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• 8. Maybe had listened her brother’s words, the baby was eager to come out to see the world. • 9. He hug me and asked, ―Why the plum tree grows so slow? Mommy, I’m so eager to see the bady!‖ • 10. Except sleeping and eating, he spent every time of his there. • 11. Justin cried hardly, he didn’t know the time his sister would come. • 12. Justin was shouting on the roof of the house, then he picked it up and ran to my side, ―You will bore soon, won’t you?‖ In the June, the little baby was bore.
A lack of accurate understanding of the given passage and reasonable imagination. （缺乏对原文的精确理解和合理的想象力）
Plots and sentences in your writing • 1. …… Eventually, he dragged his toy tractors and trucks up to his garage with his little brother. Carelessly, the baby couldn’t sit by himself and fell down. He died. • 2. It was saying that always walk near the sea, finally you will wet your shoes. One day, Justin dropped from the plum tree and was injured severely. • 3. Unfortunately, my baby miscarried by accident. I was afraid to tell him this bad news feared of hurting his feelings.
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• 13. I was angry about it and worried about him, he was not a professional climber after all. • 14. I always hear his delight voice. … He also touched my tummy which was became biger and biger. • 15. Usually I could see him asking to the plum tree that when the plums would be ripe on the roof of the house. • 16. He was hard to wait this tree ripen its plums. Day by day, plums still there with Justin eager expectation.
• 4. But as the time I was sent to hospital to deliver my baby. Justin was taken ill—he was got pneumonia. When he is dying, he said me, ―Mommy, I will go to heaven…Don’t be said, the baby will replace me…‖ • 5. Finally, Justin was so excited that the coming sister. …… At last, her dear sister was born with great disability–she had no legs. • 6. I was sent to the hospital but the doctors told me my baby was dead. Justin cried wildly when he knew this. • 7. He picked a plum and squeezed it into juice to feed the baby. But it was poisonous. The baby died immediately after drinking the juice. I was scared and angry so I killed Justin and cried out, ―What a f*** thing you have done!‖
• 17. He was hard to wait this tree ripen its plums. Day by day, plums still there with Justin eager expectation. • 18. The first thing he woke up to do was to have a look of his special schesual – the plum tree. … The day after the day, Justin still had persistently watched it and waited. • 19. Justin kept silent, watching the little brother, say nothing but ran out of the house. • 20. One day, he asked me if the little baby would born to play with him soon.
Continuation-writing 读后续写
The major problems in your writing 软伤： 情节或不合理，与所给上文不契合； 情节或太简单，寥寥数语，缺乏必要的人物 活动和内心的描绘； 情节或太阴暗，动辄流产/摔死/夭折等; 没有结局； 语言不够生动; 字迹潦草，卷面不整洁等。 硬伤： 拼写错误、语法错误(时态/词汇/句子结构等).