed the warm goose inside his coat and zipped it back up. “Make sure you keep the goose’s head out so it can breathe.” Buddy sighed happily. My plan was working.
注意：1. 续写词数应为150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

“Doug, it is time for you to open your coat. ”
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【参考范文】
“Doug, it is time for you to open your coat. ” Buddy handed the goose to me. Its feathered body was as warm as angel feathers inside my coat. Putting my freezing hands on its body, I felt a rush of warmth sweeping over me. We passed the goose back and forth between us all the way home, battling biting cold. After what seemed
like ages, we got home. Upon arrival, we couldn’t wait to explain to our parents how the goose had kept us from freezing. (76 words)
Hearing our surviving experience, my parents hesitated about what to do with the goose. “What should we have for Christmas dinner?” They looked at us with a concerned look. “Anything but the goose. He has saved our lives.” Buddy and I exclaimed. Shifting gazes between us and the goose which was honking as if he were pleading too. “Fine. Then we’ll do without it,” my parents announced. “Hooray!” we sprang to our feet. That Christmas, we didn’t have a grand feast, but came upon a hero in our life. (75 words)
【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者和弟弟巴迪·厄尔去汤米叔叔家买只鹅。

因为父母要给他们一只做圣诞晚餐。

在回家的路上，雪下得更大了，风到处刮。

鹅帮助作者他们取暖，回到了家。

作者他们迫不及待地向父母解释这只鹅是如何让他们免于冻僵的。

最后父母决定不杀他们生命中的一位英雄。

的故事。

1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“道格，你该把外套打开了。

”可知，第一段可描写作者抱着鹅和弟弟一起冒着风雪回家的经过。

②由第二段首句内容“听到我们幸存的经历，我的父母对如何处理这只鹅犹豫不决。

”可知，第二段可描写作者父母决定不杀这只英雄鹅。

2.续写线索：冒雪——取暖——解释——决定——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①递过来：deliver/pass/hand over
②.回家：all the way home/go back home/return home
③.阻止某人做：keep us from/stop us from/prevent sb (from)
情绪类
①.感谢：showing one's appreciation/show one's gratitude/be grateful
②.担忧的：concerned /worried
【典型句式】
[句式1]. After what seemed like ages, we got home. （由连接词what引导的宾语从句作after的宾语）
[句式2].Shifting gazes between us and the goose which was honking as if he were pleading too.（运用了非谓语动词，由关系代词which引导定语从句和as if引导的虚拟语气）
2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Coming Clean
Derek and Janey were eating in the hall and talking about the jacket of Mr. Such, who was their teacher.
“They’re so crumpled and baggy, ” Derek said. “ Like a pair of old dish-cloths. ”
“He wears them all the time ! I really wish he’d get some new ones, ” Janey sighed.
At that moment Mr. Such himself came into the hall. Today he was in a brand new suit, which was white and spotless. Everyone in the hall stopped eating and stared at him in amazement.
“Wow! ” said Derek, leaning across his plate. “ Mr. Such, you look so different today! I like your suit! ”
Thank you, Derek. It’s for Parents’ meeting. ” said Mr. Such, a bit red in the face.
“But that’s not till Monday, Mr. Such, ” Janey said.
I know that, J aney. I’m just getting used to it. ”
The last lesson of the day was art. In case his new jacket got dirty, before his teaching. Mr. Such took it off and hang it on the cupboard door. However, probably because he hadn’t got used to the new jacket, he forgo t to take it back with him. All the students left except Derek and Janey, who were still busy with their painting. Derek mixed up too much green paints and got his hand very dirty. He reached behind him and rubbed his hands on the towel on the cupboard doo r. Except that it wasn’t the towel.
“ Oh, ” he said quietly. “ What have I done! ” Turing around, he found he had wiped his hands on Mr. Such’s new jacket! Janey wanted to help, so she quickly grabbed some paper and rubbed at the green marks. “ Oh no! ” De rek cried in agony, “ You’re making them worse. They’re twice as big now. ”
Janey felt sorry and thought hard, and finally she came up with an idea. “ He was still in the office, so we still have time. There’s only one thing for it now, ” she said with de termination and pointed to the sink outside the classroom. Desperate as Derek was, he took some soaps and fetched the jacket secretly to the sink with Janey.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答
They darted over to the sink and turned on the tap.
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“Oh dear, the green stuff was still there. ” Janey sighed. “ I think we have to tell the truth. ”
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【参考范文】
They darted over to the sink and turned on the tap. The water running, they quickly threw the jacket into the sink. With his heart beating wildly, Derek rubbed the green marks with the soaps，and washed/scrubbed them carefully. The water soon formed into a pile of bubbles. After washing away the bubbles and squeezing the water out, they couldn’t wait to turn it over. To their disappointment, the green marks were still there! Derek’s heart sank.
“Oh dear, the green stuff was still there. ” Janey sighed, “ I think we have to tell the truth. ” Gathering up his courage, Derek headed to the office with Janey. Derek told Mr. Such everything and apologized to him, “ I am sorry I ruined your jacket. ” However, Mr. Such said gently, “ Anyway I really appreciate your courage to admit your mistake. ” Surprised, Derek and Janey asked anxiously, “ But what about the Parents’ meeting? ” Mr. Such put on his old jacket and replied, “ This one just suits me better. ” With laughter lingering in the office, they all felt a warm current welling up in their hearts.
【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了德里克和詹尼的老师萨奇先生为了这次家长会准备了一件新外套，在最后一节艺术课后，萨奇忘了把外套带回去，结果德里克不小心将外套当成毛巾擦手，他和詹尼一起洗还是没洗掉最后坦诚相告的故事。

1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“他们冲到水池边，打开水龙头。

”可知，第一段可描写他们试图通过肥皂能洗掉污渍。

②由第二段首句内容““哦，天哪，绿色的东西还在。

”詹尼叹了口气。

“我认为我们必须说出真相。

””可知，第二段可描写詹尼和德里克与老师坦诚相告。

2.续写线索：帮忙——无果——说明真相——道歉——欣赏——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.去：head to/go/leave/ apart from
②.道歉：apologize/make an apology
情绪类
①.温柔地：gently/softly/ tenderly
②.焦急地：anxiously/in anxiety/nervously
【典型句式】
[句式1]. Gathering up his courage, Derek headed to the office with Janey.（这句话运用了动词现在分词作状语）[句式2]. With laughter lingering in the office, they all felt a warm current welling up in their hearts.（这句话运用了现在分词作宾语补足语和现在分词作后置定语）
3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

A long time ago, there was a country where the people would change a king every year. The person who would become the king had to sign a contract that he would be sent to an island after one year.
One king finished his term and it was time for him to go to the island. The people dressed him up in expensive clothes and put him on an elephant and took him around the cities to say goodbye to all the people. This was the moment of sadness for all the kings who ruled for one year. Then the people took the king in a boat to the remote island and left him there.
On their way back, the people discovered a ship that had sunk just recently and a young man who survived by holding on to a floating piece of wood. As they needed a new king, they picked up the young man and took him to their country. They requested him to be a king and told him about all the rules and regulations. At first, he refused but later he agreed to be a king.
After three days of being a king, he asked the ministers if they could show him the island where all the other kings were sent. They agreed and took him to the island. The island was covered with thick jungles and sounds of dangerous animals were heard coming out of them. The king discovered the dead bodies of all the past kings. It was clear that as soon as they were left in the island, the animals came and killed them.
On returning to his country, the young king asked the people to provide him with 100 strong workers. He took them to the island and told them to remove all the deadly animals and to cut down some trees. He often visited the island to see how the work was progressing.
After a month, the whole island was cleaned out. The king then told the workers to plant gardens and raise useful animals like chickens, ducks, birds, goats and cows.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

In the third month, he ordered the workers to build big houses and ships.
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Now it was a full year and the king would be taken to the island.
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【参考范文】
In the third month, he ordered the workers to build big houses and ships. After the hard work of the workers, the island became a beautiful place. The young king would wear simple clothes and spend very little from his earnings. He used his remaining earnings to buy a large number of necessities of life and transported them to the island for storage. Nine months passed. The king called the people together and told them that he wanted to go to the island right now, but he was refused.
Now it was a full year and the king would be taken to the island. The people dressed up the young king and took him around the country to say goodbye to others. However, this king was unusually delighted to leave the kingdom. They felt puzzled and asked him, “All the other kings would cry at this moment. Why are you laughing?” He replied, “While all the other kings were lost into the luxuries of the kingdom, I always thought about the future and planned for it. I have turned the deadly island into a beautiful place where I can stay peacefully and happily.”【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了很久以前，有一个国家的人民每年都要换一个国王，在当国王前，必须签一个合同，一年后他们会被送到一个岛上去，这是悲伤的时刻，在送完其中一任国王回来的路上，人们发现了一个年轻人，并请求他当国王，年轻人去历代国王去的岛上发现了被动物杀死的国王尸体，他要求工人移走了致命的动物并种植花园和饲养有用的动物。

1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“在第三个月，他命令工人们建造大房子和大船。

”可知，第一段可描写他如何改造那个岛。

②由第二段首句内容“一年过去了，国王将被带到岛上。

”可知，第二段可描写国王对即将要去那个岛感到高兴和高兴的原因。

2.续写线索：省钱买必需品——上岛的要求被拒绝——人们送国王——国王高兴——人们困惑——解释原因
3.词汇激活
行为类
①购买：buy/purchase
②告别：say goodbye to/farewell to
③回答：reply/answer
情绪类
①高兴：delighted/happy
②困惑：puzzled/confused
【典型句式】
[句式1] The king called the people together and told them that he wanted to go to the island right now, but he was refused. (由that引导的宾语从句)
[句式2] I have turned the deadly island into a beautiful place where I can stay peacefully and happily. (由关系副词where引导的限制性定语从句)。