考研英语2018黄皮书基础版-写作-增值资料

写作
1997年
【精彩句式】
1. According to picture 3 and picture 4, 200 billion US dollars are lost annually because of tobacco consumption, and meanwhile 3 million people worldwide lose their lives due to smoking-related diseases.
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
Picture 3 and picture 4 reflect some problems.
200 billion US dollars are lost every year.
The losses are caused by tobacco consumption.
3 million people suffer from smoking-related diseases.
They finally lose their lives.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
Picture 3 and picture 4 reflect some problems: 200 billion US dollars are lost every year, which is caused by tobacco consumption, and 3 million people suffer from smoking-related diseases and finally lose their lives.
③增加表达精确性和美感
According to picture 3 and picture 4, 200 billion US dollars are lost annually because of tobacco consumption, and meanwhile 3 million people worldwide lose their lives due to smoking-related diseases.
点评句式发光点：
介词状语引出数据的具体内容，用并列句描绘数据，并列句结构对应均为“句子主干+原因状语”结构。

2. To our great relief, there is a tendency of decline in tobacco production — the year between 1994 and 1995, as indicated by chart 1 , witnessed a drop from 14.364 billion pounds to 14.2 billion pounds.
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
There is a tendency of decline in tobacco production.
Tobacco production drops from 14.364 billion pounds to 14.2 billion pounds.
Chart 1 indicates this tendency.
It is a great relief for us.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
It is a great relief for us that,as chart 1 indicates, there is a tendency of decline in tobacco production, which drops from 14.364 billion pounds in 1994 to 14.2 billion pounds in 1995.
③增加表达精确性和美感
To our great relief, there is a tendency of decline in tobacco production—the year between 1994 and 1995, as indicated by chart 1, witnessed a drop from 14.364 billion pounds to 14.2 billion pounds.
点评句式发光点：
本句值得关注的是评注性短语的使用。

to our great relief这类评注性短语修饰整个句子，体现了作者的态度。

除了使用短语，写作中还可以用评注性副词对句子表达的意思做出评价。

考研英语写作中常用的评注性副词有：
①表示对行为方式的评价，如：cleverly, correctly, reasonably, unwisely, etc.
②表示对行为可能性的评价，如：obviously, possibly, likely, actually, etc.
3. For one thing , the percentage of smokers is too larg according to a survey, there are 1.1 billion tobacco consumers in the world, accounting for approximately 20 percent of the world population.
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
The percentage of smokers is large.
A survey indicates it.
There are 1.1 billion tobacco consumers in the world.
They account for 20 percent of the world population.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
The percentage of smokers is large: as a survey indicates, there are 1.1 billion tobacco consumers in the world, who account for 20 percent of the world population.
③增加表达精确性和美感
The percentage of smokers is too large: according to a survey, there are 1.1 billion tobacco consumers in the world, accounting for approximately 20 percent of the world population.
④增加衔接成分，连贯上下文。

For one thing,the percentage of smokers is...
点评句式发光点：
使用现在分词作伴随状语，说明数据的意义，使句式更加紧凑。

【应用模板】
适用于本文论证思·的作文题目有两个特点：
1. 图片以组图形式出现，且组图既包含负面信息也暗示可喜趋势；
2. 图片反映的社会现象给人类社会造成了损失，比如：侵犯知识产权、侵害消费者权益。

As an important cause for ____，组图共同反映的事物或现象 is always a hot issue in our society. According to the picture ____ , 引用图片中的数据.（论证前文提到的Σ害）.
To our great relief, 揭示组图中部分信息所反映的令人欣ο的趋势—the year/month/quarter between ____and ____ , as indicated by chart ____ , witnessed a drop/increase in ____ , declining/raising from ____ to ____ . （引用图表数据说明趋势）The decline/increase happens because ____. （揭示可喜趋势的原因）
If this trend could be maintained, 呈现可喜趋势的积极影响. However, it is difficult to achieve it. For one thing,the percentage of ____ is
too large: according to a survey, there are ____ , accounting for approximately ____percent of ____. It wouldn’t be an easy task to ____.(利用图表数据指出问题不容易解决的第一个原因)For another, ____.（说明问题不容易解决的第二个原因）In this sense, only with concerted efforts of all people, can ____ be properly solved.
1998年
【精彩句式】
1. Under the funny appearance hides a serious social problem that there are many meaningless promises which only reflect the basic responsibilities of the promise makers .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
A social problem hides under the appearance.
There are many promises.
These promises only reflect the basic responsibilities of the promise makers.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
Under the appearance hides a social problem that there are many promises which only reflect the basic responsibilities of the promise makers.
③增加表达的精确性和美感
Under the funny appearance hides a serious social problem that there are many meaningless promises which only reflect the basic responsibilities of the promise makers.
点评句式发光点：
本句的亮点有：
1.使用同λ语从句
同λ语从句用于表示抽象概念的名词（belief, fact, hope, idea, conclusion, problem, opinion等）后，用来说明其具体内容，一般由that连接。

如：The news that we are invited to the conference is very encouraging.与定语从句不同，同λ语从句的先行词（如例句中的news）在从句中并不充当任何成分。

2.使用修辞性倒装
表示地点或范Χ的介词短语λ于句首，主语结构较长时，需要倒装。

这样的倒装是为了避免头重脚轻，是写作中常见的修辞性倒装。

修辞性倒装在考研写作中常见的形式还有：
①“only+状语”λ于句首表强调：Only in this way can we learn English well.
②never等具有否定意义或否定形式的词或词组居于句首：Not only was Churchill a statesman, but also a writer.
③让步状语从句中使用“形容词（副词，动词，分词）+as/though/+主语+ν语”：Strange though it may appear, it is true. Try as I might, I could not bring him round.
2. People engaged in providing all kinds of services should honestly inform their customers of the services that can be provided because mutual trust is the foundation of business .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
Certain services can be provided.
Some people are working on providing all kinds of services.
They should let their customers know about the services.
Mutual trust is the foundation of business.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
People who are working on providing all kinds of services should let their customers know about the services that can be provided because mutual trust is the foundation of business.
③增加表达精确性和美感
People engaged in providing all kinds of services should honestly inform their customers of the services that can be provided because mutual trust is the foundation of business.
3. Only in these ways , can both parties , service providers and those served , enjoy a healthy atmosphere of mutual trust .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
The parties can trust each other in these ways.
The parties include service providers and those served.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
The parties, which include service providers and those served, can trust each other in these ways.
③增加表达精确性和美感
Only in these ways, can both parties， service providers and those served, enjoy a healthy atmosphere of mutual trust.
【应用模板】
该思·适合的题目特点是：图片幽默地讽刺了社会现象。

描写图片，呈现出与主题相关的细节.揭示图片的本质. How ridiculous it is！（对图片现象进行总体评价）
Under the funny appearance hides a serious social problem that 具体论述社会问题. 举例说明社会问题的普遍.
就社会现象提出自己的看法. 指出这种现象的Σ害. On one hand, 提出建议一 . They should remember the old saying，引用谚语或名言来加强建议一的论述. On the other hand, 提出建议二. Only in these ways, 指出施行以上建议的好处.
1999年
［句式精解］
1. The second graph demonstrates the extinction of 70 wild life species among which 50 to 60 species disappeared from the planet between 1800 and 1900.
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
The second graph shows the disappearance of 70 wild life species.
50 to 60 species disappeared from the planet between 1800 and 1900.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
The second graph shows the disappearance of 70 wild life species, among which 50 to 60 species disappeared from the planet between 1800 and 1900.
③增加表达的精确性和美感
The second graph demonstrates the extinction of 70 wild life species, among which 50 to 60 species disappeared from the planet between 1800 and 1900.
2. What’s worse , the process of urbanization and industrialization will drive sorts of wild animals away from their shelters to other places where they cannot survive due to the harsh environment .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
Urbanization and industrialization is in progress.
Sorts of wild animals go away from their home to other places.
The environment in the new places is bad.
They cannot survive.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
Urbanization and industrialization is in progress and sorts of wild animals go away from their home to other places where the environment is bad and they cannot survive.
③增加表达精确性和美感
The process of urbanization and industrialization will drive sorts of wild animals away from their shelters to other places where they cannot survive due to the harsh environment.
④利用衔接词连贯上下文
What’s worse, the process of urbanization and ...
【应用模板】
There are two graphs above. The first graph shows 描写第一个图表. The second graph demonstrates 描写第二个图表. It seems that 归纳两个图表的联系. In other words,______. (根据图表信息提出论点)
The above argument makes sense logically for the following reason （s）. 阐述具体的原因.
提出个人观点. Some actions are required to be taken to ____.(引出下文的建议) First of all, 提出第一个建议. In addition, 提出第二个建议.
2000年
【精彩句式】
1. In 1900 there was only one ship in the sea rich in fishes, while in 1995, there became only one fish in the sea crowded with ships.
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
In 1900 there was only one ship in the sea.
In 1900 the sea was rich in fishes.
In 1995 there became only one fish in the sea.
In 1995 the sea was crowded with ships.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
In 1900 there was only one ship in the sea and the sea was rich in fishes，while in 1995, there became only one fish in the sea and the sea was crowded with ships.
③增加表达精确性和美感
In 1900 there was only one ship in the sea rich in fishes, while in 1995, there became only one fish in the sea crowded with ships.
2. The caption demonstrates that it was the ever-developing fishing industry that caused the devastating effects on the fishing resource .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
The caption demonstrates the following meaning.
Fishing industry developed gradually.
Fishing industry influenced fishing resource.
The effects were devastating.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
The caption demonstrates that fishing industry which developed gradually influenced fishing resource and the effects were devastating.
③增加表达精确性和美感
The caption demonstrates that it was the ever-developing fishing industry that caused the devastating effects on the fishing resource.
点评句式发光点：
本句亮点是使用强调句结构强调主语。

在考研英语写作中，强调句主要用来强调状语或主语、宾语。

强调句表述为：It is 状语 that 句子剩余部分.或It is 主语或宾语 that/who/whom 句子剩余部分.
例：
(1)It is only when one is ill that one realizes the value of health.(强调状语)
(2)It was Doctor James that we invited to give us a lecture. (强调宾语)
3. The picture conveys a deep concern about the ecological disaster which was brought about disaster by the over-fishing driven by short-term commercial interests .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
The picture conveys a deep concern about the disaster.
The ecological disaster was brought about by over-fishing.
Over-fishing was driven by short-term commercial interests.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
The picture conveys a deep concern about the ecological disaster which was brought about by the over-fishing which was driven by short-term commercial interests.
③增加表达精确性和美感
The picture conveys a deep concern about the ecological disaster which was brought about by the over-fishing driven by short-term commercial interests.
点评句式发光点：
本句的亮点是过去分词结构做后置定语。

过去分词做定语时在语态上表示被动含义，在时间上表示动作的完成。

例：a frozen lake结了冰的湖；the risen sun升起的太阳。

与过去分词相对的是现在分词，现在分词做定语时，其在语态上是主动含义，在时间上表示动作的正在进行。

例：a freezing wind凛冽的寒风；the rising sun正在升起的太阳。

单个分词做定语置于名词前，当分词与其它成分组合成分词结构时，置于名词后。

【应用模板】
适用本文思·的作文题目有两个特点：
1. 图片包含标题和图画两个部分，其中图画呈现的是对比关系；
2. 图画内容反映了令人担忧的变化趋势，比如：道德的堕落、环境的恶化。

As we can see from the two pictures, 揭示图片反映出的趋势 .对呈现对比关系的图片细节信息进行具体描写. The caption demonstrates that利用标题信息补充说明图画内容.
The picture conveys a deep concern about 揭示图片反映的问题. It also implies a more worrisome consequence. 指出图片反映的问题若扩散到更大的领域会造成什ô样的惨重后果.
To prevent such undesirable situation from happening, we should spare no efforts in______ .(承接上文，指出需要努力避免问题的发生) Laws should be enforced to______ .（从法律角度提出具体实施办法） In addition, people should______ .（从个人角度提出具体实施办法）
2001年
【精彩句式】
1.The picture means that love is considered more precious in more difficult situations, or rather more needed by people in urgent need of help .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
The picture has some meanings.
Love is considered more precious in more difficult situations.
Love is more needed by people in urgent need of help.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
The picture has some meanings: love is considered more precious in more difficult situations and love is more needed by people in urgent need of help.
③增加表达精确性和美感
The picture means that love is considered more precious in more difficult situations or rather more needed by people in urgent need of help.
2.In its spirit of helping the poor in backward regions, many college students, upon graduation, choose to work in poor areas where they are most needed 1and their knowledge can be made better use of .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
People are encouraged to help the poor in backward regions.
Many college students graduate.
They choose to work in poor areas.
They are most needed in poor areas.
Their knowledge can be made better use of in poor areas.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
Since people are encouraged to help the poor in backward regions, when many college students graduate, they choose to work in poor areas where they are most needed and their knowledge can be made better use of.
③增加表达精确性和美感
In its spirit of helping the poor in backward regions, many college students, upon graduation, choose to work in poor areas where they are most needed and their knowledge can be made better use of.
点评句式发光点：
本句的亮点是介词短语做状语。

介词与名词性结构一起组成介词短语，用来表示时间、地点、原因、方式等。

用来修饰动词时，可以做相应的状语。

如：（1）He felt proud at the thought of his son’s achievement. (时间) （2）She lost her job through carelessness.(原因)
3.Seeing how excited the poverty-stricken people there are when they experience the change these dedicators bring about , we can know how much the devoted love and help are cherished .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
These dedicators bring about a change.
The poverty-stricken people there experience the change.
The people there are very excited.
We can know it.
The devoted love and help are cherished very much.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
If we can see the poverty-stricken people there are very excited when they experience the change that these dedicators bring about, we can know that the devoted love and help are cherished very much.
③增加表达精确性和美感
Seeing how excited the poverty-stricken people there are when they experience the change these dedicators bring about, we can know how much the devoted love and help are cherished.
点评句式发光点：
该句有两处使用How引导宾语从句，how与形容词或副词搭配，对形容词或副词起到强调作用。

【应用模板】
这样的写作思·适合永恒话题的写作，比如“人生是不断进步的过程”、“从别人的错误中学习”等等。

In this vivid picture, 描写图画信息. Around/Under/Above/Beside it is the caption reading陈述文字信息. The picture means that揭示图片主旨.
提出自己对该话题的理解. I can exemplify this conclusion with ____ . （举例论证自己的理解）
对例子进行点评 .（强化自己的观点）The best way to ______ , in my opinion, is to follow the above mentioned example by ____ . （将例子体现的精神升华，指出它是实现某种目标最好的方式）Therefore, 提出具体的行动建议.
2002年
【精彩句式】
1.More importantly , with rapid social development and frequent cultural exchanges, a mounting number of foreigners begin to understand and accept splendid Chinese culture and some of them even flood into China to gain a deeper insight into it .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
The society develops rapidly.
Cultural exchanges become frequent.
More and more foreigners begin to understand and accept Chinese culture.
Some of them come to China to gain a deeper insight into it.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
As the society develops rapidly and cultural exchanges become frequent, more and more foreigners begin to understand and accept Chinese culture and some of them come to China to gain a deeper insight into it.
③增加表达精确性和美感
With rapid social development and frequent cultural exchanges, a mounting number of foreigners begin to understand and accept splendid Chinese culture and some of them even flood into China to gain a deeper insight into it.
④增加衔接成分，连贯上下文
More importantly, with rapid social development and frequent cultural exchanges,...
2.The recent popularity of Chinese culture results from our great achievements during the last two decades , such as the re-unification of Hong Kong and Macao with China, the accession to WTO and so forth.
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
Chinese culture has become popular recently.
It results from our great achievements during the last two decades.
Achievements include the re-unification of Hong Kong and Macao with China, the accession to WTO, and so forth.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
Chinese culture has become popular recently, which results from our great achievements during the last two decades including the
re-unification of Hong Kong and Macao with China, the accession to WTO, and so forth.
③增加表达精确性和美感
The recent popularity of Chinese culture results from our great achievements during the last two decades, such as the re-unification of Hong Kong and Macao with China, the accession to WTO, and so forth.
点评句式发光点：
本句亮点是such as引导的两个并列的例子。

这两个例子采用名词性结构表达出了两个简单句表达的动作含义:
1.the re-unification of Hong Kong and Macao with China= Hong Kong and Macao are reunified with China.
2.the accession to WTO=China has accessed to WTO.
用名词结构表示动作含义主要有以下两种方法：
1. 表示动作含义的抽象名词+介词（of最常用，如本例），介词后接的名词可能是动作的主语或宾语。

2.动名词复合结构。

动名词复合结构由动名词与其逻辑主语共同构成，其表现形式有：
（1）名词+动名词：I am astonished at Mary suddenly becoming rich.
（2）名词化的数词、指示代词或不定代词+动名词：He was awakened by somebody shouting outside.
（3）人称代词宾格+动名词: Mother dislike me working late. 当逻辑主语为有生命的物体，复合结构做主语和宾语时还可用：（1）形容词性物主代词+动名词：Her leaving is a great loss.（2）名词所有格+动名词：Tom’s coming is what we have expected.
【应用模板】
这样的思·适用于写作以良好的社会趋势为话题的作文，比如“传统文化热”、“环保意识增强”等。

刻画图片的细节。

（为分析抽象含义做准备）
In recent years, accompanied by a upsurge of , a new fashion trend of has swept .(阐述图片的浅层含义。

) More importantly, with rapid social development and 图片反映的现象，a mounting number of begin to understand and accept and some of them even . (进一步阐述图片的深层含义。

) The phenomenon highlights . (揭示现象传达的精神)。

results from (分析现象产生的原因。

)How can ？（用反问句抒发感情的同时，概括文章主旨）
2003年
【精彩句式】
1.A flower thrives under the protection of the greenhouse , its branches tender and petals fresh.
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
A flower is protected by the greenhouse.
The flower thrives.
Its branches are tender.
Its petals are fresh.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
A flower thrives when it is protected by the greenhouse, whose branches are tender and petals are fresh.
③增加表达精确性和美感
A flower thrives under the protection of the greenhouse, its branches tender and petals fresh.
点评句式发光点：
本句的亮点是独立主格的使用。

分词做状语时，逻辑主语应该与主句主语一致，否则，分词应有自己的逻辑主语，构成独立主格结构。

分词的独立主格结构由“逻辑主语+分词”构成。

现在分词表主动，过去分词表被动。

当独立主格中分词是being, 或having been时，可以省略，本句中的独立主格结构即为being 的省略。

独立主格结构还可以用来表示原因、条件等，如：
（1）That being the case, we’d better make another plan.(原因) （2）All being well, the project will be finished in five months. (条件)
2. This is particularly true of children born in the 1980s ，majority of them being the only child in their families .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
This is true of those children.
Those children were born in the 1980s.
Majority of those children are the only child in their families.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
This is true of those children who were born in the 1980s and majority of those children are the only child in their families.
③增加表达精确性和美感
This is particularly true of the children born in the 1980s, majority of them being the only child in their families.
3. How worrisome it is that those fragile young people will have to be the pillar of the state!
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
Those young people will have to be the pillar of the state.
It is worrisome.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
It is worrisome that those young people will have to be the pillar of the state.
③增加表达精确性和美感
How worrisome it is that those fragile young people will have to be the pillar of the state!
点评句式发光点：
本句的亮点是使用了主语从句的感叹句结构。

感叹句一般用来强调单词充当的表语或状语，其常见的表现形式是：
1.当表语为名词时：What +表语+主语+ν语，如：What kind women they are!
2.当表语为形容词时：How+表语+主语+ν语，如：How clever the girl is!
3.强调状语时：How +状语+主语+ν语，如：How fast the runner runs! 主语从句的感叹句结构，就是用it形式主语占据主语λ置，主语从句后置。

4. Until this right concept of parenting is installed ，we shall continue to have children like greenhouse flowers , beautiful but unable to stand up to life’s real challenges.
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
Children are like greenhouse flowers.
Greenhouse flowers are beautiful but unable to stand up to life’s real challenges.
We shall continue to have those children.
This right concept of parenting is introduced.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
Until this right concept of parenting is introduced, we shall continue to have children who are like greenhouse flowers which are beautiful but unable to stand up to life’s real challenges.
③增加表达精确性和美感
Until this right concept of parenting is installed，we shall continue to have children like greenhouse flowers, beautiful but unable to stand up to life’s real challenges.
点评句式发光点：
本句的亮点是嵌套式后置定语的使用。

介词结构，形容词结构和定语从句等较长的定语都λ于名词中心语的后面，称为后置定语。

后置定语与前置定语相比，能够提供更多的信息，表意更加丰富。

【应用模板】
先描写第一幅图画.However, (转折词表示对比)once 写出条件或时间的改变, 描写第二幅图画.The pictures indicate that_____ . (段β做总结) Similarly,深入论证主题句.具体阐释现象.How worrisome is it that . (指出Σ害，为下一段提建议起到承上启下的作用)
is directly attributed to . (探讨问题产生的原因) 具体阐释原因. 提出具体建议.Until ，we shall continue to .(总结句)
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【精彩句式】
1.A boy, sweaty and happy, is dashing to embrace his victory in a race .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
A boy is running towards the finishing line.
He is sweaty and happy.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
A boy, who is sweaty and happy, is running towards the finishing line.
③增加表达精确性和美感
A boy, sweaty and happy, is dashing to embrace his victory in a race.
点评句式发光点：
本句的亮点是形容词短语作状语，对主语进行解释，说明主语是什ô情况。

它的实质是“being+形容词、分词结构或when, if, because等从句”的省略。

因为其结构短小，可以使句子显得凝练。

形容词作状语在写作中还可用来表示原因、让步等。

如：
（1）Eager to see the sunrise(=Being eager to see the sunrise), they got up at four. (原因)
（2）Large or small(No matter they are large or small), all countries are equal.(让步)
2.Madame Curie, a world-renowned female scientist, was awarded twice the Nobel Prize for Physics and Chemistry ,two totally different research fields .
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
Madame Curie was a female scientist.
She was awarded twice the Nobel Prize.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
Madame Curie, who was a female scientist, was awarded twice the Nobel Prize.
③增加表达精确性和美感
Madame Curie, a world-renowned female scientist, was awarded twice the Nobel Prize for Physics and Chemistry, two totally different research fields.
点评句式发光点：
本句的亮点是用名词短语作同λ语。

同λ语可以由代词，名词，动名词，从句这些名词性结构充当，用来解释说明前置的名词结构。

又如：We Chinese people are brave and hardworking.（Chinese People解释说明we的身份）
3. If she had stopped conducting further research , she主语 would not have achieved unequalled success in the history of science .
句子成形步骤:
①写出简单句
She didn’t stop doing further research.
She achieved big success.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
She didn’t stop doing further research and achieved big success.
③增加表达精确性和美感
If she had stopped conducting further research, she would not have achieved unequalled success in the history of science.
点评句式发光点：
本句的亮点是虚拟条件句的运用。

“If ...had done, ...would/might （not）have done...”陈述的是与过去事实相反的情况。

虚拟条件句用来强调某一情形
产生的重要条件。

又如： If we hadn’t built so many reservoirs, the flood might have caused great damage.（过去的事实是：我们修了水库，洪水û有造成很大损失。

用来强调修水库是抗击洪灾的重要条件。

）
4.Upon graduation ,we stand at a new starting point ,either pursuing further study or starting a career.
句子成形步骤：
①写出简单句
We graduate.
We stand at a new starting point.
Some of us pursue further study.
Some of us start a career.
②利用衔接词将简单句整合
After we graduate, we stand at a new starting point, some of whom pursue further study and some of whom start a career.
③增加表达精确性和美感
Upon graduation, we stand at a new starting point, either pursuing further study or starting a career.
点评句式发光点：
本句的亮点是现在分词结构做状语。

分词结构做状语，其逻辑主语要与主句主语一致。

在语态上，现在分词表示主动意思；在时态上，它表示正在进行。

本句中的现在分词结构做伴随状语，这是写作中常用的句式，它起到一个并列句的作用，又如：He walked down the hill, singing softly to himself.(=He walked down the hill and sang softly to himself.)
【应用模板】
抓住人物的动作、神情、状态等简明地描写图画.
Apparently, this drawing reveals to us: 揭示图画寓意.This is true also in one’s life.(深入论证，将主题升华）进一步分析图片信息和现实生活的联系.
The viability of this philosophy can be easily proved. 阐述第一个例子. The spirit of is also shared by . 阐述第二个例子. There is also an example relevant to . 阐述第三个例子. (列举的三个例子需覆盖不同层面)。