2018浙江高考读后续写范文研读(第二课时新)

Version 1 Para 1 语言丰富：（词汇、非谓语，从句）
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2108浙江高考读后续写研究 1. 研读350词短文（一节课） 2.研读范文及相关素材（一节课） 3. 研讨两段的内容（一节课）
2108浙江高考读后续写研究 研读范文及相关素材
高分作文
布局划线：（两段150左右、5个词下划线） 衔接合理：（段与段之间、句与句之间） 描写具体：（动作、心理、环境、对话）
(70词)
Version 1 Para 2
衔接合理
We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. The thought that we might be trapped in such darkness sent shivers down my spine. If only I hadn’t sought to catch the rabbit! Instead of scolding me, my dad wiped my tears of fear and regret. Then he listened carefully and said hopefully, “Flowing Water! To the west!” We had ridden for what seemed like ages when a river finally came into sight. Speeding along it, we arrived safe and sound at the farmhouse. Exhausting as the ride was, it was an impressive experience like never before! (88词)
like lightning. 词块 I raced to follow it eagerly.
Version 1 Para 1 描述具体(动作、心理、对话、环境)
We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. The thought that we might be trapped in such darkness sent shivers down my spine. If only I hadn't sought to catch the rabbit! Instead of scolding me, my dad wiped my tears of fear and regret. Then he listened carefully and said hopefully, “Flowing Water! To the west” We had ridden for what seemed like ages when a river finally came into sight. Speeding along it, we arrived safe and sound at the farmhouse. Exhausting as the ride was, it was an impressive experience like never before!
Version 1 Para 1 描述具体(动作、心理、对话、环境)
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. I called out excitedly, “Dad! Catch it!” Terrified at my shout, the rabbit ran away like lightning. I raced to follow it eagerly. Finding it impossible to stop me, my dad caught up with me. We tracked the rabbit for about ten minutes until it got completely out of sight. Depressed and tired, I suggested going back. Unfortunately, we had been off the track Uncle Paul warned us to keep to.
语言丰富：（词汇、非谓语，从句，倒装，强调句型等）
从衔接、描写、语言三个方面来分析优点！
Version 1 Para 1
衔接合理
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. I called out excitedly, “Dad! Catch it!” Terrified at my shout, the rabbit ran away like lightning. I raced to follow it eagerly. Finding it impossible to stop me, my dad caught up with me. We tracked the rabbit for about ten minutes until it got completely out of sight. Depressed and tired, I suggested going back. Unfortunately, we had been off the track Uncle Paul warned us to keep to.