中考作文精讲提升

技巧再梳理

技巧1：形容词高级化

技巧2：动词短语化

技巧3：名词具体化

技巧4：两句2合1

技巧1：形容词高级化

勤奋的hard-working—diligent

聪明的clever—intelligent

重要的important—essential

美丽的beautiful—attractive

开心的happy—delightful

有害的bad—be harmful to

技巧2：动词短语化

认为think—hold the viewpoint that

阻止stop—prevent from doing sth

解决solve—deal with

给give—provide with

提高improve—make progress

期待expect—look forward to doing sth. 技巧3：名词具体化

好处advantage

知识knowledge

幸福happiness

影响influence

自信心self-confidence

建议suggestion

技巧4：两句2合1

时间状语从句：when, not…until, as soon as

目的状语从句：so that+clause; to do（为了）

结果状语从句：so…that+clause, too…to do（太……以至于……）专题过关

变为简单句

1、I hope that I can see you soon．

I hope to see you soon.

2、He showed me how he used the computer

He showed me how to use the computer

3、I don’t know what he said.

I don’t know his words.

4、Could you tell me how I can get to the park?

Could you tell me the way to the park?

5、I found that it was easy to finish the work.

I found it easy to finish the work.

6、It seemed that they won the match.

They seemed to win the match.

变并列句为复合句

Hurry up, or you will miss the early bus.

If you don't hurry up ，you'll miss the early bus．

写作步骤：

1、列提纲：列提纲包括（1）审题，确定文章的体裁和篇章结构，先后顺序以及侧重点（总-分；总-分-总）；（2）选材，选择最能说明主题且自己有话可说的材料，忌眼高手低选择深奥、偏僻、复杂的材料；（3）选写作方法，如举例，因果，并列，递进，正反对比，对照，时序等。

2、根据提纲写作，注意选词和句型，过渡句，衔接词。

3、检查：查词汇；查句型；查要点；查文采；查拼写

训练方法：

1、遣词：在正确的基础上选择具体的、高级的词汇。

2、造句：使用正确的、熟练的句型。恰当使用复杂句。能恰当表意的习语、谚语。使用连接词增加文章的逻辑性和条理性。

3、布局谋篇：主题句简洁明了，中间句丰富多彩，结束句首位呼应，提升主题。作文批阅和借鉴：

Water is precious

As we all know, water is one of the most important thing in our lives（生命可数，生活，不可数）. We can live without water because we use it to do the washing ,drinking and so on. But it isn’t enough for everyone to use. Although there is a lot of water on the Earth but 97% of the water is salty. （数据例证好！）So we must save it .First of all ,we can use water twice or more. For example, we can use the water to clean the rice and then use it to water the plants. The water after cleaning the rice has a lot of nutrition for plants. Secondly, we should turn of the tap when we don’t use. Last but not least, we shouldn’t pour the sewage into the lake. It may make the lake dirtier.（Chinglish表达尽量避免！）Water is important for every species on the earth. We mustn’t waste or pollute the water.(结尾再升华！) （151）

点评：

内容：结构合理，三个要点包含清楚。个别句子内容简单，需要多添加一些背景补充。-0.5

语言：个别拼写，语法小错(冠词the 滥用，earth大写)。-2.5

文采：+2

总分：15

修改满分版：

Water is Precious

As we all know, water is one of the most important resources in our life because we not only drink and wash with it, but use it in agricultural and industrial production as well. ①（However, despite large amounts of water on the earth, only less than 3% can be used by humans, which is not enough for everyone at all. So we must save it .）②（First of all, use water twice or more. For example, we can use water after cleaning the rice to water the plants. It includes a lot of nutrition for them. Secondly, we shou ld turn off the tap when we don’t use it. Last but not least, we shouldn’t pour the sewage into the lake, for it may dirty the lake. In all, let’s take actions to protect precious water!）③

亮点分析：

①一句话点明水的重要性。用状语从句because,并列连词not only, but…as