官方指南雅思范文(完整大作文附赠部分解析)

Test 1

Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

1.For most people, when they get their first job they have little idea whether or not they will remain in the same organisation throughout their working life.

2. If they decide to change, they need to consider how this will impact on their career overall.

注意开头段写法，说明背景句+观点的方式已经被雅思官方认可，而且一般就两句话。

但是这两句话作者并不是随意的简单同意替换，句型上来说一定要丰富。比如作者用了一个用了一个时间状语从句+一个条件状语从句。

平时在行文练习中，一定要注意开头段的长句子输出，如果大家无法用一个句子说清楚背景，可以用两个句子，介绍背景加题目观点。

另外一个句子来表达自己观点。

从现在官方范文来看，几乎所有开头段都表达了作者的观点。

3. People who stay with the same organisation will have the advantage of a thoroughly understanding how it works and also becoming familiar with the staff and processes.

4. If they work hard, their promotion prospects are good and there is likely to be greater job security with a promise of a good pension when they retire.

5. Employers value loyalty and may offer additional incentives to long-term employees, including bonuses and reward schemes.

第3句，中心句，表达长期从事一份工作的主要好处

第4句，中心句的拓展，解释在长期工作的情况下，如果工作努力，又会得到什么好处

第5句，解释雇主对忠心员工提供的好处, including的用法一定要学会别动不动就such as

很多同学一遇到稍微抽象的问题，就不知道该怎么拓展了。动不动就for example了，其实这是下策。本段就为大家做了一个如何的拓展示例：从多角度看问题——横向、纵向、时间维度、地域维度、主观客观等等

这样去思考拓展，就很明显了：

第一句的好处其实是主观好处，针对本人的；第二句的好处是时间维度的；第三句的好处是客观，是从雇主提供的。以此类推，就不愁没有写的。

6. However, one of the drawbacks of staying with the same organisations is that the person may get stuck doing the same job year after year.

7. In some cases, this can lead to boredom and disillusionment.

8. Moving from one organisation to another can be a strategic decision in order to have variety and acquire a range of skills and experience.

9. A friend of my father started out as a sociology teacher, he then joined the Social Services and is currently managing a care home in Western Australia. 10. This has made him incredibly knowledgeable in a range of related fields and, in my view, has provided him with a much more interesting working life.

第6句，并不能算直接中心句，不太建议同学采用这种写法，容易让考官误认为此段要写长期待的坏处了。其实本句准确来说算一个让步句，建议放到上面一段去。

第7句，真正的中心句，换工作的好处

第8句，举例，你以为她真的仅仅是在举例么？其实是在秀语法！什么语法，时态！对一个句子中将两次过去和现在进行全用上个了，这样的举例你们会写么？是不是从来没有想

过呢，其实纵观整个考官范文，时态的重要性一直被我们忽视了，考官特别注意时态。有了准确的时态，例子一下鲜活了，代入感随之产生，我们也能明白，有这么一个朋友老爹，过去现在的变化，以及因此或得的好处。

第9句，举例之后的总结。很多人在举例之后就嘎然而止，其实不太好。应该学习作者，有简单的评论和总结。否则无法使举例显得扣题，容易丢分。另外，注意in my view 的位置，是不是和大家不一样呢。偶尔插入一下，就让考官更爽嘛！

11. There are benefits to working for one organisation, I feel that it is also valuable for an employee to be able to offer a wide range of experience having worked for different companies. 12. As long as it is planned carefully, I feel that change is good and will ultimately benefit the employee and the employer.

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两句话表达观点加结尾

第11句，注意分词的用法，这是本句亮点。很多同学写到这里就只能and 或者which，俗不俗啊！另外注意to 是介词，所以用working（区别不定式）

第12句，很常用的句式，有模板嫌疑，但是大家一定要背会，几乎都是万能的。只要xxx，就能ooo。其实若用虚拟语气结尾也让老师知道你的语法丰富度。

总结：

整篇文章用词简单明了，结构丰富，衔接紧密，内容扣题，真正体现了雅思官方对于当前作文考试的各个要求。其实通过分析，文章总共12句话，句句精彩，大家在平时的练习中一定要多注意这种长句子+短句子结合，并且准确描述意图的风格。如果你没有能力写出一个句子超过25个单词，那么很难让考官相信你的作文程度有7分的。

当然，本文也有一定的瑕疵，比如最后一段写作者观点，稍微不够丰富，有草草收场之嫌。另外organisation用得太过于频繁，可适当替换。

整体分数：7.5-8

扣题：7.5

衔接：8

语法：8

词汇：7.5

后面的文章同学们可以尝试将每个句子按照中心句，解释，举例，对比等进行分析，同时总结常用的词伙以及句子表达方式。通过观察作者的句子之前的关系来体会如何扣题和衔接；通过词伙和句子结构来学习地道表达和语法。不断积累提升作文的硬实力。