2011广州一模英语读写任务作文讲评

广州一模英语读写任务作文讲评

郑中钧中学英语科组

﹙二﹚分析写作内容

A. Summary部分

1. 学会预测：读写任务先读后写。那么“读”的材料肯定是与要“写”的材料话题

是相同的，至少是相关的。因此，我们可以利用这一关系来进行有效的预测：

以约120个词写一篇读后感，说明“诚信的重要性”，内容包括：

﹙1﹚你读后的感受；

﹙2﹚以你或他人的经历说明；

﹙3﹚谈谈你从中悟出的道理。

预测出：阅读材料与有关。

因此：summary部分应突出所带来的影响。

2. 组织阅读材料内容提要：

在﹙who？﹚的﹙文体？﹚里，他讲了一个

＿＿＿＿＿﹙who？﹚由于﹙why？﹚而不能

﹙result？﹚的故事。它告诉我们﹙道理？﹚

3. 谨记：记叙部分的概括三要素是：；；。

4. 范文练习：填充所缺信息。

In the of , he spoke of an who couldn’t

because of . The story shows us that really is the best policy.

B. 主题写作

﹙三﹚写作中暴露出的问题

A.阅读不仔细

1.Who made the speech?

2.Who was dishonest?

B.情感错位

1.读完阅读材料后的感受可能有哪些情绪反应?

思考：对整个故事feel moved/ disappointed/hurt符不符合逻辑? 怎样才能

自圆其说?

C. 词汇运用不过关---完成下列练习

1. 诚实：﹙n.﹚；﹙adj.﹚

2. 不诚实：﹙n.﹚；﹙adj.﹚

3. remind：; remain：

4. 偷：﹙原形﹚；﹙过去式﹚；﹙过去分词﹚

5. 狼：； 5. 老虎：；

6. 负罪的：

D. 语言表达能力欠佳---心是笔非

翻译下列句子。

1.我为那位因一时利益而得不到工作的学生感到非常遗憾。

2. 感受与经历之间过渡句的多种表达：

a.

b.

c.

d.

e.

E. 描述经历重点不突出，啰嗦；例子无说服力。

技巧：移花接木，描述典型经历（起因—发展、高潮—结果/影响）练习：

1.用简洁的语言改写下列段落。

2.改写下列段落使中心与主题“诚信的重要性”相呼应。

3.按照起因—发展、高潮—结果/影响编写下列故事。

a.Cry Wolf的故事

b.根据中心串故事：

①反证：

考试中碰到难题----偷看同桌答案----测验拿了第一-----期末考试同

样的题答不出，不及格

②正证：

买东西----店主多找钱-----告诉实情-----被表扬，最开心的时刻

﹙四﹚找出下文的好词好句。

思考：

高分文章的特征是什么？

（五）阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

Who says honesty is dead? Last Tuesday morning Alan Reed, a student, was at the bank. He asked to take out $ 50 but the bank clerk mistakenly gave him five twenties instead of five tens. For a few seconds he wondered what to do. Should he give the extra money back? Keep it? If he kept it, he could buy several new books, or he could take his friend Alice to a fancy dinner. Probably no one would ever notice. Besides, this would make up for all the times he’d been overcharged. But then he looked at the clerk. She was a middle-aged woman with a sweet face, and she reminded him of his mother. She had been nice to him, and she looked pressured in her work. Then it occurred to him that the lady would probably get in trouble. Worst of all, Alan felt, he would probably feel guilty about keeping the extra cash. So Alan gave back the money.

The bank clerk was so impressed that someone was honest enough to return money not rightfully his that she contacted the newspaper. So there you have it. What would you have done if you’d been in Alan’s position?

[写作内容]

你想投稿给某英文报社，就上面短文中的话题发表评论。以下是主要内容：

1．以约30个词概括故事的主要内容；

2．以约120个词表达你内心的感受，并包括如下要点：

(1) 你看完这个故事的感受；