My_Happy_junior_School_Life

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优点：
本文小作者构思巧妙，开篇以三个并列从句夺人眼球。

多种短语及句型的恰当使用，使文章亮点多多。

需要修改的地方:
①Because 改为Becauseof 。

becauseof 是介词短语，后接名词、代词、动名词等。

②in the hospital 改为in hospital 。

in the hospital 意为“在医院里”，而
in hospital 意为“生病住院”。

③surprised 改为surprise 。

to one ’s surprise 是固定搭配，意为“令人惊奇的是”。

④Under 改为With 。

with thehelp ofsb.是固定短语，意为“在某人的帮助下”。

评分:
按中考英语作文满分20分的评分标准，本文修改前可得18分。

My Happy Junior School Life My happy junior school life made me grow up and made me know what friendship is,what love is and what happiness is.I still remember one afternoon last winter.Because ①a bad cold,I had to be absent from my classes and was in the hospital ②for two weeks.I was so sad and worried about my study that I was in no mood to eat.However,to my surprised ③,my classmates took turns to come to see me.They cheered me up and helped me with my study till I came back to school.Under ④the help of my classmates,I became healthy quickly.More luckily,I didn ’t fall behind others in study.Because of friendship and love,I feel I have been the happiest boy in the past two years.I ’m lucky that I have a happy junior school life.河北省阜城县第四中学刘立海
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张超语教师、县骨干教师、市优秀英语教师，从事英语教
育教学工作30多年；多年来，在省级以上报刊发表
文章数百篇，并有多篇文章获奖；曾参与多本教辅资
料的编写工作；曾荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基
础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号；曾多次辅导多名学
生在市、省和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。

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