高三公开课读后续写how to polish your writing
howtopolishyourwriting写作技巧PPT教案
Enjoy the following passages and
pick out the shining points of them:
What a fine Sunday! I was planning to play football with Xiao Ming, but while I was going out, I found my mother was washing clothes. Mum was busy working and doing housework after work day and night without complaining. She was so tired. Thinking about this, I decided to help do the washing.
式表达。对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分。 2. 应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性。值得 注意的是语法结构或词汇方面虽有些许错误, 但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致; 具 有较强的语言运用能力。
写作要领
1、 细读提示——明白写什么，日记、信函 、报导或叙事描写 2 、写全要点——了解核心内容，非重要情 节，图画作文应认真分析判断才能分清主次 。表格类原则上一个不能少 3 、层次分明——为使短文令人感到赏心悦 目分成2甚至3段为好 4、承上启下——简而言之是连接词、过渡 句他们是组成文章粘和剂，上下沟通的纽带
洋味十足---才是好文章
I don’t want to live with a stranger in a hotel room. I don’t want to share a hotel room with a stranger.
She shouted loudly , “I’ve succeeded!” She shouted at the top of her voice, “I ‘ve made it!”
【省级公开课教案】高三英语读后继写公开课教案
A Teaching Plan for continuation writing课题：读后续写时间：班级：高三（1）班地点：高三（1）班授课人：I.Teaching goalsBy the end of the class, the students will be able to1.acknowledge basic rules of continuation writing.2.learn to explore useful information in reading.3.further predict the logic of the story according to the given sentences.4.learn to develop coherent emotion and logical plot line.5.further understand the meaning of true friendship and value it.II.Teaching important and difficult points1.Students learn to infer plot development clues based on reading.2.Students learn to predict the logic of the story based on reading and the given sentences.3.Students learn to add some logical details to the following two paragraphs.4.Students learn to appreciate the writings.III.Teaching MethodsTask-based Language Teaching ApproachIV.Teaching AidsComputer multi-media projectorV.Teaching procedures阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
高考英语书面表达-how-to-polish-your-writing
step3 Sentencing 成句时态，语态
1 简单句 2 并列句 3 复合句
别忘了并列连词 连词的选择
4 非谓语形式 主语一致
5
特殊结构
强调句型；N倒o装；
避生就熟！独立主格Ch结in构gl…ish…!!
Improve your sentences.
1. My name is Li Hua. I am a student and I study in XinHua Middle School.
应用文写作五部曲 step1 Topic exploring 审题
step2 Wording
构词
step3 Sentence making 成句
step4 Essay writing 成篇
step5 Improving
修订
Step1 Topic exploring审题
( 定文章结构 ) 1 审体裁
away.
3．避免重复 尽量避免过多地使用某一个单词，必要时选择使用其 他恰当的同义词或词组来代替。 I like reading while my brother likes watching football matches. →I like reading while my brother enjoys watching football matches. 二、使用高级句式，让句子靓起来 1．恰当使用被动语态 Above all, we must do something to stop pollution. →Above all, something must be done to stop pollution.
7．使用虚拟语气 I didn't take his advice, so I failed in the exam. →If I had taken his advice, I wouldn't have failed in the exam. It's time for us to take measures to protect the wild animals. →It's high time that we took measures to protect the wild animals.
公开课how to polish writing模板
五 美
2. 结构美
3. 词汇美 4. 句式美
5. 衔接美
书面表达高档次的给分范围和要求
第五档（很好25-30分） 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式 所致；具备较强的语言应用能力 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 完全达到了预期的写作目的。 第四档（好19-24分） 完成了试题规定的任务。 比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容 应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复 杂语言结构或词汇所致 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 达到了预期的写作目的。
master
affect
have a good command of ; get the hang of
have an effect/ influence on
Strategy 3
(1)
巧增修饰成分
We can feast our eyes on the flowers in the wild. delicate flowers We can feast our eyes on the __________ in various colors and gestures. We are impressed by the scenery. deeply impressed by the We are _________ breathtaking ___________ scenery
善用高级短语词组 (1) We can enjoy the flowers in the wild. feast our eyes on the flowers in the wild. We can _______________ (2) The entrance examination is near. around the corner The entrance examination is ______________ (3) We should work hard to achieve our dream. make efforts/ to achieve our dream We should ____________ spare no effort/ take pains
高考英语读后续写6
to appreciate one possible version
Para. 1 “But you will be a beautiful narrator,” she said, reminding me of how much I loved to
read stories aloud to her. “The narrator’s part is every bit as important as the part of a princess.” Her constant encouragement filled me with pride but before the night of the performance, I suddenly felt nervous backstage. My teacher came over to me. “Your mother asked me to give this to you,” she said, handing me a dandelion. Looking at it, I knew my mother was out there.
Continuation Writing
Mother’s gift
Teaching Objectives:
1. Be able to know what to read and how to read.
2. Be able to know what to write and how to write.
第五档(21－25) 评分标准：
——与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。 ——内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 ——所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但 完全不影响意义表达。 ——有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑 。
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(A)
(B)
Their homework was finished, they felt happy. With their homework finished, they felt happy. (with复合结构)
Which sentence is better? Why?
(A)
The little girl did a good performance in Chinese Poetry Conference. Chinese Poetry Conference.
a photo taken.
(非谓语现在分词作伴随状语)
Polish our writing
advanced words and expressions
We can use advanced words and Two ways advanced sentences sentences to make our writing more attractive.
(B) The little girl did a wonderful performance in (高级词汇)
Which sentence is better? Why?
(A) Surounded by fans,Zhao Liying had a photo taken. (B) Zhao liying was surounded by fans. Zhao Liying had
Task2:Beautify words and expressions by using words .
1. He was so angry that she had forgotten his birthday. He was so ________ annoyed that she had forgotten his birthday. 2. A short break from routine will benefit our study. A short break from routine is ____________ beneficial to our study. A short break from routine is ____________ of benefit our study. 3. They are not satisfied with their academic results. satisfaction Their academic results are beyond their __________. 4.It is obvious that a refreshed mind will handle your school work more efficiently. ___________ Obviously , a refreshed mind will handle your school work more efficiently.
how to polish up your writing
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丢分原因
大错误主要指审题不清导致出现内容偏题、时态 错误、人称错误 及使用中式英语。 “ 小错误”主要是反映在个别单词拼写错误、 形容词、动词、名词、介词、短语等使用不准 确，数、人称前后不一致，标点符号乱用等。
单词拼写错误
Happiness
listen
缺少动词
the best way to become happy is to get together with positive people.
第四档：（16-—20分） •较好地完成了试题规定的任务。 •对题中所提供的信息进行了描述，表 达了自己的观点。 •应用的语法结构和词汇能基本满足任 务的要求。 •语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确， 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文 结构紧凑。
• 第三档（11-—15分） • 基本完成了试题规定的任务。 • 能描述题目中的信息，表达了自己 的观点。 • 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误， 但不影响理解。 • 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使 全文内容连贯。
语言第一位（语言高级、书写规范） 内容第二位（要点齐全、句子准确） 结构第三位（文章分段，结构紧凑）
语言第一位（语言高级、书写规范）
美化作文要强化“语法、修辞”两个概念
一、单词不如短语棒
be anxious/eager/hungry/thirsty for ; hunger/long for 1.Everyone wants happiness. has a strong desire for Everyone___________________ happiness. 2.Helping others is important in our life.
listen to some light music.
how to polish writing 如何打磨英语写作
Highlight 1
Fresh and not overused words 4.“不知道”→用in the dark/at a loss替换don’t know/have no idea 【秒杀】现在，我们需要比从前更意识到解决这个问题 的迫切性。(苏北四市2017一模作文） Moreover, without it, we might be in the dark about what to do, thus achieving nothing in the end.
What makes a good writing?
What makes a good writing?
1. _U_n_d__e_rs_t_a_n_d___ your readers and what they want
2. _P_l_a_n____your writing 3. Organize your ideas into paragraphs, with
Phrases come first 3. Your fluency in English makes you better than the other candidates for the job.
Your fluency in English gives you __a_n_____ _ad__v_a_n_ta_g_e___o_v_e_r_ the other candidates for the job. 4. We should remember that everyone is the master of his own fate.
Fresh and not overused words
2. It is classmates’ einncsopuirraatgioenment aanfdfecltoiove that help me go through this periodtoounfghdifficult time.(南京、盐城2017二模作文） 3. It is everyone’s duty to obey the regulations to keep our osobcsieertvyein order and going on the right track. (2015江苏卷作文）
如何提升高中英语写作：how to polish your writing
3. Personally/ But for me, I would rather …/ prefer … to ….
4. Even though…I still consider it…
增分策略六 注重主题句
With the help of ads , people can get much information about new products. Making use of ads, companies can promote the sales of products. Some advertisements educate the public
5. With all its…we must acknowledge…
增分策略五 句式变换 Advertisements help people get much information about new products.
1) It is ads that help people get../ It is with the help of ads that people can ….
增分策略三 巧用过渡连接表达
1. Para.2 is about advantages of advertisements.
Para3: Advertisements have some bad effects on our daily life.
However, advertisements have some bad effects on our daily life. (段际过渡)
高考英语书面表达-how to polish your writing
Three pieces of a student’s work(学生作品）
13分
16分
23分
WHAT MAKES A GOOD PIECE OF WRITING? Good first impression Everything 1.neat writing书写 required Well organized and No Chinglish included 2. content内容 smoothly No Grammatical mistakes developed exactly used words and 3. structure结构 relatively changed sentence patterns 4. language语言
2016年福建省质检书面表达
国外某网站举办新的一轮网上讲座活动，正面向 全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学的学生 李华，经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站 发送一封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包括: 自我介绍 写信目的 话题：我们应该感恩（thankful). 推荐理由 预祝活动成功 注意：1.词数100左右; 2.邮件格式已为你给出； 3.邮件出不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上作答。
书面表达评讲之:
TO POLISH YOUR WRITING
让你的作文
起来
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高级词汇与高级句式的润色升级
一、使用高级词汇
写作时，“高级词汇”如能运用贴切自
然，哪怕整篇文章只用上一两个，也会为
你的作文增添色彩。
1．标新立异
写作时要恰当得体地使用一些蕴含感情色彩，别人有 可能想不到的词汇，恰当地求新求异。
读后续写 -公开课
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Task 1.who are mentioned in the text? (人物关系)
Group work
Task2: How does the plot develop? (动作线)
Task 3: What had happened? (Main idea)
big box of corn Uncle John sent us？Well, we can
out on his new business.
make popcorn, and put it into paper bags, and
Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
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如何写出流畅的高中英语读后续写
如何写出流畅的高中英语读后续写全文共10篇示例，供读者参考篇1Hey guys! Today I want to share some tips on how to write a smooth high school English writing continuation after reading a passage. It's important to be able to connect your ideas and thoughts seamlessly to create a cohesive and engaging piece of writing. Here are some tips to help you do just that!First of all, make sure you understand the passage you are reading. Take your time to comprehend the story or the main points of the text. This will help you grasp the context and come up with relevant ideas for your continuation.Next, think about the characters, plot, and themes of the passage. Consider the motivations of the characters and how they drive the story forward. Try to empathize with the characters and put yourself in their shoes to come up with authentic responses in your writing.When starting your continuation, make sure to include a brief summary of the passage to give your readers some context.This will make it easier for them to follow your narrative and understand your ideas.Use transitional phrases to connect your ideas smoothly. Words like "furthermore," "in addition," or "however" can help you link your sentences and paragraphs effectively.Pay attention to your sentence structure and grammar. Use a variety of sentence lengths and types to keep your writing engaging. Make sure to proofread your work to catch any errors and make necessary corrections.Lastly, be creative and have fun with your writing! Don't be afraid to experiment with different writing styles and techniques. Remember, practice makes perfect, so keep writing and honing your skills.With these tips in mind, you'll be able to write a flowing and engaging high school English continuation in no time. Good luck, and happy writing!篇2Hey guys, do you have trouble writing those long and boring high school English essays after reading a book? Don't worry, I'mhere to help you write a smooth and fluent one! It's super easy once you follow these simple steps.First, make sure you understand the book you read. Pay attention to the characters, setting, plot, and any important themes or messages the author is trying to convey. Take notes while you're reading so you don't forget important details.Next, start your essay with a catchy introduction that briefly summarizes the book and hints at what you'll be discussing in your response. Maybe even start with a quote or athought-provoking question to grab the reader's attention!Then, move on to the body paragraphs where you analyze the book's key points. Make sure to use examples from the text to support your ideas and explain how they contribute to the overall message of the book. This is where you can really show off your understanding of the book!Finally, wrap up your essay with a strong conclusion that summarizes your main points and leaves the reader with something to think about. Maybe even end with a personal reflection on what you learned from the book or how it affected you.Remember, practice makes perfect! The more essays you write, the better you'll get at expressing your thoughts clearly and effectively. So keep reading, keep writing, and soon enough you'll be a pro at writing those high school English essays! Good luck!篇3Hey guys, today I'm going to tell you how to write a fluent continuation of a high school English reading! It might sound hard, but I'll break it down for you so it's super easy!First, make sure you understand the story or article you're reading. Take notes on the main characters, plot, and themes. This will help you when you start writing your continuation.Next, think about what could happen next in the story. You can brainstorm different ideas and choose the one you like best. Remember to keep it realistic and in line with the original story.When you start writing, make sure to use descriptive language to set the scene and bring the characters to life. Show, don't tell, what they're feeling and thinking. This will make your continuation more interesting to read.Don't forget to use transition words to connect your ideas and make your writing flow smoothly. Words like "meanwhile," "therefore," and "however" can help make your writing sound more polished.Finally, read over your continuation and make any necessary edits. Check for spelling and grammar mistakes, and make sure your ideas are clear and organized.And there you have it, a simple guide to writing a fluent continuation of a high school English reading! Just remember to have fun with it and let your creativity shine through. Happy writing!篇4Hello everyone, today I want to share with you some tips on how to write a fluent continuation of a high school English reading.Firstly, before starting your writing, make sure you fully understand the original text. Read it carefully, highlight the key points, and try to summarize the main ideas in your own words. This will help you to better grasp the story and be able to continue it smoothly.Next, think about the characters and the plot. Consider what might happen next based on the events and personalities presented in the reading. Use your imagination to come up with creative and interesting developments that would make sense in the context of the story.When writing the continuation, pay attention to the language you use. Try to vary your sentence structures, use descriptive adjectives and adverbs, and include dialogue to make the text more engaging. Remember to organize your ideas logically and use transitional words to connect different parts of the story.Don't forget to edit and revise your work. Check for spelling and grammar mistakes, make sure your sentences flow well together, and see if the continuation fits seamlessly with the original text.In conclusion, writing a fluent continuation of a high school English reading requires careful planning, creative thinking, and attention to detail. By following these tips, you can create a compelling and cohesive story that keeps the reader interested from beginning to end.I hope these tips are helpful for you. Good luck with your writing!篇5Hey guys! Do you ever get scared when you have to write a continuation of a story in English class? Don't worry, I'm here to give you some tips on how to write a smooth and fluent high school English continuation!First, make sure you understand the story really well. Read it carefully and try to picture what might happen next. Think about the characters, the setting, and the events that have already happened.Next, start your continuation with a strong opening. You can use dialogue, description, or action to grab the reader's attention. Try to hook them in from the very beginning!As you continue the story, make sure to keep the same tone and style as the original piece. If it's a serious story, don't suddenly switch to a funny or light-hearted tone. Stay consistent with the mood and atmosphere.Use transitions to connect your ideas smoothly. You can use words like "meanwhile," "however," or "on the other hand" to link your ideas together and keep the story flowing.Don't forget to show, not tell. Instead of just saying that a character is sad, show their actions and emotions to convey their feelings. Describe their body language, facial expressions, and thoughts to make the story more engaging.Finally, end your continuation with a satisfying conclusion. Tie up any loose ends, resolve any conflicts, and leave the reader feeling satisfied with the story's outcome.Remember, practice makes perfect! The more you write continuations, the better you'll get at it. So keep practicing, have fun with it, and you'll be writing smooth and fluent high school English continuations in no time!篇6Hey guys! Today I'm gonna share with you some tips on how to write a smooth continuation for your high school English reading. It's super important to keep the story flowing and engaging for your readers, so let's dive in!First things first, make sure you understand the original story or text you're continuing from. Pay attention to the characters, setting, and plot so you can seamlessly continue the story in the same tone and style.Next, think about what could happen next in the story. Maybe the main character faces a new challenge, meets a new character, or goes on an exciting adventure. Be creative and think outside the box!When writing your continuation, focus on using descriptive language to paint a clear picture for your readers. Describe the characters' emotions, the setting, and any action that's happening. This will help bring your story to life and keep readers hooked.Don't forget to keep the dialogue realistic and engaging. Use quotation marks and new paragraphs for each new speaker, and try to vary your sentence structure to keep things interesting.Lastly, make sure to wrap up your continuation in a satisfying way. Tie up any loose ends and leave readers with a sense of closure. You can also leave them with a cliffhanger to keep them eagerly awaiting the next installment.And there you have it, some tips for writing a smooth and engaging continuation for your high school English reading. Remember to have fun with it and let your creativity shine! Happy writing, guys!篇7Hello everyone! Today, I want to share with you some tips on how to write a smooth and fluent continuation of a high school English reading passage.First of all, it's important to understand the main idea of the passage. Make sure you have a clear understanding of the characters, plot, and themes before you start writing. This will help you stay on track and create a cohesive continuation.Next, organize your ideas before you begin writing. You can make an outline or jot down key points to help you stay focused and ensure that your writing flows naturally from one point to the next.When you start writing, pay attention to your sentence structure and transitions. Use a variety of sentence lengths and types to keep your writing interesting and engaging. Also, make sure to use transition words like "however," "meanwhile," and "therefore" to connect your ideas and make your writing flow smoothly.Don't forget to reread and revise your work. Check for grammar and spelling mistakes, and make sure that your ideas are clearly conveyed. Reading your work out loud can also helpyou catch any awkward phrasing or areas where your writing doesn't flow well.Finally, practice makes perfect! The more you write continuations of reading passages, the better you'll get at it. So keep practicing and don't be afraid to experiment with different writing styles and techniques.With these tips in mind, you'll be well on your way to writing smooth and fluent continuations of high school English reading passages. Good luck and happy writing!篇8How to Write a Smooth English Post-reading CompositionHi guys! Today I'm gonna tell you about how to write a smooth English post-reading composition. It's super important to make sure your writing flows nicely and makes sense. So let's get started!First of all, you need to make sure you understand the text you're writing about. Read it carefully and try to grasp the main idea and important details. This will help you to write a coherent and clear composition.Next, think about the structure of your composition. A good post-reading composition should have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. In the introduction, briefly summarize the text and state your point of view. The body paragraphs should provide more details and examples to support your opinion. Finally, in the conclusion, restate your main points and wrap up your composition.Don't forget to use transitional words and phrases to connect your ideas smoothly. Words like "furthermore", "in addition", "however", and "on the other hand" can help your composition flow seamlessly.Lastly, read through your composition once you've finished writing. Check for grammar and spelling mistakes, and make sure your ideas are clear and well-organized. If possible, ask a friend or teacher to read it as well and give you feedback.So remember, understanding the text, organizing your ideas, using transitional words, and proofreading are key to writing a smooth English post-reading composition. Good luck!篇9Hey guys! Do you struggle with writing a smooth and fluent continuation of a high school English reading? Well, fear not, because I've got some awesome tips to help you out!First, make sure to re-read the original text carefully. This will help you understand the characters, plot, and theme better. It's important to have a clear grasp of the story before you start writing your continuation.Next, jot down some key points or ideas that you want to include in your continuation. Think about what could happen next or how the story could develop further. You can also consider introducing new characters or conflicts to make your continuation more interesting.When you start writing, focus on maintaining a consistent tone and style with the original text. Try to mimic the author's writing style and use similar language and imagery. This will help create a seamless transition between the original text and your continuation.Don't forget to pay attention to the pacing of your writing. Keep the story moving forward and maintain a good flow throughout the continuation. Avoid long, rambling paragraphs and instead opt for shorter sentences to keep the reader engaged.Finally, revise and edit your work carefully. Check for spelling and grammar mistakes, as well as any inconsistencies in the plot or character development. It's always a good idea to have someone else read your continuation and provide feedback before submitting it.With these tips in mind, you'll be well on your way to writing a smooth and compelling continuation of a high school English reading. So go ahead, get creative, and let your imagination run wild! Good luck!篇10Hey guys, do you know how to write a smooth and amazing high school English sequel? Let me tell you all about it!First, you gotta start by reading the original story carefully. Make sure you understand the characters, the plot, and the main idea of the story. This will help you to come up with a creative and interesting sequel.Next, think about what could happen next in the story. Maybe the main character faces a new challenge or goes on an exciting adventure. You can also introduce new characters or develop the existing ones further.When you start writing, make sure to use descriptive language to paint a vivid picture for your readers. Describe the settings, the emotions of the characters, and any action happening in the scene. This will make your sequel more engaging and exciting to read.Don't forget to keep the same tone and style as the original story. If it's a serious and dramatic story, make sure your sequel reflects that tone. If it's a funny and lighthearted story, add some humor and fun elements to your sequel.Lastly, revise and edit your work to make sure it flows smoothly and makes sense. Check for spelling and grammar mistakes, and make sure your ideas are clear and well-organized.So there you have it, guys! Follow these tips and you'll be writing awesome high school English sequels in no time. Good luck!。
英语读后续写通用作文
英语读后续写通用作文English Response:English Response:Reading is not only enjoyable but also beneficial for improving one's language skills. After reading, continuing the story or writing an essay is a great way to reinforce comprehension and creativity. Here, I'll provide some tips on how to effectively write a follow-up essay in English.Firstly, it's essential to understand the main theme or message of the passage. This comprehension forms the foundation for your continuation. For instance, if the story is about perseverance, your follow-up could explore how the characters overcome challenges through resilience and determination.Next, pay attention to the characters, setting, andplot development. These elements offer rich material forfurther exploration. Consider how the characters might evolve or how the story could progress from where it left off. You can introduce new conflicts, characters, or plot twists to keep the narrative engaging.Moreover, think about the tone and style of theoriginal passage. Try to maintain consistency while adding your own voice to the writing. For example, if the story has a humorous tone, incorporate witty dialogue or situations into your continuation to align with the overall mood.Additionally, focus on incorporating descriptive language to paint vivid imagery for the readers. Show,don't tell. Instead of simply stating that the protagonist is sad, describe their downturned gaze, trembling hands, and quivering voice to evoke emotions effectively.Furthermore, ensure coherence and logical progression in your writing. Each paragraph should flow smoothly into the next, building upon the previous ideas. Usetransitional phrases like "however," "meanwhile," or"consequently" to connect different parts of your essay seamlessly.Lastly, revise and edit your work thoroughly. Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure to polish your writing. It's also helpful to seek feedback from peers or teachers to gain different perspectives and improve further.In conclusion, writing a follow-up essay after reading not only enhances your language skills but also encourages creativity and critical thinking. By following these tips and practicing regularly, you can become a more proficient and confident writer.中文回答：阅读不仅是一种享受，而且有助于提高语言能力。
【文本】读后续写试题、参考范文及拓展资料A warm scarf
读后续写试题、参考范文及拓展资料第二节(满分25分)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A warm scarfI was a proud mother of three children, my last little one being delivered in the middle of this pandemic. She was born in August and her name is Aida.Shortly after having Aida, my mother-in-law showed me something she learned from her frien d’s mother in an art class she attended weekly. She had showed me how to knit a scarf. She showed me stitches and gave me her half done project.I spent a lot of time breastfeeding my sweet little girl, so I had some extra time to do something with my hands throughout the day. I enjoyed making the scarf so I purchased tons of yarn since it was winter. I wanted to make scarves for my three children as Christmas gifts.There was a new family that moved in down the street. The only daughter of the family was Jane, a shy girl, aged 14, the same age of my oldest son David. It seemed that she came from a financially disadvantaged family, for she always wore old clothes. Worse still, in such cold days, she had no more clothes to wear and trembled with cold.Due to the pandemic, society was thrown into crisis mode. Schools were closed, food supplies and deliveries were suspended and children were stuck at home. In such discouraging times, however, they became good companions, talking and playing at home or around the houses.It was dreadfully cold this winter. Every time David came back from outside, with red face, he always cried, “Mum, it’s freezing outside!” then he came over to see whether I finished the scarf. I could tell how impatient he w as to wear my scarf sooner! I had to speed the project to satisfy his expectation. But David comforted me saying he could wait a few days. What a kind and considerate boy he was! Then my great project finally was accomplished on the morning ahead of Christmas.Para 1: I wrapped the scarf around David’s neck._____________Para 2: Later that day David came back saying Jane also deserved a scarf._______Possible versionI wrapped the scarf around David's neck. David's face lit up with joy. Stroking the scarf softly, David excitedly kisssed me in the neck, beaming at me”Thank you, Mum. This is the best gift I have ever received.” Before I could say anything, he dashed out to join Jane with a spring in his step. I felt relieved and content as a mother, seeing David play happily outside, with the scarf shelting him to brave the bone-chilling wind. Wearing a smile on his face, I continued my chores that morning.Later that day David came back saying Jane also deserved a scarf. Obviously, David noticed Jane could hardly bear the freezing weather with worn-out clothes. “Can I give this to Jane as a Christmas gift?” David ventured in a low voice. Smilingly, I nodded. Seeing David rush into Jane's house with the scarf in his hand, I felt a burst of pride. I was happy that both of them received the best gift for Christmas. For Jane---a scarf to keep warm and for David---a taste of happiness of giving.How to polish your language6个场景句式提升+语料补充Plot 1: his reaction to the scarf普通版：He was happy .升级版1. 现在分词作状语，独立主格; 描写他的脸；比喻手法描写他的眼睛低头看着我刚刚完成的围巾，他乐不可支,他的脸照亮了整个房间，黑色的眼睛像钻石一般闪烁。
2023届高三英语读后续写训练之The+first+flowers+ofspring春天里的第一束花
Polish your writing
Presentation
成长类（成长故事“三部曲”）
第一步： 成长前的苦恼（负面情绪塑造）
1、孤独 2、伤心 3、惭愧 4、嘲笑 5.紧张 6. 害怕
• 第二步： • 成长中（蜕变塑造）
1、惊讶
2、希望
3、教育与成长
第三步： 成长后的升华（喜悦+感激+升华）
ENGLISH CONTINUATION WRITING
读后续写
《春天里的第一束花》
Learning Objectives:
After learning this lesson, you will be able to
1. Analyze the article using reading strategies
1、喜悦
2、感激
3、升华句
Problems in writing
没有完全读懂文章，文章大意及主题 不明白
没有很好衔接段落
没有写Joan用自己积极的态度来鼓励 Maya
没有呼应上文，向Samir提到支架的作 用
结尾缺少主题的提炼与升华。
Appreciation
• In a sudden wave of bravery Maya asked, “What’s it like being in a wheelchair?” “It helps m幽e默get around,” Joan said simply.
Climax
green__b_u_d__s__, she turned a deaf ear
to his inquires, which made Samir sad.
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高三英语读后续写-如何打磨语言(2个)
(3)丰富故事情节（细节和连贯） Proper adverbs to enrich your story
小提示：1.高级词汇的选择遵循具体性原则，晚词优先原则 1) a good/nice woman a warm-hearted/generous/honest woman
读后续写－如何打磨语言
写作步骤
1、解读文本。过滤有效信息，把握文章要素。 2、缜密构思。文章中心内容、段首句相结合。 情节发展是主体，细节描写是关键。 3、打磨写作。快速初步成稿，然后升级词汇与 丰富句式，最后规范誊写。
本节重点
***如何打磨续写的语言 (vivid writing)
strategies
I was only eight years old. I’d often gone shopping with my mother, and never had I shopped for anything all by myself. The store seemed big and crowded, full of people competing to finish their Christmas shopping. For a few moments I just stood there, confused, holding that ten-dollar bill, wondering what to buy and who to buy something for.
Grade the story
That evening, Grandma helped me wrap the coat in Christmas paper. She asked me to write "To Bobby, from Santa Claus” on it. Then we went to Bobby Decker's house. We parked our car, not faraway from his house, and we walked to his front door. Silently, I put the Christmas present down when Grandma knocked at his door. Quickly we ran into the car. Then we waited for him.
高中英语读后续写：读后续写 (2)
be overwhelmingly(压倒性地) moved； in cheerful spirits; be delighted at; can hardly conceal(隐藏) one's excitement; etc.
Choose wisely. Don't be greedy(贪婪的).
THANKS
FOR WATCHING
谢谢
Writing Assessment Criteria(评价标准) Accurcy (词法，句法的准确性） Diversity (词，句的丰富性与多样性） Content (合理性，逻辑性） Coherence（语言，内容，文风的连贯性） Neat and tidy
READ and ANSWER
WHO WHAT WHEN WHERE
My mom and I Bulbs; flowers; May baskets From winter to spring Our garden; neighborhood
Tip1: To figure out the basic elements in a narrative story
UNDERLINED WORDS
涉及人物： my mother 具体名词： flowers; colored paper; May baskets 抽象名词： kindness; joy 地点名词： front door 行为动词： smelled; understand 描绘新形容词：pretty
EXAMPLE
...A strong sense of loss overwhelmed me. It might be quite weird, but I did consider these flowers my treasure. From the first day on, I'd been expectedly watching them grow. Every new dawn could cheer me up as it meant being closer to spring, in which my treasure would finally bloom. Now spring had finally arrived! Look how pretty my treasure had become! How could I willingly give them up? I looked at my mother with a sentimental mood, but surprisingly I found her smiling. “Let's make a bet.”she said, “Do what I said, and I bet you'll find your true treasure.” She indeed aroused my curiosity. I nodded.
在读后续写中,如何用“眼睛”提亮句子？
1. (2020.01读后续写) Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. It has _s_h_in_i_n_g_/__tw__in_k_l_in_g___/g_l_it_te_r_i_n_g_/_s_p_a_rk_l_in_g___ dark eyes. T_w_i_n_k_le, t_w_in__kl_e, little star. How I wonder what you are. All that glitters is not gold.—The Merchant of Venice
In continuation writing,
how to polish your sentences with “eyes”? 在读后续写中，如何用“眼睛”提亮句子？
specific, vivid, memorable
Oh her __e_ye_s___, her __e_y_e_s__ make the stars look like they're not _s_h_i_n_in_g__. Her hair, her hair falls perfectly without her trying. She's so beautiful.
Tip2: eyes + v. (shine/ glitter/twinkle/sparkle)+with + feelings(n.)
3. (2017.06读后续写) …As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away... … Mac was too terrified to __o_p_e_n__h_is__e_ye_s_______. …Suddenly, Mac let out a scream of terror with eyes __w_id_e__o_p_e_n___. The wolf was almost catching up!
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With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him. She forced a smile, saying “Thank you” and walked towards the door.Pappy thought of his daughter . Driven by a sense of sympathy, Pappy said to the girl loudly, “How much have you got to spend?” Hearing this, the little girl counted money in her purse---two dollars. After thinking for a few seconds, Pappy said, “Today is Christmas Day and this is your lucky day. The bell costs two dollars.” The child went out with great joy, holding the special bell in her hand.
Later that evening when Pappy was closing up the shop, he heard a familiar ringing. He couldn’t believe his ears. The girl stood in the doorway, ringing the bell happily. Then Pappy got close to her and asked, “Have you changed your mind, Miss?” “ No. My Momma says the present is for you.” said the child. Before Pappy had time to say another word, a young woman walked in. She said to Pappy, “Hello, Dad.”
Let’s compare！
① Driven by a sense of ① He decided to visit regret, he decided to visit the family. ②But the the family. ②To his great shabby cottage was surprise, the shabby nowhere to be found. cottage was nowhere to He only found a be found. He only found a splendid house. ③He splendid house. ③Upon thought the family thinking the family might might die. have starved to death, he sighed with guilt. In conclusion，the description of inner thoughts can make our story more logical, reasonable, creative and powerful.
How to describe your inner feelings?
1. Feeling happy/sad/angry/guilty/depressed…, 2. Driven by curiosity/a sense of regret/sympathy….或 者是 Deeply touched/ moved by… 3. …., full of regret/anger/fear/gratitude/sadness… 4. To one’s disappointment/surprise/delight/relief/ astonishment… 5. in surprise/relief/anger 或者是with satisfaction/excitement(等于一个副词） 6. 具体的动作描写 stand frozen, jump with joy, tremble with anger, with tears filling one’s eyes, with one’s eyes wide open 等等
Tip1：“小”心思——丰满人物内心
2016年10月高考作文 23分
悲伤
快乐
Tip1：“小”心思——丰满人物内心
2017年6月高考作文 23分
震惊
Tip1：“小”心思——丰满人物内心
One day, the Brother, who had become a Monk, forced himself on the same road where he found accommodation years ago. ① He decided to visit the family. ②But the shabby cottage was nowhere to be found. He only found a splendid house. ③He thought the family might die. Suddenly, a man came out. The monk recognized him. It was the father of the family. So he asked, “ Have you lived here?”
Grade the story
With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him. She forced a smile, saying“Thank you” and walked towards the door.Pappy thought of his daughter and said to the girl loudly, “How much have you got to spend?” Hearing this, the little girl counted money in her purse---two dollars. After thinking for a few seconds, Pappy said,“Today is Christmas Day and this is your lucky day. The bell costs two dollars.” The child went out, holding the special bell in her hand.
declared a state of ①The government _________ emergency. ② “Get out of my house!” The officer roared ______. ③He _________ murmuredsomething in his sleep. ④Seeing the film star, the fans screamed ________ with excitement. ⑤Asked why he was late, Alex explained ________ that his car had broken down.
2. The child walked out, holding the special bell in her hands. The child went out with great joy, holding the special bell in her hands.
3. Then Pappy got close to her and asked, “Have you changed your mind, Miss?” Feeling puzzled, Pappy got close to her and asked, “Have you changed your mind, Miss?” 4. She said to Pappy, “Hello, Dad.” With tears filling her eyes, she said to Pappy cheerfully, “Hello, Dad.”
“小”心思——丰满人物内心 Inner thoughts to portray the figures “小”词汇——增加表达效果 Detailed verbs to make expressions powerful
“小”细节——丰富故事情节 Proper adv to enrich your story
Tip 2：“小”词汇——增加表达效果
Brainstorming:
tell
speak
explain announce reply
declare
call out yell…
say
talk
cry out murmur whisper
respond
shout
scream roar
Tip 2：“小”词汇——增加表达效果
Tip1：“小”心思——丰满人物内心
One day, the Brother, who had become a Monk, forced himself on the same road where he found accommodation years ago. ① Driven by a sense of regret, he decided to visit the family. ②To his great surprise, the shabby cottage was nowhere to be found. He only found a splendid house. ③Upon thinking the family might have starved to death, he sighed with guilt. Suddenly, a man came out. The monk recognized him. It was the father of the family. So he asked, “ Have you lived here?”