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2017 高考英语作文：

你是××中学的××，你校学生会即将组织一次徒步活动，已在校园网发布方案，征求师生的修改意见。你需要写一封邮件，包含以下两点：

1.提出你觉得需要改进的地方；

2.需要改进的原因。

主题发现上海

时间5月1日（周日）下午3点

路线从人民广场经过南京路到外滩（the Bund），全程徒步，之后再徒步原路返回人民广场。

Dear Sir/Madam,

I’m really excited to heat that a hiking activity is going to be held near the Bund on the Labor Day holiday. However, there may be further improvement of the scheme you’ve posted on the campus website, as I’d like to point out.

First of all, the hike needs to be planned in more detail as the information released online appears to be too general. As participants, we need to know how long the hike will last. Also, we are willing to have a clearer picture of security precautions and necessary medical support for the activity. After all, the scheme should be comprehensive and thoughtful enough to ensure the success of the activity. Only by clarifying these details, are you likely to attract more attention from the students. What’s more, I suggest the hike be more suited to the theme “Discover Shanghai” through additional activities. Upon arrival at the Bund, I propose an introduction of the architecture on both sides of the Huangpu River. By appreciating different artistic styles of the buildings, we can gain a deeper insight into the authentic Shanghai culture mixed with exotic flavor. Thus, the experience may well be unforgettable one, because it not only makes us move, but also enables us to discover the scenic beauty of Shanghai, which will well achieve the purpose of organizing the activity.

All in all, if the hike is organized in more detail and in a more supportive way, it is sure to succeed. I hope that my voice above can be heard and considered and wish the activity a great success.

Yours sincerely

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