1.2020山东高考英语读后续写讲评guo(修改版)

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Step2 细读首句，构思大纲
1.续写的第一段的大纲, 由第一段首句与第二段首句确定。
2.续写的第二段的大纲, 由第二段首句与正能量结尾确定。
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Mrs. Meredith asked her children
Paras3-4 to find out ways to help poor
Bernard's family.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much. “I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.”
a.how Bernard sold popcorn Bernard knocked at neighbors' doors to sell;
or he went around the houses nearby and shouted aloud to sell;
or the children helped him sell
Step3 增加细节，开始写作
1.依据情节发展和生活常识，合理推断故事中人物 所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等。
2.贯彻一致性原则,内容要前后衔接、上下连贯,语言 表达风格一致，注意使用关联词语。
3.注意细节描写，如描述人物的动作、神态和心情。
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2.Main events
Para1
Para2
Paras3-4
Paras5-8
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2.Main events Para1
The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. P__e_o_p_l_e_w__e_r_e_ t_r_y_i_n_g__t_o_h__e_lp__e_a_c_h__o_t_h_e__r_m__e_e_t__t_h_e__c_h_a_l_le_n_g__e_s_.
c.Bernard participated in the preparing work
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②With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. ____________________
The outline of Para1
①When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a g__o_o_d__o__n_e_,__t_o_o.
a.how to put John's idea into practice
b.what were ready
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1.Beautiful handwriting
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I.Criteria for excellent continuation writing 第五档(21-25分)评分标准
1.与所给短文融合度高,与所提供的各段落开头语 衔接合理；
2. 内容丰富；
3. 所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有 些许错误，但不影响意思表达；
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Paras5-8
John advised making and selling popcorn.
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3.Emotion helpful, kind/ warm-hearted (positive)
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Para2 Mrs. Meredith often helped the poor.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
1.合理推断 Make reasonable inferences.
①When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too. _________
a.how to put John's idea into practice b.what were ready c.Bernard
bought materials (sugar/butter, paper bags... ) made popcorn (how, where) put popcorn into paper bags
b.what were ready paper bags full of popcorn
or ways to promote/sell popcorn
find out ways to help poor Bernard's family.
Paras5-8 John advised making and selling
popcorn.
4.Theme be ready to help others
(fight against difficulty together)
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2.Well-written compositions
刘晔 17.5'
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2.前后衔接、上下连贯Write coherent content.
①When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too. _________
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Then, Mrs. Meredith detemined to do something with them. (熊高阳)
Thus, with Mrs. Meredith's permission, they started to make popcorn . (周雨昕)
4. 有效地使用了连接词，所续写短文结构紧凑。
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II.Principles to follow遵循的原则
consistent & positive
1. 原文一致原则 内容要前后衔接、上下连贯,语言表达风格一致。 2. 正能量原则 内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。
+ a positive ending
a.how Bernard sold popcorn, b.what Bernard got from selling popcorn, c.how Bernard or the children felt
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b.what Bernard got from selling popcorn money; people's warm words;
or the children's frienship
c.how Bernard or the children felt happy; grateful
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1.合理推断 Make reasonable inferences.
①When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too. _________
a.how to put John's idea into practice
Then, she told her children that they should take action as soon as possible. (李知宜)
So Mrs. Meredith took children to Bernard's house and told his mother and him about the idea. (刘雨薇)
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III.Writing steps写作步骤
Step1 读懂原文，理清脉络
弄清大意和主题，理清故事的人物、情感和主要 事件。
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1.Characters
Mrs. Meredith, her children (John, Harry, Clara), Bernard
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So she decided to help them to accomplish the idea. (刘凯)
Without more consideration, Mrs. Meredith took her children to see Bernard. (刘子洋)
c.Bernard
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②With e_v__e_r_y_t_h__i_n_g__r_e_a_d__y, Bernard started out on his new business.
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The outline of Para2
②With everything ready, B_e__r_n_a_r_d___s_t_a_r_t_e__d o_u_t__o__n_h__i_s_n__e_w__b__u_s_i_n_e_s__s_. _____________
Main events
Para1 People were trying to help each other meet
the challenges.
Para2 Mrs. Meredith often helped the poor. Paras3-4 Mrs. Meredith asked her children to