高中英语写作训练(公开课)课件

句子的简洁
• 1.主题句 • 1) 主题句的位置 : 请找出段落的主题句
• Smoking is harmful to your health. Experiment show that smoking can cause cancer. Besides the most serious disease cancer, smoking can also cause other health problems. For example, it gives one a “smoker’s cough”. Finally, studies have shown it is easy for smokers to catch colds. Whether you get an unimportant cold or the terrible killer, cancer, smoking is harmful. Is it worth it?
Look out for cars while crossing the street?
句子的简洁
2.避免使用同义词重复.(如下面的这些句子, 划 线部分重复, 应删掉).
1).He is blind in both eyes. He is blind in the left eye.
2).In my opinion, I think your plan is feasible. 3).The desk is round in shape and red in color. 4).I shall accompany my mother by going with
her to the market.
句子的简洁
• 段落(设计好一个段落)
• 一般说来, 一个段落由三部分组成: 主题句, 扩展句和结论句.主题句提出的论述的主题, 扩展句利用必要的细节对主题加以论证说 明,结论句总结全文,在论证的基础上得出结 论. 这三者是段落的必要成分,他们相辅相成, 构成一个完整的段落. 有些段落还有过渡句, 它起到段与段之间的顺利过渡.
句子的简洁
• 2.主题句要概括, 它陈述你要说明的重点和观点, 句中必须包含有可扩展主题的词,词组或从句. 他 应该是你将进一步表明你的态度和看法的概括. 同 时, 主题句有利于控制作者本人的主题的扩展. 例 如: The young girl studied Chinese History. 该主 题句未能概括主题的要点,则不利于下面的扩展. 最好增添一个词或一个短语来修改这个句子,以便 顺利地展开你的主题. 例如:
句子的简洁
• Albert Einstein, one of the world’s greatest scientists, failed in his university entrance exam on his first attempt. William Faulkner, one of America’s famous writers, never finished college because he could not pass his English courses. Sir Winston Churchill, who is considered one of the masters of the English language, was very poor in English during middle school. oes not always predict failure in life.
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写作训练的思路
句子的完整
写一完整的句子:
句子的连贯 句子的简洁
句子的多样化
设计一个段落: 主题句, 扩展句, 结论句
基础写作
读写任务
写一个完整的句子
这几句是正确的句子吗? 如果你认为 有误, 该怎么改?
1.Work harda,nydou will succeed.
^ 2. There are only 4 students take part in the
句子的简洁
试比较下列改写的句子. Do you know the man who is speaking at the meeting? Do you know the man speaking at the meeting?
Look out for cars while you are crossing the street?
1. 用连词/副词 (and, but , so, for, or , not only…but also, either…or, neither…nor, while, both…and, however, therefore…)
1) Li Ming is 18 years old and he is a student in No.1 Middle School.
• 连贯性的要求是：句子前后之间要有照应， 有衔接，思想的表达应该有序，清楚．句 子与句子之间的过渡要符合逻辑，不能造 成歧义或矛盾．
句子的简洁
１．文字简洁. 如下面这些短语均可用括号中的词代替: from time to time (often), draw a conclusion (conclude), with anger (angrily), It is clear that… (clearly)
Birds fly. Buses run from dawn till midnight. We are studying hard.
2. 主语+及物动词+宾语
We have read many books.
They do shopping at the weekend.
We are learning English.
复合句
复合句里包含两个或更多的主谓结构, 其中 有一个主谓结构为句子的主体称为主句，另 一个／些主谓结构为从句，他（们）只能充 当句子的某一（些）成分，,如: 主语, 宾语, 表语, 同位语, 定语, 状语等. 根据他们在句子 中的功能分别称为主语从句, 宾语从句, 表 语从句, 同位语从句, 定语从句, 状语从句 等.
句子的连贯
• Faulty: A man is judged not only by what he says but also by his deeds.
1. A man is judged not only by what he says but also by what he does. 2. A man is judged not only by his words but also by his deeds. 前后的一致、对等、平衡
2) Lily does well in study; all the teachers think
highly of her. 3. 用 “ ; + adv ”
,so all …
1) We fished all day; however, we didn’t catch anything.
2) The car was almost new; besides, it was in excellent condition.
句子的简洁
• Karaok, which was invented by a Japanese, one of the greatest wonders of modern technology. Needless to say, Karaok is a good way of rest. You can learn a new song easily. It’s also a good way to make your friends happy. Nearly every body has a chance to be a singing star. However, everything has two sides, so does Karaok. It’s noisy to your neighbors. Besides, if you sing badly, they will feel uncomfortable. In fact, you are sure to make a sound pollution
• Faulty: The idea he mentioned at first sounded good.
1. The idea he first mentioned sounded good. 2. The idea he mentioned sounded good at first.
句子的连贯
五种基本的简单句
3. 主语+系动词+表语
We are students. He became a scientist. That sounds good.
4. 主语+及物动词+间接宾语+直接宾语
He gave Tom a present. He offered me a job.
5. 主语+及物动词+宾语+宾语补足语
^ class.
who taking/to take
句子的分类
简单句: 只包含一个主谓结构的句子.
并 列 句 : 主 谓 结 构 + 连 词 (and, but, so, or……) +主谓结构 (或更多的主谓结构)
复合句: 引导词+主谓结构, 主谓结构
(从句)
(主句)
五种基本的简单句
1.主语+不及物动词
• a. The young girl eagerly studied Chinese History.
• b. The young girl studied Chinese History under a famous historian.