2013年宜宾市中考英语优秀作文五篇赏析

2013年宜宾市中考英语优秀作文

第三节：写作（共1题，计12分）

最近媒体对“中国式过马路”这一现象进行了尖锐的批评。请你以一个中学生的角色，写一篇短文，对“中国式过马路”这一现象加以评论。

注意：1. 文中不能出现自己的姓名和学校名称。

2. 开头已给出，不计入总词数。字数：80词左右，不可逐字翻译。

3. 参考词语：红绿灯traffic lights，缺乏安全意识lack awareness of traffic safety

遵守交通规则obey the traffic rules

Chinese Style of Crossing Streets

Chinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the internet recently.

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A

Chinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the Internet recently.

Nowadays, many people cross streets without looking at the traffic lights. Why? I think there are two main reasons. Some people lack awareness of traffic safety. Besides, some people are so busy that they don’t want to wait for the green light.

However, it has brought danger to themselves as well as to others. So I hope something must be done to avoid traffic accidents. First of all, whoever breaks the traffic rules should be punished. Secondly, I hope government should make the crossroads more convenient and available for people to cross the street.

As a student, I must observe the right light to cross the road, and never follow those who lead themselves to danger. What’s more, I will try my best to advise people to obey the rules. Only in this way can we cross streets safely.

【作文评析】

作者用了比较高级的词汇和句子结构，面面俱到，思维缜密，上下文连贯、成熟。【优秀作文二】

B

Chinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the Internet recently.

These days, most of Chinese people don’t look at the traffic lights when they cross the street. There are two different reasons for this. On the one hand, they lack awareness of traffic safety. On the other hand, they hurry to save time because they are too busy all the time.

It’s always dangerous for people to cross the street without looking at the traffic lights. It’s reported that many people died of car accidents every year. In my opinion, we’re supposed to obey the traffic rules. We mustn’t cross the street until the traffic lights turn green. Next, it’s very important for us to help the old and the young cross the street.

As we know, life is very important for us. If we follow the rules, there will be fewer traffic accidents and we will be safe when we cross the street.

【作文评析】

作者思维细腻，使用词汇和语法结构准确、上下文连贯及语言表述得体，把所学知识运用得淋漓尽致，恰到好处。