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英国大学经济与金融专业申请文书范文展示:PS篇.doc

英国大学经济与金融专业申请文书范文展示:PS篇.doc

英国大学经济与金融专业申请文书范文展示:PS篇Personal Statement xxx My aspiration for finance can be traced back to my teenage years, when my father was fascinated with stock market and I bought stocks together with him for fun. When he purchased a new one, I would ask him the bid price and expected ask price, and then brainstormed how much we may possibly get. Earning money by investment after ups and downs was a fantastic experience for me, and I came to realize that there exist rules and principles deeply rooted in finance theories and statistics, which drove me to further explore the field. Now, through three-year systematic studies in economics and finance, my interest and passion have been fully exploited and I made up my mind to pursue a career in the field of finance. The more I know, the more I want to know. In order to do further study and build a successful future career, I plan to go for advanced study in the United Kingdom, where the most cutting-edged researches and practices of financial analysis are being carried out. Luckily, I believe that I am in possession of essential qualities for undertaking both advanced training and career development in finance and economics, such as the good control of English and an always-stay-discrete attitude. I believewith those characteristics, I will surely survive through twists and turns in the world of finance. My undergraduate studies in economics have provided me with good academic foundations. Through studying fundamental theories in economics including Advanced Mathematics 95, Intermediate Microeconomics 87, Macroeconomics 80, Monetary Banking 83, Development Economics 89 and Econometrics 87 with the using of Eviews software, which enables me to establish basic mathematical models to solve problems, I have mastered a basic understanding and a clear picture of Western Economics, Risk Management Insurance, Finance, Financial Engineering, etc. Benefiting from my strength in mathematics and effective learning, I enjoyed an upward trend in the academic performance, preparing myself to be a capable student with diligent studying style. Since junior year, I began to focus on securities and futures. Supervised by my financial professor named Qingyuan Zhang who taught me Monetary Banking, I researched the stock index futures in western financial markets and its performance. Based on the research, I completed an essay to be published in National Financial Journal in Nov. 2012 where I listed the operations of stock index futures investment in western capital markets and put forward my ideas about stockindex futures investment in Chinese mainland markets. Thanks to the research, I have mastered the methodology on how to approach a problem in a logical and analytical manner. In January 2013, I have participated in Hongkong Management Trainee Plan. I had been engaged in communication and arrangement works with Harry Ho-Director of Aviva and Andy Mak-Chief Investment Strategist of Aviva, analyzing the result of GSEC Marketing Competition Simulation Contest of each group by using relative software, participating in the discussion on fund mix choice, supervising the implementation of public projects and assisting in auditing the project last-term report and grade. Besides academic excellence, I also tried to enhance my social communicative skills and leadership. For three years, I worked at student union of my university, in charge of organizing various campus activities such as music festival, arts gala, and cultural salon. I nurtured interpersonal communication skills, leading my team to complete the activity-launching tasks within limited time. I believe these skills are necessary for supporting my success in both the academic and social life in a new environment. However, it is far from enough to arrive at my destination-the field of business and management. In order to gain more improvement,I looked for a precious opportunity towork as a Futures Manager Assistant in GF Securities Zhangjiakou Branch of Hebei Province. In this company, I have learnt the relative knowledge on stock markets analysis and futures business, maintaining the existing customers by collecting the feedback from the customers and reflecting to the manager and looking for the new customers by introducing the profit and risk of the futures to the potential customers. To seek for more improvement, I work as a HR Director Assistant in Beijing Branch of Budweiser China Sales Co., LTD. I was then responsible for making the statistics of the employees’attendance rate and drawing the weekly report. New employees’recruitment and training, assisting HR director in arranging the meeting decoration, receiving the customers and helping the HR director coordinate the relations with other departments, are also what my responsibilities lie in. With my ambition grows greater, I found it a mix of challenge and fun to be my own boss. Driven by the common idea, I, together with four partners, create an offline program. I was in charge of the marketing part. My work was talking over the cooperation with catering, entertainment, hotel and training institutions besides Nankai University and Tianjin University. We designed the entity coupon for the stores and gave out them to the college student by taking advantage ofsocieties and student union. The discount activities submitted to the final discussion result with merchants. From the activity, we achieved the situation of “Win-win-win”. On one hand, the merchants could get more customers and popularities through our promotion. On the other hand, the customers got cheaper goods. In addition, our team gained certain monthly commission from the merchants. My interest and abilities indicates that a lifelong career in finance will be very appropriate for me because that is where my potential lies. In order to seek new heights academically, I would like to apply for admission into your prestigious program. I participated in the “Entrepreneurship and Leadership Seminar” held by School of Business, University of Cambridge, and four-week economics courses in Oxford University during 2012 summer vacation. I really enjoyed the open communication with professors and lecturers. With this wonderful journey where I adapted quickly to the English-based academic environment, I feel confident for mastering overseas study. Your university, with its topmost academic atmosphere, attracts me as an ideal place to pursue my master degree. The financial program has a tradition of excellence in research, education and service to the profession, which will help me to understand global capital marketing andfinancial investment internationally. With all the passion and belief to challenge myself, I am sure that I will be the best I can be if I am lucky enough to have the chance to study in your University.。

个人陈述(PS)写作要点

个人陈述(PS)写作要点

个人陈述(PS)写作要点第一篇:个人陈述(PS)写作要点英国留学申请之个人陈述写作最全教程一、英国留学个人陈述(PS)的主旨个人陈述PS在英国留学申请中之所以重要是因为很多英国大学无需面试申请人,所以他们唯一认识你的地方就是网上申请表格。

大部分表格涵盖了你的个人信息,包括大学感兴趣的你的学术/语言成绩、推荐信以及PS(留学个人陈述)。

PS(留学个人陈述)是这些材料当中唯一一个由你来控制的,所以这个是你给大学招生办留下一个良好印象的机会,这个印象是用分数无法反映出来的。

尤其是当你申请的学校竞争特别激烈,所有的申请者都有很好的成绩的时候,PS就是唯一一种能凸显你的与众不同的材料,所以同志们,一定要尽可能地把PS做到尽善尽美。

大学招生办和课程老师在看你的PS的时候,他们通常会问以下两个问题:1、我们是否想要这个学生来学习这门课程?2、我们是否想要这个学生来我们的学校学习?这两个问题可以分解为以下几个小问题来解答:1)这个学生是否适合他/她所申请的课程?2)这个学生是否具备他/她所申请的课程需要的素质?3)这个学生是否有足够的毅力、勤奋的品格以及不会轻易辍学?4)这个学生是否会全力以赴地达到这门课程所要求的各项能力?5)这个学生是否能在高压底下工作?6)这个学生是否能很快得调整好自己融入到大学的新环境?7)他们的交际能力如何?8)他们是否热爱这个课程并且做了仔细的研究9)他们对课程是否有真正的兴趣并且渴望去做更深入的学习?这些问题就是需要你在PS当中去表述和解答,只不过你不能只是说YES和NO,你需要有足够的事实依据去证明你的说法,让你的观点言之有物。

不过,招生办的老师们毕竟也是平凡人,他们有可能需要阅读成百上千的PS,所以即便你觉得已经对上述问题回答的很好了你还有可能被不幸地拒绝。

还有其他的一些技巧可以让你的PS脱颖而出给老师们留下深刻印象,但要记住老师们也都因人而异他们对于申请者的期望也都不完全相同,怎么把握当中玄机就看童鞋们自己拿捏了。

英国留学个人陈述PS十大忌讳

英国留学个人陈述PS十大忌讳

英国留学个人陈述PS十大忌讳
在英国留学个人陈述PS的写作过程中,有很多需要做到的细节要点,当然也有很多千万不能提到的忌讳,下面就是就是根据往年申请者的经验总结出来的英国留学个人陈述PS十大忌讳。

和店铺小编一起来看看。

英国留学个人陈述PS十大忌讳:
1、一定不要表现得自命不凡
2、尽量不要以“I”开头展开句子描述
3、尽量不要用无趣的词组和句子做开头和结尾
4、尽量不要引用报纸杂志书籍上的名言警句,感觉像是表示你多么地饱读经书然后故意秀出来一样。

5、一定不要撒谎,要真实诚恳。

6、不要尝试在PS里面故作滑稽开玩笑
7、不要谈与你的申请无关的兴趣爱好
8、不要用生僻词汇
9、不要重复那些在大学申请表格上就有的内容
10、不要提及任何政治立场
英国留学个人陈述PS十大忌讳的目的就是让大家把内容写让英国考生老师看了觉得舒服,不会反感,俗话说的好“一粒老鼠屎坏了一锅粥”,千万不要因为触碰了这些忌讳而让自己英国留学个人陈述PS 失败。

英国留学推荐信常见的典型错误分析

英国留学推荐信常见的典型错误分析

英国留学信常见的典型错误分析英国留学推荐信常见的典型错误分析PS、推荐信在申请留学的过程中至关重要,有时候甚至直接决定了我们能否敲开国外大学的大门。

申请人在准备PS、推荐信的过程中常常会犯一些错误,这里将总结一些比较常见的典型错误,提醒申请人注意。

PS典型错误之一:我们在服务中发现大量申请人在PS中讲故事,最为典型的第一段是:我小时候受了什么启发或者指导,或者来自父亲母亲或者来自老师朋友,于是开始对某某学科感兴趣。

这让我们哭笑不得。

我们在美国所见到的大量PS,不管是美国学生写的还是中国学生为转学写的,95%不超过一页。

美国教授是没有耐心看几十份甚至上百份两页或者三页的故事的,而且一页纸的PS是没地方讲故事的,只能把自己最突出的两点或者三点用数据、事实和细节表达出来。

推荐信典型错误之一:很多人的推荐信都是满满一页纸,更有一些文采飞扬,认为只要多写就能把优点写全的人把推荐信写了两页。

可是,老美的Reference,都是一页,抬头以上部分和署名以下部分已经占到了整个信纸的三分之二,只有剩下的三分之一是文字,三段或者四段而已,短小精悍。

关于写作能力。

我们相信,国内确有极少数高人的写作水平无可挑剔(TWE6.0或者IELTS9.0),但绝大多数人写出来的东西都有这样那样的错误,比如用词,语法等等,有时甚至是极为严重的错误。

我们认为,单就语言能力谈,如果没有在英语国家刻苦磨练几年语言的经历,很难达到地道流畅地表达思想的写作水平。

当年我们的申请文件,曾经请数位国内英语专业硕士为我们把关,现在看看这些文件,仍有相当多的地方不尽人意,既有词汇使用的错误,也有使用了不少连美国人都认为“之乎者也”的使用频率极低的词,看起来很别扭,甚至发生误解,这就是语言应用能力的差距。

写作典型错误这里举两个单词的例子证明准确用词的重要性。

当时我们在申请时,在PS中将未来的职业目标定位为“行业专家”,当时用的是specialist,几位英语硕士并没有提出异议。

[LSE] PS

[LSE] PS

To whom it may concern:Why am I applying for this program?During my study in Accounting and Finance, I’ve became increasingly interested in how a company can be managed and financed properly. The stunning emergence of high profile companies featuring creativity and well-organized structures never fails to attract me. Then I came into realize that I’m feeling especially comfortable about the aspects of strategy and financing in corporate governance. So I’ve decided to take the strategic manager as my destination in career. To fulfil this goal, first I want to gain experiences about the industries and the financial world, and to start off by working in the field of Corporate Finance (Investment Banking/ Management Consulting). However, through my past experiences (3 internships related to corporate finance and participation in CIMA Global Business Challenge) I realized that my knowledge relating to these areas is far away from enough. I also need further years’ of studying and living in the UK to help strengthen my language skills so that I can compete smoothly in a global market. For these reasons, I seek to gain a further academic grounding in Accounting and Finance; further, a m aster’s degree in these areas will grant me a more profound and strengthened academic background than I had before, and will polish up my quantitative skills and ability of turning theory into action.Why am I applying forthe London School of Economics and Political Science?I’ve put my entire focus on LSE and found some factors that push me to apply for a master’s degree from it.1. LSE can give me an access to high-standard education and rigorous academic atmosphere. Its programs will offer me diversified optional courses to choose from. For example, the course “accounting in the global economy” will offer me a point of view about the role of accounting in global financial market, a field in which I want to gain more insights.2. LSE has a world-wide reputation for excellence, and employers value its alumni highly positively. It is one of the G5 institutions and is in the top five social science institutions in the world, according to the QS Global Rankings. Besides, it is located in the heart of London. So it will be more beneficial for me to get in contact with job market and to experience the commercialand cultural surroundings of a world’s leading metropolitan city.3. LSE is made up of a full variety of disciplines around social science; it is attracting think tanks from different areas. LSE will offer me a marvellous chance to hear from well-diversified voices. So I think, through my hard work, the study experience in LSE will allow me to see the business world more comprehensively and grant me strategic agility and great competence in job market.Why you should choose me?My previous performanceI am a primarily numerate reasoner with enhanced verbal ability (In my joint degree of Accounting and Finance in University of Exeter/ Nanjing University of Finance and Economics, I have a mark average of 68.13% (Exeter) and 86.15% (China, GPA: 3.6/5.0)). I’ve chosen to take this program because I want to comprehend the business routines and accounting policies not only in the UK but also in China; therefore, I can take advantages of affluent know-hows and know-whys about the industries in the world’s two leading economies. In 2012, in order to broaden my horizon and to see what Economics is like, I attended the LSE-PKU Summer School in which I studied Global Economy and got a mark of A (70~79%).In 2010, I managed to obtain the “First Prize Scholarship”, which was to honour the student who had scored the best in his or her class, and a Third Prize in the “National English Contest for College Students”, a competition authorized by Chinese Ministry of Education to test students’English ability to the nation’s scale. I also obtained the “Science and Technology Innovation Scholarship”and “Elite Quality Development Scholarship”, which were given to students who had distinguished themselves in university’s society and community life. Besides, I was also selected as “Outstanding University Student”and “Student Cadre”for my outstanding performance during my tenure as the Class Study Secretary.I always pursue the ways by which I can study efficiently and effectively. Although the teaching and evaluation methods of the University of Exeter are hugely different from those of the Nanjing University of Finance and Economics, I still managed to achieve an upper 2:1 degree as a 2nd year student in Exeter last year. Because I’m getting used to study in an English-spoken country and have kept improving my English skills since I came to the University of Exeter (I got anoverall band score of 7.5 with no elements less than 6.5 in my latest IELTS test in 5th of January, 2013), I am expected to get a first honour after my final year’s study.InternshipsI pursued my interest in Corporate Finance with internships from three situations and employers.1. Position: Assistant of Manager of Credit DepartmentDate: 15th July ~ 15th August, 2010Company: Industrial and Commercial Bank of China (ranked as 87th on Fortune Global 500 in 2010)Task: specialising in Financing and Accounting-- c ollecting the companies’ monthly reports, keeping records, and doing ratio calculations and analysis of corporate performance.2. Position: Lobby Assistant ManagerDate: 12th July ~ 30th August, 2011Company: Bank of China (ranked as 132rd on Fortune Global 500 in 2011)Task: specialising in Management and Administration-- maintaining the lobby’s order and giving advice to customers about the financial services we can offer.3. Position: Assistant Accountant in Finance DepartmentDate: 21st August ~ 15th September, 2012Company: China Life Insurance Company Limited (ranked as 129th on Fortune Global 500 in 2012)Task: specialising in Accounting-- bookkeeping, tracing the recordings and type the data into the central database (using SAP).My potential contributions to LSE1. I am primarily a team-worker and am comfortable in motivating others: I jointly founded the Model United Nations society in the Nanjing University of Finance and Economics in 2010, which later on achieved the “University’s Best Society”award in 2011. During my first internship, I worked as an assistant of manager of Credit Department and I had to work with senior colleagues and clients. I found that, in order to show that I was an active but not so aggressive participant, it’s quite important to keep a balance between obeying the rules and being initiative. So I tried to keep an intimate relationship with my superintendent and later, I managed to do so and could give him my opinions and proposals with ease. I am also a moderatelyexpressed extrovert: I joined wind orchestra in high school as the chief oboe player and gave several charity shows with the orchestra in Suzhou, China.2. I can listen to other people in a way that they feel understood, and can accept critical feedback without getting defensive: during my internship as a lobby assistant manager, I was responsible for welcoming and guiding guests, for talking with them about their requests and our services, and for maintaining the lobby’s order. My favourite part was to persuade the clients to use our financial services and I managed to complete the missions allocated to me.3. I can contribute to the class discussion, and provide my fellow classmates with a different perspective of ideas, because I have a bilingual background and abundant Asian Market knowledge. My parents both work for the government, and in the spare time we usually discuss the political and economic issues of China. This tremendously motivated me to get to think about what China was and would be like. Possessing a good presentation skill, I can make myself easily understood. I love to manage things and time properly-- I’m participating in the CIMA Global Business Challenge, for which our team work as management consultants, analyse a business case that simulates the reality, and tackle the problems given.4. I am motivated by helping others-- I joined the Crisis Christmas Volunteering 2012, to help homeless people. This experience really enhanced my development, and I felt extremely good to help the people in need.Studying in LSE is indeed ideal for me and my future. Given the reasons above, I’m here to apply for your master’s degree. I hope that you can offer me a place, and trust that you will see the bigger picture of me.Yours faithfully,Zhiyao, Bian。

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英国本科商科的ps范文(精选3篇)

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英国留学ps范文

英国留学ps范文

英国留学ps范文英国留学PS范文留学英国一直是许多学子的梦想,而个人陈述(Personal Statement,简称PS)作为留学申请的重要部分,对于申请者来说至关重要。

今天我们就来看一篇优秀的英国留学PS范文,希望能够给正在准备留学申请的同学们一些启发和帮助。

首先,这篇PS范文以自我介绍开篇,作者简要介绍了自己的基本情况,包括姓名、年龄、学历背景等。

接下来,作者着重介绍了自己的学术背景和成就。

他提到自己在学校担任过学生会主席,并且在数学竞赛中取得了优异的成绩。

这些都展现了作者的领导能力和学术能力,为他申请英国名校留学提供了有力的支撑。

其次,作者在PS中提到了自己的个人兴趣爱好和特长。

他表示自己热爱音乐,并且在校期间参加了学校乐队的演出。

此外,他还提到了自己对社会公益事业的关注,并且参与了一些志愿者活动。

这些个人兴趣爱好和社会实践经验,不仅展现了作者的多元化发展,也显示了他的社会责任感和团队合作精神。

最后,作者在PS中表达了自己对留学的期望和目标。

他表示希望能够在英国深造,拓宽自己的学术视野,同时也希望能够结识更多的国际友人,了解不同文化背景下的人们。

此外,他还提到了自己未来的职业规划,希望能够成为一名优秀的数学教师,为社会培养更多的人才。

总的来说,这篇PS范文内容丰富,结构清晰,语言流畅。

作者通过介绍自己的学术背景、个人兴趣爱好和留学目标,展现了自己的优势和特点,同时也表达了自己对留学的热情和期望。

这样的PS范文无疑会给招生官留下深刻的印象,为自己的留学申请增添不少分数。

当然,每个人的情况和背景都不同,PS范文也需要因人而异。

但是,通过阅读优秀的PS范文,我们可以了解到留学申请中需要突出的重点,以及如何用恰当的语言和结构来展现自己的优势。

希望这篇PS范文能够给正在准备留学申请的同学们一些启发和帮助,祝愿大家都能顺利实现自己的留学梦想!。

英国ps范文

英国ps范文

英国ps范文As an international student applying to study in the UK, writing a compelling personal statement (PS) is a crucial part of the application process. Your PS is an opportunity to showcase your strengths, experiences, and motivations to the admissions committee, and it can greatly influence the outcome of your application. In this sample PS, we will explore the key elements that make a strong PS and provide you with a guide to crafting your own impactful statement.I am passionate about pursuing a degree in Business Management ata prestigious UK university. My interest in this field stems from my early exposure to my family's business, where I witnessed the challenges and rewards of entrepreneurship. This experience ignited my desire to understand the intricacies of business operations and inspired me to pursue a career in business management.During my high school years, I actively participated in various extracurricular activities that honed my leadership and communication skills. As the president of the student council, I organized successful events and initiatives that fostered a sense ofcommunity within the school. These experiences equipped me with the ability to effectively collaborate with diverse groups of people and to lead with empathy and resilience.Furthermore, my academic journey has been marked by a strong dedication to excellence. I consistently achieved top grades in subjects such as Economics, Mathematics, and Business Studies, demonstrating my aptitude for analytical thinking and problem-solving. Additionally, I sought out opportunities to gain practical experience through internships and part-time jobs, where I developed a deep understanding of the real-world application of business concepts.In addition to my academic and extracurricular pursuits, I am committed to making a positive impact in my community. I volunteered at a local charity organization, where I led fundraising campaigns and contributed to the implementation of sustainable development projects. These experiences allowed me to witness the transformative power of effective management and inspired me to pursue a career that creates meaningful change.Moreover, my international background has instilled in me a globalperspective and an appreciation for cultural diversity. Growing up in a multicultural environment has broadened my worldview and equipped me with the skills to thrive in diverse settings. I am eagerto bring this perspective to the classroom and contribute to the rich cultural tapestry of the university community.In conclusion, my passion for business management, combined with my leadership abilities, academic achievements, community engagement, and global outlook, makes me a strong candidate for the Business Management program at your esteemed university. Iam confident that my diverse experiences and unwavering commitment to excellence will enable me to thrive in the dynamic and challenging academic environment of the UK. Thank you for considering my application, and I am eager to contribute to the vibrant academic community at your university.In this sample PS, we have demonstrated the essential componentsof a strong personal statement for a UK university application. By highlighting the applicant's passion, experiences, and skills, the PS effectively communicates the candidate's suitability for the program. We hope that this example serves as a helpful guide for crafting your own compelling personal statement. Good luck with your application!。

商科专业申请ps范文及说明

商科专业申请ps范文及说明

商科专业申请ps范文及说明编者按:As a child I often accompanied my father to his small coin shop and spent hours watching him work. When I was older, I som... As a child I often accompanied my father to his small coin shop and spent hours watching him work. When I was older, I sometimes set up displays, waited on customers, and even balanced the books. This experience instilled in me the desire to own and manage my own business someday, yet I understand that the business world today is more complex. This complexity requires more education, and with that in mind, I am applying to the Master’s of Business Administration program at Indiana University Bloomington (IUB).通过一个故事开头,讲述自己为何对business感兴趣。

In addi tion to my helping out in my father’s business, I have had numerous other work experiences that further enhance my qualifications for this program. My resume enumerates the various positions I have held at Kerasotes Theaters, Chili’s restaurants, and India na University’s new Student Recreational Sports Center (SRSC), and what all of these positions have in common is an emphasis on serving the public effectively. Further, as an assistant manager at the Showplace 11 and a staff coordinator at the SRSC, I have gained valuable expertise in managing employees and creating work schedules. Both of these positions have allowed me to develop my sales and people skills, which are extremely important in an increasingly service-driven marketplace.讲述自己的相关经历。

英国留学申请必看:PS里有这十句话你就失败了一半!

英国留学申请必看:PS里有这十句话你就失败了一半!

PS在英国留学申请中扮演着重要的角色,如何写出与众不同的PS呢?哪些表达是英国留学申请PS中常见到已经被用烂的表达,以下鑫泉留学为您总结英国留学申请PS中的不良表达希望能够对您提供一定的帮助。

英国大学学院招生服务中心(UCAS)负责人表示:学生在个人陈述中所用的“陈词滥调”会损害其未来的职业发展。

Ucas数据显示:“从小我一直是……”(From a young age I have always been、、、)是去年申请者最常用的开头。

70万学生中有超过1,779名学生在个人陈述中喜欢用“最感兴趣的是”(interested in)或“被…所吸引”(fascinated by)结尾。

我们梳理了个人陈述中被人用烂的句子,各位准备写申请文书的同学可要留心哟!1、“自打记事起,我就……”(For as long as I can remember I have、、、)2、“我申请这个课程是因为……”(I am applying for this course because、、、)3、“我一直对…感兴趣”(I have always been interested in、、、)4、“在我一生当中,我一直很享受…”(Throughout my life, I have always enjoyed、、、)5、“回顾我的教育经历,我……”(Reflecting on my educational experiences、、、)6、“护理专业是一门十分具有挑战性的……”(Nursing is a very challenging and demanding [career/profession/course)7、“在学术上,我一直是……”(Academically, I have always been、、、)8、“我一直想从事…职业”(I have always wanted to pursue a career in、、、)9、“我一直对…充满热情”(I have always been passionate about、、、)。

英国留学申请文书:怎样的PS才能让打动hr的心

英国留学申请文书:怎样的PS才能让打动hr的心

英国留学申请文书:怎样的PS才能让打动hr的心英国留学申请文书:怎样的PS才能让打动hr的心从今年的形式来看,申请英国留学的学生竞争十分激烈,更有学校一夜之间提高了录取要求。

除了成绩和学术背景以外,学校也更加注重学生其他的申请材料,特别是个人陈述将成为重要的评审标准。

优秀的PS可以弥补成绩的不足,提高申请成功率。

那么具体该如何构思和写作呢?建议大家可以参考以下的写作结构:第一段,清楚地陈述写作的目的,简述自己的背景,学术兴趣以及未来的目标。

(这一段也可自由发挥,最好能够新颖别致,引人入胜。

不要开头就是My name is ...)第二段,说明自己学习中取得的进步和成就,例如完成过的项目,实践过程与实践心得等。

1.科研能力,介绍自己的经验、技能、研究范围和研究成果。

2.专业方面,写出对未来的展望、自己的经验、领导能力、合作能力、创新能力等。

最好举实例来体现自己在本领域的能力。

第三段,陈述专业目标。

在本段中可以从以下几个方面着手:1.为什么选择此专业,是哪些方面吸引你?2.你对本专业的理解,和学习本专业的优势3. 出国之后的计划和目标是什么?4.在国外进修后对你的职业规划有何影响?第四段,简述申请此学校的原因和留学英国的原因,如何与你的目标一致,学校的突出特点能够给予你的帮助。

第五段,简述自己为店铺所做的准备,以及略表决心。

致谢。

PS一般的长度为A4纸5号字一页半的长度比较合适。

出色的PS写作应该保持自身的独特性,结构清晰但避免公式化,避免陈述过多的基本信息,基本情况可以在简历中体现。

以上的写作内容仅供参考,为同学们提供一点思路和灵感,例如成长故事、课余活动及爱好等也可略写。

你的PS若能做到别人无法套用,就是成功的。

加油吧!。

英国留学个人陈述PS写作模板参考

英国留学个人陈述PS写作模板参考

英国留学个人陈述PS写作模板参考去英国留学大家必须要确认好自己的资格优势,其中文书材料的准备就是非常重要的部分,大家要认真对待。

和来看看英国留学个人陈述PS写作模板参考。

一、官方网站中有明确的字数要求比如宾夕法尼亚大学的TESOL专业要求750words之内,康奈尔大学的LLM专业要求750 words之内,弗吉尼亚大学的景观园林专业要求600到750 words之内,佛罗里达大学和宾夕法尼亚大学的建筑专业要求500 words之内。

二、官方网站中没有明确说明多少个单词,但是有篇幅长度的要求比如加州大学伯克利分校的MPP专业要求个人陈述的长度在3-5页,12号字体,双倍行距;加州大学洛杉矶分校的LLM专业要求个人陈述的长度在3页以内,12号字体,双倍行距。

三、官方网站中既没有明确的字数要求,也没有篇幅的限制,但是它会在网申当中给个人陈述留有一个文本框,有对于字符数的限制,对于超过规定的字符数的字符不能输入我们这里说的字符数指的是计空格的。

比如说佛罗里达大学的TESOL专业SP要求5000 字符之内,纽约州立大学纽波兹分校的珠宝设计专业SP要求4000 字符之内。

面对如此多的要求,你是不是在想,双倍行距2页是多少字呢,5000字符又是多少字呢?每个学校的字数要求各不相同,有的甚至还没有要求,那到底要写多少才合适呢?一般情况下,我们前期都会以800-1000字左右的长度来构思我们的SP,后期如果碰到有特殊要求的学校,再进行相应的调整。

但如果能提前了解自己想申请的学校对于个人陈述的字数要求,然后按照要求确定内容进行写作,那当然是最好的。

Personal StatementMy great curiosity about camera lens is rooted in a televisioninterview when I was still a young girl. Hunan Television Station held a talent show called Super Girl Voice in 2004. I was a student in high school at that time, and I found the high audience rating brought huge viewers and the advertisers. It also made mass media to be a hot industry. I thought that was a potential job which would provide opportunities;prospects and material conditions for me to take off. Therefore I determined to choose mass communication to be my major.I am very proud to study in Communication University of China Nanjing College, which is the tiptop communication and media institution of higher education in China. During my undergraduate study, I find myself has been strongly attached to this specific territory. Achieving 82 of the GPA proved that I am an excellent student in my class. I learned basic methodology and theories of Broadcasting and TV program Editor and mass communication. There is no doubt that practice makes perfect. For that reason I have applied for my professional internship as a TV editor in Yueyang Broadcasting & Television Co. Ltd, which is the largest and most authoritative media company in Yueyang. During that intern work I applied what I acknowledged at school to actual process of producing television program,which includes programme scheming,transcribe programme,editing and broadcasting.Writing scripts and shooting films with my classmates is also my favourite. During the creation process, we exchanged our ideas and discussed about the problems of scripts, performing and postproduction is benefit from my strong sense of team work. Being a member of the university’s volleyball team instill the idea of ‘team work’ deep inside me. That is the very spirit which made my short film ‘timeline’, a cooperated film work,won the 3rd rate prize of ‘the 5th International Film Work Selection Practice’. No pain no gain!Emerging technologies is rapidly changing the media map. Internet, wireless communications and digital video technology are creating a new communications environment. Our world is becoming a earth village gradually which metioned by Canadian professor Marshall McLuhan first time in his in 1967. With the recent tendency of globalization, I wish to pursue my study in media communication. To find out how the methods and perspectives of media communication affect the ultimate communication effects and what global media can do to serve their social responsibility better under a globalization circumstances.The reason why I choose UK is because I am crazy about English TV drama Like ,,and so on. I am also enthusiastic about football very much and I want to watch the FA Premier League. I choose UK because UK is the media center of European.I can learn a lot of knowledge which I cannot acquire in China and broaden my horizon at the same time. There is an old saying in China: Reading over ten thousands of books is not as good as walking over ten thousands of miles. I will be influenced by many different cultures in UK.At present, my career ideal is clear in my mind. In order to combine my own career objective with social development and accommodate a wide variety of interdisciplinary knowledge, I will comprehensively study the interactive relationship between mass media and human civilization. That’s the objective law and trends. I pick up this programme with the most advanced research facilities and world-class faculty,to upgrade my knowledge of scientific research methods. And even when I typemy Statement of Purpose word by word, I became even more determined with my choice. It’s quite convincible that my solid technical background will help me to understand more clearly the internal operation of the media communication. My adequate internship experiences will prepare me to be easily integrated into the media market as well. Equally,I’m certain that with your wonderful guidance I will play a better part in contribution to China’s media industry and add luster to my career.In the past three years,though sometimes I suffered setbacks,felt confused or dissatisfied with the reality like a rebellious youth,I have never stopped the pursuit of my interests and all-round development of myself. Modern undergraduate education focuses on the expansion of students’ major knowledge. As the world changing rapidly, only the all-rounders can best adapt to the global society. In this active atmosphere around our campus,I definitely seize the opportunities to cultivate the makings of being a media people.Applicant:Date:。

英国留学商科类PS经典范文.doc

英国留学商科类PS经典范文.doc

英国留学商科类PS经典范文Accounting personal statement(监审留学专业留学文书写作官方QQ:970865017)‘Accounting is like Art’.You have to analyse every aspect before*** a just decision.A teacher of mine once told me that if you were good at art,you would be good at accounts.It was hard to find his logic at first,but having spent two years doing GCSE Art and a further two on Accounts A Level,it all began to make sense.You need logic;everything has a set order and method.Each piece is placed carefully and has a high significance amongst its environment.You need analytical skills.Take apart every piece of information and use it to make your own decisions.Having excelled in both these exams,I can proudly say that I possessthe skills that will lead me to university.I have developed an interest in studying accounts or and would therefore like to continue doing so at university.The course that I would like to do at university is Business Accounts or Accounts and Finance.I feel that the two subjects combine well with one another and on many occasions I have founds that my knowledge of one has helped me with the other.Studying Maths and Business has also provided me with logic and a greater understanding of various concepts and methods.I have become more flexible in identifying what concepts need to be used and when,thus,helping me achieve the greatest results possible.I have the ability to pick up skills and knowledge quickly and am independent enough to conduct my own study and research.On many occasions at college I have taught myself various chapters in maths in order to remain ahead of the class.My main ambition for the future is to become an Accountant Executive or a Financial Advisor.I am hoping university will provide me with an understanding of the business world as well as offering me a wide range of choices and connections after my course.However,I have also helped to teach mathematics.I have taken part in a project at school where we taught younger pupils the basics of maths.I also helped to tutor many of my classmates in preparation for exams,which they foundhelpful.I enjoyed teaching and so this will be my third choice of career.Outside of studying,one of my many passions is Art.I enjoy visiting art galleries and studying art in depth.My favourite type of art is symbolism and surrealism and my favourite artists are Dali and Escher as they both deal with‘double possibilities’.Recently,however,I have developed a new interest in contemporary art,of which I have done a number of paintings on canvas on commission for friends and family who have all been pleased with my work.Most of my spare time on the weekend is taken up by my part time job as a sales associate at Skechers USA,Bullring,Birmingham.I have been working at Skechers since the opening of the store in September 2003and am one of only two of the original members of staff left.This is an advantage for me as I can offer the highest level of customer service and have a good knowledge of the overall running of the store,which makes me committed,reliable and adaptable as I have found that I need to adjust myself to the many changes that have occurred over the year. My job has also taught me to be more tolerable and patient with others.I have thoroughly enjoyed college and believe that university is the next step for me.College and my part time job have changed me as a person.They have given me a greater sense of independence and success.I feel that college has really made me grow and has introduced me to a wider range of people.I have opened up to people more and am now a better team player as I have learnt to listen to others and take in their opinions.I have become accepting to other cultures and beliefs and feel that I am much more open-minded.I hope that you have analysed this piece carefully enough to offer mea place at your university,and trust that you have yet to see the bigger picture of me.。

英国留学申请文书写作PS的五项禁忌 及十项写作建议

英国留学申请文书写作PS的五项禁忌 及十项写作建议

英国留学申请文书写作PS的五项禁忌及十项写作建议文书写作是申请英国留学的同学所必备的材料,包含PS、CV等等,在这些材料写作准备过程中,要注意一些写作禁忌不要犯,以及参考写作建议来指导。

五项禁忌1.避免在推荐信中提到申请者的外貌避免在推荐信中描述任何有关申请者的身体特征。

如果英国的读者读到说申请者是一个“年轻漂亮的女孩”,或者是一个“相貌英俊,身体强壮的男孩”时,他们会感到很不舒服。

(学校那边也是不允许招生办人员根据长相来评估一个学生的。

)2.避免运用一些不恰当的理由在说明某所大学为何对你有吸引力时,避免运用一些不恰当的理由。

你必须仔细浏览学校官方网站,以便发现一些具体的项目、活动、课程,以及著名的教授,诸如此类的,然后你就可以在短文中指出这就是你想要去XX大学的原因。

5.不要试图费力地运用一些特别长的句子或者特别大的词汇如果英语是你的第二语言,那么不要试图费力地运用一些特别长的句子或者特别大的词汇。

(不要用“internationalization”,用“international”就好了。

另外,如果你可以用“city”,为什么要用“metropolis”呢?记住,读者并不希望被你的词汇打动,而是被你的故事所打动。

4.不要只在短文中陈述学校多么好不要只在短文中陈述学校多么好。

“我想要申请著名的XX大学,因为它是英国一所顶尖的大学,在国际上都享有盛誉。

”这样说的话会显得不真诚。

5.推荐信中不要含有负面信息推荐信中不要包含一些负面信息。

只需描述他们的成功,而非那些失败。

十项建议1.慎用英式英语中一些含有否定意义的词汇慎用英式英语中一些含有否定意义的词汇。

在英国,我们也不会用“cripple”或者是“retarded”之类的词,取而代之的是“handicapped”(disabled更好)。

2.变换句子的长短变换句子的长短。

如果你已经连续用了几个长句,那么插入一个短句能给读者一个停顿的时间。

句式多样化能够使你的短文更容易懂,因而也更容易让人记住。

英国——营销和战略理学专业PS

英国——营销和战略理学专业PS

申请英国大学营销和战略理学硕士PS赏析Personal StatementI love shopping; but unlike most shop-goers, I find my keenest interest in the process of observing. I love to observe the way products are displayed in stores, and the way they are picked up, examined, and finally put back or purchased by consumers. I always wonder how these products communicate to consumers, and why certain products attract certain consumers in certain ways. It was not until I went to college that I approached the core of all my previous questions: the enterprises behind these products are making every endeavour to build a bridge between their products and customers, and the bridge is constructed with nothing else but the art of Marketing.After I was admitted into Beijing Normal University, one of the top 20 universities in China, I began a step-by-step pursuit of my chosen field: the very essence of the art of marketing. In addition to my first major, English Language, I studied International Economics and Trade as my second major, in order to first get an overall understanding of economics and business. With a tough schedule for both majors, I did my best both to learn well in class and to accumulate related knowledge after class. Coursesincluding Macroeconomics, Microeconomics, Accounting, Finance and Marketing have equipped me with theoretical knowledge necessary for further study. Discussions and debates carried out frequently in class have provided me with problem-solving skills that later proved to be of immense use in a teamwork environment.Working as an intern in the world-renowned advertising agency Ogilvy&Mather offered me the first glimpse into the real business world. I obtained this opportunity during my fourth year at university and I devoted myself to the work wholeheartedly. My work was to support the daily work of theentire team I was in, which enabled me to get involved in all the work and to perceive business from different perspectives. By collecting and analysing competitors’ advertisements over an entire year, I obtained a deeper understanding of advertising industry. Furthermore, by benchmarking the performance of our clients against their competitors, we could correctly position their products in the market. Finally, the result of continuous market analysis revealed to me the ultimate power that directs advertising: the strategies of marketing. Together with what I learned from my colleagues and daily work, I have certainly acquired an in-depth understanding of marketing from our clients’ point of view. Our clients include such international corporations as Kimberly-Clark, Kraft, Johnson&Johnson, and DHL, and they have many deep insights into today’s competitive market.What impressed me most in Ogilvy&Mather was the Kotex workshop with marketing managers from Kimberly-Clark. In this workshop, our clients and we worked together on the market segmentation, targeting and positioning for Kotex re-launch in Mainland China. During this workshop, I not only learned a lot about marketing from others, but also presented to clients my own ideas, both as an advertising agent and as a consumer. These precious experiences inOgilvy&Mather have opened to me the profound and fascinating world of marketing, and have increased my interest in marketing to an even higher degree.My undergraduate first major, English Language, has established a solid foundation for my further studies. The four years of undergraduate study have taught me much more than the rudiments of a language. I have learned the skill of using language, of understanding, of expressing, and of communicating. These are precisely the skills marketing requires.Moreover, the basis of understanding language is understanding culture, while in the field of marketing, culture plays a crucial role in the analysis of consumer behaviour, new product introduction as well as brand management. During my undergraduateyears, I constantly ranked among top 3 out of 97 students, and achieved an average score of 90.4%. I believe that my English proficiency, business knowledge and internship experience will combine to offer me better insights into the marketing world.My education and experience to date have provided the foundations for my chosen career in Marketing. As a girl with a constant thirst for fresh knowledge and new challenge, I feel I would benefit a lot from the opportunity to study at a higher level. After my MSc study, I plan to come back to China with the advanced knowledge and skills I have acquired in UK, and contribute as much as I can to the development of marketing in my motherland.Warwick Business School, with its international reputation and its unique blending of marketing and strategy, is the ideal place for me to pursue my MSc degree in Marketing &Strategy. I sincerely hope that Warwick can give me this precious opportunity and thus lead me further into the world of marketing. If I am fortunate enough to be selected, I will try my best to achieve perfection in every aspect of MSc study, and contribute to the future of Warwick with all my effort.。

PS写好了就可以拿offer?!

PS写好了就可以拿offer?!

PS写好了就可以拿offer?!英国院校录取研究生比较关心的问题包括:学生的学校背景、是否为国内重点大学、排名情况如何;专业背景、本科专业与硕士专业的相关度;是否有相关的工作经验或实习经验;语言成绩(英国以雅思考试为主);申请文书中是否体现了对于申请院校和专业的理解,学习目标和职业规划是否清晰;是否参加过相应的学术项目、学术竞赛、课外活动;是否有所特长等。

其中,学校个人陈述部分非常看重,除此之外学生还要注重其他方面能力的提升。

今天陈老师纯雷锋式的跟小伙伴们分享下部门学校针对PS部分的特殊要求:从 2016 年 7 月 1 日起,现有学生签证持有人的家人,如果目前不持有学生签证, 但以后想到澳大利亚与家人一起,则需申请子类 500 签证。

华威大学(University of Warwick WMG)学院所有专业Ps应包含内容:学术:为什么想要学习硕士课程;为什么要选择该课程(重要),不能只说对它感兴趣;你之前的学校和工作经历跟这个课程是怎么相关的;你都养成了哪些学术技能,这些技能如何对你学习所选专业有用?个人:你能提供哪些方面的个人能力,同样也需要解释这些技能如何对你在WMG的学习有帮助;你将来的职业目标是什么?总结下来,我觉得,口语其实并不难,只要你尽力去说,不管说什么,不要停顿,能和考官交流,就不会差。

不用绞尽脑汁去想多么好的词汇,平时的普通单词就足够了,但是一定要注意时态千万不能错,不然就是语法错误是不能拿高分的。

Ps应该怎么写:指出你要学习的课程,同时说明你的技能和兴趣如何跟你想申请的课程相关。

所举的事例都要和所申请的课程相关,不用说在哪里工作过两个月,而要说在工作中你都做了些什么使你对想要申请的专业感兴趣。

注意哦,华威WMG的PS要求字数不能超过500哦隋唐时期,中国考试制度发生根本性的改革,将此前的“察举制”改为“科举制”,分科考试,分科举人,这本身就有点针对不同人才进行不同的考试录取的味道。

英国——商务管理专业PS

英国——商务管理专业PS

英国留学商务管理个人陈述范文My interest in economics, business, finance and banking has been long standing as I am interested in how important decisions within these fields have everyday affects. I feel I have a sound and enthusiastic response to this aspect. I am currently studying Economics at 'A' level, in which I have learnt in theory and through demand and supply analysis, how the economy works. This has encouraged me to use these theories in practical application. Sociology has sharpened my ability to analyse information in depth, as well as my interpersonal skills, both of which are vital for management. Sociology has also helped me appreciate people's differing needs, which I see as an important feature of business. The content of the courses I have studied at 'A' level such as Mathematics, I feel, complement my choice of degree As part of a Work Experience programme, I have been fortunate to have the opportunity of shadowing the Finance Director of a growing fashion company and was given a virtual tour on the financial aspects of the company. I attended seminars and Board meetings and gained insight into decision making. I also helped to organise an exhibition at Earl's Court. I also attended a placement at the Head Office of Norwood Ravenswood, a largeCharitable Trust. My time had been divided between various departments from Fund Raising to FinanceActive participation in extra-curricular activities has taken up further time.I helped to organise and promote various events at some of London's most regarded venues, which involved raising capital through investment and planning advertisement strategies. Through this I was able to acquaint with a range of different people. I find great satisfaction in helping others that has led me to contribute to many charity events, as well as working at The Cancer Research Campaign charity shop on a voluntary basisI have also travelled to many countries, including America, India and Kenya, which has broadened my knowledge and awareness of other cultures.I have a strong passion for music. Furthermore, the presentation of a radio show gave me a chance to interact with the whole of London, which enhanced my communication skills. In my spare time I enjoy keeping fit and much of my spare time is spent at the gym. I also enjoy playing football and play on a regular basis for a 5-a-side team.。

英国留学新闻专业PS范文

英国留学新闻专业PS范文

英国留学新闻专业PS范文/ueditor/201709/28/0d784619f09cf3d5be1c0adc17e87cb 6.jpg" title="ihdask亲爱的.jpg" alt="ihdask亲爱的.jpg" width="400" vspace="0" height="250" border="0"/> 英国留学新闻专业个人陈述(PS)范文Journalism personal statementThe media s the most powerful entity on earth. An interesting quote from Malcolm X, who also claimed, Without education, you re not going anywhere in this world. I wish to combine these two passions and follow my ambition to become a journalist by continuing my studies into Higher Education. It is well known that power attracts and I, like many others, have become enchanted by the power of the written and spoken word. This fascination has created a deep interest in writing, and Journalism provides the perfect outlet to develop my skills.Ive heard enough about the media industry to realise that experience is everything, and as Sixth Form Reporter on the College committee, I gain regular experience of journalistic writing and meeting deadlines. I have written for the officialcollege Network, which is sent home to parents, and the Student Newspaper.When selecting my A Level subjects, I seemed drawn to essay based courses. I enjoy writing and the courses undoubtedly helped my writing skills. However, I was required to make the opening of a film in Media, which was an experience to say the least! It increased my interest in Broadcast Journalism. Until that moment, I only had eyes for Print. Creative writing has always been one of my favourite aspects of English, and the coursework gave me the chance to write in whichever style I chose, one piece was a newspaper feature on Chelsea Football Club. I have always been interested in Sports Writing and Im considering specialising in it at a later date. I have chosen to continue four of my five AS Levels onto A2, even though it was not necessary. I have always found Psychology quite challenging as it involves deep levels of critical analysis, so I decided to carry on as I find it extremely intriguing. The different theories as to why humans do the things they do, attract me because I am interested in how people act, though one could hardly call me an anthropologist! My main priorities are English, Media and Sociology as I feel they will aid me most in my ambition,although I still find Psychology a fascinating subject.I have often said that nothing is impossible, yet asking me to name my favourite book is asking too much. Some much-loved literature includes The Hobbit, Gone With The Wind, and Jane Eyre. In my opinion a good novel should evoke a variety of emotions from beginning to end. Music may not be my first love, but it is definitely one of my passions; I have high passes in grade 3 flute, singing, and grade 5 piano. Like my literary tastes, my choice of music is eclectic; I like anything from hip-hop to classical, soul to rock, and past to present. I also love Black history, musicals, and icons of film and music, such as Audrey Hepburn, John Lennon, and Sinatra. Lennon once said, We all want to change the world, I empathise with this view and seek to achieve it using my chosen profession and the power of the media.。

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英国商学院PS写作全解析附2015华威拒信分析近些年去英国读商科的中国学生越来越多,这是因为在英国,多数学生在高中就开始接触商科课程,这与各国对英国商科学历的高承认度、商科课程的高趣味性以及商科毕业生的就业优势是分不开的。

英国留学的顶尖商学院推荐:伦敦商学院华威大学巴斯大学牛津、剑桥大学商学院伦敦政治经济学院兰卡斯特大学管理学院曼彻斯特商学院诺丁汉大学雷丁大学对于申请这些顶尖商科学校的学生来说,语言成绩,专业成绩什么的固然重要,但是还有一个非常重要的方面会直接影响你能否被学校录取委员会录取,那就是文书的撰写,也就是我们说的personalstatement。

首先以一封2015年华威大学的拒信给大家分析下英国商学院关于PS的撰写有什么忌讳:如上图,是华威大学的一封拒信。

正文翻译如下:“基于以上专业(Degree of Master of Scienceine-businessmanagement)的分析,我们认真看了您的申请信息。

但是遗憾的,恐怕我们不能给您这个Offer.招生办公室的老师是基于我们的申请者是从多大程度上满足这个课程的入学要求的。

另外,对于这个专业,今年的竞争非常激烈,入选者都很优秀。

我们做出这个决定也是很艰难的。

然而对于您的申请,我们认为你并没有提供到一个令我们满意的个人陈述。

(注意:我们现在的审核政策,不能够让您再提供一次修改过的PS,很抱歉。

)谢谢您的支持。

”除了整个Offer信的客套话,我们可以看出学校已经明确指出了该学生的PS写的质量太差了。

所以,很有可能是套用了模板或者就是毫无灵魂的大词长句。

Peter Corvi,华威大学商学院副院长有提到,‘我们需要数学水平好的人才’。

他还谈到,批判性并引人深思的写作技巧对于商科学生一样很重要。

个人陈述中,你应该谈到你本科所学到的,偏会计或金融的专业一定会涉及数学,所以千万不要忘记强调你通过这门学科学到的知识技能。

华威大学想要看到学生自己立论然后写得有理有据,但是很多条件很好的申请者都缺乏这一技巧。

所以,你的个人陈述需要流畅并且有理有据。

Corvi说每年合格的申请者都会超过他们学院给出的名额。

有一个方法可以让你从众多申请者中脱颖而出,那就是课外活动,但是审核者不会希望看到表面的描述而无实例。

确保你提及的课外活动是相关的,为什么相关,举点实例你到底做了什么,为什么你认为你适合这个课程。

不要忽视参加课外活动的重要性,但是也要讲你为什么要参加这项活动。

他们会想知道原因以及你从中所得。

那么怎么样的PersonalStatement才是英国大学认为真正好的呢?下面小编整理了一下英国大学申请时写好文书的5条必备原则:Top 1: 一个真正属于你自己的故事。

每个人都是不一样的。

所以,一个属于你自己的故事就可以是一个你的PS。

由一个故事,写一下发生这个故事的感受,洞察力,通过这些就可以很好的展示你的内驱力和价值观,再升华到自己想要申请的这个学科。

一个吸引人眼球的好故事,就是一个好的PS。

Top 2:分享自己的看法和观点。

听过最残酷的一句话是‘你冷场只是因为你知识面不够’。

是的,在准备写PS之前,广泛的阅读,平时的积累是很重要的。

这样才可以在触及任何一个话题的时候,你才可以‘有话说’。

这样任何的一个点,加上你建立在广泛阅读的基础上,你都可以有自己的一个批判性观点。

这样丰富的PS,审核老师自然会喜欢你的PS啦。

Top 3:把握学科周边的新闻事实。

关注你将要学习的新闻事实可以让你对自己想要学习的学有更深刻的解读。

这样你的PS 也必然是一个术业有专攻的有深度的有前瞻性的文书了。

Top 4:展现你的个人魅力,用自己的语言说话。

什么是你的兴趣爱好呢。

你在什么方便是很擅长的呢。

你有做过只有少数人做过的事情么?这些都能够让你显得不同。

比如:独立一个人去旅行;读一本很冷门的书。

这些就是你的个人魅力。

最后,所谓‘文如其人’,用自己的语言说话,不要故意使用大词长句,这会让文章显得生硬,也会让招生官怀疑这是照抄模板的结果,而不是发自内心自己的表达。

很多机构会展示文书样本时强调用词的讲究,文法的严谨或结构的完整等等。

殊不知真正高水平的文书总是在做减法,用词精炼拒绝冗长,少用复合句,字字珠玑,引经据典,用老外认可的方式来表达,这才是有竞争力的文书。

Top 5: 让你申请的院校看出你的真爱。

留学申请正如相亲,短短几分钟的寒暄如何让对方感到你的真爱,是一个好的留学文书必须达到的条件。

因此文书中必须有相当篇幅介绍下自己选择这所大学的原因,切忌写你们排名高,诺贝尔奖得的多等等每个学生都会写的套话,每天关注学校网站,了解学校新闻,科研动态甚至文体活动等等,言之有物的说出你真爱的理由,自然会打动校方。

下面是华威大学官网上对于PS写作的要求和建议,比较中肯:Personal StatementYour Personal Statement is a vital part of your MSc application to WMG. Notonly do we read it carefully, we also think about what you say and how you sayit. It helps us to decide if you will succeed and be happy at WMG.Your Personal Statement gives us an opportunity to find out more about you.Therefore, you should think of the Personal Statement as an opportunity to tellus about yourself and to highlight your strengths.It is absolutely critical that you explain to us why you have applied foryour chosen course; if you fail to do so your application will be rejected, evenif you meet our other admission criteria.Remember that writing a personal statement takes time and effort – you should jot down a few points on a piece of paper before starting to write it in full.General statements such as “I want a better job” or “I enjoy studying” are not sufficient and will count against you.What you should sayHere are the themes that you should consider when writing your personal statement. This list is not complete, but they are likely to form the basis of your statement.AcademicWhy you want to undertake postgraduate study.Your reasons for choosing the specific course. This is vital. Saying youare interested in “business” or “management” is not sufficient.How your first degree and/or work experience is relevant to the course.What academic skills you have developed and how they relate to the MSc course you have chosen.Personal AttributesWhat personal skills can you offer? Again, you must explain how theseskills are relevant for your study at WMGYour future career goals.How you should say itAddress the subject of the course. WMG do not offer general “management” or“business” courses, so be specific: how are your skills and interests related toLogistics, Project Management, e-Business etc?Relate the things you say about yourself to the course applied for. Don’t just say “I worked for two months at Company X”; explain its relevance: “At Company X I was involved in troubleshooting project overruns on a new product design. This made it clear to me how important project management and risk management is”.Grammar, Punctuation, and SpellingIt is important to get these right. Incorrect grammar, spelling orpunctuation can make it difficult for us to read and understand what you are trying to say. For a start, you should use the grammar and spell checker provided in your word processor, but don’t rely on these alone. Print your statement and read it with a pen in hand. Even better, get someone else to check it for you.StyleAim for 500 words. It may seem like a lot, but it will fill up quickly. Be concise and straight-forward in your writing. Keep your sentences short and get to the point. Most of the poor statements we see are too long, not tooshort.PresentationUse full sentences, starting with a capital letter and finishing with afull-stop.Do not use slang or informal language.Use paragraphs – your statement should read like any other piece of written work, that is, it should have an introduction (the beginning), body (the middle), and conclusion (the end).Quick TipsDon’t use your statement to tell us what we already know. For example details of your undergraduate degree will be evident from your transcripts.A personal statement is not a CV, so avoid just listing everything you have ever done.Don?t submit the same generic statement for many different courses. You must tailor the statement for each specific course.You can include information about your hobbies / voluntary work etc, butyou must explain how these relate to the course you have applied for.Don?t tell us about other people (e.g. your parents), they aren’t the ones who will be studying at WMG.Avoid vague statements such as “I have always wanted to go to your University because I have a passion for study”.Do not, under any circumstances, copy a personal statement from anothersource. In particular do not use “effective personal statement” type websites orforums.。

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