考研作文批改示例

小作文：

Dear Sir or Madam:

As a student of chinese field in Beijing university, I would like to study to your school after I graduated in july this year.

There are some problems want to know. I need your help very much. Frist, in Beijing university, my speciality is Chinese, I want to know what qualifications to study of your university. Second, because my family are not rich, I make money after my course in past four year. So, please tell me if I could apply scholarships. Third, I also want to know what accommodation environment of your school.

I would like to express my gratitude for your kind consideration of my request. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Your sincerely

Liming

评语：档次5~6分

该短文总体上达到了写作目的。需要注意的是：

1. 没有包含所有写作要点，例如对于学费的询问。

2. 语法错误较多。

大作文：

This is a very interesting picture which is a football macth is going on. In the cartoon, there are three sons and one daughter who are keeping their doors. A old man in the middle of them who are their old father. The drawing shows us a football match of adopt parents.

It is not uncommon phenomenon in Chinese now. Take care of my parents are our liability. Firstly, from children to adult, my parents make many things for us. They make money, take care of us every day. Secondly, my parents become old with the day after day, their bodies become more badly, they can’t care themselves. Thirdly, because my parents give us all of them when they are young, so, I should give them my love when my parents go old. All the old man need warm from their son or daughter.

As a child, it is our liability to take care of my parents. We should apply both finacial and mind support to give them a happy life.

老师您辛苦了！很惭愧的说我是第一次动笔写完整的大小作文，非常希望得到您全方位的指导。谢谢！

评语：档次5~8分

首先你对图画的审题是准确的，明白了命题者的用意，因此大方向把握的很好。但是，在文章第二段的时候，前两点你是按照写作要求进行图画的阐释，第三点就转为了你的评论，这样就和第三段的评论存在重合的问题。

在今后的作文种，你要注意以下问题：

1. 写作思路要很清晰，不要想到哪说到哪，这样你的文章看起来会很乱。

2. 要注意加强语法训练，这篇文章的语法错误很多，会使你失去很多的分数。

3. 语言表达欠地道，可以多参考一下写作范文，汲取你多需要的语言结构和用词。

希望你再接再厉，虽然作文的档次归的比较低，但是贵在坚持。只要你继续努力，一定会有更好的成绩。

（1）复习计划个性化调整系统

针对学员基础不同、复习时间不同、报考院校专业不同，对学员各阶段进行复习计划个性化调整服务。使学员事半功倍的进行复习，为学员取得考研的成功保驾护航。

计划调整示例