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• Modern facilities, especially the internet, provide opportunities for dwellers to lead a life of great convenience. It enables people to shop, work and communicate with a click on your mouse without going around the city. From my perspective, it has more positive effects on our life indeed.
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• With the rapid development of science and technology, internet is playing important roles in our lives. However, when it comes to whether it is a positive development for people to go shopping, work and communicate via the Internet without face-to-face contact with one another , people hold divergent views. Some people are in favor of this view, while others disagree. Speaking for myself, I agree with the latter view.
• In modern society, it is possible to go shopping, work and communicate via the Internet without face-to-face contact with one another. To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development?
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• Positive or negative effects • 关键词：internet, face to face
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• Internet has facilitated our life since it was invented. Nowadays, many people do almost everything via internet such as shopping, working, communicating. However, whether the negative effects of this phenomenon overweigh the positive ones is a controversial issue. My view is that our life benefits a lot from internet, but we should not rely too much on internet.
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• Traditional way of life is in decline. People increasingly do not go outdoors for shopping, working or communicating, and more and more people start to do these things on the internet.
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• With the rapid development of science and technology, internet is playing important roles in our lives. However, when it comes to whether it is a positive development for people to go shopping, work and communicate via the Internet without face-to-face contact with one another , people hold divergent views. Some people are in favor of this view, while others disagree. Speaking for myself, I agree with the latter view.
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• Modern facilities, specifically, the internet provides opportunities for dwellers to lead to a life of great convenience. It enables people to shop with a click of mouse, work and communicate without going outside instead of traditional manners. From my perspective, it has positive effects on our life indeed.
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