初中英语作文专题讲解-作文1-人物荟萃-教师版

OverviewRevision2020年写作评分标准2020年作文共20分，评分标准包括内容8分，语言8分，组织结构分4分。

如果学生的作文内容充实，不写废话；上下文连贯；用语规范，表达准确，无或少见语法错误；词汇和句型句式运用恰当，多见好句型和习惯表达用语者，才可给4分结构分。

一般情况下，学生要得到4分组织结构分，内容和语言积累得分在15分以上者（含）。

作文内容和语言累积不足15分者，如文中有值得肯定的好的句型和表达，可酌情考虑给1-3分组织结构分。

但是如果作文的通篇句型，句式单一，词汇贫乏，即使在习作中无语法错误，一般亦不予给组织结构分。

自从2012年中考写作有了结构分后，改变了以往评价作文只从内容和语言两方面评分的单一性，近年来中考组织结构分的不断调整和上升，也充分体现了对于学生英语语言能力更高要求。

在平时的写作阅卷及历年的中考英语阅卷中，我们常常将评分细则综合成五个档次。

在评分时，阅卷老师先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。

A档：16-18分B档：12-15.5分C档：8-11.5分D档：5-7.5分E档：1-4.5分以下表格是教育部五级写作评分标准各档次的给分范围和要求，相信对中考英语作文评Introduction说到写作，大多数学生都会头皮发麻，觉得很难把握，是一个非常棘手的问题。

的确，由于初中生词汇量的有限，有时又受到汉语思维的干扰，所以就不能正确的遣词造句，切中题意，久而久之就惧怕写作了。

但是，在英语学习中，写的能力是一种非常重要的语言能力。

他是通过书面形式来表达作者的思想、观点，从而达到传递信息的目的。

写作主要考查同学们实际运用英语的语言能力和初步的交际能力，而且写的水平在很大程度上能说明你语言能力的优劣。

因此每年的中考都有写作这一考查的内容。

随着英语学科教改的不断深入，初中阶段写作的要求比以往几年提高了，分值也提高了。

所以同学们一定要重视写作的技巧，要消除畏惧心理，排除心理障碍。

初中阶段英语写作的常见题型：1、是根据所给标题写作2、是根据英语情景提示写作3、是根据英汉提示写作4、是看图写作。

写作的题材一般是写人、写事、写物、写景、议论、日记、书信、通知、便条等应用类文体。

一般来说，不同的写作题材，它的人物，时间，写作的重点也是不尽相同的。

这节课就着重讲解训练关于人物的写作训练。

写人重写外貌特征如果是写人的，一般我们用第一或第三人称写，时态一般用一般现在时。

写人的文章，学生们一定要注意用词的恰当。

比如，我们能说He is very tall, 我们不能说He is very high.我们能说He likes his job very much. 我们不能说He very like this job.只有正确的遣词造句，才能写出通顺的话，表达你想要说的意思。

一．brainstorm(vocabularies and phrases)T: When we mention people, what vocabularies and phrases can we use?名词：favorite actor , comedy，pen pal, shop assistant, doctor, reporter, policeman, waiter, bank clerk, policewoman, nurse, police, man, hair, height, build, captain, person, beard, glasses, look, singer, sex, king, host, members of the family, university, engineer, pilot, dream, artist, instrument, talent, talent show, success, achievement, medal, championship, violinist, pianist, programmer, exhibition, resolution，high school, college, computer programmer, house, apartment, dream job动词：go to movies, go to see Beijing opera，be like, be from, work as a teacher, be of medium build, be of medium height, look like, wear glasses, perform, become, skate, tour, travel, hold, be good at, like to do, take part in, have a yard sale, get good grades, get a part-time job, make more friends, make me laugh, major in, grow up, live alone, keep a pet, look smart, make a living, get married, dress casually, used to…, be terrified of…, give up, worry about, take pride in, pay attention to形容词：successful, boring, hungry, smart, kind of, ugly, clever, friendly, beautiful, shy, other, lazy, young, surprised, relaxed, curly, straight, tall, medium, thin, heavy, popular, blonde,good-looking, a little bit, brown, unfriendly, outgoing, calm, serious, tall, long hair, shorthair, curly hair, funny, heavy, quiet, talented, loving, creative, kind, well-known, rich,cool, popular, wild, athletic, funny, outstanding, unusual, national, alive, professional,polite, friendly, beautiful, interesting, short, tall, outgoing, funny, shy, serious, friendly, quiet, excellent, devoted（投入的）, easygoing, outgoing, passionate（有激情的）, energetic，strict, patient, kind, weak/poor, confidentPresentation书面表达：假如你在2018奥运会期间碰到外国朋友，请你根据下表的提示介绍进入NBA的中国球员易建联的情况。

要求：主题鲜明，语句通顺，意思连贯，适当发挥，拼写正确，书写工整。

80词左右。

篮球运动员（basketball player）出生（be born）被选入国家队（be chosen to play for the National Basketball Team）成为NBA 一员（become an NBA player）流行音乐（pop music）努力学好英语(try to learn )三．扩：扩展成句Eg: 1.basketball player，be born,Yi Jianlian, a famous basketball player, is from Guangdong China.He was born on October 27th,1987.2. be chosen ,play , the National Basketball Team,in January 2004He was chosen to play for the National Basketball Team in January, 2004.3. become a player, in July, 2007, NBAHe became an NBA player in July, 2007.随堂练习：1. 我们发现礼堂坐满了。

We found the hall full.2. 我们发现大礼堂坐满了。

We found the great hall full.3. 我们发现大礼堂坐满了学生和教师。

We found the great hall full of students and teachers.4. 我们发现大礼堂坐满了学生和教师，在听一个报告。

We found the great hall full of students and teachers listening to a report.5. 我们发现大礼堂坐满了学生和教师，在听一个重要的报告。

We found the great hall full of students and teachers listening to an important report.6. 我们发现大礼堂坐满了学生和教师，在听布朗先生作重要报告。

We found the great hall full of students and teachers listening to an important report madeby Mr. Brown.7. 我们发现大礼堂坐满了学生和教师，在听人民日报的布朗先生作个重要报告。

We found the great hall full of students and teachers listening to an important report made by Mr. Brown from the People’s Daily.8. 我们发现大礼堂坐满了学生和教师，在听人民日报的布朗先生作有关日本地震的重要报告。

We found the great hall full of students and teachers listening to an important report made by Mr. Brown from the People’s Daily on the earthquake in Japan.四、连：连句成文(form a passage)本文应按时间顺序，in 2003, in his spare time …常用连接词: because, so, but, until,when, since, before，after, on the other hand, on the contrary, so that, therefore, firstly、secondly、thirdly、finally…五、改：查漏改错Yi Jianlian, a famous basketball player, is from Guangdong, China. He is born on October 27th, 1987. He is 2.21meters tall. This handsome boy become a college student in 2003. He was chose to play for the National Basketball Team in January, 2004. This young man became an NBA player in July, 2007. In his spare time, he like listening pop music and to play computer games. Now he is trying his best learn English well.改正：Yi Jianlian, a famous basketball player, is from Guangdong, China. He was born on October 27th, 1987. He is 2.21meters tall. This handsome boy became a college student in 2003. He was chosen to play for the National Basketball Team in January, 2004. This young man became an NBA player in July, 2007. In his spare time, he likes listening to pop music and playing computer games. Now he is trying his best to learn English well.六．抄写中考书面表达常见错误一、名词的单复数：There are two hundreds student on the playground.There are two hundred students on the playground.二.主谓一致：David with his little brother go to the park every Sunday.David with his little brother goes to the park every SundayDavid and his little brother go to the park every Sunday三.时态和语态：A thief is seen break a window to climb into an office of the factory last nightA thief was seen to break a window to climb into an office of the factory last night.四.逻辑性问题：She wasn’t careful, but she fell into the river.She wasn’t careful, so/and she fell into the river.五.词类错用：When I was happily, I played computer games.When I was happy, I played computer games.六.中式英语：I very like English.I like English very much.★★★如何拿高分1.灵活运用短语或词组他们在短时间内把火扑灭了.They ___________ the fire _________________.2.巧用连接词他吃了很多,虽然他说他不饿.He ate a lot , ________ he said he wasn’t hungry.3.句型活用不准在图书馆大声喧哗.1) You _________ talk loudly in the library.2) You ____ ____ _________ to talk loudly in the library.3) ______ talk loudly in the library.4.用词生动Jack went to the telephone.Jack rushed to the telephone5.避难就易我最喜欢的科目是英语.My ___________ subject is English.I ______ English _______ ______ any other subject.I ______ English _______.6.长短句交错运用The town in which my parents live is very beautiful. We all love it very much.Focused practice一．短文改错AAlice and Jack are middle school student (students). They volunteer them (their) time to help other people. The work take (takes)them 3 hours a week. Alice loves read (reading). She often helps young children to read. Jack likes animals. He wants to be a vet before (after)he leaves school. Every Saturday morning he goes to work in a (an) animals hospital. He says he has learnt a lot of (/) about animals. Alice and Jack both think volunteering is great. They feel good about help (helping) other people. They spend time doing what they love to do.BDear sir,I’m very sorry trouble (to trouble) you.My name is Mary. I usually do the shop (shopping) at your store. Three days ago, I bought some clothes at your store. But I was not carefully (careful) enough then. When I went home, I found some problem (problems). The pants is (are) too short for my husband. And my daughter don’t (doesn’t) like the red skirt. She likes a yellow skirt (/) one. I will (will be) glad if you can change me some new one (ones).Mary二．写作练习案例: Here is an application form (申请表) of Sara. Suppose you are Sara and want to study in Australia. Write a letter of at least 60 words to introduce yourself. (下面是Sara的申请表。