2020新课标高考艺考英语复习教师用书：第四板块第一部分第二讲 增加细节的5大高分技巧 Word版

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第二讲增加细节的5大高分技巧

在应用文写作中,增加细节内容的描述是必不可少的。在信息提纲类写作中,考生一定不能简单地翻译或者仅仅完成所给条目的指定内容；在看图作文中更不能只是轻描淡写图片内容，否则很有可能造成内容不充实、词数要求不达标或者结构不连贯等问题。适当增加细节内容，能够使习作流畅、丰满，达到应有的表达效果.

列举具体的实例进行补充说明

(2019·浙江卷6月·应用文写作）我仍旧记得……

1．I still remember.。。

→I still remember what you have devoted to improving my oral English and English writing。

2．(2018·浙江卷11月·应用文写作)这是一个黑色的皮革钱包。

It is a black leather wallet.

→It is a black leather wallet with my ID card，2 credit cards and around 200 dollars in it.

3．（2020·宁波综合检测·应用文写作)我想大体上介绍一下中国的传统文化。

I'd like to talk briefly about Chinese traditional culture.

→I’d like to talk briefly about Chinese traditional culture,especially Chinese painting.

4．(2020·台州市第一次质量预测·应用文写作）现在，我想与你分享春节的一些传统风俗习惯。

Now，I’d like to share with you some traditional customs of the Spring Festival.

→Now，I’d like to share with you some traditional customs of the Spring Festival,the most important festival in China。

5．我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友.

I’d like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me.

→I'd like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me。If possible,we can travel together or share traveling experiences.

6．我是一个充满活力的健康男孩,我非常喜欢体育运动.

I am a healthy boy full of energy so I like sports very much。

→I am a healthy boy full of energy so I like sports very much，especially outdoor activities。Whenever I have time,I'll go hiking or mountain climbing with my classmates。

7．我要花一些时间和父母在一起。

I'll spend some time staying with my parents。

→I'll spend some time staying with my parents，chatting with them and doing some housework.

[题组过关1]-—根据括号内提示完成句子

1．The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our daily life.__________________________（我们不仅能阅读国内外的新闻),but also get information，send emails and attend online schools。

2．Laura is a standard American style.__________________________(她说一口完美的美式英语)，and that’s why I am crazy about her.

3．However,it seems people are unaware of the negative effects of mobile phones on communication.

________________________________________________________________ ________

（比如，很多人越来越不重视面对面的交流）．

4．However,every coin has two sides，so does the Internet。

________________________________________________________________ ________

（比如，沉溺于网络也许会影响我们的学习和工作)．

答案：1.We can not only read news from home and abroad

2．She speaks perfect American English

3．For example，many people begin to pay less attention to face。to。face communication

4．For example，being lost in the Internet may affect our study and work

增添与所写信息相关的神态、动作、

结果、心理描写以及背景渲染等内容

（2019·北京卷·书面表达)在农场里，我们帮忙摘西瓜。

On the farm，we helped pick watermelons。

→On the farm，we helped pick watermelons.While working I realised how hard it was to work in the fields under a hot sun。

1．（2020·丽水市检测·应用文写作)当我们爬山时所有人都捡垃圾。

All of us picked up the rubbish as we climbed up。

→All of us picked up the rubbish as we climbed up，helping to beautify the scenery。(结果描写)

2．我有时去村西的小河游泳。

I went swimming in the river of the west of the village now and then。

→I went swimming in the river of the west of the village now and then.The water in the river is very clear.（背景渲染)

→Weather permitting,I went swimming in the river of the west of the village now and then。(相关背景)

3．旅行了一周后，他回到了家.

After a week's trip，he returned home。

→After a week’s trip，he returned home，tired but very happy.（心理描写）

[题组过关2]——根据括号内提示完成句子