英语书面表达易错剖析含解析

英语书面表达易错剖析含解析
一、英语书面表达
1．假如你即将在学校英语兴趣小组的活动中发言，请你用英语写一篇发言稿。

要点提示如下:（1）几个月前，奶奶晚饭后去跳广场舞（do square dancing）。

（2）从那时起，奶奶喜欢上了广场舞。

（3）现在，奶奶比以前健康了，有了很多朋友。

（4）有些邻居有意见，认为音乐很吵，无法入睡。

（5）你认为人们可以跳广场舞，但……
要求：（1）开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

（2）要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥。

Boys and girls,
I’m very happy to speak here and I’d like to talk about my grandma.
_______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________
That’s all. Thank you!
【答案】Boys and girls,
I’m very happy to speak here and I’d like to talk about my grandma.
A few months ago, my grandma went to do square dancing after supper. Since then, she has been in love with square dancing. Now, she is much healthier than before. What’smore, she has a lot of friends. However, some neighbors have a complaint against the people who do square dancing. They think that the music is so loud that they can’t fall asleep at night.
In my opinion, people can do square dancing because it is a good way to keep healthy. But they should think about the feelings of others and th ey shouldn’t make a lot of noise.
That’s all. Thank you!
【解析】
这是一篇给材料作文，根据要点提示写一篇学校英语兴趣小组的活动中的发言稿。

要注意随着文章推进时态的变化，一开始应该选择一般过去时，而后面应该选用一般现在时，最后表达自己观点的时候也应该使用一般现在时。

人称为第一，三人称，注意主谓一致关系，构思文章框架，列举出可能会用到的好词好句，记住千万不能漏写信息要点。

参考词汇就是必用词汇，一定要运用到文章当中。

在写作中注意运用恰当的连词，使文章更加顺畅，自然。

2．书面表达
难忘的初中生活即将结束。

你们班计划举行“告别初中生活”的主题班会。

假如你是班长，根据以下提示，用英语写一则通知。

要点如下：
1. 时间：6月26日下午3:00.
2. 地点:六楼会议室
3. 活动内容：
1）对老师用话语表达谢意；2）与同学交流自己的将来的梦想；3）师生合影，互赠留言等等。

参考词汇：look back at , say goodbye to, express thanks to , talk about, take photos..
备注：词数100左右，通知开头已拟好，不计入总数。

Boys and girls,
The wonderful middle school life will go to the end._______________________
【答案】Boys and girls,
The wonderful middle school life will go to the end. In the past three years, we have studied and stayed together. Looking back at the days we spend together, how sweet we feel. In order to keep the happy times in our hearts for ever, we are going to have a class meeting on the afternoon of June 26 next week. The theme of the class meeting is saying goodbye to our middle school life. It will be held in Conference Room on the Sixth Floor.
We are going to have some meaningful activities. To express thanks to our teachers, we each should say a thankful word to our dear teachers. We can chat freely with our classmates and teachers about our plans of the summer vacation. We can even talk about the dreams of our future. Then, we are going to take some photos with our teachers and classmates. In the end, we may give our wishes to each other.
Don't be late! That's all. Thank you!
【解析】
【详解】
这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少，如In order to，look back at，be going to，have a class meeting，say goodbye to，talk about，the dreams of，take some photos，in the end，each other，be late等。

而复杂单句结构In order to keep the happy times in our hearts forever, we are going to have a class meeting on the afternoon of June 26 next week./ To express thanks to our teachers, we each should say a thankful word to our dear teachers.和Then, we are going to take some photos with our teachers and classmates.的运用，丰富了短文内容，使表达多样化，是本文的亮点。

在学习中注意总结牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章表达更有逻辑性，也更富有条理。

【点睛】
书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。

它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。

所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。

3．最近一份学生体质健康调查结果显示，学生近视率仍维持在高位水平，且越来越低龄化。

请根据下表所提示的内容，用英语写一篇短文，并发表自己的观点。

参考词汇：近视的 shortsighted
要求：
（1）词数：80～100个。

（2）开头已给出，不计入总词数。

（3）要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥。

The survey shows that many students have become shortsighted at a very young age. At present, _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________
【答案】The survey shows that many students have become shortsighted at a very young age. At present, about 70% of the students are shortsighted. Here are some main causes.
Some students may not have enough sleep. Some students spend too much time reading or doing their homework without a rest. Some students even like to watch TV or use computers for a long time.
In order to have good eyesight, we should do eye exercises every day. We can also try to do more sports in our spare time. We should have the good habit of using our eyes.
I think all of us should understand the importance of protecting eyes and try our best to protect them.
【解析】
【详解】
这是一篇图表作文。

根据题干要求可知，本篇文章主要使用一般现在时写作，人称用第三人称复数和第一人称。

内容包括：学生近视原因：1.睡眠不足（not enough）2.长时间看书、做作业、用电脑等（for a long time）防止近视的方法：1.做眼睛保健操，多进行体育活动（eye exercises）2.养成正确的用眼习惯（have the good habit of）个人观点：如：我认为，我们应该了解保护眼睛的重要性，尽最大努力保护我们的眼睛。

（I think ⋅⋅⋅；try one's best to do sth.）。

常用的重点句型和短语有：sb. spend some time doing sth.，in order to do sth.，try to do sth.，the importance of…等。

4．近年来雾霾天气在中国许多城市频频发生。

雾霾天气引起大家极大的关注。

请你用
英语写一篇有关雾霾的短文向校刊“英语角”投稿,内容包括：
1. 雾霾的危害
2. 雾霾产生的原因（2个）
3. 应对雾霾的措施（3个）
提示：雾霾 smog poisonous 有毒的
注意：1. 词数110左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3. 开头语已为你写好（不计入总词数）。

In recent years, many cities in China have been hit by smog frequently, which has aroused great concern among people.
_______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________
【答案】In recent years, many cities in China have been hit by smog frequently, which has aroused great concern among people.
Smog has a bad effect on people’s health. Many people, children and the old in particular, suffer from illnesses caused by smog. Consequently, citizens are warned not to go out without wearing masks.
How does it come about? Scientists have found that it is human activity that has caused this. The poisonous matters in the air mainly come as a result of people’s burning coal, drivi ng cars, industry production and so on.
What should we do to stop the situation from worsening? First, cleaner fuels for cars and stricter emission standards for factories are of vital importance. Second, for us individuals, living a green life like going to work or school by public transport is a good choice. Also planting more trees to increase green areas is necessary. I believe every contribution counts. Only if we work together will smog weather disappear completely.
【解析】
【详解】
这篇作文要求我们根据提示来介绍有关雾霾的情况，题目中给出了写作的内容，我们应将这些内容用正确的英语表达出来。

首先应注意在短文中要包括题目中给出的所有信息，不能遗漏要点，并注意表达的层次和条理。

其次要注意使用正确的时态和人称，通过分析可知，这篇短文应使用一般现在时态，谓语动词用原形，特别要注意谓语动词形式要变化，这是一个写作的难点。

最后要注意英语的表达习惯，英语句式与汉语在语序和词性上的使
用是不同的，要注意不能逐词翻译，写汉语式的英语。

应从句子整体考虑，使用恰当的词汇和句型来表达，语法规范。

还应使用一些较好的句型或者短语，增强文章的表现力。

5．书面表达
共享单车（shared bikes）在苏州投入使用以来，给人们带来了诸多便利，受到人们的追捧，改变了人们的出行方式，但同时也遇到了一些挑战，是国民素质的‘“照妖镜”，请你根据表格中信息的提示，给《21世纪英文报》写一篇关于共享单车看法的稿件。

注意事项：1.短文须包括表格中所有提示内容，要求语句通顺，意思连贯。

2.表格中“你的观点”一栏用2―3句话展开合理想象。

作适当发挥。

3.词数在90个左右，文章的开头部分已给出，不计入总词数。

Shared bikes are becoming more and more popular in our daily life.
【答案】Shared bikes are becoming more and more popular in our daily life. They have won high praise since they appeared.
Shared bikes have brought us many advantages. They can be seen everywhere so that it's easy for us to get around on shared bikes. Also, riding bicycles not only is good for our health but also can help reduce pollution. What's more, using shared bikes costs so little that we can afford it.
But there are some problems too. Some people can't return shared bikes in time. Sometimes shared bikes take up too much of the road, so they are in our way.
I think we should encourage more people to use shared bikes properly. After all, it's a way of living a green life.
【解析】这篇作文要求我们给《21世纪英文报》投稿，谈一谈自己对共享单车的看法。

题目中利用表格的形式给我们列举了短文的主要内容，包括：共享单车的优势；存在的问题以及你自己对这件事情的看法。

前两个内容我们需要根据表格的提示用正确的英语表达，
而自己的观点则需要学生们自己发挥想象力，组织语言，并表达出来，要求至少两点。

通过审题可知，这篇短文应主要使用一般现在时态，第三人称来叙述，短文可以分成两段或者三段，一个内容一段或前两个内容合到一段。

写作时，应注意英语表达习惯和汉语的不同，不能逐词翻译，而应从句子的整体考虑，简单句、并列句和复合句交叉使用，改变文章句式节奏，使用不同的句式，避免单调。

语句之间注意使用恰当的连接成分，使整篇文章意思连贯、表达流畅。

点睛：这是一篇优秀的作文。

首先短文内容完整，包含了题目要求的所有信息。

短文分成了四段，第一段引出话题共享单车；第二段讲述了共享单车的一些优点；第三段介绍了一些问题；最后一段作者提出了自己的看法。

分段叙述使文章的结构清晰，主题明确，有层次性。

其次短文中使用了恰当的时态和人称，文章以第三人称、一般现在时态为主，语法规范，用词准确，句式富于变化。

例如They can be seen everywhere so that it's easy for us to get around on shared bikes. Also, riding bicycles not only is good for our health but also can help reduce pollution. What's more, using shared bikes costs so little that we can afford it.这几个长句；另外文章中还使用了恰当的连接成分，如Al so, What’s more, But, sometimes, After all等等。

正确文章行文连贯、语句通顺、表达流畅。

6．书面表达
以下图画呈现了林涛和梅梅在公园里发生的事情。

请用英语写一篇约100词的短文。

要求：1.完整叙述图画内容。

2.简要陈述你从中学到了什么。

【答案】One day Lin Tao and Meimei were playing in the garden. They found that a young tree needed watering and it was going to die. So they decided to do something for the young tree. First, Meimei kept the tree straight and pushed the earth hard down with her foot. Then Lin Tao knocked a board into the earth. It said,
“Please take care of trees.” After that, they quic kly got water and watered it carefully. Both of them were working hard. Their teacher, Miss Li, spoke highly of them.
Trees are good for the environment. We should protect them.
【解析】
这是一篇看图作文，要求我们仔细观察图片，弄清楚里面发生的事情，用英语将这些内容完整地叙述出来，并简单陈述自己从中学到的东西。

因此写作前，要仔细看图片，了解图片中所发生的事情，并提炼出要点，列出所要用到的词汇、短语等，或者列出大概的写作提纲。

通过分析可知，这篇短文讲述的是过去发生的事情，应用一般过去时态，注意谓语动词形式的变化，尤其是不规则动词的过去式形式。

写作时要注意按照事情发展的先后顺序，这样可以使文章条理清楚。

还需注意的是英语表达和汉语的习惯不同，不能逐词去翻译，应从句子整体考虑，使用简单句的基本句型，如主谓宾结构或主系表结构。

在文章中点缀几个并列句、复合句或复杂句式，调整文章节奏，提升文章档次。

语句之间注意使用恰当的连接成分，使文意连贯。

点睛：这是一篇优秀的作文。

首先短文内容完整，符合图片所传达的信息，表述准确。

作者在短文中叙述了林涛和梅梅两人在公园里给小树浇水、并挂牌子告诉人们注意保护树木。

整篇文章按照事情发生的先后顺序叙述，条理清晰。

文章最后的两句话也点明了文章
的主题。

其次短文中使用了正确的时态和人称，文章以一般过去时态为主，谓语动词用了过去式，尤其是注意了不规则动词过去式的形式，如found, kept, got, were, spoke等。

语法规范、准确。

短文中还使用了较丰富的句型和短语，如They found that a young tree needed watering and it was going to die.这句话中使用了并列句和宾语从句；再如So they decided to do something for the young tree这句话中使用了句型decided to do sth.决定做某事；After that, they quickly got water and watered it carefully. Both of them were working hard. Their teacher, Miss Li, spoke highly of them.这两句话中用了短语after that, speak highly of等等。

7．题目②
“持之以恒，方得始。

”坚持是一种可贵的品格。

生活中想要做成任何一件事情，都需要持之以恒的精神。

某英文网站正在开展以“坚持”为主题的征文活动。

假如你是李华，请用英语写一篇短文投稿。

谈淡你在初中生活中坚持的一件事（爱好，习惯……），你是怎样做的，以及你的感受。

提示词语：keep, practice, difficult, give up, proud
提示问题：1. What did you do?
2. How do you feel?
It s important for us to keep trying to achieve our goals.
【答案】It's important for us to keep trying to achieve our goals.I love running and I have kept running for three years.
When I was in Grade 7，I was not good at sports and running was always my headache.I often failed in my running test.In order to catch up with my classmates，I began to practice running every day after school.Sometimes，I was so tired that I really wanted to give up.But I kept telling myself that I could make it.No matter what kind of difficulties I faced，I tried my best to keep running.Now I do much better in running and I'm very proud of myself.I feel more confident and I'm ready for any challenges in the future.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇是材料作文，根据所给提示写一篇自己在初中生活中坚持做的事；文中写明自己是怎么做的并谈谈自己的感受。

【详解】
1.本篇要求根据所给材料，用第一人称写初中生活中自己坚持做的一件事，根据提示，描写“What did you do?用一般过去时，描写How do you feel?用一般现在时。

书写时要紧扣主题，文句通顺。

2.本例文开篇立即点明自己的坚持做的事是“跑步”，正文部分详细地描写了自己起初跑步总是不及格，通过克服困难、不懈地努力，坚持跑步，到现在比以前会跑；结尾谈了这件事对自己的影响；文章结构清晰，前后呼应。

3.本例文出彩之处在于用了很多的短语和重点句型。

比如：固定搭配、固定句型It's +adj+ for us +to do sth、love doing sth、keep doing 、be good at、 catch up with、be proud of；不
定式in order to；try my best to；状语从句so…that …；比较级do much better in …、feel more confident等；短语多彩、文句表达多样。

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8．书面表达
为了配合“足球进校园”活动，你们班开展了一次主题班会。

请你以足球迷的身份，根据下列表格中的要点提示，用英语向同学们介绍足球这项运动并谈谈自己的梦想。

注意：1. 词数90左右。

短文的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数；
1.短文须包括所有要点，不要逐词翻译，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺；
2.短文中不得真实的人名、校名等相关信息。

参考词汇：梅西 Messi
Dear classmates,
I’m very excited to hear that China will build 20,000 football-themed schools by 2020.
Thank you for your attention.
【答案】Dear classmates，
I’m very excited to hear that China will build 20，000 football-themed schools by 2020．Football has a very long history．It is liked by people all over the world．The World Cup takes place every four years．Playing football has lots of advantages．First，both boys and girls can
take part in it．Second，it helps develop team spirit．What’s more，playing football is good for our health．
I’m a football fan．Messi is my hero．He has a gift for playing football．My dream is to become a famous football player like Messi．I hope China will hold the World Cup some day．
Thank you for your attention．
【解析】
【详解】
试题分析：本题要求按提纲的提示，介绍足球运动并谈谈自己的梦想。

要求仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确本文主要从三个方面来写：介绍足球运动及其好处；说说自己的偶像；谈谈自己的梦想。

要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。

根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；语言表达要符合英语习惯。

写作亮点：本文语言精炼，像第二自然段的Football has a very long history. It is liked by people all over the world. The World Cup takes place every four years. it helps develop team spirit. What’s more, playing football is good for our health. 等等句子，简洁，但是句意表达清楚；同时，本文用了被动语态、动名词作主语、不定式作表语等等语法形式，使表达生动；用了first, second等使得短文层次清楚。

9．书面表达
初中就要毕业了，校报“英语角”栏目向同学们征集毕业晚会的计划。

假定你是李华，请根据要点写一封信，说说你的计划。

要求：1.要点完整，可适当发挥，使句子通顺，连贯; 2.正确使用语态，语法正确，书写整洁。

3.80词左右，开头结尾己给出，不计入总词数; 4.文中不得出现真实姓名和地名。

Dear editor,
I am very happy to have the chance to show my plan for the graduation party.
_______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________
Best wishes,
Yours Lihua
【答案】Dear editor,
I'm very happy to have the chance to show my plan for the graduation ceremony. The ceremony will be held in our school ha ll at 7 o’clock on June 28th.I have planned three activities for it. First of all, we would like to invite our headmaster to make a speech and give us his best wishes for a bright future. After that, every one give each other gifts and blessings. And then each class will give a wonderful performance. In the end, some pictures will be shown to share the happy time we have had together.
This is what we will do. I hope you will choose my plan.
Best wishes,
Yours,
Li hua
【解析】
【分析】
这篇书面表达主要是推荐自己的毕业晚会计划。

【详解】
这是一篇给材料作文，介绍毕业典礼活动计划。

结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般现在时和一般将来时，人称为第一，三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构和动宾结构，注意一些常见句式的应用写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。

写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系。

10．书面表达
假如你是英语俱乐部的Cathy,上周五你们收到了外教Angel为同学们网购的英文书籍。

俱乐部的同学们很喜欢网购图书这种便捷的方式，并打算在本周五交流读书后的感受。

请你根据以下信息, 给Angel写一封电子邮件，告诉她俱乐部的活动情况，并说说网购图书的好处。

写作要点：
1表达收到图书后的喜悦与感激之情。

2介绍活动的情况：
（l）上周五，俱乐部成员们一起读英文书。

（2）本周五的下午3点，大家将共同交流读书的体会。

（3）同学们将在下个月网购其他的英文书。

3说一说网上购书有什么好处。

写作要求：
1不得使用真实的姓名和学校名。

2可适当加入细节，使内容充实，行文连贯。

3字迹工整、语言精练、表达准确、条理清晰。

4至少80词。

Dear Angel,
How are you doing?
Best wishes!
Yours,
Cathy
【答案】Dear Angel,
How are you doing? I’m writing to tell you that we received the books that you bought fo r us. We are grateful to you and all of us are very happy。

Last Friday，we had a reading party, which was held on Friday in our reading room. Then we are going to hold an activity to share the feeling with others at 3:00 on Friday afternoon. All of us are fond of buying books on the Internet. We are going to buy some books on the Internet next month. As far as I am concerned, on the one hand, the books on the Internet are cheaper than those in the bookstore. On the other hand, there are all kinds of books, s o we needn’t go from one bookstore to another .
Best wishes!
Yours,
Cathy 【解析】
【详解】
本文属于材料作文，向外教介绍俱乐部中读书交流会的活动，并且告诉外教同学们现在喜欢网购图书并阐述网购图书的好处。

根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。

亮点说明：这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，如bought sth for sb, be grateful to, be going to do, share sth with sb, be fond of, as far as I am concerned, on the one hand...on the other hand, from to以及we had a reading party,which was held on Friday in our reading room 中which引导非限制性定语从句。

增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。

【点睛】
写作时可以从以下几个方面做起：
认真审题。

审好题是写好书面表达的关键。

审题时要注意试题的要求，抓住要点，词数符合要求。

构思提纲。

有了提纲，我们就可以根据提纲和主题确定相关的写作材料。

通常书面表达给出的话题是开放的，而具体的内容要求学生自己发挥，因此选择恰当的素材也是使短文中心突出、明确的关键。

初写短文。

一切都准备就绪，就可以动笔写作了，在写作的过程中我们要注意句子的准确性、连贯性以及简洁性。

使用的词语、短语及句型尽量用自己有把握的词。

同时还要注意使用恰当的连词，使句子衔接自然。

修改润色。

修改润色是获取高分的必要步骤。

这一步我们除了检查短文的各种错误外，还
要检查语法结构是否合理，有无重复、啰嗦的语言，大小写是否正确，格式是否正确，词数是否符合要求等。