英语作文(改错)

曾经生活过的校园你是否记得，曾经谈笑的湖边你是否还记得，曾经在身边陪伴你的朋友是否还记得？我们每个人都曾经拥有过一段令人难忘的大学时光。

如今已经毕业一年了，曾经的点点滴滴记忆犹新。

Do you still remember the campus once we lived; can you recall the lake where we laughed together; forthemore, do you have in rememberance the special friend who had accompany with you no matter where you went. Each of us have an unforgettable college time. So far, we have graduated from the university for one year, but every bit of the mesningful memory are still fresh .
是否记得：指现在，用现在时；recall:忆起，表动作，用can引导比较好；lake是地点，所以用where引导；remind的用法应该是sth remind sb，而不是sb remind sth; university指大学，college指学院；
那年，我们背着满满的行李来到了这个陌生的地方，这就是我们理想的大学。

军训的生活是艰苦的，每天的训练都令人汗流浃背。

那时，我认识了你，我亲爱的朋友，从此军训变得不再枯燥。

Four years ago, we, carrying filled luggage, came to that strange place, which was our ideal university. Military life was hard and difficult, and we were exhausted, with sweat streaming down our back after everyday’s training. At that time, I met you, my dear friend. Since that, the military training became no longer boring.
如果用carry，句子就应该是we carry filled luggage and came to that strange place，一定要有连词；否则就用独立句型表伴随，参照改好的句子；
每天上课、吃饭、休息都有你的陪伴。

你就像我生活中不可缺少的一部分。

因为我得贪睡，经常使你跟我一起迟到，但是，每次你都笑着跟我说没关系。

有一次我生病了，你比我还着急，大晚上的跑到医务室帮我买药。

那次病的比较严重，那么瘦弱的你竟然背起我就往医务室走。

We went to class and had meal together, inseparable like a person and his shadow. You were an indispensable part of my life. Because I was somnolent, we were often late for class. However, you never blamed me and smiled to me:“that’s all right; don’t put it in mind”. Once I got stomachache, and ,you were worried more seriously than me. And you went to clinic to buy medicine for me. Latter on, as my stomache became more severe, you carried me on your thin shoulders, and walked to the clinic fast.
Went to school一般表示从家里到学校；因为大学里都是住在校园里，所以表示“去上课”最好用wento to class;
那次病的比较严重，用serious可以，但是与前面重复，所以给你改了个severe;
从没见过你这么强悍有力的样子。

医生诊断完你送了口气，瘫坐在沙发上，一点力气都没有了，只是默默的看着我，冲我微笑。

躺在病床上看你那么累的样子心生感激，庆幸自己有你这个好朋友。

I was amazed that I had never seen you as powerful as that before. You took a deeply breath when the doctor diagnosed me. You smiled and looked at me quietly , after you slumped on the sofa weakly. At that moment, I was grateful that I could have such a kind friend as you.
Amazing表事物，amazed指人；
Grateful是形容词，所以要加系动词；
Such as是固定搭配
大二那年掀起一阵兼职风，我也迫切的想找一个兼职，有一个招聘家教的工作待遇非常高，但是让先交押金。

我拿不定主意，把详细内容告诉你，你觉得不靠谱，劝我不要去做。

我固执的与你辩驳，那是我们第一次吵架。

后来，我终于被骗了，你又回到我身边安慰我，我抱着你大哭了一场。

In the year of sophomore, as most of the students got a part-time job, I wanted to find a job urgently. I saw a recruitment of tutor with a very great treatment, and the only condition was to pay the deposit first. I can’t make the idea, and I told you the details. But you didn’t agree with me and persuaded me not to do the job. That was the first time we quarreled with each other. Finally. I was deceived, and you came back to me and gave me an embrace. Then I could not help crying.
第一句话有一种前后和伴随的语气，所以用As比较好；
毕业那天，我紧紧地牵着你的手，不舍得与你分离。

你说，我是你最好的朋友，其实你也是我最好的朋友。

看着你渐行渐远的背影，眼泪不住的流下。

那是我们曾经一起生活的校园，因为有你，所以倍加怀念。

The day when we had the graduation, I held your hand firmly. Both of us were not willing to separate. You said that I was your best friend. In fact, you are my best friend too. Warching your back going farther and farther, I couldn’t hold to tears. That was the campus we lived together. I cherished it so much just because of you.
See表结果，“看见”，watch表状态，“看，看着“
Cherish后面要有宾语。