2014.11.9托福独立写作范文+解析
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2014.11.9托福独立写作范文+解析
2014-11-10谢侃Kevin英语课堂
文/谢侃(公众号:kevinenglishclass)
【题】Which factor influences you the most when it comes to a major purchase: 1) recommendations from your friends or colleagues;2) information from media; 3) salesman in the market
题型分类:对比题
论证角度:原因挖掘
观点选择:让步
开头:朋友同事的推荐影响最大。(话题引入+他人观点+明确立场+过渡)When people plan to buy something that costs a great deal of money, they will think twice before making the final decision. Factors that will affect the decision might be recommendations from friends and colleagues, information on media
and words of salesman in the market. Among all those factors, I believe that what friends and colleagues say play the most important role in helping us with the decision-making. I am going to elaborate my point of view in the following paragraphs. (75 words)
中间段1:同事朋友比较靠谱。(主题句+说理论证+细节例子)
My first reason is that friends or colleagues’ words are reliable. When offering recommendations for us to make a purchase, friends and colleagues are highly unlikely to lie to us about the quality of the goods while TV commercials and salesmen will try to convince customers to make the deal by any possible means out of commercial purposes. Imagine that I want to buy a car, a salesperson probably recommend me an expensive car that is beyond my purchasing power. Conversely, if I have a friend who is a car-lover, he will guide me to buy a car with a high quality-price ratio. (103 words)
中间段2:朋友的建议能给我们完整的信息。(主题句+说理论证+细节例子)In addition, friends or colleagues’ recommendations provide us with complete information about the product, which is beneficial for making a wise decision. When friends or colleagues can recommend us something, they must have bought or tried this product so that they have a deeper understanding of the features of the product including its quality, price and value. In this sense, their advice is very helpful for our decision. For example, I am very satisfied with the computer that I have bought recently. Expect for its reasonable price, the performance far exceeds my expectation. It is attributed to the recommendation from my friend--Jack, who has already bought one before. (109 words)
让步段:当然,朋友和同事的推荐也不一定全部正确,因为其中或许有他们的个人偏好,并不适合我们,但是比起销售人员或电视广告的商业性而言,朋友同事的推荐还是值得参考的,但是最后还得自己做决定,也不能盲从。(承认漏洞+堵漏)
Admittedly, I am not saying that recommendations from friends and colleagues are absolutely correct. They may involve their personal preferences when buying the goods, and therefore what they recommend to us may not be totally appropriate for our own situations. However, as long as we can fully realize our