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Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?
It is admitted that every adult in the world has been allured or misguided, at least once or twice, to spend a lot of money on something that beyond their economical ability or even unneeded. This is a common phenomenon and will not hurt much if everything is still under control. However, there are always some people who cross the limitation and put themselves in a dangers situation such as being involved in debt or credit crisis. In this essay, I will briefly analyze the possible reasons of this severe phenomenon and suggest a few solutions to tackle this problem.
The most important reason is obvious to everyone. Influenced by the pictures or videos showing the exaggerated rich life of certain milliniors on social websites, some people may lose their mind due to the jealousness and desire to own same life and same things. These people, who only attracted by the glorious face of the rich and ignore their talent and effort on work, are apt to fulfill their thirst by purchasing expensive things that they cannot afford, instead of working harder to pursue financial power. Besides, lacking confidence and under stress also contribute to the misbehaviour.
In order to address this problem, what is needed is education. This phenomenon is the result of improper self-consciousness, while a good education, starting form pregnancy all the way to adulthood and beyond, means raising people to be responsible. Moreover, a proper educated people would acquire sufficient skills to hunt a proper job and a variety of decent habits to better their life. Undoubtedly, people who enjoy a happy life would not tend to be allured by the other people’s lives.
To sum up, the either real or fictional rich life stories in the mass media do impact some people in a negative way. However, a proper and promptly education could handle the problem from the root.
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