高中英语学考作文指导

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导致低分的主要原因
问题1 问题1： 句型结构混乱 问题2 问题2： 汉式英语 问题3 问题3： 缺乏高级词汇， 缺乏高级词汇， 句式单一 问题4 问题4： 表达不连贯， 表达不连贯， 缺乏过渡语
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对策：主干优先，添枝加叶
对策：用英语进行思维
对策：使用高级词汇、 丰富句式和语法结构
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我们都是中国人。 我们都是中国人。
汉 式 英
We all are Chinese.
×
√
We are all Chinese.
你方便时来找我吧。 你方便时来找我吧。 Come to see me when you are convenient.
语 Come to see me when it's convenient
汉
式 There are two foreigners who will
come to our school for a visit.
英 There are two foreigners coming to
our school for a visit.
语
Two foreigners will come to our school for a visit.
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问题四：表达不连贯，缺乏过渡语。 问题四：表达不连贯，缺乏过渡语。
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常用的连接词
递进 1. 表示_____ 关系（在同一话题上补充内容）： what's more _______; 另外，还有：__________; besides also; moreover; in addition 2.表示______关系： 转折 但是，然而，相反：but; ________; yet; instead; however on the ______ hand; on the contrary(相反） other 3.表示______关系：因为，因此，所以： 因果 since; now that; as; ________(of); so; thus; because therefore; as a result (of) _____
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（三）丰富的语法结构的使用
1.Eric set sail again,this time with 25 ships.But only14 of them made it to Greenland.(用定语从句） 用定语从句） 用定语从句 of _____ Eric set sail again,this time with 25 ships, ____ which only14 made it to Greenland. 2.She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. ______ ____ many students, She walked out of the lab . Followed by 3.As soon as he arrived, he began his research. On ____ _____, ____ his arrival he began his research.
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假设政府将在某学校附近的 The building of the 河边修建一座化工厂，请你 factory will make lots of 以该校学生的名义向媒体反 money for the city.It will 映修建化工厂后产生的实际 let many people get 情况。陈述反对修建的理由。jobs.It'll help the local 好处：化工厂将为该市赚很 economy to develop.But 多钱，解决很多人的就业问 it will let out a lot of 题，促进该市经济的发展。 poisonous smoke and 坏处：化工厂将排放大量的 有毒气体，污水，严重污染 环境，危害人民身体健康， 化工厂将释放很大的噪音， 严重影响学校正常的教学。
Teaching Objectives(教学目的)
By the end of this lesson you 'll be able to find out the mistakes of the compositions given. find out what problems cause you not to get higher marks in your writing. know some practical ways to improve a composition. feel less scared(恐惧的) in writing.
英 语
There were many people donating money. Many people donated money.
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练习：有两个外国人将来我们学校参观。 练习：有两个外国人将来我们学校参观。 There are two foreigners will come to our school for a visit. (?)
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（二）丰富句式的使用
1.I was happy when I received your letter.(用感叹句）
How happy____ ____ when I received ____ ____ I was your letter!
2.我就是要跟他结婚！ I want to marry him! (用强调句进行强调）
The naughty boy ran away. The naughty boy ran away without turning off the water.
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练习1： 练习1
女孩 是 班长 穿红色羊毛衫的女孩是我们的班长。 穿红色羊毛衫的女孩是我们的班长。
The girl____________________________ (who is) in a red sweater is our monitress.
练习2 练习2：
她 离开了 办公室 她眼泪汪汪地离开了办公室。 她眼泪汪汪地离开了办公室。
She left the office. She left the office with tears in her eyes.
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例句：有很多人捐了钱。 例句：有很多人捐了钱。
汉 式
There were many people donated money.(?) There were many people who donated money.
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generous,humorous, gentle,warm-hearted
Exercises:
1.He spends all his spare time on computer games. He devotes all his spare time ___ playing _____ to _____ computer games. 2.I saw her hurrying away but I didn't try to speak to her. I _____ ____ of her hurrying away but I caught sight ___ didn't try to speak to her. 3.Our school lies in the middle of Taojiang City. Our school ___ located in middle of Taojiang is ______ City.
对策：使用恰当的连接词
第一步：找出句子主干 例句：那个淘气的男孩没关水龙头就跑了。 跑了 男孩
主 第二步：确定主干的相应词汇 干 优 boy , run away 先，第三步：翻译句子主干 添 The boy ran away. 枝 第四步：添加修饰成分 加 叶 那个淘气的男孩没关水龙头就 跑了。
for you.
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我们有必要每天早上坚持说英语。 我们有必要每天早上坚持说英语。 We are necessary to keep on reading English every morning. （？） It's necessary for us to keep on reading English every morning. 五月十二号四川发生了大地震。 五月十二号四川发生了大地震。 May 12 Sichuan happened a big earthquake. (?) A big earthquake happened in Sichuan on May 12. √
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汉 式 英 语
问题三：缺乏高级词汇，句式单一 问题三：缺乏高级词汇，
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（一）较高级词汇的使用
原则1 原则1：多实少 虚 a nice person 原则2 原则2：短语优先 A new subway is being built in my hometown 。 under _________ A new subway is _____ construction in my hometown. 原则3 原则3：弃旧取新 你的课引不起我的兴趣。 你的课引不起我的兴趣。 I'm not interested in your lesson. appeal to Your lesson doesn't _____ _____ me.
It is him who/that I want to marry!
3.When he spoke, he felt more and more excited.
The more the more ______ ______ he spoke, ______ ______ excited he felt.
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（二）丰富句式的使用
4.Please write to me soon! ______ write to me soon! Do 5.You can solve the problem in this way. Only in this way ____ you solve this problem. can ____ 6.We all know the earth moves round the sun. ___ is well-know_____ the earth moves It ___ _______ that round the sun.
pollute the environment. It'll do harm to people's health.It will produce loud noise. The nosie will influence the normal 建议：希望政府放弃该项修 teaching of our school.I 建计划。 hope the government can give up the project.
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Many people are warm-hearted donated money to Sichuan people. Include a beggar who called Xu Chao, and a shoeshine woman who called Wang Fang. On May 12, Sichuan happen a big earthquake. There are many people donated money. Because they all want to express their love. My classmates donating more 50 dollars. We all are Chinese. We must help the people who are in trouble. Chinese don't afraid of it!