雅思写作赏析2+写作评分法则

④ Thirdly, studying in college gives students an opportunity to live with others and learn to cooperate with others. Usually, people feel uncomfortable about living with strangers because of different habits and values. But in the long run, it will turn out good for them because in the process of forcing themselves to bond with other people and sort out problems together, they will gradually learn to put myself in others’ shoes.
CC原则
Coherence and cohesion: 1. Sequences information and ideas logically 2. Manages all aspects of cohesion well 3. Uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately. 1.将信息和论点进行有逻辑的排序. 2.各种衔接手段运用得当 3.充分且合理地使用分段 cohesion 衔接 coherence 连贯 衔接主要是强调外在段落的结合 而连贯强调内在意义的一致性
③ Secondly, students can learn how to arrange time efficiently. Before studying in college, their life may often be arranged by their parents, and their study by teachers. It is very different for them to live and study in college, because they will have to settle their life and study by themselves. They have toBiblioteka Baidudecide things such as when to get up, when to play and when to finish their assignment, etc. This experience is of great importance for their work and life ahead.
② Firstly, students can obtain new knowledge and experience from studying in college. Teachers and professors in college who possess(拥有) not only abundant professional knowledge(丰富的专 业的知识) but also plentiful of teaching experience will supply students with new knowledge and direct(指引) them to solve problems in reality(在现实中). With their help, students can be equipped with knowledge(用知识 武装起来) in a specific area, which will pave the road for(铺平道路) their future career.
雅思高分范文赏析+背诵
高分作文三部曲 1.熟读中英文互译 2.研读并划出有用的写作词汇句型等 3.段落背诵
1.教育类
topic: 你认为为什么要上大学？ why do you think people attend college or university?
1.独立思考,列出提纲(论点和论据) 2.同伴讨论,完善提纲 3. 中译英 (写作练习) 4.背诵范文 (第2段) (people attend college or university for many different reasons—new experience; career preparation; increased knowledge)
*所有信息和观点有逻辑地进行排序 这里强调的是文章的逻辑性----在写作中，逻辑性主要指 的是通过对文章信息有效的整合，使复杂信息表达清楚， 从而吸引读者。主要考察考生对于段落、观点句与支持 句之间先后顺序的安排。一般来说，如果文章主体段落 是两段，通常把自己不支持的一段放在第一段，作为让 步段；而把自己支持的段落放在第二段。同时，根据观 点重要的程度，以依次渐弱或依次渐强的方式排列.
(CC原则) Disadvantageous as it may be, the
widespread of advertisements also gives rise to an array of merits. In the first place, through advertisement, government’s employment pressure can be gradually eased since(因为) a great amount of positions have been created to meet the needs for the advance of advertising industry. What matters even more is that, despite being costly, expending money on advertisement is still a favorable approach for company’s promoting products, since it can enable the product to occupy a larger market share. In the last place, advertising is of significant benefit for consumers to buy suitable products. Without advertisements, by contrast, consumers may lack of knowledge to recognize and choose the ones that satisfy their needs.(注意蓝体部分的 内在衔接和连贯)
写作评分法则
writing band descriptors
雅思高级写作赏析背诵
具体评分五法则
1. TA = task achievement 高: 4-5 任务完成 中: 2-3 2. CC= coherence and cohesion 低: 0-1 连贯与衔接 通过5个方面的得分 层次锁定需要进行 3. LR= lexical resource 提升的方面 词汇资源 4. GRA= grammatical range and accuracy 语法结构的范围和准确性
(题目) In recent years, more and more advertisements have been flooding into our lives. Some advertisements exert negative effects on the youth. Therefore people suggest that advertisements be banned. Do you agree or disagree with this? Give your reasons. 在讲到广告带来的好处时，最重要的应该是广告 对消费者带来的好处，其次是对厂家，最后才是 对推动经济发展或对政府带来的影响(CC原则)
中译英 （破题段） ①大学是一个让学生获得更多新知识和新经验 的地方. 当然,不同的人上大学有不同的原因: 有些 人想在大学深造, 有些人想找一份好工作,还有一些 人希望通过大学学习改变他们目前的状况. 在我看 来,对大学学习最好的定义就是一个人对未来生活 做的准备。(注意避免中文式英文)
① College is a place where students can gain more new knowledge and experience. Of course, different people have varied reasons for attending college: some may want to further their study in college; some hope to find a decent job while others wish to change their present situation through studying in college. From my perspective, college study can be best defined as a preparation for one’s future life or career.
M1 -lifestyle
Topic: working from home 在家工作 More and more companies are allowing employees to work from home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? (negative) (主要内容) The most commonly cited negative influence is the effect on company cohesion. (呈现,强调,阐述相关的,得以延伸的,含有论据的论点) As more and more employees choose to work from home, the day-to-day interaction between staff will reduce. Team spirit is highly valued in the corporate world. When working from home feeling of all working together towards the same goal is inevitably reduced.
TA CC LR GRA HR(handwriting) Total score
5
5
5
5
5
25
TA原则
Task achievement: 1. Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task 2. Presents, highlights and illustrates key features/bullet points clearly and appropriately 3. Presents a well-developed response to the question with relevant, extended and supported ideas. 1.写作内容充分涵盖所有的写作任务要求. 2.就主要内容/要点进行清晰和恰当的呈现,强调和阐述. 3.就写作任务中的问题进行较为充分的回应，并提出相关 的,得以延伸的,含有论据的论点.