托福满分作文-教育类

Do you agree or disagree: Improving schools is the most important factor in successful development of country.

Intro:

1.每个国家在发展时，都会遇到资源分配的问题，在这么多领域上，有人提出应该先优先发展教育，因为提高学校质量是一个国家成功发展的最重要的条件。但是我不容易这个观点，我认为仅仅提高学校质量并不能保证一个国家的发展，我们还需要看到其他的东西。

BODY:

2.需要重视提供足够的就业机会。没有足够的就业机会，英雄无用武之地，不会对国家发展有利。

3.需要重视社会制度的发展：公平性，社会保障。否则会打击优秀毕业生积极性，导致好的学校也没有意义。

很多富二代，官二代人靠着关系跟后门进入好的单位，但是有能力的人没关系的人却处处面壁。

每年也有大量的留学生出国后滞留国外，因为国外能享受到更好的社会保障。

4.让步+转折：虽然教育是国家发展的重要方面，但是不能忽略了其他同样重要的方面的发展。

Conlusion

5.所以,虽然教育是国家发展中重要的一环，但是却不能说是最重要的一环，一个国家能最终成功发展，必须在多个领域上都要抓紧。

When it comes to the development of a country, many people believe that societal source should give priority to education, which is the most essential ingredient for successful development. However, I can not agree with this statement. It's worthwhile and necessary to develop education, but to say that schools improvement is the most important factor to develop a country is out of point. Education can not guarantee the development of a country if the improvements of other equally important aspects are omitted.

First, a country will not be successfully developed if it neglects to create or can not offer enough job opportunities. Basically, if the economy does not generate enough good professional jobs to absorb the influx of highly educated young adults, improving in school seems to be meaningless to a society. Worse yet, too many jobless graduates may even bring instability to a country. That's because unemployment can elicit their dissatisfactions and disappointments to the authorities which may spur the abuse of their intelligence.

Also, little concern about social system improvement can threaten the development course regardless of top-level schools. Suppose that when getting a good job is not much connected

with capability but social connections, which facilitates the way for the offspring of nouveau riche and the politically connected, that's, degree does not mean so much commercially, fresh graduates would be frustrated. This undoubtedly runs contrary to our expectation of improving schools if youngsters lack their confidence in upward mobility which education is supposed to bring them. In addition, many students studying abroad don't come back after graduation for the reason that they can enjoy better social security there.

Admittedly, education plays a important role in the improvement of a modern country and gives the nation a competitive edge in this age of globalization. However, a country which desires a successful development should put same importance on not only education but also other equally fundamental aspects of the society.

In light of these, I would like to say that I personally disagree with the statement that improving schools is the most important factor in successful development of country, and with my example I wanted to illustrate that a successful development depends on many aspects that a nation who wants to be more successfully developed should pay close attention to.