2020年高考英语作文高分素材训练:2.2 高考读后续写高分技巧
高中英语写作 读后续写得分要点及技巧
得分要点1、字迹清晰。
每段首尾的字迹必须非常清楚。
其实阅卷老师无论看什么作文,他的重点一般都是放在每段的首尾,首尾必须吸睛。
2、前后呼应,主题升华。
有些乱七八糟八竿子打不着的就不要乱说,读后续写一般都划出了提示词,这些提示词其实都是续写的线索,必须串联使文章紧凑。
但最重要的就是主题升华,弘扬人性的真善美。
3、高级词汇怎么放?读后续写的词汇得分点除了一般的名词、形容词、副词之外,最重要的是高级动词!因为续写侧重叙事,里面涉及到的人的动作是非常多的,比如cry,这就过于简单,要侧重细节描写,to show, not to tell, 高分作文一般就会写,With shoulders shivering, her tears cannot help streaming down her face.她的双肩哆哆嗦嗦,眼泪情不自禁的从她脸上流下来。
所以类似表现喜怒哀乐的情况,都要事先做好准备(注意,两三句即可,但这两三句一定要是最佳句,如句式,高级词汇都要是最好的,熟记于心,一直用即可),侧重刻画描写,脸,手,眼睛都可以描写。
4、关于情节,提倡一波两折。
虽说读后续写没有字数限制,但是考虑到字的大小与整体篇幅限制,一般两个波折即可,如事态变坏一个转折,最后事态好转一个转折即可。
侧重人物矛盾与心理冲突,比如两人之间的猜忌,后重归于好,类似小学生作文。
写作技巧1.从原文中整理出3~5个小的情节,从中推理出续写的主要情节。
情节不能自己读后凭空想象,按自己看过的小说、电视剧情节适当推理。
2. 根据两个段首语来推理情节。
段首语往往决定着这一整段话的走向,不可衔接不当。
3. 根据关键词来推理情节发展。
原文中关键词一般会在十个左右,也并不是都能用上的。
有一部分关键词对于预测下面的情节是很有导向意义的,因而会在后文中用的到。
关键词中,有关于情感的连接的有关于时间的指向的,有关键句线索反复出现的,要做的,是串联前面的伏笔后面是否有所体现,前文的人物关系是否把握,以及把握后是否在续写中使矛盾凸现既而解决,这些都是决定了分数高低的因素。
2020年高考英语作文高分素材训练:2.2 高考读后续写高分技巧
2. 高考读后续写高分技巧(2018·浙江高考) 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
续写的词数应为150左右。
It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guest room of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm, ” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper, ” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!”“OK!”my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven(编织的)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us. 注意: 续写部分分为两段, 每段的开头语已为你写好。
高考英语专题复习:读后续写 答题技巧指导
高考英语专题复习:读后续写答题技巧指导读后续写是随着我国高考改革由教育部考试中心研制的英语高考新题型,2016 年10 月在浙江省首次使用。
该题型通过读写结合,检测学生的英语书面语言理解与表达能力。
要求学生能够梳理故事文体的结构、分析故事发展的线索、想像故事发展的情节以及续写故事的发展和结局。
2020年山东省高考英语卷准备首次采用读后续写题型。
读后续写考题,“提供一段350 词以内的语言材料,要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写(150 词左右),将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文”。
从试题结构看,读后续写评价的是书面理解能力和书面表达能。
因此,在写作之前,首先读懂文本,理清故事情节,然后构思故事的发展和结局。
下面介绍一下读后续写的答题技巧:一.写作思路主要按照以下四个步骤来写:第一步:通读文本,提取线索词和信息句,写出每段段落大意。
第二步:根据文本每段内容,结合所给续写部分的首句,构思完整的故事情节。
第三步:根据续写部分所提供的首句,写出续写部分每段的段落大意,围绕续写部分的段落大意进行合理的细节描写。
第四步:润色成篇。
二.写作过程展示1阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
续写的词数应为150左右。
It was somewhere between spring and summer that my mom and I were driving through the countryside. Back then I was 13 years old and always felt unhappy with Mom. But little did I know that this trip was going to be a special one.A pot of flowers sat in the back seat, whose heavenly scent filled the car. Suddenly, in the middle of nowhere, my mom pulled over. “What are you doing?”I cried, fearing that the car had broken down and we’d be stuck there, so far from home. But that wasn’t the case. My mom hopped out of the car, grabbing the flowers from the back seat. “It’ll just be a minute,”she called back through the open windows.My eyes impatiently skimmed the edge of the road before settling on a little s ign showing that it was a nursing home (养老院). I looked back at the building, somewhat annoyed, as my mom reappeared, empty-handed.Before she started the car, curiosity drove me to ask, “Do you know anyone there?”She shook her head. “Then what did you do with the flowers?”She smiled slightly, “I gave them to the receptionist (接待员).”“What?”She laughed at my confusion. “I told the receptionist to give the flowers to whoever needed them, especially those who haven’t gotten any.”I kept silent for a moment. Not long after we continued our driving, I spoke again, “Did you leave your name?”To this she answered instantly, “No. Leaving flowers there for someone who will appreciate them makes me feel good, which is enough.”2Suddenly, still thinking about Mom’s deeds, I heard something burst loudly. It was our car that broke down! Nothing could be worse, because neither my mom nor I understood how to repair it, and we didn’t know where the garage (汽车修理厂) was. It also seemed impossible to wait for any passerby, since we had seen so few along the way.Paragraph 1:We were worrying about what could be done.Paragraph 2:As we drove along, a flower shop came into sight.【写作思路】第一步:通读文本,提取线索词和信息句,写出每段段落大意。
新高考英语满分作文读后续写高分突破+万能金句:专题 2 读后续写(如何巧妙构思读后续写的故事情节)
专题02 如何巧妙构思读后续写的故事情节之高分技巧、高分手段和易错点读后续写能否拿否拿高分某种程度上取决于故事情节的构思。
这就要求考生做到学会分析情节。
分析故事情节一般从故事六要素着手,即who, when, where, what, why, how。
然后根据故事情节发展线和主人公的情感变化来续写文章。
简化为:❖高分手段读后续写的故事情节设计中,矛盾冲突和转折总体上应当体现清代袁枚《随园诗话》中“文似看山不喜平”的意思,即写文章好比观赏山峰那样,喜欢起伏,不喜欢平铺直叙。
所以读后续写的冲突就体现了这种跌宕起伏,而最终的矛盾冲突会变为积极的正能量。
❖易错点在续写过程中,应当体会原材料故事中的语言特点,从人物动作描写,场景描写,情感情绪描写,人物心理和神态外貌描写等方面进行润色,提升语言表达的准确性,完成语言风格高契合度的短文。
典例剖析【2022年高考浙江卷6 月】阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
I needed to do something in my community (社区) in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen, so I did, too. It seemed like a good thing to do.I thought that we would just be passing out dinners to those in need, but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner. We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served, but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering. It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner.As the line of people came toward me, I got a little scared. I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act? How would they treat me? Would they hate me for having more than they did? While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous. I didn’t have too much time to worry about i t. I was assigned (分配) to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had tally given up on life, while others seemed to be making the best of the situation, smiling and joking. Some were better off than others, but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
新高考英语读后续写写作妙招:精彩的收尾
新高考英语读后续写写作妙招:精彩的收尾好的开端和结尾是一篇文章获取高分的关键,本篇文章从五个方面分析如何写出精彩的结尾,帮助考生快速抓住阅卷老师的眼球。
精彩收尾1:画面定格这样的收尾引人入胜,给人无限想象空间,让人回味无穷。
考生可以从人物动作的画面和具有特殊寓意的写景画面两个方面定格。
1.人物动作的画面定格①(2020杭州五校联考)They stood there for a moment, side by side, waiting for the rushing holiday current and for their place in it. Then the daughter glanced over and momentarily regarded her mother. And slowly, almost reluctantly, she placed her arm with apparently unaccustomed affection around her mother's shoulders and gently guided her back into the deluge.她们并肩站在那里,等待着节日的浪潮,等待着她们在浪潮中的位置。
然后女儿扫了一眼,立刻注视着她的母亲。
慢慢地,几乎是不情愿地,带着明显不习惯的爱她把胳膊放在她母亲的肩膀上,轻轻地引导她回到洪水中。
②His hard work paid off! Holding the soda tin firmly, Reuben rushed for the shop to buy the brooch. The moment he got the beautiful brooch, he burst through the front door and placed it in Dora's hand. Never had Dora received such a gift. Speechless and happy, she held her son tightly into her arms, with tears welling up in her eyes.他的努力得到了回报!鲁本紧紧地握着汽水罐,冲向商店去买胸针。
2020高中英语新高考-英语作文:读后续写进阶指导(含模拟作文训练3篇)
2020高中英语新高考读后续写的升华:删繁就简三秋树,领异标新二月花引言我在近日提出读后续写的两个概念。
读后续写的内容可以分为:Be a story; Beyond a story.所谓Be a story,就是把故事说完整即可,不一定要突出一定的道理,类似于情景剧《老友记》,娱乐一下;而Beyond a story是基于一定的主旨(theme)去挖掘人物的内心情感,所有情节的拓展都是服务于主旨。
从浙江的历年读后续写材料和提供的范文看,文章并没有突出一定的主旨,纯粹的Be a story。
譬如2016年的妻子赌气和丈夫旅游中分开,然后迷路。
续写也是最后两人又和好。
包括今年的儿子上学,父母给家里的狗又添了一个伙伴,然后儿子回家。
这里面的故事就是单纯地围绕人物线展开,把故事讲完了,就结束了。
我认为无论是be a story还是beyond a story,只要把人物形象刻画出来了,并且续写部分的想象合情合理,都是达到了高考的写作要求。
但有人说,beyond a story对学生来说,太难了。
其实这就误解了我的意思。
就具体写而言,要想写好,都不容易。
甚至be a story对学生的遣词造句要求更高。
因为你完全靠情节胜出,就要在用词上卯足劲,否则这篇文章就干巴巴的。
不仅仅没有思想,而且语言平庸,味同嚼蜡。
而beyond a story,你虽然语言平庸一点,但是你的思想非常动人,这就弥补了语言表达的匮乏。
以浙江作文题为例材料大致是:丈夫和妻子去旅游,来到森林里,二人意见不合,妻子赌气跑开了。
然后突然发现迷路了。
此时看到头上的飞机,估计是找她,但无法让它看到。
续写部分的范文是:天黑了,妻子找了写果实吃了后睡去;天亮,又和丈夫重逢。
我的想法:这几年的续写材料说实话,不知道是不是命题人觉得学生水平有限,选材都没有一定的思想深度,即使和完形填空比都差一截。
作为考生,如果要从思想上拔高,就要如此考虑,由于文章主要写妻子的活动,人物此时就一个:妻子。
2020新高考英语读后续写或概要写作技巧!
2015 年 8 月,在教育部考试中心发布的《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科考试说明》中,提出了写作新题型:读后续写或概要写作,两种形式在不同考次不定期交替使用。
随着新教材的使用推广,该题型已经在浙江、山东、辽宁等省份的日常考试中频繁出现,并将在2020年高考中使用。
读后续写作为一种全新的高考题型,对于新题型我们该如何训练我们的续写和概要总结能力呢!一起来边做例题边学习吧!【读后续写】读后续写主要关注以下四个方面的能力:(1)把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力。
学生需要了解所给短文的主要内容,清楚其关键词和语言结构的使用情况,并通过续写短文表现出来。
(2)语言运用的准确性和丰富性。
学生能准确、恰当地使用所学词汇和语言结构,还能够根据内容需要使用较多、较复杂的词汇和语言结构。
(3)对语篇结构的把控能力。
学生需要掌握上下文逻辑关系,所续写的短文与所给短文及段落开头语之间要有连贯性,所续写的短文内语句要连贯、有序。
(4)创造性思维能力。
学生所续写的短文要具有较丰富的内容,包含详细和生动的情景、态度和感情描述。
“读后续写”答题攻略如下:(1)精读文章,确定文章线索。
每篇文章都有各自独特的写作思路,通过精读文章,找到该篇文章的写作线索,例如什么人(who)什么时间(when)在什么地方(where)因为什么(why)做了什么事儿(what),最后有了什么发展(how)。
(2)仔细审题,明确续写要求。
一般短文后面的“注意”都有对此短文续写的具体要求,如字数限制、使用几处下划线关键词语、续写段落的首句提示。
(3)回扣原文,揣摩续写思路。
根据文章后面的要求,再次快速回读短文,抓住文章的思路,结合段首的提示语,最终确定续写段落的思路,同时结合文章划线词语提示,确定续写段落的内容。
(4)拟写草稿,修改错词病句。
在确定了思路和内容之后,最关键的就是结合提示语或者文中划线的关键词语拟写草稿。
拟写时,注意句子结构的多样性、语言的丰富性,并通过句与句之间连接词的正确使用,使上下文连贯。
高考英语新题型-读后续写-技巧
高考英语新题型-读后续写-技巧读后续写是一种考查考生综合语言运用能力的新题型。
它要求考生在给定的前文基础上,写出后文。
在理解前文的基础上,考生需要建立一个对前文的理解框架和概括,并以此为基础,确定接下来应该出现的内容。
续写部分不仅要求准确使用词汇和语言框架,还要明白如何整理内容,使其与前文形成统一连贯的表达内容。
因此,续写是读和写的统一,需要考查阅读能力、概括能力、思维转化能力、语言领悟能力、语言组织能力、创造性思维能力以及对上下文逻辑关系的掌握。
对于前文文本的选择,应该是脉络清晰,能够为不同层次考生根据不同能力确认主旨信息的文本。
前文的选择一定要信息完整,可以提炼观点,同时也要为下面的续写留有余地。
因此,选文判断能力也是命题者需要具备的能力。
完成高质量的读后续写最重要的是要通过大量阅读信息的输入,形成一定的阅读思维能力。
只有沉淀思维,归纳信息,梳理脉络,转换思维,阅读思维能力才能迅速提升。
对续写的前文的理解是这一题型的最关键部分,多读、多思维、多沉淀、多拓展是应对读后续写的重要环节。
读后续写的阅读材料一般以记叙文和夹叙夹议文为主。
记叙文浅显易懂,但故事情节多曲折动人,故事线索的逻辑性也较强。
要求考生续写的部分多是故事发展的或结局。
情节曲折跌宕,线索性和逻辑性较强。
考生要抓住故事的叙事线索,依据原文的写作思路续写文章,并适当发散。
续写要求考生在读懂原文的基础上,在规定时间内展开合理的想象,并运用所学的英语知识完成一篇约150词左右的续写。
原文给出10处左右的标有下划线的关键词语,所续写短文应使用5个以上。
续写部分分为两段,每段开头语已经给出。
考生所续写的部分要有创新性,不是原文的抄写或胡编乱造,同时,还要带有原文色彩(必须使用原文5处以上的关键词语)。
读后续写是一种要求考生在给定材料和关键词的帮助下完成续写部分的题型。
考生需要精确理解所给材料,遵循段落开头语的引导,按照可能的合理方向进行拓展发挥,使文章逻辑结构完整。
高考英语读后续写解题技巧
高考英语读后续写满分作文万能模板【题型分析与写作方法】题型解析:读后续写是写作的一种新题型,顾名思义就是我们在阅读一篇还未写完的文章之后,按照语段所给的开头写出两个语段(约150词),从而把这篇文章未写完的部分补充完整,使之浑然一体。
读后续写不仅要求考生准确使用词汇和语言框架,会合理润色语言,更重要的是,它还要求考生能够明白应该如何整理续写内容,以使得其形成和前文统一连贯的、能够表述完整信息的表达内容。
应该说,这种题型是阅读理解和书面表达的沟通桥梁,它不仅考查了考生在阅读文章的基础上分析文章逻辑的能力,又考查了考生的创造力、想象力,以及运用准确丰富的语言进行表达的能力。
解题方法:下面是读后续写类作文的写作步骤:1. 读文精读文章,确定文章线索。
每篇文章都有各自独特的写作思路,通过精读文章,找到该篇文章的写作线索,比如,是以时间为线索还是以空间为线索,这样有利于考生“顺藤摸瓜”完成续写。
确定文章体裁和主要内容(话题)。
注意文中的关键词,也就是故事中的时间、地点、人物和事件等信息。
2. 审题仔细审题,明确续写要求。
一般短文后面的“注意”都有对此次短文续写的具体要求,如词数限制、续写段落的首句提示,这样考生才能做到“心中有数”。
3. 谋段在读文、审题的基础上,先仔细阅读续写部分所给出的两段段首文字,再构思这两段要写的段落大意。
根据原文情节确定好段落大意,找出每一段的写作要点,然后再补充相关细节和常识,这两段加起来要能写出10到15个句子,以满足续写词数的要求。
4. 初写拟写草稿,修改错词病句。
在确定了思路和内容之后,拟写草稿。
拟写时,注意句子结构的多样性及语言的丰富性,并通过句与句之间连接词的正确使用,使上下文连贯。
写作时要注意,所用的人称和时态要与原材料一致。
5. 定稿完成初稿后,考生需先结合原材料中故事线索读一读自己续写的内容,既要确保所写内容没有与原材料相矛盾的地方,又要保证内容上前后连贯,语句通顺;然后润色续写部分,可使用高分单词或短语,运用各种从句、介词短语结构、非谓语动词等高级表达,合理添加过渡词;最后誉写文字,这个过程考生务必做到“字迹工整、清晰”。
高中英语新高考-英语作文:读后续写进阶指导(含原创模拟作文训练3篇)
2020高中英语新高考读后续写的升华:删繁就简三秋树,领异标新二月花引言我在近日提出读后续写的两个概念。
读后续写的内容可以分为:Be a story; Beyond a story.所谓Be a story,就是把故事说完整即可,不一定要突出一定的道理,类似于情景剧《老友记》,娱乐一下;而Beyond a story是基于一定的主旨(theme)去挖掘人物的内心情感,所有情节的拓展都是服务于主旨。
从浙江的历年读后续写材料和提供的范文看,文章并没有突出一定的主旨,纯粹的Be a story。
譬如2016年的妻子赌气和丈夫旅游中分开,然后迷路。
续写也是最后两人又和好。
包括今年的儿子上学,父母给家里的狗又添了一个伙伴,然后儿子回家。
这里面的故事就是单纯地围绕人物线展开,把故事讲完了,就结束了。
我认为无论是be a story还是beyond a story,只要把人物形象刻画出来了,并且续写部分的想象合情合理,都是达到了高考的写作要求。
但有人说,beyond a story对学生来说,太难了。
其实这就误解了我的意思。
就具体写而言,要想写好,都不容易。
甚至be a story 对学生的遣词造句要求更高。
因为你完全靠情节胜出,就要在用词上卯足劲,否则这篇文章就干巴巴的。
不仅仅没有思想,而且语言平庸,味同嚼蜡。
而beyond a story,你虽然语言平庸一点,但是你的思想非常动人,这就弥补了语言表达的匮乏。
以浙江作文题为例材料大致是:丈夫和妻子去旅游,来到森林里,二人意见不合,妻子赌气跑开了。
然后突然发现迷路了。
此时看到头上的飞机,估计是找她,但无法让它看到。
续写部分的范文是:天黑了,妻子找了写果实吃了后睡去;天亮,又和丈夫重逢。
我的想法:这几年的续写材料说实话,不知道是不是命题人觉得学生水平有限,选材都没有一定的思想深度,即使和完形填空比都差一截。
作为考生,如果要从思想上拔高,就要如此考虑,由于文章主要写妻子的活动,人物此时就一个:妻子。
2020年高考英语新题型写作技巧十 读后续写及续写综合训练
2020年高考英语写作新题型备考技巧专题(十)读后续写+续写综合训练随着高考改革的不断深化, 高考英语引入了综合题型, 即读后续写和概要写作。
该题型将阅读和写作深度结合, 具有综合性、应用性和创新性, 有助于英语考试评分的科学性、合理性。
综合写作任务给考生提供一篇包含丰富语言的文本并要求考生在完成写作任务时须要1.理解并提炼原文要点;2. 选择相关要点;3. 综合分析相关要点;4. 转换原文语言;5. 组织要点;6. 运用诸如要点连接和引述原文的行文手法。
所以考生在备考时要多结合素材多注重培养这些能力。
当然, 根据文本类型的不同, 任务考查的形式和目标也会不同, 对阅读和写作能力的具体要求也会有差异。
本节学案着重讲解下读后续写。
读后续写是一种全新的综合写作任务形式。
根据研究表明, 读后续写能有效检测学生的阅读和写作水平, 从而有效区分不同能力的考生。
一.读后续写的考纲说明和题型介绍1.了解考纲说明根据教育部考试中心的相关说明, 读后续写要求考生在阅读一段350 词以内的语言材料的基础上, 根据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写(150 词左右), 将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
续写部分分为两段。
原文给出10 个左右的标有下划线的关键词语, 所续写短文应使用5 个以上。
2.明白试题选材的特点教育部考试中心的考试说明虽未对读后续写材料的体裁做出明确说明, 但根据所附的样题和近几年的真题来看, 所提供的阅读材料一般多以记叙文为主, 亦或是夹叙夹议类的文章, 故事情节有曲折、有起伏;故事线索的逻辑性比较强。
记叙文是以记人、叙事、写景、状物为主,以写人物的经历和事物的发展变化为主要内容的一种文体形式。
它的主要的表达方式是叙述和描写, 也常辅以适当的抒情、议论和说明。
记叙文的特点是通过生动形象的事件来反映生活并表达作者的思想情感, 它的中心思想蕴含在具体材料中, 通过对人、事、物的生动描写来表现。
高考英语读后续写提分技巧及练习
读后续写提分技巧1、微动作体现人物情绪After hearing his son's words, the father frowned.听了他儿子的话,这个父亲皱了皱眉。
(1)The little girl winked her eyes, with the hope that her mother could agree.小女孩眨了眨眼睛,希望她妈妈能同意。
(2)On the way home, he whistled while walking with a paper with full marks in his hand. 在回家的路上,他边走边吹口哨,手里攥着一张满分卷。
(3)When he saw her, he shruRged his shoulders , and she knew that their demand was turned down.当他看见她时,耸了耸肩,她就知道他们的要求被拒绝了。
(4)The naughtv bov scratched his head, so confused.顽皮的男孩抓着自己的脑袋,很困惑。
2、大动作推动情节发副词的修饰副词可以从程度、频率、方式、方向、时间、地点等方面修饰动作,让大动作描写更具体。
(1)He packed the box carefully (with care) so as not to break the delicate vase inside.他小心翼翼的包装那个盒子,生怕打碎了里面的瓶子。
(2)She stepped forward in spite of the fear in her heart.他不顾心中的恐惧向前走去。
1)各种短语的辅助各种短语的添加,如名词短语、介词短语、副词短语等,能够使人物动作刻画更形象。
(1)He practiced playing the violin, heart and soul. 他全身心练习小提琴。
高中英语新高考-英语作文:读后续写进阶指导(含原创模拟作文训练3篇)
2020高中英语新高考读后续写的升华:删繁就简三秋树,领异标新二月花引言我在近日提出读后续写的两个概念。
读后续写的内容可以分为:Be a story; Beyond a story.所谓Be a story,就是把故事说完整即可,不一定要突出一定的道理,类似于情景剧《老友记》,娱乐一下;而Beyond a story是基于一定的主旨(theme)去挖掘人物的内心情感,所有情节的拓展都是服务于主旨。
从浙江的历年读后续写材料和提供的范文看,文章并没有突出一定的主旨,纯粹的Be a story。
譬如2016年的妻子赌气和丈夫旅游中分开,然后迷路。
续写也是最后两人又和好。
包括今年的儿子上学,父母给家里的狗又添了一个伙伴,然后儿子回家。
这里面的故事就是单纯地围绕人物线展开,把故事讲完了,就结束了。
我认为无论是be a story还是beyond a story,只要把人物形象刻画出来了,并且续写部分的想象合情合理,都是达到了高考的写作要求。
但有人说,beyond a story对学生来说,太难了。
其实这就误解了我的意思。
就具体写而言,要想写好,都不容易。
甚至be a story 对学生的遣词造句要求更高。
因为你完全靠情节胜出,就要在用词上卯足劲,否则这篇文章就干巴巴的。
不仅仅没有思想,而且语言平庸,味同嚼蜡。
而beyond a story,你虽然语言平庸一点,但是你的思想非常动人,这就弥补了语言表达的匮乏。
以浙江作文题为例材料大致是:丈夫和妻子去旅游,来到森林里,二人意见不合,妻子赌气跑开了。
然后突然发现迷路了。
此时看到头上的飞机,估计是找她,但无法让它看到。
续写部分的范文是:天黑了,妻子找了写果实吃了后睡去;天亮,又和丈夫重逢。
我的想法:这几年的续写材料说实话,不知道是不是命题人觉得学生水平有限,选材都没有一定的思想深度,即使和完形填空比都差一截。
作为考生,如果要从思想上拔高,就要如此考虑,由于文章主要写妻子的活动,人物此时就一个:妻子。
[全]高考英语-读后续写-高分技巧详解
高考英语-读后续写-高分技巧详解一、什么是读后续写读后续写从浙江省开始试点,到去年开始,山东新高考也增加了读后续写这个题型。
它要求考生在理解一片不完整文章的基础上,格局要求和提示来预测缺失部分的内容走势,将文章补充完整,使之浑然一体。
二、读后续写两大写作手法“叙述”“、描写”。
1、叙述的功能主要是推动国庆节的发展。
2、描写力求通过呈现细节强调任务的性格特点。
精彩的描写往往更容易提高文章的可读性,给阅卷老师留下深刻的印象。
所以考生若是在续写文章时,若想获取高分,就要学会将这两种写作手法结合起来使用。
三、如何应用这两大手法下面通过一个例子来清楚地展示同一个场景,两种不同的叙述方式,大家看看哪一种更能获得阅卷老师的好感呢?1.She pushed the door open and saw her mother sitting in the room sadly.2.Opening the door slowly and carefully, she caught sight of her mother, who sat motionlessly with her eyes staring blankly into space and tears rolling down her cheeks.以上两句话描绘的是同一个场景:女儿推开房门发现母亲伤心地坐在房间里。
句1主要采用了叙述的方式,虽然交代清楚了场景和事件,语言上也没有错误,但是句子显得平淡无味,属于基本合格的句子。
而在句2中,作者具体地描写了母亲茫然地盯着前方,眼泪顺着面颊流了下来的样子,虽然没有出现sad一词,但是通过这些细节读者很容易感受到母亲当时的心情。
细细品味高下立判。
四、写作训练第二节(满分25分)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
续写的词数应为150左右。
My sister Jeanne and I were born only 14 months apart, and we once shared many happy moments. She liked telling jokes to me and I would laugh heartily. She always said she loved my laughter and it's the mostimpressive sound for her. But by the time we were teenagers we had years without speaking and lost touch due to family breaking. By age 19, I had moved away from our home in Wisconsin to live on my father's horse farin Virginia. Jeanne got married at 20, moved to Chicago, and became ——well, I didn't know what. We lived separate lives in separate states, and our connection somehow ended.Fast-forward about five years. I was 24 and on a trip with my best friend to New York City, a place I had never been to. It was so different from my hometown. I was used to riding my horse to the corner store where everyone knew everyone and everything went on in the quiet little cowboy town of Driver, Virginia. We went to New York to visit my friend's cousin and see the sights. We went to Little Italy, the Statue of Liberty, Chinatown and several Manhattan clubs. I had never seen so many taxis in one spot in all my life.During a day of sightseeing, we were crossing a very busy street loaded with people. Everyone was in a hurry. I was laughing at something my friend just said, and then I suddenly heard my name yelled from somewhere behind me: “Cheryl! ”The voice was so familiar. I froze in my steps in the middle of the road. Tears welled spontaneously(不由自主地)in my eyes. knew without shadow of doubt that it was my sister Jeanne. I yelled back before even turning to look. “Jeanne?”It was her. "Oh my!" I screamed, and began pushing people out of my way to get to her. The crowd started to part even by New York standards, we must have seemed crazy. And there we were, standing in the middle of Manhattan street, facing each other and smiling. I couldn’t believe it. Paragraph 1:I later asked how she'd known it was me.Paragraph 2:Since that time, my sister and I have never been separated.一、读后续写高分技巧之二把握核心:优化用词,表达方式务求丰富。
新高考英语读后续写满分攻略:读后续写 对话高分技巧
距离高考还有一段时间,不少有经验的老师都会提醒考生,愈是临近高考, 能否咬紧牙关、学会自我调节,态度是否主动积极,安排是否科学合理,能不 能保持良好的心态、以饱满的情绪迎接挑战,其效果往往大不一样。以下是本 人从事10多年教学经验总结出的超实用新高考英语专题复习讲义希望可以帮助 大家提高答题的正确率,希望对你有所帮助,有志者事竟成!
纠正方法如下: ➢ "I can't believe it," Emma said with a gasp.(对话标签Emma said+ with介词短
语) ➢ Emma gasped. "I can't believe it." (动作描写+句号) ➢ "I can't believe it." Emma gasped. (对话句+动作描写,注意对话句式句号) ➢ "That's funny!" Henry chuckled. (感叹句结束+动作描写) ➢ "That's funny," Henry said, chuckling.
4. 对话标签多此一举:对话对象十分明确,仍使用对
话标签
“I told you already,” I said, glaring. 评析:此句貌似豪华,其实对话中的主语“I”已经清晰地说明了说话者,完全没
有必要用对话标签“I said” 来说说话对象。纠正方法:加上一点动作描写就可以避 免这种错误,并且提升语言的生动性。 I glared at him. “I told you already.”
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让你的对话标签不平庸四个小技巧
高考英语读后续写难点突破—— 续写高分的诀窍
Part III Bonus Tips:读后续写高分的诀窍
读后续写高分的诀窍
1.锁定关键词
2.有框架感
Bonus tips
5.构建专属语料库
3.有血、有肉、有灵魂
4.避免汉式思维
1.锁定关键词
“5W1H”
2020年4月 潍坊一模考试读后续写
Deep in the forest, my husband and I had fun climbing over and crawling
she had left
4.避免汉式思维
3.有血、有肉、有灵魂 2.有框架感 1.锁定关键词
grateful
4.避免汉式思维
We became good friends with the woman, whom we paid a visit to once a year from then on.
frightened
1.Nervous and frightened, I felt my heart began to beat wildly and my mind went blank. 2.Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent myself from falling off. 3.He felt so scared that his throat tightened and his knees felt weak.
2.有框架感 1.锁定关键词
3.有血、有肉、有灵魂
3.有血、有肉、有灵魂
情感、情节、主题
Paragraph 1: My husband suddenly spotted a small building on a hill in the distance.
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2. 高考读后续写高分技巧(2018·浙江高考) 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
续写的词数应为150左右。
It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guest room of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm, ” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper, ” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!”“OK!”my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven(编织的)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us. 注意: 续写部分分为两段, 每段的开头语已为你写好。
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. _____________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ _We had no idea where we were and it got dark._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ _练考场审题Step 1: 精准审题谋篇布局文体记叙文时态一般过去时原文分析第一段: 交代故事的背景。
介绍了度假的原因和地点第二段: 简单地介绍了旅途第三段: 对在农场的日常活动的简单介绍第四段和续写故事的展开有很大的关系。
这一段讲到了如何发生了我和爸爸去骑马的故事。
而续写的内容就是在此基础上展开写作思路根据第一段所给首句Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. 这一句是故事发展的转折点, 可从rabbit出现后带来的反应扩展开, 可以写马的反应, 也可以写人的反应, 但要注意与第二段首句相呼应第二段首句是We had no idea where we were and it got dark. 这一句呼应前文Uncle Paul的叮嘱——不要误了吃晚饭, 可从如何寻路返回农场去写Step 2: 头脑风暴字字珠玉(1)美词: previous;in vain;at the point of desperation;a faint voice(2)佳句①Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent me from falling off .②Fortunately, minutes later, the horse stopped before a river, out of breath, and so did I.③What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly. Step 3: 斟酌词句妙笔生花要点1: 这个出其不意的出场让我的马疯狂地跑起来。
一般表达:This unexpected appearance made my horse run wildly.句式升级(定语从句)This unexpected appearance frightened my horse, which made it run wildly.要点2: 尽管我很害怕, 我努力不(让自己)掉下马来。
一般表达:Although I was frightened, I tried not to fall off the horse.句式升级(倒装句)Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent me from falling off.要点3: 我们只能沿着之前的路慢慢走回去。
一般表达:We could only go back along the previous track slowly.句式升级(主语从句)我们所能做的只有沿着之前的路慢慢走回去。
What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly. Step 4: 衔接过渡斐然成篇Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. This unexpected appearance frightened my horse, which made it run wildly.I tried my best to control it, but in vain. Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent me from falling off. Fortunately, minutes later, the horse stopped before a river, out of breath, and so did I. At that moment, my dad also came up. Seeing I was OK, he was quite relieved. But it was clear that we got lost.We had no idea where we were and it got dark. We didn’t know where the farm house was. What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly. But it was really difficult for us in such a dark situation. Just as we were at the point of desperation, we heard a faint voice from the distance. “It must be Uncle Paul, ” I said. So we cried back with excitement. Finally, Uncle Paul safely brought us back home. What an amazing ride!1阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。