浙江新高考概要写作应用文评分及范文展示教学课件
英语概要写作(浙江省高考英语新题型)
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文体类型一：议论文
议论文通常包括论点、论据和结论，因此写议论文的概 要主要是找出主题句（the topic sentences)、支撑句（ supporting sentences）和结论句（conclusion sentences)。 其中最主要的是找准主题句。 概要模板：论点＋论据（＋结论）
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说明文写作方法 我们根据说明文的不同类型，分别给出几种参考模板： l.描写某事物的性质功用。即“对象＋性质功用＋利好 ” ： ( In the passage ) the writer introduces (对象 )to us , especially its ...(性质或功用)， from which we know...(对象带来的利好) 2.针对某个问题提出解决方法或措施。即“问题十解决方 法”： The passage tells us...(问题)，including...(方法1)，二 ，(方法2 ) and...(方法3)． 3.介绍某现象及其原因和结果。即“现象＋原因＋结果” ： ( The author/writer said/talks about)…(现象)of 二because /but...(原因／本质1)，and.。 二(原因／本质2).
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One possible version People have mixed opinions towards dirt on skin. (要点1) For a long time in history, people of some European countries, such as France, believed that dirt protected people from getting ill.(要点2) However, people began to change their attitudes to dirt about 200 years ago. People have been told that washing dirt off our body can keep us healthy. (要点3) However, some scientists believe that exposure to some dirt may help our immune system.(要点4)
浙江新高考英语作文命题分析 PPT课件(共13张)
读后续写型作文命题分析
二、对学生能力的要求 与应用文不同，故事续写型文章除了要求学生掌握丰 富的词汇和句式外，还注重学生的内容构思和情节衔接的 能力。 三、教师教学准备 一阶段：增加故事型完形和阅读的赏析和段落背诵 （情节设置衔接、动词的用法、动作的描述）适当增加新 概念故事类文章的讲解和背诵 二阶段：设定主题类继续段落的演练（加强词汇句型 的准确熟练运用；加强情节衔接的顺畅） 三阶段：故事续写类主题文章的大范围练习
读后续写型作文样题
The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm. It was from the bank. There had been a robbery （抢劫）！ Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shoutsof people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened?” But everyone had a different answer. Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him. She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that?” He thought. “The suitcase! She thinks I’m the bank thief!” Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he stared to run.
新高考英语概要写作课件
解释/ 分述
第二步：定位核心信息
Types 记叙文 Narration
说明文 Exposition
议论文 Argumentation
Key information
人物+时间+地点+事件（起因+发展+结果）
1. 描写某事物的性质功用。 “对象+性质功用+利好”； 2. 针对某个问题提出解决方法或措施。 “问题+解决方法”； 3. 介绍某现象及其原因和结果。 “现象+原因+结果”
新高考英语概要写作课件
备考建议
1. 引导学生明确写作步骤和灵活使用技巧； 2. 加强训练学生的语言组织能力和转换表达能力。
新高考英语概要写作课件
新高考英语概要写作课件 新高考英语概要写作课件
3. 各种从句转换
Baker concludes that people do not have the ability to sense when they’re being stared at.
His conclusion is that people are not equipped with the ability to feel others’ observation.
Two experiments were carried out by a psychologist.
2. 从句变为短语（介词短语，非谓语动词）
If the interviewee agrees, you can use a recorder to get the facts straight.
With the interviewee’s agreement, a recorder could be d.
浙江新高考之概要写作summarywriting省公开课金奖全国赛课一等奖微课获奖PPT课件
there is really a sixth sense
Only if you ask many different questions will you acquire all the information.
20/40
• … there is nothing fixed about attitudes to dirt.
have, exist, S+V+P
changing
opinions， viewpoints
✓People have changing opinions toward dirt over time.
10/40
2.把短语变为单词 Cleaning away day dirt benefits health.
3.使用广义词(general words)代替详细词 (specific words)
She brought home several Chinese and English novels, a few copies of Time and Newsweek, and some textbooks.
描写某事物性质功用。即“对
√ 说明文
象+性质功用+利好”； 针对某个问题提出处理方法或
exposition 方法。即“问题+处理方法”；
介绍某现象及其原因和结果。
√ 议论文
即“现象+原因+结果”
论点+论据(+结论)
argumentation
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浙江省新高考英语写作题型之概要写作介绍及范例点评
浙江省新高考英语写作题型之概要写作介绍及范例点评本栏目特约主持：赵伐◎陈科芳|浙江外国语学院《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科考试说明（高考综合改革试验省份试用）（第一版）》已经公布。
作为试点单位，浙江省对２０１６年１０月份开始的新高考英语科目考试题型作了重大调整，其中英语写作分为两部分，共４０分：第一部分为应用文写作（１５分），第二部分为读后续写或概要写作（２５分），两种形式在不同考次不定期交替使用。
对于应用文写作，广大师生相对熟悉，但是读后续写或概要写作是一种新题型，之前考试中考生并未接触过。
为方便广大师生尽早熟悉这种题型，适应相关变化，本刊特设学生习作点评栏目。
上一期我们已经分析了读后续写题型，这期分析概要写作题型，学生习作选自杭州某高中。
编者按题型介绍概要写作题型的基本要求为：提供一篇350词以内的短文，要求考生基于该短文写出一篇60词左右的内容概要。
（所选材料体裁没有限制，以说明文、议论文和记叙文为主）评分原则1.本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
2.评分时，先根据所写概要的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
英语写作543.词数少于40和多于80的，从总分中减去2分。
4.评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：（1）对原文要点的理解和呈现情况；（2）应用语法结构和词汇的准确性；（3）上下文的连贯性；（4）对各要点表达的独立性情况。
5.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。
6.如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。
各档次的给分范围和要求英语写作档次第五档（２１￣２５）第四档（１６￣２０）第三档（１１￣１５）第二档（６￣１０）第一档（１￣５）０分描述－理解准确，涵盖全部要点。
－能准确使用相应的语法结构和词汇。
－有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所完成的概要结构紧凑。
－完全使用自己的语言。
－理解准确，涵盖绝大部分要点。
浙江新高考英语概要写作初探(整理稿)(黄岩中学杨谢友)市公开课获奖课件省名师示范课获奖课件
but, however, on the other hand, yet, in contrast, nevertheless, otherwise
similarly, likewise, also, like
Cause-Effect
Condition result
because, thus, therefore, since, hence, consequently,
Para.1: Before the earthquake strange things began to happen but no one paid attention to them.
Para.2: The earthquake destroyed the city of Tangshan. Para. 3: The people were very shocked at the destruction. Para. 4: The army came to help the survivors, bringing hope for a new life.
In Britain and America people were feeling miserable because of the bad economic situation. Charlie understood their problems. His character “the little tramp” was poor and homeless, but everybody loved him for his kind heart and the way he dealt with his difficult situation. Charlie Chaplin made people laugh at some of these terrible situations like being without food or money. He wrote and directed his own films and received an Oscar for his outstanding work. (76 words)
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Paragraph 1
• Bad news sells. If it bleeds, it leads. No news is good news, and good news is no news. Those are the classic rules for the evening broadcasts and the morning papers. But now that information is being spread and monitored (监控) in different ways, researchers are discovering new rules. By tracking people's e-mails and online posts, scientists have found that good news can spread faster and farther than disasters and sob stories.
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Paragraph 2
• "The 'if it bleeds' rule works for mass media," says Jonah Berger, a scholar at the University of Pennsylvania. "They want your eyeballs and don't care how you're feeling. But when you share a story with your friends, you care a lot more how they react. You don't want them to think of you as a Debbie Downer."
浙江省新高考英语应用文写作试题分析及范例点评 文档
浙江省新高考英语应用文写作试题分析及范例点评2016年10月起，浙江省高考英语科目启用了新题型，其中写作分为两部分，第一部分为应用文写作，要求考生根据所给情景，写一篇80词左右的短文。
题型分析应用文属实用文体，有严格的语境限制，比如确定的时间、地点，确定的对象、范围，确定的行文目的等。
因此，应用文写作应力求主旨鲜明，格式正确，语言简练，语气因人因事而异。
书信、电子邮件是常见的应用文写作考查题型，主要包括询问信、致歉信、致谢信、慰问信、投诉信、邀请信、介绍信、求职信等。
写作时要注意格式正确，包含称呼语（salutation），正文（body），结束语（complimentary close），签名（signature）。
如在2016年10月的试卷中，应用文写作的要求是给未曾谋面的加拿大的住家（homestay）写一封咨询信（Letter of Inquiry）。
写作时遣词应尽量客气一些，行文应力求具有亲和力，切忌使用一些艰深的大词，也不宜使用一些结构过于杂糅的长句。
题目要求假定你是李华，下学期你将作为交换生（exchange student）去加拿大一所高中学习，要住在Lynn的家里。
请给Lynn写一封邮件，内容包括：介绍自己；1.2.告知到达时间；3.询问应做何准备。
注意：1.词数80左右；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
试题要点分析答题难度提示写作具体要求（一）内容要点1.介绍自己；2.告知到达时间；3.询问应做何准备。
（二）应用词汇和语法结构的情况1.使用与主题相关的词汇；2.能够使用恰当的语法结构。
（三）上下文的连贯性按照内容要点展开写作，使用恰当的连接词或表达法使文章内容连贯。
写作构思对于这封咨询邮件（（Letter of Inquiry），可采用以下步骤来构思：参考范文，Dear LynnI'm Li Hua， an exchange student from China. I'm happy to know that I'll be staying with your family in the next few months while I'm studying at the local high school. Thank you for having me！ I will arrive in Toronto on August 20th and get to your place later that afternoon. I wonder if you could give me some advice so that I can get myself better prepared for my stay in Canada.Looking forward to seeing you！Best wishes，Li Hua习作点评学生习作1Dear Lynn，I'm Li Hua， an exchange student from China. Next term I'll study in a senior high school in Canada， during which I will live in your house.As a high school student， I do well in my schoolwork and get along well with others. After school， I am fond of reading books and watching films.I am scheduled to arrive just a week before my class begins. And since I have never been to Canada before， Ihave no idea what to prepare. It would be really kind of you to give me some advice.Looking forward to your early reply.Yours sincerely，Li Hua点评1这篇习作无论是内容、结构，还是语言、信件的格式，都非常好。
浙江省台州市天台县高三英语新高考复习课件高考新题型之概要写作(共23张PPT)
Can you use one sentenceto8 make a summary ofl S myself-introduction?' >My temporary teacher Rose from Yuying-Middle School5who ...........is looking forward to our cooperation and perfect performance.It蟲丽旳_高考新题型之曲东慧娇《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科看试说明》概要写作：提供一篇350词以内的短文,要求考生基于该短文写出一篇60词左右的内容概要。
（满分25分）评分原则completecorrectcoherent____________ concise:no copying 本题总分为25分,分5个档次给分 4C 原则Argumentation （议论文）Forms of L汁eratureExposition （说明文）Narration （记叙文）（who when where what why how）Writing Steps for narration summary????Writing Step 1: Read for form, key information What form of passage is it?My name is Hua Fei and l am a sporting robot of the 23rd century. I am an expert …A. Argumentation© A self-introduction fNarrationJC- ExpositionPara 1: Basic information aboutthe robot■Name: Hua Fei Who■When: In the 23" century When■Occupation: A sporting robot■Ability: An expert at …,・・・ turn, dive …■Prize won：5ilyecniedaUnJheJ78th OlYmpics衣 Basic information about Hua Fei:■Name: Hua Fei■When: In the 23皿century■Occupation: A sporting robot■Ability: An expert at high living exercises■Prize won: Silver medal in the 78也Olympicswriting step 1: Read for form, main idea: The 79th Olympicsthat Hua Fei took part in:• Reasons for the failure:WhyProgrammer fell ill;Frightened; not confide nt;i - - A problem with...衣 His failure in the 79出Olympics：■ Reasons for the failure：Programmer fell ill；Frightened; not confident; A problem with …* main idea (Para 2-3):writingstep 1：Read for form5key information para4: The treatment of Hua Fei• Where:lying in hospital bed•What happened: Two broken legs and a fragile head •Treatme nt: Two new legs a nd a bi££er headWriting Step 2: Make a summary(narration v s6factors) what win a silver medal failedhis programmer fell ill No longer confidenta problem with parachuteget treatment (with two new legs and even bigger head)How to polish your summary to meetwho Hua Feiwhen of the 23rd centurywhere 78th Olympic, 79th Olympicwhy howWriting Step 2: Make a summary(narration v s the 4C requirements of criteria 6factors)•complete•correct•coherent•concise(no copying)Writing Step 3:Polish the sentences to meet 4cs to be concise(5 skills)I feel nervous/worried/anxious that I wouldbedefeated/lose/fail.~I I | | | | gI am lack/short of confidence that I would win. ① I no longer felt sol confident that I wouldI no longer believe myself that I would succeed/achieve.反义转换Writing step 3: Polish the sentences to meet 4csto be consise▲The fact that I might be defeated worries me.▲ I was so nervous that I might lose the competition ▲It is the possibility of losing that makes me anxious.Writing Step 3: Polish the sentences to be concise,meet4cs Have a drilkrewrite the following main idea using the four skills and try to be concise(20words or so)Paral：Hua Fei is a sporting robot the 23rdcentury.He is an expert吐 high flying exercises- He took part in the 7的Olympics and won a silver medal.Hua Fei, a sporting robot of the 23rd century, who is good at high flying, got a silver medal in the 78th Olympics.Writing step 3: Polish the sentences to be concise■ Para 2・3：Bebe the competition, hisprogrammer fell ill. Knowing this, Hua Fei was and no longer felt conficent. In the day of thecompetition, there was a problem with theparachute・ He fell from the sky and landedheavily on a mountain・Huafei was defeated in the 79th Olympics for his progmmer *s illness.which makes him nervous.What1 s the worse, his parachute went wrong .Writing step 4: Make the summary Coherent①Hua Fei，a sporting robot of the 23rd century, who is good at high flying exercises got a silver medal ir the 78th Olympics. However/But/While/Though Huafei was defeated in the 79thOlympics for his progmmer *s illness#which makes him nervous.What*s the worse, his parachute went wrong .As a resu It/Th u s/The refore/So ③ He is now in hospital with two broken legs and fragile head while ne is still looking forwara to next success.Writing steps：Revise 4心：complete correct,concise, coherentHua Fei, a sporting robot of the 23rd century, who is good at high flying exercises got a silver medal in the 78tn Olympics.Huafei was defeated in tne /9th Olympics for his progmmer f s illness.which makes him nervous.What's the worse, his Rarachute went wrong •he is now in ospital with two broken legs and fragile head while he is still looking forward to next success«words)Writing Step 6: Clearly copy your draft to the paperStepsI.Read2.Make a summary based on 6 elements of narration3.Polish to be concise and to meet 4cs4- Make it coherent。
浙江高考英语新题型“概要写作”
Step 1: Read
①topic sentence: There is nothing fixed about attitudes to dirt ② structure
③ supporting ideas
Find out the topic sentence of each paragraph
supply and hand washing are practical means of preventing disease. Yet, it seems that standards of cleanliness have moved beyond science since World War Ⅱ. Advertisements repeatedly sell the idea; clothes need to be whiter than white, cloths ever softer, surfaces to shine. Has the hate for dirt, however, gone too far?
评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑： (1)对原文要点的理解和呈现情况； (2)应用语法结构和词汇的准确性； (3)上下文的连贯性； (4)对各要点表达的独立性情况；
Forms of Literature
Argumentation (议论文） Exposition （说明文）
Narration （记叙文）
同义词替换
句型转换
▲ The attitudes to dirt is not always the same. ▲ People’s attitudes to dirt vary in different times. ▲ People hold different opinions towards dirt over time.
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要点2： However, inadequate praise can be equally harmful.
➢此要点与上一句的逻辑关系为转折，原文是still, 作副词有“但 是”的意思。 这里如果保留still 或者写的是表转折意思的连接词算正确；如果 取了 still“仍然，还是”的意思写similarly, also等表达, 酌情扣分。
高考阅卷 概要写作& 2019.06
目录
一．评卷概况 二．原文解读 三．参考范文 四．评分标准 五．样卷展示 六．典型问题 七．教学启示 八．佳作欣赏
一、评卷概况
1. 全省考生人数共26.56万人左右；阅卷教师约280人， 分为14个组，每组20人，各组设有小组长。
2. 评分流程：—双评制 概 要: │ 1评-2评│ ≤ 3，取平均值。 应用文: │ 1评-2评│ ≤ 2，取平均值。 超出阈值范围，双评变三评，取│3评-1评 │,│3评-2评 │中差值较小分数间平均值；差值相等，取高平均值。 如果三评仍超出阈值范围，系统自动提交小组长进行仲裁。 ➢前三人看不到互相给分，也不知是几评卷，小组长仲裁 可以看到前三人给分； ➢概要打过分数的任意两人分差超过7，系统提交专家组审 核。
不到位的表达：praise 太过笼统 over praise(over常作 adv/prep.）
酌情给分：a lot of praise这类
➢没写bad effects,写的是具体例子，写出大于等于2的算全；只 写1个算不全（具体选择哪几个不作要求）
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3. 阅卷顺序： 概要（600篇/人/天） 应用文（1200篇/人/天） 语法填空
4. 宏观调控 阅卷总量，平均速度，平均分，有效度，吻合度，自 评指数等等
吻合度：个人所评各分数的曲线要与所在小组和大组的平均曲 线大致吻合（尽量避免某个分数打的过多或过少），越往后面 评，吻合指数应该是越来越接近。
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三、参考范文
范文： Nowadays parents tend to overpraise their children, which may have bad effects.(要点 1) However, inadequate praise can be equally harmful. (要点2) Experts suggest that parents pay attention to the quality of their praise and praise the effort rather than the result. (要点3) Parents should also be aware that praise needs to be task-specific and match the amount of effort their children have made. (要点4)
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➢“inadequate”写成lack of/not enough praise 到位； too little praise/less praise 可酌情给分； little/few praise 算不到位。
➢“equally harmful” 写成 also harmful/harmful too/do harm to 都算到位
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评卷专家指导意见
要点1：Nowadays parents tend to overpraise their children, which may have bad effects.
➢到位的表达：too much praise; praise excessively; overpraise…
自评指数: 每改100-200篇左右，会跳出你之前改过的卷，来 判断阅卷老师的两次评得误差，看你的标准是否是统一。
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