ETM8语段翻译解析黑衣人.PPT

语气衔接语

概括词：指向下文黑衣人的言谈和行为方式
His manner, it is true, are tinctured with some strange inconsistencies, and he may be justly termed a humorist in a nation of humorists.
Though fond of my acquaintances, I desire an intimacy only with a few.

何种语义连贯关系？


——语义递进关系


初译：虽然喜欢我的相识，但我渴望只与几 个人保持一种亲密性。 —语义连贯+衔接？ 改译：我虽喜欢与许多人交友，却只愿与少 数几人保持深交。 —程度关系 + 语义扩展 修订：我虽喜欢广交朋友，却只愿与少数人 成为至交。 —— 文字润色

注意两个 while 引出的平行结构的衔接关系的翻 译—— 这也是一种结构上的重复而产生的人物特 性格征的强化性描写 译文：当他自称为损人之徒时，脸上却洋溢着同情 之心；而当他眼里露出怜悯之情时，嘴里却说出最 为恶意之辞。 * 四个之字词组结构形态为一种重复性修辞衔接


Some affects humanity and tenderness, others boast of having dispositions from Nature; but he is the only man I ever knew who seemed ashamed of his natural benevolence.
特征倾向性近义词缩并法+ 属性特征引申为属性主体

译文：有些人假装仁义君子，有些人则自吹 天性就是如此仁厚；然而，他却是我所知唯 一之人，竟以自己的仁爱本性为耻。
语气衔接（以强化对比） 对比性衔接

He takes as much pains to hide his feelings, as any hypocrite would to conceal his indifference; but on every unguarded moment the mask drops off, and reveals to the most superficial observer.
I have known him profess himself a man-hater, while his cheek was glowing with compassion; and while his looks were softened into pity, I have heard him use the language of the most unbounded ill-nature.
ETM8语段翻译
——衔接与连贯
2015.11.22

Though fond of my acquaintances, I desire an intimacy only with a few. The Man in Black, whom I have mentioned, is one whose friendship I could wish to acquire, because he possesses my esteem. His manner, it is true, are tinctured with some strange inconsistencies, and he may be justly termed a humorist in a nation of humorists. Though he is generous even to profusion, he affects to be thought a prodigy of parsimony and prudence; though his conversation be replete with the most sordid and selfish maxims, his heart is dilated with most unbounded love. I have known him profess himself a man-hater, while his cheek was glowing with compassion; and while his looks were softened into pity, I have heard him use the language of the most unbounded ill-nature. Some affects humanity and tenderness, others boast of having dispositions from Nature; but he is the only man I ever knew who seemed ashamed of his natural benevolence. He takes as much pains to hide his feelings, as any hypocrite would to conceal his indifference; but on every unguarded moment the mask drops off, and reveals to the most superficial observer.
The Man in Black, whom I have mentioned, is one whose friendship I could wish to acquire, because he possesses my esteem.

非限制性定语前置

译文：对于经常提起的那位黑衣绅士，我倒 希望能获得他的友情，因为他深得我的敬仰。
maxims, his heart is dilated with most unbounded love.

注意两个 though 引出的平行结构的衔接关系的翻 译——这是一种结构上的重复而产生的人物特性格 征的强化性描写

译文：他虽慷慨大方，甚至有过度之举，却 装得像个吝啬鬼（或：假装斤斤计较），慎 而又慎；尽管他满口卑劣自私之言，可内心 却充盈无限爱心。


词义虚化 小句译为副词 + 并句译法
译为并列性概念

译文：他的言谈举止确有些怪异反常之处， 而且简直可以称作一位幽默之国的幽默之 士。
Though he is generous even to profusion, he affects to be thought a prodigy of parsimony and prudence; though his conversation be replete with the most sordid and selfish

The End!
视角转换

译文：他总是竭力掩饰自己的情感，如同那 些伪君子总尽力掩饰内心的冷漠；当他不经 意地落下面具之际，就连那些最浅薄之人也 能看出他的仁厚本性来。
语境化连贯性增译
仁厚的伪君子

我虽喜欢广交朋友，却只愿与少数人成为至交。 对于我常提起的那位黑衣绅士，我倒希望能获得他 的友情，因为他深得我的敬仰。他的言谈举止确有 些怪异反常之处，而且简直可以称作一位幽默之国 的幽默之士。他虽慷慨大方，甚至有过度之举，却 装得像个吝啬鬼（或：却假装斤斤计较），慎而又 慎；尽管他满口卑劣自私之言，可内心却充盈无限 爱心。 当他自称为损人之徒时，脸上却洋溢同情之 心；当他眼里露出怜悯之情时，嘴里却说出最为恶 意之辞。有些人假装仁义君子，有些人则自吹天性 就是如此仁厚；但他却是我所知唯一之人，竟以自 己的仁爱本性为耻。他总是竭力掩饰自己的仁厚之 情，如同那些伪君子总尽力掩饰冷漠的内心；当他 不经意地落下面具之际，就连那些最浅薄之人也能 看出他的仁厚本性。 [曾利沙译]