英语作文优化句子的四种常用方法

[例3]介绍地点 姓名：李华 身份：育才中学学生 职位：学生会主席 校址：你们大学附近 I’m Li Hua, Chairman of the Student Union of Yucai Middle School, which is close to your university.
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1.(翻译)李敏是个女孩子,今年18岁, 她在光 华中学学习,她是我的邻居也是我最好的朋友。
1. Li Ming, a g百度文库rl of 18, my neighbour and my best friend, is studying in Guanghua Middle school.
2.(整合)Guangzhou is the capital of Guangdong Province. It is located in the middle of Guangdong Province. It is the culture and economy center of Guangdong Province. 2. Guangzhou, the capital and the culture and economic center of Guangdong Province, is located in the middle of Guangdong.
7.According to the professor, the cause of short-sightedness is very complicated. No medicine can cure it. 7. According to the professor, the cause of short-sightedness is very complicated, so no medicine can cure it.
3. (整合)Zhang Hai is male. He is 23 years old. He graduated from Hunan Normal University last year. 3. Zhang Hai , male, 23 years old, graduated from Hunan Normal University last year.
运用 用短语整合句子。 9.He was ill. He didn’t go to school.
9. Being ill, he didn’t go to school.
10.The man is singing a song. He is my brother.
10. The man singing a song is my brother.
运用并列句 常用的并列连词有and, but, or, otherwise, nor, so, yet, however, for, as well as, both…and, not only…but also, either…or, neither…nor, (and) then, since等。
[例10]他病得很重，这让我着急。 [一般] He was seriously ill. It made me worried.
[高级] That he was seriously ill made me worried. He was seriously ill, which made me worried.
[例12]我正在餐桌旁吃饭，一个人朝我 走了过来，那个人戴着一顶黑帽子。 [复杂] I was eating at the table when a man who was wearing a black hat came up to me. [简明] When I was eating at the table, a man wearing a black hat came up to me.
14. Li Hua is my classmate, whose English is very good.
15.As for myself, Thomas Edison is my idol. His inventions have greatly changed our life.
15. As for myself, Thomas Edison is my idol because his inventions have greatly changed our life. 或As for myself, Thomas Edison, whose inventions have greatly changed our life, is my idol.
温馨提示: 需要注意的是，我们在写 作时，不要一味地追求复 杂句型，能简则简，能用 短语，就不用从句。在句 式多样的前提下，尽量做 到精练。
[例11]我到家后马上给他打电话。 [一般] After I got home, I called him at once.
[较好] After getting home, I called him at once.
运用 用从句整合下列句子。 13.He never lost a game. I was really astonished.
13. I was really astonished that he never lost a game.
14.Li Hua is my classmate. His English is very good.
运用 用连接词整合下列句子。 4.He works hard himself. He encourages us to work hard, too.
4. He not only works hard himself but also encourages us to work hard.
5.These glasses are very expensive. Please be careful with them. 5. Please be careful with the glasses, for they are very expensive.
6.Half of the girls choose film and TV stars as their idols. 48% of the boys favor sports stars. 6.Half of the girls choose film and TV stars as their idols while 48% of the boys favor sports stars.
[例7]她回到舞厅。她寻找丢失的项链。 [一般] She went back. She wanted to find her lost necklace.
[高级] She went back to find her lost necklace.
[例8]故事是用简单的英语写的，很受英语 初学者的欢迎。 [一般] The stories are written in simple English. They are popular with English beginners [高级] Written in simple English, the stories are popular with English beginners.
8. I am good at expressing myself. I have the language advantage over others. 8. Not only am I good at expressing myself but I also have the language advantage over others.
11.I’m writing to invite you to be a judge at our English speech contest. It will be held on June 5.
11. I’m writing to invite you to be a judge at our English speech contest to be held on June 5.
12.After she listened to me for a while, she gave me a big smile and said she liked my voice very much.
12. After listening to me for a while, she gave me a big smile, saying she liked my voice very much.
运用短语
根据具体情况我们可以用现在分词、过去分词，介词短语、 不定式短语等。
[例6]我很惊讶，一切进展得那么顺利。
[一般] I was surprised. Everything went on very well.
[高级] To my surprise, everything went on well.
[例4]他不喜欢音乐，也不喜欢运动。 [一般] He doesn’t like music. He doesn’t like sports, either.
[高级] He likes neither music nor sports.
[例5]我不喜欢他，他很自私。
[一般] I don’t like him. He is selfish. [高级] I don’t like him, for he is selfish.
17.We are now living in an information age. TV, cells and the Web are widely used in this age.
17. We are now living in an information age in which TV, cells and the Web are widely used.
[例2]介绍人物(2009广东) 时间: 上周末 对象: 眼科医生(eye-doctor)王教授 主题: 我国中小学生近视(eye-sightedness) 问题 Last weekend, I had an interview with Professor Wang, an eye-doctor, concerning the issue of short-sightedness of the school children in China.
运用从句
最常用的是状语从句、主语从句、宾语从句和定语从句.
[例9]废水被直接排放河里,河水被严重污染。
[一般] Waste water is directly let into the river. The river is seriously polluted. [高级] The river is seriously polluted because waste water is directly let into the river.
16.Currently China has about 350 million smokers. Among these smokers 75% are men and 25% are women.
16. Currently China has about 350 million smokers, among whom 75% are men and 25% are women.
优化句子的四种常用方法 整合信息的十种语言手段
篇章结构连贯的常用词语
优化句子的四种常用方法
一、同位语手段 二、运用并列句 三、运用短语 四、运用从句
同位语手段
此方法多用于介绍人物、事物或地点等。 [例1] 介绍事物(2008广东) 背景：射击最初只是生存工具，19世纪末 才发展成为一项体育运动。 Shooting, a means of survival originally, developed into a sport only in the late 19th century.