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Some people believe that a country can benefit a lot from the fact that many students graduate from universities. Others believe that sending a large percentage of young students to university is the way which leads to future highly rate of unemployment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

翻译：

一些人相信许多学生从大学毕业这一事实会让一个国家受益良多。另一些人相信送很大比例的年轻人去上大学是会导致未来的高失业率的方式。讨论两种观点并给出你自己的看法。

傻瓜式开头一：

In present-day society, according to a recent survey which is conducted by a famous international organization , the increase in the number of people who believe that high unemployment rate is the result of expansion of university enrolment is accelerating ,which has aroused deep social concern. However, opponents believe that more graduates will make great contributions to the development of the whole society. Personally, I am in favor of the latter.(72words)

傻瓜式开头二：Currently, the importance of the universities to development of a country and the employment rate is a matter for debate. Many people, if not most, are strong believers in the claim that with the increase in the number of college and university students, more graduates will not find decent jobs .While others are in total agreement with the idea that these graduates will make great contributions to the development of the whole society. Personally, I am in favor of the latter.（81words）

Convincing arguments can be given that colleges and universities are beneficial to the sustainable development of a country. First of all , attending the university will increase the opportunities of success . Since most of the students can acquire latest knowledge and they are more likely find good jobs ,the unemployment rate will be lower ,which is essential to the safety and stability of our society. If most of the graduates can not find satisfying jobs , the normal life will be disturbed . What is more , colleges and universities will teach the

latest skills and technology which will enhance the competitiveness of the employees who have received the high education. There is no denying the fact they will promote the technological development of the country. Numerous convincing examples can be given ,but one will suffice. Graduates and postgraduates coming from universities play a pivotal role in the success of Shenzhou-five shuttle . Last but not least , the increase in the number of those who graduate from campus will be beneficial to the enhancement of qualifications of average citizens. Such a phenomenon will exert a positive influence on the harmonious development of our society and will appeal to talents from overseas . (203 words)

1、增加个体的成功，有工作，社会稳定。减少犯罪率。如果不，则会社会混乱

2、学习最新的技术，增加竞争力，为国家的进步做贡献

3、使国民素质提高，社会和谐发展，吸引外来人才

On the other hand, many people , if not most , are strong believer in the claim that the higher rate of unemployment is due to the increase in the number of graduates. Actually , they misunderstand the real situation and their arguments can not withstand by the careful examination. In fact , the real reason for the unemployment lies in the students themselves , failing to spare no efforts to concentrate on their studies and update their knowledge . If those who are enrolled by universities learn the lessons ,such cases can be avoided . (95words)

反方：导致失业反驳：失业的真正原因是自身能力不够

Judging from what we have discussed above ,we can safely come to the conclusion that the reasons for high unemployment of graduates is not the enrollment of colleges but the students themselves .in fact ,attending universities will benefit individuals and the whole country