上海市九年级初三中考英语-作文修改及亮点句型训练1

Write at least 60 words about the topic “I enjoy (reading, traveling, doing sports...)”

请以“我喜欢做……”为题目，写一篇不少于60个词的短文。要求内容贴切，意思连贯。

请在答题纸上补充完整题目

（注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分）

Use the following as your reference:

＞What do you enjoy doing?

＞Why do you enjoy doing it?

＞What can you get/learn from it?

I enjoy traveling

Everyone has one or two habits. Some enjoy reading or writing; others enjoy playing basketball or football. As far as I’am concerned, I enjoy traveling very much. The reasons are showed as follows.

If I am upset, I will go out for a short travel. When my heart is filled with the beautiful scenery, I will leave all the annoyances behind. Besides, not only can travel enrich our knowledge and experiences，but also can make us be aware of the vastness of nature. I am attracted by the planet that we are living on so that l will try my best to protect it.

In short, that is my habit, which is of great benefit to me.

修改版：

I enjoy traveling

It is important for us all to have at least one or two hobbies in our daily life. Some enjoy reading or writing, others are favor of playing basketball or football. As for me, traveling is one of my favorite hobbies,which benefit me a great deal.

First, surrounded with much endless work and pressure,we sometimes feel tired and desperate, so going somewhere different is necessary to relax and change the way of thinking. Second, traveling can not only widen our horizons but also enrich our knowledge in many fields. Besides, experiencing different kinds of cultures is essential for our future life.

In short, as far as I am concerned, traveling all around the world sounds so wonderful that I can’t helping thinking working harder to achieve my ambition.

解析：

1.It is important for us all to have at least one or two hobbies in our daily life. It is+adj+for/of sb+to do sth 句型，作文里很好用的句型，at least 至少

2.are favor of+doing，表示喜欢，可用于替代like，love，enjoy等词汇

3.As for me, traveling is one of my favorite hobbies,which benefit me a great deal. 动名词做主语的句型，谓语动词用单数形式，As for me，至于我，对于我来说。

4.surrounded with much endless work and pressure,we sometimes feel tired and desperate. Be surrounded with 被...包围，这里是过去分词做状语。

5.traveling can not only widen our horizons but also enrich our knowledge in many fields. Not only...but also 句型，不仅...而且；widen our horizons拓宽视野，对于基础的学生也可用widen our eyes; In many fields ,在很多方面。

6.experiencing different kinds of cultures is essential for our future life. Essential重要的，基础的，可用于替代important，key等词

7.In short，总之，这一类的词还有in a word, therefor等。