大学英语写作句子练习

I. Developing a Concise Style: To retain your readers’ interest and improve the flow of your prose, trim all the fat from your sentences.

e.g. Wordy The opponents’ argument seems to be reasonable.

Revised The opponents’ argument seems reasonable.

1. Poor Because of the fact that it is usually derived from behaviors of novelty on the Internet, cyber fame has a weak

basis which would lead to its mortality.

Revised Derived from behaviors of novelty on the Internet, cyber fame has a weak basis which would lead to its mortality.

2. Wordy There are more and more university students engaging in social practices.

Revised More and more/An increasing number of university students engage in social practices.

3. Wordy There are 56 ethnic groups composing the Chinese big family.

Revised Fifty-six ethnic groups compose the Chinese big family.

4. Wordy Those who have great ambition are people of great determination and perseverance.

Revised Ambitious people are of great determination and perseverance.

5. Wordy The interview which is a popular recruiting method has unprecedentedly involved kinds of sciences such as

psychology and statistics.

Revised Interview, a popular recruiting method, has unprecedentedly involved kinds of sciences such as psychology and statistics.

6. Wordy A crack of joke may inspire students’ interest and enthusiasm and then what they learn leaves on them an

impression which cannot be easily forgotten.

Revised A crack of joke may inspire students’ interest and enthusiasm a nd then what they learn leaves on them an impression not easily forgotten.

7. Wordy One of my close personal friends who lives in the city of Taipei at the present time is under consideration of

moving his residence to Beijing for the reason that he has been offered a promising position in that metropolis. Concise One of my close friends in Taipei is considering moving to Beijing because he has been offered a promising position there.

II. Developing a Lively Style: Use specific, descriptive verbs.

e.g. Bland The heroic deeds are good for the youth education.

Better The heroic deeds would function as invigorating materials of the youth education.

1. Bland Some people like copycatting, while others do not like it.

Better Some people adore/are fond of copycatting, while others dislike/are repelled by it.

2. Bland If they do not pay enough attention to study, university students will not do well in their future work.

Better If they do not pay enough heed to study, university students will stagger/encounter stumbling blocks in their future work.

3. Imprecise One friend of mine is a very interesting person.

Better One friend of mine can turn an originally strained/tense/intense atmosphere into an easy and pleasant/happy and relaxing one whenever she turns up.

III. Varying Your Sentence Style: NO all-too-common “subject + predicate” pattern.

combining sentences with conjunctions

beginning some sentences with participles/prepositional phrases

using -ly/to openers

e.g. ① Many teachers can give students information. Very few can inspire students to learn. Information is of little use to the students. Soon he will leave college. Then he will forget what he has memorized. He must be inspired to learn on his own.

② Many teachers can give students information, but few can inspire them to learn. When a student leaves college, the