高考英语作文概要写作附习作两篇Summary writing

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Once home to emperors, the Palace Museum is known for its grand complex (综合设施) of buildings and large collection of imperial (宫廷的) treasures. Even if you are not a museum person, you might like to get a special treat for your ears.

In 2018, the Palace Museum teamed up with Tencent to hold a music contest called “If ancient paintings could sing”. They invited public contributions of original music to accompany the museum’s paintings, while the museum’s scholars provided some literary background and famous musicians helped select the best musical creations. The museum released its first digital (数字的) music album, Ancient Paintings Can Sing in October 2018. The album has become popular among young people.

The museum authorized (授权) 11 paintings to serve as sources of inspiration, including Along the River During the Qingming Festival by Song Dynasty artist Zhang Zeduan (1085-1145) and An Ode to the Goddess of the Luo River by Gu Kaizhi (348-409). The album is intend ed to introduce more people to the museum’s ancient paintings. “It is a new approach to cultural innovation (创新) that integrates (融合) art, music and technology. It aims to teach young people about the beauty of traditional art,” Shan Jixiang, former curato r (馆长) of the museum, told China Daily.

The Palace Museum has also created several new smartphone apps. One is The Palace Museum, which gives users daily information about cultural relics. The Qing Emperor’s Wardrobe shows high-quality pictures of clothes that were worn in ancient China. And another app, Han Xizai’s Night Feast, is based on a classic ancient painting. Users can get an overview of Han’s house and take a closer look at the people and clothes within it by touching the screen.

These apps target tech-savvy (精通科技的) young people. “The Forbidden City is a carrier of traditional culture and shows the wisdom and creativity of ancient China. The most important duty of the Palace Museum is to explore and spread this spiritual wealth,” Shan said.

【文章分析】

该文章主要介绍了故宫博物院为鼓励年轻人了解中国传统文化，实行的一些文化创新举措。

【写作建议】

写好概要写作的重点一是把握好文章结构，二是简要概括出其要点，可参考上文对文章进行文本分析从而形成思维导图。这篇文章是常见的说明文结构，清晰明了。文章介绍了故宫博物院的文化创新举措：古画配乐创作大赛、据此创作出的第一张数字音乐专辑以及多个智能手机应用程序，这些创新举措都旨在吸引年轻人了解中国传统文化。

概要写作时要突出这些要点，其他不重要细节可以省略。同时用词上要准确斟酌含义，使用同义替换词来转述文意。【作品一】

Museums are usually a place to look at things, but now the Palace Museum has created “①exhibits” for our ears. With Tencent, the museum invited people to compose “②soundtracks” for ancient paintings. ③It also released a digital album that integrates art, music and technology. ④As part of a wider goal to get young people excited about traditional Chinese culture, the museum has also released phone apps to ⑤give users a detailed look at ancient life.点评：

本篇概要涵盖了原文的大部分内容，语言表达正确，在用词方面也比较巧妙。但该篇概要未能完全体现出文章的核心重点，且个别衔接不够自然。

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①exhibits加上引号表示音乐专辑就像是展出作品，给人一场听觉盛宴。

②此处巧用了“soundtrack”，该词本义为“电影配乐”，此处生动形象地进行比喻，表现出为名画配乐的意思。

③到这里上文交代了古画配乐大赛，所以此承接上要突出大赛与专辑的关系，并突出两个举措的效果，可改成：This led to a digital album that has attracted many youths.

④这样表达与前文割裂开来，使得衔接不够自然，且wider goal所指也不明确。

⑤目的状语应突出文章主题，即故宫新举措的目的，建议改成：Smartphone apps were also created to help spread traditional Chinese culture among young people.

【作品二】

The Palace Museum, ①famous for its grand complex and many ancient treasures, held a music contest with Tencent in 2018, ②seeking original compositions to feature on a digital album. By ③combining art, music and technology, ④the goal is to inspire enthusiasm among young people for traditional Chinese culture. ⑤Along with the album, several new apps were created to help the museum ⑥spread the wisdom and creativity of ancient China.

点评：

本篇概要较为完整地涵盖了原文的主要内容，层次清晰明了，语法结构与句式丰富，用到较多高级词汇。但仍要注意写作时要紧扣文章的重点。

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①下划线部分均不是文章的重点，可考虑删去。建议第一句话改为：The Palace Museum held a music contest in 2018, seeking original compositions to a ccompany the museum’s paintings. The best were chosen to feature on a digital album.

②seek，feature精炼准确地表达了原文的意思。

③combine可以作为原文中integrate的近义替换。

④此处改为its goal会使衔接更自然。

⑤原文并没有说二者是一同发布的，改为besides比较妥当。

⑥此处很好地总结了故宫传播文化的使命。