高中英语记叙文写作 教学课件(共40张PPT)
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高考英语作文记叙文专题PPT课件
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结尾：
1、It is an unforgettable experience which I will remember forever.
2、It is so meaningful/ moving that I won’t forget it forever.
3、By taking part in this activity, I learn/ benefit a lot.
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三、 确定要写的活动：
For example：
运动会：the Sporting Meeting
相关词汇：take part in ,
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3、Time passed quickly, before we knew it, it was time to say goodbye to others/ old people. On the way back, we not only shared our feeling happily, but also we learnt a lot from each other. Meanwhile, the voluntary work can promote our social awareness.
100 /200/1000/5000 metre race
the relay race/ the shuttle race
the high/long jump
the Tug-of-war competition
高中英语记叙文写作 教学课件(共40张PPT)
meeting to discuss it.
8. It is reported that the river has been polluted (污染).
9. She tried to remind (提醒) us not to throw rubbish anywhere.
10. We can breathe fresh (新鲜的) air and enjoy ourselves.
Last Sunday, we had a picnic in a mountain near our school.
Spring is coming. let’s have a picnic.
What can we eat?
What are they cooking, fish or pork?
When our monitor suggested having a picnic , we were all pleased.
由词到句
4) 我们带了各种食品和饮料。 bring /bring…with… kinds of/all kinds of/various/a variety of/varieties of food and drinks We brought all kinds of food and drinks.
Li Hai told such a funny story that we couldn’t help laughing.
由词到句
6) 赵娟在跳舞时摔了一跤。 dance fall/have a fall Zhao Juan fell when she danced.
Zhao Juan had a fall when she danced.
8. It is reported that the river has been polluted (污染).
9. She tried to remind (提醒) us not to throw rubbish anywhere.
10. We can breathe fresh (新鲜的) air and enjoy ourselves.
Last Sunday, we had a picnic in a mountain near our school.
Spring is coming. let’s have a picnic.
What can we eat?
What are they cooking, fish or pork?
When our monitor suggested having a picnic , we were all pleased.
由词到句
4) 我们带了各种食品和饮料。 bring /bring…with… kinds of/all kinds of/various/a variety of/varieties of food and drinks We brought all kinds of food and drinks.
Li Hai told such a funny story that we couldn’t help laughing.
由词到句
6) 赵娟在跳舞时摔了一跤。 dance fall/have a fall Zhao Juan fell when she danced.
Zhao Juan had a fall when she danced.
英语记叙文写作教学课件
Writing techniques
1.understanding and appreciation of good narrative essay 2.writing sequence (1)think of an event in your life which was emotionally moving.spend some time thinking about it and then make detailed notes about that moving experience.
Narration
组员：
definition
To narrate is to give an account of an event or an account of a series of events, such as …
such as …
a. b. c. d. e.
real stories imaginary stories biographies news items narrative poems
There are six aspects which should be considered by the writer.
1. Organization 2. Dialogue 3. Purpose 4. Action 5. Chronological Connectors 6. Point of View
• Although I dread riding roller coasters, I am also a person who likes to confront my fear. So I went to Six Flags with a clear purpose: to get over my fear for roller coasters. It did not work very well at the beginning. Despite the great effort of encouraging myself while waiting in line, I backed off at the last minute. There were two voices battling inside my head. One said: this isn’t making you happy, so why bother? The other argued: well, don’t you want to feel a sense of accomplishment by proving to yourself that you can handle the worst? conflict between man andnarrative essay is like a story;it has a beginning,a middle and an end. The middle is the center of interest which focuses on some conflicts.
英语记叙文的写作(Unit 1写作教学)PPT课件
appeal 呼吁；恳求
appeal to the school for support
We should appeal to the school for more support.
Though there is little possibility of success, we should insist on appealing to the school for more support. L4: 虽然我们中的多数人认为成功的可能性不大，但作为有 抱负的当代学生，我们应该坚持向学校呼吁获得更多财 政上的支持。 Though most of us think there is little possibility of success, as an ambitious modern student, we should insist on appealing to the school for more financial support.
I admire the creativity, imagination and brilliant ideas which can only be found in children like Amy. And I think it’s a precious instinct that nothing can substitute for. However, nowadays, parents always force children to solve problems in the way which they think is right. It can only destroy some admiring qualities of children. So, why not give children more freedom and space ,more time for themselves to do what they like.
appeal to the school for support
We should appeal to the school for more support.
Though there is little possibility of success, we should insist on appealing to the school for more support. L4: 虽然我们中的多数人认为成功的可能性不大，但作为有 抱负的当代学生，我们应该坚持向学校呼吁获得更多财 政上的支持。 Though most of us think there is little possibility of success, as an ambitious modern student, we should insist on appealing to the school for more financial support.
I admire the creativity, imagination and brilliant ideas which can only be found in children like Amy. And I think it’s a precious instinct that nothing can substitute for. However, nowadays, parents always force children to solve problems in the way which they think is right. It can only destroy some admiring qualities of children. So, why not give children more freedom and space ,more time for themselves to do what they like.
高考英语记叙文写作ppt课件
arrived and stood behind the mountain with the
traming scene in our eyes, our hearts opened brightly.
As we were on the way to the top, the fresh air cleaned
1. 时间与地点：4月10日，大青山 (Daqing Mountain);
2. 活动的过程; 3. 你对于这次活动的评论。 注意：1. 词数120左右。 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
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In order to encourage the students to take outdoor exercise, our school organized a mountain-climbing on April 10. Hundreds of us took part in it。
4.120词左右。
2
Writing process
一，审题：新闻报道（记叙文）、时态（一般过去式）
二，扣题，拟要点，想句式和词汇。 三，开始写，注意连贯词和时态 四，检查
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记叙文的连接词一般用时间连接词，体现事情发 展的时间顺序，常用的连接词有(写作必备P10) now ,after ,afterwards ,after that ,after a while ,at first ,in the beginning ,to begin with ,later ,next ,finally ,all of a sudden/suddenly, at that moment, as soon as ,from now on ,from then on , meanwhile ,not …until , in the end /eventually， last week ,On dong…, （一。。。 就。。。）句式，having done … ,(with) everything done , when it is time to …, to one happiness /joy ,
writing-高中英文记叙文写作(共21张PPT)
1. requirement（person, tense） 2. details in pictures（5W1H)
3. passages with linking words 4. ending with feelings (What…! How…!) 5. corrections (grammar & spellings)
handwriting
Key points
1. better your handwriting… 2. avoid the language mistakes 3. use advanced word&expressions 4. vary your sentence patterns 5. make the description vivid and organized 6. present your independent thinking
请根据图片所提供的信息以第一人称用英语写一篇记叙文。 注意：①短文应包括所有图片的主要内容，内容要连贯、完整；
②长度100单词左右。
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Picture 1
who: I when: 9:00AM
June, 17 where: at home what: wake up late
why: stay up
Picture 2
get dressed
prepare breakfast
get the schoolbag to school
Pschool
as fast as…
Picture 4
to one’s surprise find…close
realize…Sunday
To my surprise, it was closed. It was then that I realized it was Sunday today. What an awful day! I really did a foolish thing.
3. passages with linking words 4. ending with feelings (What…! How…!) 5. corrections (grammar & spellings)
handwriting
Key points
1. better your handwriting… 2. avoid the language mistakes 3. use advanced word&expressions 4. vary your sentence patterns 5. make the description vivid and organized 6. present your independent thinking
请根据图片所提供的信息以第一人称用英语写一篇记叙文。 注意：①短文应包括所有图片的主要内容，内容要连贯、完整；
②长度100单词左右。
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Picture 1
who: I when: 9:00AM
June, 17 where: at home what: wake up late
why: stay up
Picture 2
get dressed
prepare breakfast
get the schoolbag to school
Pschool
as fast as…
Picture 4
to one’s surprise find…close
realize…Sunday
To my surprise, it was closed. It was then that I realized it was Sunday today. What an awful day! I really did a foolish thing.
高考英语总复习精编课件：写作 记叙文 专题1 人物介绍 (37张ppt)
句④运用了短语be honored as(被授予……称号)；句
⑤运用了倒装结构使文章增色不少。
人物介绍包括他人介绍和自我介绍。它一般要求 能用简洁明了的英语把要介绍的情况按照逻辑顺序
一一讲明即可。写作时，应当注意以下问题：
1．要注意介绍别人要用第三人称来写；自我介
绍是介绍自己，所以文章要以第一人称来写。两种
他对我们国家做出了巨大的贡献。
3．Born in a poor family, he had to make a living by selling newspaper.
由于出生于一个贫穷的家庭，他不得不以卖报为 生。 4．When he was a small boy, he showed a great interest in maths.他小时候就对数学非常感兴趣。 5．Thanks to the help of his teacher, he was able to continue his education. 由于他老师的帮忙，他才得以继续学业。
活学活用 仿照上述句型，翻译下列句子。 (1)俗话说得好：良好的开始是成功的一半。 As the old saying goes, “Well begun, half done.” _________________________________________
(2)俗话说得好：成功来自努力。 As the old saying goes, “Hard work leads to _________________________________________ success./Success results from hard work.” _________________________________
高中英语作文(32张PPT)-经典通用课件资料
表起始的过渡语有first of all，to begin with，in my ／our opinion，according to，so far， as far as等。
表时间的过渡语有at first，then，later， firstly, secondly, meanwhile，in the end， finally，after that等。
[原文]I like reading while my brother likes watching TV.
[修正]I like reading while my brother enjoys watching TV.
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有可能的话,使用一些地道的,充满洋腔洋调,有“洋味”的单词。
高中英语教学课件
2021/10/10
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内容
行文 2021/10/10
homework
语言 2
新旧评分标准的不同:
内容方面
旧标准只对要点作出要求，而新标准除要求内容要点外，还涉及到对次重点和无关内容的评定。考生要 获得高分，除要覆盖所有要点外，还要尽量覆盖次重点，并且要少写或不写无关内容。
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语言方面
语言方面
旧标准只用语言中错误的多少来衡量语
言的好坏；
旧新标标准准只对用语语言言的中要错求误则的较多为少具来体衡：量
语应言用的语好法坏结；构应多样，力避单调。
应用的词汇应丰富，忌重复用词。
语言错误方面，对“尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致”的“些许错误”可以原谅。
新标准这发对语比挥言旧自的评己要分的求标潜则准能较对。语为具言体错：误的一棒子打死更能鼓励考生发挥自己的水平，更能鼓励考生 应用语法结构应多样，力避单调。
表时间的过渡语有at first，then，later， firstly, secondly, meanwhile，in the end， finally，after that等。
[原文]I like reading while my brother likes watching TV.
[修正]I like reading while my brother enjoys watching TV.
2021/10/10
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有可能的话,使用一些地道的,充满洋腔洋调,有“洋味”的单词。
高中英语教学课件
2021/10/10
1
内容
行文 2021/10/10
homework
语言 2
新旧评分标准的不同:
内容方面
旧标准只对要点作出要求，而新标准除要求内容要点外，还涉及到对次重点和无关内容的评定。考生要 获得高分，除要覆盖所有要点外，还要尽量覆盖次重点，并且要少写或不写无关内容。
2021/10/10
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语言方面
语言方面
旧标准只用语言中错误的多少来衡量语
言的好坏；
旧新标标准准只对用语语言言的中要错求误则的较多为少具来体衡：量
语应言用的语好法坏结；构应多样，力避单调。
应用的词汇应丰富，忌重复用词。
语言错误方面，对“尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致”的“些许错误”可以原谅。
新标准这发对语比挥言旧自的评己要分的求标潜则准能较对。语为具言体错：误的一棒子打死更能鼓励考生发挥自己的水平，更能鼓励考生 应用语法结构应多样，力避单调。
高中英语必修三(人教版)2-5如何写叙事类记叙文 教学课件
assignment before taking bus back home, and when sitting around the
table, I shared my experiences with my parents, who told me that they felt proud of me for what I had experienced⑤.
(3)交代时间地点和相关人物的典型句型： Sb.was doing...in someplace when...某人正在某地做……这 时…… Sb.was about to do...when...＝Sb.was on the point of doing..when...某人正要做……这时…… Sb. had just done...when...某人刚刚做了……这时……
What an unforgettable experience it was⑥！
[亮点回放] 1．开篇叙述故事的原委，结构紧凑，发挥自然，使用了被动 语态和whose引导的定语从句来描述活动内容； 2．clarify, detail这些高级词汇运用准确； 3．这个主从复合句使用了“介词＋动名词短语”结构来代替 状语从句，what引导的宾语从句以及省略关系词的定语从句使本 句内容饱满，显示了作者较强的语言运用能力；
3．介绍故事的结果或谈自己的感想 (1)常用词汇 at last; finally; luckily/fortunately; to one's surprise; feel tired/delighted
(2)常用句型 Personally, I think that... What surprised/attracted/delighted us most was that... Tired as we were, we learned what we couldn't learn in/at school. Through this meaningful activity, we learned something that can't be learned in class. I was deeply impressed/moved/touched by... I learned a lot from... What an unforgettable experience!
英语记叙文的写作的结构ppt课件
2)并说明你参加的理由
3)以及在活动中你都做了什么,
4)同时谈谈你对课外活动的看法.
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There are many after-class activities
in our school, such as running, playing
tennis,playing basketball and so on. I
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每个人都需要朋友。你的朋友叫什么？ 来自哪里？你们是怎样认识的？谈谈 你们之间的友谊以及你的看法。
everyone, friend ,come from, get to know, be sure.
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Everyone needs friends. But different people have different ways to make friends.
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英语记叙文的写作的结构
• Beginning Topic sentence 主题句
Middle Supporting sentence 支持句 (举例说明、分层描写、解释原 因等)
Ending Conclusion 结论句
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写作基本要求． １．仔细研读汉语及英文提示词，千万不要漏项． ２．列出可能用到的句型，注意关联词的使用，如： and, but, so, although, because等． ３．语法方面：时态，人称的准确使用． ４．形成整个文段，想好“开头，中间，结尾”（发 表议论，谈感受）． ５．可以适当分段． ６．写完后要通读检查．
found the Great Wall looked like a huge
dragon on the mountains. It took us
3)以及在活动中你都做了什么,
4)同时谈谈你对课外活动的看法.
.
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There are many after-class activities
in our school, such as running, playing
tennis,playing basketball and so on. I
.
3
每个人都需要朋友。你的朋友叫什么？ 来自哪里？你们是怎样认识的？谈谈 你们之间的友谊以及你的看法。
everyone, friend ,come from, get to know, be sure.
.
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Everyone needs friends. But different people have different ways to make friends.
.
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英语记叙文的写作的结构
• Beginning Topic sentence 主题句
Middle Supporting sentence 支持句 (举例说明、分层描写、解释原 因等)
Ending Conclusion 结论句
.
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写作基本要求． １．仔细研读汉语及英文提示词，千万不要漏项． ２．列出可能用到的句型，注意关联词的使用，如： and, but, so, although, because等． ３．语法方面：时态，人称的准确使用． ４．形成整个文段，想好“开头，中间，结尾”（发 表议论，谈感受）． ５．可以适当分段． ６．写完后要通读检查．
found the Great Wall looked like a huge
dragon on the mountains. It took us
高中英语记叙文作写模板36页PPT
8.胡姗姗读过这本书多次了.
Hu Shanshan has read the book many times.
并列句
1. 用连词/副词 (and, but , so, for, or , not only…but also, either…or, neither…nor, while, both…aEnvda, lhuoatwioenvoenr,lyt.herefore…)
What makes Evaluation only.
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Content
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3. 主语+系动词+表语
We are students. He became a scientist.
4. T主ha语t s+o及un物ds 动goo词d.+间接宾语+直接宾语
He gave Tom Eavparleusaetniot.n only. ed wHithe oAfsfeproesdem.Selidaejsobfo. r .NET 3.5 Client Profile 5.2
练习:翻译下面的简单句
1.1939年爆发了第二次世界大战.(break out) The Second World War/ World War II broke out 2in.一19天39,.她高兴地走进我的房间. One day she came into my room happily.
Hu Shanshan has read the book many times.
并列句
1. 用连词/副词 (and, but , so, for, or , not only…but also, either…or, neither…nor, while, both…aEnvda, lhuoatwioenvoenr,lyt.herefore…)
What makes Evaluation only.
a good essay? ed with Aspose.Slides for .NET 3.5 Client Profile 5.2 Copyright 2004-2011 Aspose Pty Ltd.
Content
EverythinEgvanlueaetiodneodnlyi.ncluded ed wwithhAiscphosies.Srliedelas tfoerd.NtEoT 3y.o5 uClrievntiPerwof.ile 5.2
3. 主语+系动词+表语
We are students. He became a scientist.
4. T主ha语t s+o及un物ds 动goo词d.+间接宾语+直接宾语
He gave Tom Eavparleusaetniot.n only. ed wHithe oAfsfeproesdem.Selidaejsobfo. r .NET 3.5 Client Profile 5.2
练习:翻译下面的简单句
1.1939年爆发了第二次世界大战.(break out) The Second World War/ World War II broke out 2in.一19天39,.她高兴地走进我的房间. One day she came into my room happily.
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When we enjoy natural beauty , we should never forget to protect environment.
由词到句
10) 安全第一 。 Safety is the first Safety is the most important.
由句到段
1) 上个星期天，我们去学校附近的山上进行 野餐，我们玩的很开心。
由词到句
8) 张龙提醒我们不要乱扔垃圾 。 remind throw rubbish casually
Zhang Long, a careful boy, reminded us not to throw rubbish anywhere.
由词到句
9) 我们在享受自然美景时，不要忘了保护环境。
enjoy natural beauty protect environment
Li Hai told such a funny story that we couldn’t help laughing.
由词到句
6) 赵娟在跳舞时摔了一跤。 dance fall/have a fall Zhao Juan fell when she danced.
Zhao Juan had a fall when she danced.
Last Sunday, we had a picnic in a mountain neaoming. let’s have a picnic.
What can we eat?
What are they cooking, fish or pork?
1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 覆盖所有内容要点。 3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 4. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽
力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;具备 较强的语言运用能力。 5. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文 结构紧凑。 6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。
由段到文
Last Sunday, we had a picnic in a mountain near our school. And it was there that we had a good time.
After two weeks’ hard work, we were tired and wanted to relax ourselves, so when our monitor suggested having a picnic, we all were excited. We brought all kinds of food and drinks as usual. On the way, Li Hai, who is a lovely boy, told us so funny a story that we couldn’t help laughing. While dancing, Zhao Juan had a fall. After the picnic, some students played cards, some took photos and some played games. Before leaving, Zhang Long, a careful boy, reminded us not to throw rubbish anywhere.
构思
开头 我们玩的很开心
正文 前期计划和具体活动内容
结尾 我的感想
• 由词到句 • 由句到段 • 由段到文
成文
由词到句
1) 我们玩的很开心。 have a good/wonderful time enjoy oneself We had a good time.
We did have a good time.
由句到段
3) 我们在享受自然美景时，不要忘了保护环 境。安全第一。
I learn from the picnic when we enjoy the natural beauty, we shouldn’t forget to protect environment. Do remember: safety is the first.
3. We brought with us bananas, cakes, biscuits and some bottles (瓶)of water.
4. Do remember: safety (安全) is the first. 5. Li Hai, a lovely and humorou(s幽默的) boy,
You are the best！ Class Six!
——Vincent Lu
高中英语记叙文写作
陕西省府谷中学 英路 高三英语组 印世
单词拼写
1. We were picnickin(g野餐) when it began to rain heavily.
2.Suddenly(突然)，he lost his balance and had a fall.
We brought a variety of food and drinks with us.
由词到句
5) 李海讲了一个滑稽的故事，我们都笑了。 tell a story funny/humorous laugh/burst into laughter/burst out laughing Li Hai told a funny story. We burst into laughter.
Last Sunday, we had a picnic in a mountain near our school. And it was there that we had a good time.
由句到段
2) （在努力学习了两周后）我们很疲惫， 想放松一下。班长建议我们去野餐，我们 很高兴。（像往常一样）我们带了各种食 品和饮料。(在路上) 李海讲了一个滑稽的 故事，我们都笑了。赵娟在跳舞时摔了一 跤。（野餐后，）有几个同学玩扑克牌， 有的在照相，还有的同学做游戏。（在离 开时）张龙提醒我们不要乱扔垃圾。
When our monitor suggested having a picnic , we were all pleased.
由词到句
4) 我们带了各种食品和饮料。 bring /bring…with… kinds of/all kinds of/various/a variety of/varieties of food and drinks We brought all kinds of food and drinks.
由词到句
3) 班长建议我们去野餐，我们很高兴 。 advise/suggest/recommend picnic/have/go on a picnic/go picnicking happy/pleased
Our monitor suggested that we should have a picnic. We were all pleased.
sang a song for us. humourous
picnic-picnicking-picnicked
单词拼写
6. After that, they were determined to protect (保护) our homeland, the earth. 7. Our monitor (班长) suggested we have a
9)我们在享受自然美景时，不要忘了保护环境 。 10)安全第一 。
三位一体写作教学模式
审题
构思
成文
人称 时态 要点
开头 正文 结尾
由词到句 由句到段 由段到文
1. 审题 2. 构思 3. 成文
如何写
审题
人称 第一人称和第三人称
时态 过去时为主，可能将来时和现在时
要点 d 我们玩的很开心 前期计划和具体活动内容 我的感想
Who is telling a story?
I can’t help dancing and singing.
Playing cards is also our pleasure.
Oh, they are taking photos.
Come on! Who will be the winner?
写作任务
假定你是李华。下面的图画描述了你们班上 周末组织的一次野餐活动，请根据写作要 点并参考图画内容，为校刊“英语角”版 面写一篇短文。
写作要点：
1．前期计划； 2．具体内容； 3．你的感想。
写作任务
注意： 1．短文词数不少于100； 2．开头部分已写好，不计入总词数； 3．可根据情况增减细节，详略得当； 4．不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。
meeting to discuss it.
8. It is reported that the river has been polluted (污染).
9. She tried to remind (提醒) us not to throw rubbish anywhere.
10. We can breathe fresh (新鲜的) air and enjoy ourselves.
I learn from the picnic when we enjoy the natural beauty, we shouldn’t forget to protect environment. Do remember: safety is the first.
2012年陕西省高考英语作文评分标准
2012年中秋过后三亚3 公里海滩遍布50吨垃圾
写什么
1)我们玩的很开心 。
2)我们很疲惫，想放松一下 。 3)班长建议我们去野餐，我们很高兴 。 4)我们带了各种食品和饮料 。
由词到句
10) 安全第一 。 Safety is the first Safety is the most important.
由句到段
1) 上个星期天，我们去学校附近的山上进行 野餐，我们玩的很开心。
由词到句
8) 张龙提醒我们不要乱扔垃圾 。 remind throw rubbish casually
Zhang Long, a careful boy, reminded us not to throw rubbish anywhere.
由词到句
9) 我们在享受自然美景时，不要忘了保护环境。
enjoy natural beauty protect environment
Li Hai told such a funny story that we couldn’t help laughing.
由词到句
6) 赵娟在跳舞时摔了一跤。 dance fall/have a fall Zhao Juan fell when she danced.
Zhao Juan had a fall when she danced.
Last Sunday, we had a picnic in a mountain neaoming. let’s have a picnic.
What can we eat?
What are they cooking, fish or pork?
1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 覆盖所有内容要点。 3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 4. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽
力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;具备 较强的语言运用能力。 5. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文 结构紧凑。 6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。
由段到文
Last Sunday, we had a picnic in a mountain near our school. And it was there that we had a good time.
After two weeks’ hard work, we were tired and wanted to relax ourselves, so when our monitor suggested having a picnic, we all were excited. We brought all kinds of food and drinks as usual. On the way, Li Hai, who is a lovely boy, told us so funny a story that we couldn’t help laughing. While dancing, Zhao Juan had a fall. After the picnic, some students played cards, some took photos and some played games. Before leaving, Zhang Long, a careful boy, reminded us not to throw rubbish anywhere.
构思
开头 我们玩的很开心
正文 前期计划和具体活动内容
结尾 我的感想
• 由词到句 • 由句到段 • 由段到文
成文
由词到句
1) 我们玩的很开心。 have a good/wonderful time enjoy oneself We had a good time.
We did have a good time.
由句到段
3) 我们在享受自然美景时，不要忘了保护环 境。安全第一。
I learn from the picnic when we enjoy the natural beauty, we shouldn’t forget to protect environment. Do remember: safety is the first.
3. We brought with us bananas, cakes, biscuits and some bottles (瓶)of water.
4. Do remember: safety (安全) is the first. 5. Li Hai, a lovely and humorou(s幽默的) boy,
You are the best！ Class Six!
——Vincent Lu
高中英语记叙文写作
陕西省府谷中学 英路 高三英语组 印世
单词拼写
1. We were picnickin(g野餐) when it began to rain heavily.
2.Suddenly(突然)，he lost his balance and had a fall.
We brought a variety of food and drinks with us.
由词到句
5) 李海讲了一个滑稽的故事，我们都笑了。 tell a story funny/humorous laugh/burst into laughter/burst out laughing Li Hai told a funny story. We burst into laughter.
Last Sunday, we had a picnic in a mountain near our school. And it was there that we had a good time.
由句到段
2) （在努力学习了两周后）我们很疲惫， 想放松一下。班长建议我们去野餐，我们 很高兴。（像往常一样）我们带了各种食 品和饮料。(在路上) 李海讲了一个滑稽的 故事，我们都笑了。赵娟在跳舞时摔了一 跤。（野餐后，）有几个同学玩扑克牌， 有的在照相，还有的同学做游戏。（在离 开时）张龙提醒我们不要乱扔垃圾。
When our monitor suggested having a picnic , we were all pleased.
由词到句
4) 我们带了各种食品和饮料。 bring /bring…with… kinds of/all kinds of/various/a variety of/varieties of food and drinks We brought all kinds of food and drinks.
由词到句
3) 班长建议我们去野餐，我们很高兴 。 advise/suggest/recommend picnic/have/go on a picnic/go picnicking happy/pleased
Our monitor suggested that we should have a picnic. We were all pleased.
sang a song for us. humourous
picnic-picnicking-picnicked
单词拼写
6. After that, they were determined to protect (保护) our homeland, the earth. 7. Our monitor (班长) suggested we have a
9)我们在享受自然美景时，不要忘了保护环境 。 10)安全第一 。
三位一体写作教学模式
审题
构思
成文
人称 时态 要点
开头 正文 结尾
由词到句 由句到段 由段到文
1. 审题 2. 构思 3. 成文
如何写
审题
人称 第一人称和第三人称
时态 过去时为主，可能将来时和现在时
要点 d 我们玩的很开心 前期计划和具体活动内容 我的感想
Who is telling a story?
I can’t help dancing and singing.
Playing cards is also our pleasure.
Oh, they are taking photos.
Come on! Who will be the winner?
写作任务
假定你是李华。下面的图画描述了你们班上 周末组织的一次野餐活动，请根据写作要 点并参考图画内容，为校刊“英语角”版 面写一篇短文。
写作要点：
1．前期计划； 2．具体内容； 3．你的感想。
写作任务
注意： 1．短文词数不少于100； 2．开头部分已写好，不计入总词数； 3．可根据情况增减细节，详略得当； 4．不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。
meeting to discuss it.
8. It is reported that the river has been polluted (污染).
9. She tried to remind (提醒) us not to throw rubbish anywhere.
10. We can breathe fresh (新鲜的) air and enjoy ourselves.
I learn from the picnic when we enjoy the natural beauty, we shouldn’t forget to protect environment. Do remember: safety is the first.
2012年陕西省高考英语作文评分标准
2012年中秋过后三亚3 公里海滩遍布50吨垃圾
写什么
1)我们玩的很开心 。
2)我们很疲惫，想放松一下 。 3)班长建议我们去野餐，我们很高兴 。 4)我们带了各种食品和饮料 。