IELTS雅思9分作文欣赏.doc

IELTS雅思9分作文欣赏中国人写的雅思作文有结构但语言不够地道；native speaker写的文章够地道，但不够雅思！因此，市面上总找不到“完美”的雅思例文。

此次，我特别邀请我的美国朋友（同样研究和教授雅思）“按照我的要求”写了一些文章，这里逐一贴出来，让大家分亨一下，呵呵。

Children who grow up in fami1ies which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adul t life than chi ldre n who are brought up by weal thy parents・ To what extcnt do you agree or disagree?Some feel that the children of low income fami 1 ies are better equipped to deal with difficulties posed by the "real world J when they grow up and they al so believe theprivileged children of wealthy families are less fit to deal with these difficulties . The implications and veracity of this argument seem self-evident, but in fact require closer examination. ( 58words )点评：1+1'模式，最后1句为主题句。

此段的主题句稍微有点特殊，它的确否定了前面所提到的观点，从而表达岀了自己的观点，此外还引出了下文。

特别是最后半句：but in fact require closer examination ,感觉是在抛砖引玉。

The popular wisdom is that chi ldren of poorer fami 1 ies learn early on the value of a buck, and are thus naturally better suited to stretchi ng moneywhen times get tough in adu It hood. Inversely, the children of wealthy families, thoseborn with a silver spoon in their mouths, are believed to be completely ignorant of the value of money, having had everything provided for them in their youth and oftentimes erroneously expecting the same situation in adulthood. They are believed to be prone to overspending and financial irresponsibil ity・This belief, though logical, overlooks one key point which is , of course, education. (lOOwords)点评：1 ' +3模式，第1句是主题句。

请注意，从此段的内容来看，这是个让步段（即分析自己并不赞成的观点）。

虽然4段论的作文的主体段是两面讨论，但是本人还是喜欢这样的写作，即主体段的观点还是有侧重的，把让步段放在前面，最后1句话引出下一段，这样过度地很自然，而且自己的观点也比较明确！The basis of this argument is , of course, knowing the value of money, and the idea that children of the poor know this, and those of the wealthy do not • Who though, is in a better position to teach their children the value of money; someone ski 1 led in ear ning and keepi ng it, the wealthy pare nt, or some one who can not seem to acquire it, the poor pare nt? Both wealthy and poor children are equally likely to acquire an education in money, whether it is formal, or in the school of hard knocks. Conversely, both children are as likely to ignore this education.(101words)点评：这段的内容感觉写得不够直接，还是在分析对方观点的漏洞！请注意，前面让步段已经这么写过了，那么这--段最好是正面地论证自己的观点，这样从内容上来说更convincing 一点！此外，需要说明的是，大家发现作者的内容还是有一定深度，但是这是要有一定的英语功底才行的！如果英语功底不行的话，建议内容不耍写太深，因为那样容易造成考官看不懂你在说什么！A poor child may believe that one can get along, if not as easily, without wealth・ A weal thy child may be wel 1 trained by a parent steeped in the knowledge of money management; the key to developing this skill is education.点评：最后一段有点像是提出解决这个问题的办法，即education.它没有像传统的结尾段那样简单的重申自己的观点。

总结之总结:全文的观点有待揣摩，作者很明显是不赞成题目的说法，即Chi ldren who grow up in fami 1 ies which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adul t 1 ife than chi ldren who are brought up by wealthy parents. 但是作者自己是更偏向穷人家的孩子呢，还是富人家的孩子呢？！根据文章来看，作者是中立，他所看重的是他们所接受的教育。

In other words,整篇文章又是一次屮立的写法。

在雅思考试屮，这种写法经常使用，还是非常实用的，大家可以学习一下。

此外，文章中有很多好词好句，特别是长句，值得模仿一下。

老人生活在养老院还是在家好？Aging is both a social and natural issue that has confronted human beings for centuries. Tn the Middle Age (medieval times A. D, 500 to about 1500), alchemists tried in vain to create a kind of catholicon (panacea / cure-all) to work against the process of aging・ Today theaging problem looms more alarmingly. What has disappointed Man most is, unfortunatcly, thathis scientific innovations and inventions have never cured much more than what they killed, despite so-called therapeutics and cl inical medicine spinning faster and faster. Most pragmatical ly, however, man should first address the issue of where the old people should spend their lives.The traditiorial argument is that the old should stay at their homes with their adult chi ldren. This has been the most prevai ] ing practice worl d around. However, nei ther the old nor the children are completely satisfied with this doing. Not only because the old may inflict children cumbersome and formidable burden but also on account of the implacable generation gaps・Although, inevitably, some healthy, wealthy, and wise aged people congruously and harmoniously enjoy the life with children" s families, the number of such old people, according to the latest social statistics, has been less than 2% of the whole old population (from 60 years old to 90). Therefore, the issue should have different, effective approaches. One of the modern practices in most developed countries such as USA is to establ ish numerous comfortable and convenient sanatoriums for the old. This necessitates at least two social contracts. First, the government is willing to appropriate a sum of its revenue for such in st i tut i ons. Seco ndly, each ci tize n whe n young should have contributed significantly to the society enough to qualify himself or herself for such government allowance. Furthermore, such society system wi 11 not be seriously undermined by the shifting, reforming, or even abolishing of the government. These three prerequisites, especially the last ones, unfortunately, do not exist in 90% of the Less Developed Country (LDCs) such as China, India, and so on.Tn conclusion, the old people may 1 ive with their kids and in some special government subsidi zed, old sanatoria- As to where the ol d should dwell is a multidimensional social issue that should be analyzed on the basis of case-by ? case study. Other wise it would bepresumptuous to draw absolute conclusion.广告Perhaps no single social institute has contributed much more significantly than has advertising. Advertising, both the creature and creator, has been shaping and reflecting the life and history of human beings.The relationship between advertising and society has been complex・Advertising, like any coin with two sides, however, has both positive and negative effects on human bein gs.On the one hand, as an economic force, advertising became a dynamic, necessary part of consumer capitali sm, stimulating the buying and sei ling of brand- name goods・ For example, Ads con vin ced publ ic to buy food in tin cans in stead of the traditional cloth bag. So important has adverting become to culture and economy that by now virtually every widely accepted products has been promoted through advertising. Advertising may have exaggerated claims and false promises, but that in no way diminishes its impacts on society・ Advertising made its great contributions by informing people about an endless stream of new products and, in the process, shapping mass behavior and desires—the driving forces in a capitalist consumer eco no my.Nor did advertising ignore serious issues. In the 1960s and 1970s, controversial images of femin ism and minorities helped bring the issues of equal rights and empowerment to the forefront and began to remark the face of advertising. Advertising helped get out of the vote and shaped the debate on environmental issues, alcohol abuse, cigarette smoking, and later, AIDS.On the other hand, advertising has inevitably exerted some detrimental impacts on human civi 1 ization. For example, ads are frequently broadcast during exciting movies on TV programs. This distracts audiences， interest. Tn addition, advertising may go against accepted moral norms.Therefore, on the strength of these reasons, advertisement has both pros and cons.This is logical. What is to be done is to put the advert isi ng on its legal orb it andovercome al 1 the drawbacks.撒谎Li e, whose inte nt ion is to deceive, a.1 though di ff erent from fraudulence, i s universally condemned・ In the creed of each religion world around, to tell lie is regarded as devil rather than divine. The mundane moral norms, ethic, yardsticks, aesthetical, axiom, and eve n in dividual" s behavioral gauge, honesty is all of the m・ Lie, however, is none. But it remains a contentious and critical issue to ask whether or not tell ing lie should n ever be en couraged. Two prevai ling theories have bee n widely accepted.One is to firmly advocate honesty and thus claim that to tell lies is sin. Lies are always destruetive, devastative, and devil. This is mainly a sacred rather than secular preaching. According to this school of philosophy, or rather a kind of deontology, lies impair (hamper) the social ethos, blemish human souls, vitiate the personality and dignity, debase the social justice, and canker the health of civi1ization. Admittedly, such a sublime and supreme transcendentai, divine doctrine symbolizes the zenith of human spirit・Unfortunately, man is but an animal, or at most, a social animal as Aristotle termed. In the pragmatic mundane world, most of us humble mortals would find it sanctimonious, Pharisaic, or hypocritica1・ Devil it may be, but it is necessary at least from pragmatic point of view. This is what the second theory assumed. This approach is correctly termed as "Functionalism school v・For one thing, the level with which they utilized to prize human affairs is practical concerns.They advocate both lies and truth with little difference if both means can meet lheir ends・For another, the fulcrum on which the level functions is neither religion nor philosophy, but human behavior. What they used to vindicate for tel ling lies is not moral concerns but that under certain circumstances to tel 1 1 ie helps both the 1 iar and the dupe. They try neither to justify the righteousness of lies nor do they attempt to exculpate those who tel 1 1 ies ・ In stead, they warra nt that lies, as any implement human use such as a knife, a fork, anda pen, should not be blamed in case they contribute 1ittle to human beings.实用总结：雅思考试写作经典图表范文1930-1980五十年间五个国家囚禁犯人的数据情况中广网北京6月13 口消息该图表对比的是1930-1980五十年间五个国家囚禁犯人的数据情况。