浙江省高一英语阅读课Graduation without you素材

Graduation without You
By Samantha Halle
1Looking through tears at the cars in front of me, I thought about all the moments in the past few months that would have brought tears to my own dad’s eyes; the moments that would have made him proud.
In one month, I’ll graduate from high school —the countdown to the end.2 One by one, things are starting to end. And3, I’m one step closer to the4moment that’s played in my head for years and years: walking across that stage to graduate.
It’s a moment that the Class of 2010 has looked forward to since September; one that we have longed for on countless occasions. Whether viewed as an escape from our high school walls, or the harvest5 of years of projects, tests, and quizzes, graduation is a celebration of success —a celebration in which you’re surrounded by your teachers, family, and friends. But as the days inch closer and closer to June 18th, a fact that I’ve known for seven and a half years has become increasingly more real: my dad won’t be there.
It’s something I’ve struggled（挣扎）6with all year. For me, graduation stands for7all the things he has missed and will miss. It’s knowing that he won’t be there to watch me with his fill-the-room smile. That he won’t be here to take an entire memory card’s worth of pictures, and that the family pictures that are taken will feel incomplete. I won’t get a bear hug while hearing him tell me how fast I’ve grown up, and he can’t purposefully play tricks on8 me just for laughs. Nor can he talk with9 his friends about my successes because he wasn’t here to experience them with me.
But it’s even more than all of that. It’s realizing that he never knew me as a teenager, and will never know me as a grown-up10. That he will have missed all of my “graduations,” from primary11, middle, and high school. It’s the fact that I’ve made decisions about my future and am moving on to create my own life. A life he will never know.
Among12 all the excitement about graduating and moving on to new things is a13 fear. As much as I’ve tried to hug14 changes in my life, change still makes me uneasy. Despite all of the changes that have taken place15 since he died more than seven years
1“I was listening to the radio this morning. Dads were sharing moments during which they were so proud of their children; it brought tears to their eyes. My hand reached to change the station, but I was frozen — I wanted to hear more of the love in their voices.”删去，与主题“graduation”没有关系，删去后主题更加明显。

2“It’s as if a domino was tapped.”句删除，与主题关系疏远，包含生词。

3“, with each of my senior lasts”部分删除，“senior”为生词，句式存在语病。

4“that surreal moment”改“the moment”，“surreal”为生词，且超纲。

5“culmination”改为“harvest”，“culmination”为生词，且超纲。

6加注中文，“Struggle”为生词，关系到主题理解，易于主题的理解。

7“is symbolic of ”改为“stands for”，“symbolic”为生词，且超纲。

8“embarrass”改为“play tricks on”，“embarrass”为生词。

9“brag to”改为“talk with”，brag to”为生词，且超纲。

10“adult ”改为“grown-up”，“adult ”为生词。

11“elementary”改为“primary”，“elementary”为生词，且超纲。

12“Amidst”改为“Among”，“Amidst”使用不规范。

13“an underlying fear”改为“a fear”，“underlying”为超纲词汇，删去不影响主题理解。

14“embrace”改为“hug”，“embrace”为生词，且超纲。

15“occurred”改为“taken place”，“occurred”为生词，替换易于主题的理解。

ago, these changes feel harder. It frightens16 me to know that I will no longer be surrounded by my family on a day-to-day basis, nor will I be in an environment I know. I’m worried that it will be easier for my memories of him to fade; I’m frightened17I’ll begin to forget.
As the years since my Dad’s death have grown in number, fewer and fewer of my friends are people who actually knew my Dad, and it frightens18 me to think that moving on to college, and on with my life, will only make this worse. This, in itself, is a thought that has brought me to tears on countless occasions.19It hurts to know that a day will come when most20 of those who did know him will no longer be a part of my life.
In 30 days I’ll graduate wearing the last necklace Dad bought me with a picture of the two of us21. And although I’ll do small things like this to help keep us together22, it won’t make up for the fact that he’s not here. At the end of the day, it still won’t be fair.
Yet, I know I’ve become the person I am because of my loss. And I know he would be proud!23
688words 16“scares”改为“frightens”，“scares”为生词，替换易于主题的理解。

17“terrified”改为“frightened”，“terrified”为生词，且超纲。

18同16。

19“Most of my current friends never knew him —to them, he’s just a myriad of bits and pieces of memories;
stories that are tied to a sad part of my life. He’s more of a myth than a real person, and”删去后与上一段合并，语意有重复，删去合并后主旨更加鲜明。

20“The majority”改为“most”，“The majority”为生词，替换易于主题的理解。

21“taped on the inside of my cap”删去，与主题无关，“tap”为生词，且超纲。

22“stay connected”改为“stay connected”，“connected”为生词，替换易于主题的理解。

23“.”改为“!”突出主题，丰富情感。