英语真题作文深度点评与满分作文赏析(附10篇)

专题032022年全国甲卷

【试题再现】

你校将以六月八日世界海洋日为主题，举办英语征文比赛，请你写一篇短文投稿。内容包括：

1. 海洋的重要性；

2. 保护海洋的倡议。

注意：

1. 词数100左右；

2. 短文的题目和首句已为你写好。

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【试题解读】

写作

体裁

投稿

写作

题材

倡议书（说明+议论+倡议）

试题情境试题要求考生根据所给的情境写一封100词左右的投稿。内容是关6月8日是世界海洋日。要求写出海洋的重要性以及保护海洋的倡议。试题有一个半开放性的特点。内容要紧扣这个世界海洋日的主题。要求考生对这个环保对于海洋的事情有所了解，并且，适当增加某种细节。从而明确写信目的，海洋日的海洋的重要性，这几个方面去展开描写。并且发出保护海洋的倡议，这点让保护环境这个主题

得以升华。

四核

心

价

值

本试题考察学生对于世界海洋日的关注，反映了新时代的教育体系中，鼓励学生追求校园校内课本知识和课外知识，与时与时俱进，将学习贯彻到实践当中去的理念，鼓励学生在加强文化学习的同时，多关注并参与校外的更广泛的一个话题，培养其关注生活环境，关注人类社会发展的共同命运，能够培养有责任心，有社会使命感的这样一个新时代的中学生。

学

科

素

要求学考生运用英语词汇语法等写作知识技能，发挥独立思考的能力，适当增加细节，使作文要点全面逻辑清晰衔接自然，同时，考生还应该写出适合的开头和结尾，平等自然的语气风

层分析养格，以符合这个倡议书的表达规范，达到有效的沟通效果，对于学生的交际学习和思辨素养都有考察。

关

键

能

力

重点考察语言综合运用能力和书面表达能力，考生作文是否能够完整，逻辑清晰，符合写作目的词汇和语法结构，运用是否丰富恰当，句子之间段落之间是否衔接有效，以使整体结构清晰单词拼写标点运用是否符合规范，都是对考生在本题中数据

表达能力的考察。

必

备

知

识

词汇知识，语法知识与语用知识和语篇知识。

四翼分析试题比较贴近中学生的这样喜闻乐见的一个内容，因为人类的生活环境和我们息息相关，中学生对于海洋和生物也有一定的兴趣，这次考察学生比较熟悉的书信体，考察学生是否能够了解投稿当中这样的一个规范书写规范，能否熟练运用基础词汇语法等写作知识与技能，发出真诚的倡议书，语言自然贴切，充分体现了试题的基础

性应用性和综合性的考察方向。

〖备考解读〗

年份内容高考命题趋势启示以及备考

意见

2022全国甲卷介绍世界海洋日，说明海洋的重要，关爱海

洋，关爱环境，有责任有担当。

难点：学生在发扬传统文化的基础之上，有

社会责任感，不仅有家国情怀，还有关爱世

界环境，维护世界共同家园的使命感和责任

感。

高考英语

的难度越

来越开放，

内容也大

胆创新，符

合新时代

对中学生

的要求。希

望同学们

平常就经

常关心时

事，关心世

界的发展，

在知识上

储备自己，

在能力上

充实自己，

在思想上

保持与时

俱进。要扩

大阅读，尤

2021全国甲卷介绍中国文化给外国朋友，发布在英文网站上，这是班会的内容，因此求助外国友人，征求他们的意见。

难点：学生对于中国传统文化应该有所了解，然后通过阐述不同传统文化的特点来征求对方意见比较好。

其是重大

事件的背

景，近况等

知识储备，

多思考，多

做笔记，走

向更广阔

的的未来。

【解题思路（写前四审）】

1. 审题材：征文比赛

2. 审时态：一般现在时为主

3. 审人称：第一人称为主

4. 审要点：构思文章是否符合题目要求，主旨突出，内容要点齐全，写作对象明确，语言的选用得当，符合要求等。

【解题思路（分段落，列提纲）】

第一段：作用：开篇。

要求：开门见山，点名主题。

篇幅：2-3行：2句-3句。

Do you have idea about June 8? It is not only the college entrance examination to Chinese senior school students, but also World Oceans Day, designated by the UN to arouse people’s awareness to protect the oceans.

第二段：作用：文章主体内容。

要求：层次分明，逻辑清晰，要点齐全。

篇幅：4-5行，4-5个句子。

The ocean is the cradle of all life on earth, rich in natural resources, and also our blue home for a happy life and happy growth. To care for the ocean is to care for our future. To begin with, protect the Marine ecological environment and advocate green environmental protection actions. What’s more, to strengthen the consciousness of the sea in accordance with the law, consciously protect the blue land and resources environment, start from me, start from now, start from around things, take an active part in green volunteer activities, and advocate green environmental protection. Finally, green initiative, green life, not to the ocean, sewage, hand in hand to protect the Marine environment, be a small guard to protect the blue land.

第三段：

作用：收尾，点题，补充其他细节等。

要求：概括，得体。

篇幅：2行左右，1-2个句子。

The theme of Ocean Day 2022 is "Protecting the harmonious coexistence between man and nature in the Marine Ecosystem". Hand in hand to protect the Marine environment, and inherit the Marine civilization from heart to heart.

作文答题纸一共13行，字数分布要均匀。

【解题思路（列好提纲后三审）】

1. 检查时态、语态、单词拼写、标点符号是否有错误。

2. 句子的时态，主谓，代词要做到一致；

句子谓语要完整；

习惯用法，固定搭配要正确；

冠词，形容词，副词及连词要得当；

有没有合适的被动语态；

有没有双谓语或者没有谓语的情况等。

3.根据内容要点改写句子、合并句子、用非谓语动词改写句子、用高级替代词、用高级句式润色文章、运用适当的过渡词加强逻辑等。

【满分作文欣赏1】

Our Oceans，Our Responsibility

Do you know June 8, which is not only a day for the college entrance examination to Chinese youngsters, but also World Oceans Day, designated by the UN to arouse people’s awareness to protect the oceans?

The ocean is the cradle of all life on earth, rich in natural resources, and also our blue home for a happy life and happy growth. To begin with, protect the Marine ecological environment and advocate green environmental protection actions. What’s more, to strengthen the consciousness of the sea in accordance with the law, consciously protect the blue land and resources environment, start from me, start from now, start from around things, take an active part in green volunteer activities, and advocate green environmental protection.

Do you agree with me? If so, let’s hand in hand to protect the Marine environment, and inherit the Marine civilization from heart to heart.（160）

点评：

文章用了中规中矩的手法，和读者用疑问句进行交流，倡议书内容交代的比较自然流畅。【满分作文欣赏2】

Our Oceans，Our Responsibility

Today is June 8, World Oceans Day, whose theme of 2022 is "Protecting the harmonious coexistence between man and nature in the Marine Ecosystem".

The world is developing too fast to care for its health. It is our pity to sacrifice the harmony of ocean to achieve economic development：the polluted oceans, the dying marine creatures, the

destroyed undersea resources, etc, are all crying for our help. It is high time that we strengthen the study of Marine knowledge and enhance the awareness of Marine protection. Deepen the understanding and understanding of Marine mothers, effectively enhance the awareness and responsibility of protecting the blue land, and strive to be a small expert in protecting the Marine ecological environment.

Let’s return the mermaid to a clean ocean, and make their life more happy. (145)

点评：

文章用了比喻类比的手法，采用了现实生活中破坏海洋的危害为例子，说明海洋保护的重要性。最后以还给美人鱼一个美丽的家园为比喻，表达美好期盼。

【满分作文欣赏3】

Our Oceans，Our Responsibility

As is known to all, the World Ocean Day falls on June 8th annually.

Ocean plays an indispensable role in water circulation, carbon storage as well as climate adjustment. It is also home to a large variety of marine species such as fish, coral and algae, all of which constitute a big part in the ocean biological chain. Therefore, it is no exaggeration to say that hardly can we human go about our lives should ocean be eliminated from our planet. Considering the above merits of ocean, I appeal to everyone to do our bit in preserving our communal treasure house as well as the origin of all life forms-the deep blue sea.(113)

【满分作文欣赏4】

Our Oceans，Our Responsibility

There is comprehensive evidence that we humans are not taking good care of the ocean, posing a lot of problems, such as plastic pollution, oil leak, rising sea levels as well as extreme weathers. As a consequence, great importance should be attached to protect our ocean.

Admittedly, intense attention should be paid and tireless efforts be made by people all over the world. Initially, governments need to consider making policies and taking proper measures to to conserve our ocean. In addition, what is of utmost importance is that we individuals should raise our awareness of environment protection, reducing our footprint and living a green lifestyle. Hopefully, with our joint efforts, we are bound to build an environmental-friendly plant shared by we human being.

【满分作文欣赏5】

Our Oceans, Our Responsibility

June 8 was officially named by the UN in 2009 as World Ocean Day. It’s a day to stress the importance of ocean and remind people to protect it.

It’s generally acknowledged that ocean plays an important role in many aspects. First of all, with rich biological resources, ocean provides samples for biological science research in terms of the diversity of global biological resources. In addition, its abundant food resources and energy in

the ocean make it possible for living things to survive. Equally importantly, the abundant water resources in the ocean bear the operation of the global water circulation system, which affect or even determine the global climate change. So many benefits does ocean bring to human beings that great importance can’t be attatched enough to protect it.

Of course, it’s everybody’s duty to shoulder this responsibility. For one thing, it’s a good idea to widely study knowledge concerning ocean and think of effective approaches to protect it. For another, let’s stop our bad behabiours which may indirectly pollute ocean. Small things make a big difference. I believe, with our joint effort, a truly green will always surround us.

【满分作文欣赏6】

Our Oceans，Our Responsibility

Nowadays, it is quite common that oceans are being badly polluted. To have a better life on the earth, we human beings should well protect our oceans for the following reasons.

What comes first is that oceans are where life started and contain abundant species, which means a lot to biodiversity on the earth. Besides, it’s oceans that offer us various resources, such as food, medicine and so on, ensuring the sustainable development of human beings. What's more, oceans have a great effect on world climate because they can take in heat from the sun.

From what's mentioned above, protecting oceans becomes urgent. So let’s take action immediately and protect oceans for the sake of us!

【满分作文欣赏7】

Our Oceans，Our Responsibility

When it comes to ocean, its pollution is becoming more and more serious. World Ocean Day, falling on June 8th, is aimed at raising awareness of ocean conservation.

Ocean plays a key role in our world. Not only does ocean offer us sufficient food, but also it maintains the balance of nature. Thus, it is imperative to protect ocean. First of all, what we can do is to place importance on our daily actions. For example, garbage can’t be thrown into ocean. What’s more, we can also hand out leaflets to call on more people to protect the ocean. The more people are involved, the better the ocean environment is.

All in all, it is high time that we devoted ourselves to protecting ocean. To protect ocean is to protect ourselves.

【满分作文欣赏8】

As we all known, World Ocean Day，which is on June 8th,is approaching.

The ocean which covers most of the area in our planet gives birth to various creatures，ranging from plants to animals. It is said that a seaweed which absorbs the carbon dioxide in the air，is the major guard for the greenhouse effect. What's more，the ocean provides us with diversed creatures and beautiful landscapes. However, an increasing amount of damage has occured in our

ocean recently.For example, the over-exploration for the oil and fishing, which make great burden on the ocean and threaten the ecological balance in it.

By no means can our humans develop at the cost of the destruction of our ocean. Not only do we realize the importance of the ocean ,but also take effective action to prevent it from polluting.

I'm expecting that our next generation can see the prosperous ocean we save today.

【满分作文欣赏9】

Our Oceans,Our Responsibility

June 8th was officially named by the UN in 2009 as World Oceans Day. It was set up to raise awareness of protecting the oceans, which play a crucial part in global ecosystem. Without the oceans, no living things would survive humans included.

As senior students, we can protect oceans in our own way First, try every means to fight against global warming, which has become a great threat to sea creatures. Second, when surfing or boating, never drop litter into the sea. In addition, take an active part in the voluntary activities launched by the ocean organizations.

Every little effort counts. As long as we try our best, we will make a difference to the marine environment.

【满分作文欣赏10】

Our Oceans,Our Responsibility

Ocean is closely connected to our life. With the pollution of the ocean worsening, the oceans are in more trouble than ever before. Thus, June 8th falls on World Ocean day, aiming to raise people’s awareness of oceanic protection.

With every drop of water you drink, every breath you take, we’re connected to the sea. As is proved, the ocean generates over half of the oxygen we breathe, sustaining our existence and development. Besides, a healthy ocean regulates climate and reduce climate change impacts, which helps to make the earth a livable planet. It’s worth noting that the ocean provides at least one fifth of the animal protein people eat, let alone providing millions of livelihoods that stimulate local and global economies. Never can we stress its importance enough for humankind.

In view of the seriousness of marine contamination, it’s high time that we made concerted efforts to create a harmonious ocean. What we should practice continually is stopping polluting water and air, avoiding disposable plastic bags, and saving limited resource to preserve marine ecosystems. Now I call on all of us to take action from now on.