2013年宜宾市中考英语优秀作文五篇赏析

2013年宜宾市中考英语优秀作文第三节：写作（共1题，计12分）最近媒体对“中国式过马路”这一现象进行了尖锐的批评。

请你以一个中学生的角色，写一篇短文，对“中国式过马路”这一现象加以评论。

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字数：80词左右，不可逐字翻译。

3. 参考词语：红绿灯traffic lights，缺乏安全意识lack awareness of traffic safety遵守交通规则obey the traffic rulesChinese Style of Crossing StreetsChinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the internet recently._______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________AChinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the Internet recently.Nowadays, many people cross streets without looking at the traffic lights. Why? I think there are two main reasons. Some people lack awareness of traffic safety. Besides, some people are so busy that they don’t want to wait for the green light.However, it has brought danger to themselves as well as to others. So I hope something must be done to avoid traffic accidents. First of all, whoever breaks the traffic rules should be punished. Secondly, I hope government should make the crossroads more convenient and available for people to cross the street.As a student, I must observe the right light to cross the road, and never follow those who lead themselves to danger. What’s more, I will try my best to advise people to obey the rules. Only in this way can we cross streets safely.【作文评析】作者用了比较高级的词汇和句子结构，面面俱到，思维缜密，上下文连贯、成熟。

【优秀作文二】BChinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the Internet recently.These days, most of Chinese people don’t look at the traffic lights when they cross the street. There are two different reasons for this. On the one hand, they lack awareness of traffic safety. On the other hand, they hurry to save time because they are too busy all the time.It’s always dangerous for people to cross the street without looking at the traffic lights. It’s reported that many people died of car accidents every year. In my opinion, we’re supposed to obey the traffic rules. We mustn’t cross the street until the traffic lights turn green. Next, it’s very important for us to help the old and the young cross the street.As we know, life is very important for us. If we follow the rules, there will be fewer traffic accidents and we will be safe when we cross the street.【作文评析】作者思维细腻，使用词汇和语法结构准确、上下文连贯及语言表述得体，把所学知识运用得淋漓尽致，恰到好处。

CChinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the Internet recently.Now many people cross the streets without watching traffic lights. So the traffic accidents often happen to those people who don’t obey the traffic rules. It has been a serious problem. Why don’t they obey the rules? Because some of them lack traffic rules awareness. And most of them are busy going to work. But how do we solve the problem? First of all, we must obey the traffic rules. Secondly, whoever breaks the traffic rules should be punished. At last we should te3ach kids how to cross the streets safely. If we did like that, the traffic accidents would be fewer and fewer. And we would live happier and happier.【作文评析】作者思维缜密，环环相扣。

要点齐全，言简意赅，语句通顺，意思连贯，条理清楚，过渡自然，字迹工整。

【优秀作文四】DChinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the Internet recently.Nowadays, Chinese people have trouble in crossing streets. Many people cross the streets without looking at traffic lights when they cross the streets. Because most of them lack traffic safety awareness. And they always do everything in a hurry. They don’t realize how dangerous they are. It’s necessary for everyone to obey the traffic rules. At the same time, people should pay more attention to traffic lights before they cross the streets. I think government should do something to deal with the problem.【作文评析】作者思维细腻，环环相扣，惜墨如金。

表达连贯自然，语句通顺, 言简意赅。

使用词汇和语法结构准确、上下文连贯及语言表述得体。

【优秀作文五】EChinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the Internet recently.The picture shows what the Chinese style of crossing streets is！Many Chinese people won’t observe the traffic lights when they cross the streets. Why? Some of them lackawareness of traffic safety. Some of them are so busy that they have no time to wait for thegreen light.We should obey the traffic rules. And we should advise our friends and family to obey the traffic rules, too. No matter who breaks the traffic rules should be punished. Only in this way can we live safely and happier.【作文评析】作者使用感叹句开头一语中的，言简意赅，还恰如其分使用了倒装句。